課件專題18 奮斗勵志類新高考英語讀后續(xù)寫主題分類突破（原卷版+解析版）-課件下載-教習(xí)網(wǎng)

奮斗勵志類故事寫作導(dǎo)圖在高考英語讀后續(xù)寫中，奮斗勵志類主題是一個常見且富有感染力的題材。它能通過講述人物克服困難、追求夢想的故事，展現(xiàn)人性的堅韌與美好。接下來，我們將從主題核心要素、人物塑造技巧、情節(jié)推進(jìn)策略、語言升級方案等方面深入探討這類文章的寫作方法，并結(jié)合真題進(jìn)行實戰(zhàn)精講，幫助大家更好地掌握寫作技巧，提升寫作水平。主題核心要素生理挑戰(zhàn)類在奮斗勵志類故事中，人物常常面臨各種生理挑戰(zhàn)，這些挑戰(zhàn)成為他們成長路上的阻礙，但也激發(fā)了他們內(nèi)心的力量。我們可以通過巧妙的語言運(yùn)用，生動地展現(xiàn)人物在面對生理困境時的抗?fàn)幘瘛?The prosthetic leg rubbed against his skin painfully, but each red mark was like a mark of his courage.（義肢摩擦著他的皮膚，疼得厲害，但每一道紅印都像是他勇氣的印記。）解析：使用rubbed這個較為簡單且常見的動詞來描述義肢與皮膚的摩擦，讓讀者更易理解。like a mark of his courage運(yùn)用比喻的修辭手法，將紅印比作勇氣的印記，直觀地展現(xiàn)出人物在面對生理挑戰(zhàn)時的勇敢，強(qiáng)化了抗?fàn)幍母杏X。 Chemotherapy made her feel extremely weak, but it couldn't put out the fire of hope in her eyes.（化療讓她感到極度虛弱，但卻無法撲滅她眼中希望的火焰。）解析：made...feel這種表達(dá)使化療導(dǎo)致虛弱的描述更通俗易懂。put out替代extinguish，更符合高中生的詞匯水平。用the fire of hope比喻希望，通過couldn't put out形成對比，突出她內(nèi)心希望的堅定，展現(xiàn)出人物在困境中不放棄的精神。心理突破類除了生理挑戰(zhàn)，人物在心理上也可能面臨諸多困境，如怯場、口吃等。如何描寫人物突破這些心理障礙，是寫好奮斗勵志故事的關(guān)鍵之一。 The feeling of stage fright made her throat feel tight, but when she started singing, her first note was like a free flying bird.（怯場的感覺讓她喉嚨發(fā)緊，但當(dāng)她開始唱歌時，第一個音符就像一只自由飛翔的鳥兒。）解析：made...feel tight清晰地描述了怯場時的生理感受，易于理解。把clawed at her throat換成更直白的表達(dá)，降低理解難度。like a free flying bird這個比喻生動地展現(xiàn)了從怯場到歌聲釋放的心理轉(zhuǎn)變，讓讀者能更好地感受到人物的變化。 Because of his stutter, his words seemed to be stuck like birds in a cage, but writing poems helped him express himself freely.（因為口吃，他的話就像被困在籠子里的鳥兒一樣說不出來，但寫詩幫助他自由地表達(dá)自己。）解析：seemed to be stuck簡單直接地說明了口吃導(dǎo)致說話困難的狀態(tài)。用writing poems helped...替代原句，使表達(dá)更簡潔明了，突出詩歌對他的幫助，展現(xiàn)了藝術(shù)在幫助人物突破心理困境方面的作用。人物塑造技巧動態(tài)細(xì)節(jié)公式通過對人物動態(tài)細(xì)節(jié)的描寫，可以讓讀者更直觀地感受到人物的努力和堅持，使人物形象更加豐滿。 There were calluses on her palms. They were like medals, showing how hard she practiced at night.（她的手掌上有老繭。它們就像勛章一樣，顯示出她晚上練習(xí)得多么刻苦。）解析：先描述有老繭這一事實，再用like medals作比喻，簡單直接地展現(xiàn)老繭的意義。showing...這個現(xiàn)在分詞短語進(jìn)一步說明老繭體現(xiàn)的是人物的努力，用更易懂的方式替代原句中較為復(fù)雜的表達(dá)，讓讀者清晰地感受到人物為實現(xiàn)目標(biāo)付出的努力。 His hands were shaking, but he still painted carefully on the canvas.（他的手在顫抖，但他仍然在畫布上認(rèn)真地作畫。）解析：直接描述手在顫抖，突出人物面臨的困難。still painted carefully簡潔地展現(xiàn)出人物盡管手顫抖，仍堅持認(rèn)真作畫的狀態(tài)，與手的顫抖形成對比，體現(xiàn)出人物的專業(yè)精神和對繪畫的執(zhí)著。成長軌跡描寫描寫人物的成長軌跡，能讓讀者看到人物在經(jīng)歷困難后的變化和進(jìn)步，增強(qiáng)故事的感染力和勵志效果。 Other people saw his limp as a disadvantage, but he turned it into a special rhythm, just like his unique fingerprint.（別人把他的跛行看作是一種缺陷，但他卻把它變成了一種獨(dú)特的節(jié)奏，就像他獨(dú)一無二的指紋一樣。）解析：saw...as和turned...into這些表達(dá)簡單常見，易于理解。用unique fingerprint比喻他將跛行轉(zhuǎn)化成的獨(dú)特節(jié)奏，形象地體現(xiàn)出他個性化的抗?fàn)幏绞?，展示了人物積極面對自身缺陷的成長過程。 Before, the wheelchair made him feel bad, but now he regards it as his good friend and moves forward with it.（以前，輪椅讓他感覺很糟糕，但現(xiàn)在他把它當(dāng)作自己的好朋友，和它一起向前。）解析：made him feel bad和regards...as都是很基礎(chǔ)的表達(dá)，清晰地展現(xiàn)了人物對輪椅態(tài)度的轉(zhuǎn)變。這種簡單直接的描述，讓讀者能夠輕松理解人物的心理成長，體會到他從消極到積極的變化。情節(jié)推進(jìn)策略危機(jī)爆發(fā)階段在故事中，危機(jī)爆發(fā)階段是情節(jié)的重要轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)，能夠引發(fā)讀者的緊張感和好奇心。通過巧妙的描寫，可以讓危機(jī)更加生動，增強(qiáng)故事的吸引力。 The violin string broke suddenly and hit his cheek. The pain reminded him that things don't always go perfectly.（小提琴的琴弦突然斷了，抽到了他的臉頰。疼痛讓他意識到事情并不總是一帆風(fēng)順的。）解析：broke suddenly和hit這些簡單的動詞描述，使琴弦斷裂并抽到臉頰的場景更易想象。things don't always go perfectly用直白的語言表達(dá)出事件帶來的啟示，讓讀者能快速理解危機(jī)對人物的影響，感受到故事中的沖突。 The flood covered her textbooks, but the knowledge in her mind was like life jackets that could help her.（洪水淹沒了她的課本，但她腦海中的知識就像救生衣一樣，可以幫助她。）解析：covered形象地描繪出洪水淹沒課本的情景。將words換成knowledge，更符合語境。用life jackets比喻知識，突出知識在困境中的重要性，使讀者更能理解人物在面對危機(jī)時的精神支撐。頓悟時刻描寫頓悟時刻是人物成長的關(guān)鍵節(jié)點(diǎn)，通過對這一時刻的細(xì)膩描寫，可以深化故事的主題，讓讀者感受到人物內(nèi)心的成長和升華。 A dandelion seed fell on his cast. It made him think that there might be a new beginning.（一顆蒲公英種子落在他的石膏上。這讓他想到可能會有一個新的開始。）解析：fell on和made him think都是簡單常見的表達(dá)，清晰地描述了種子落下及引發(fā)人物思考的過程。用直白的語言展現(xiàn)出微小事物對人物的啟發(fā)，體現(xiàn)出頓悟的產(chǎn)生，讓讀者能夠感同身受。 The broken mirror didn't show a broken image. Instead, it made him realize that he could still be strong and put himself back together.（破碎的鏡子沒有映出破碎的影像。相反，這讓他意識到自己仍然可以堅強(qiáng)起來，重新振作。）解析：didn't show和made him realize簡潔明了地呈現(xiàn)出鏡子破碎這一事件對人物的影響。用be strong和put himself back together這些通俗易懂的表達(dá)，將抽象的resilience具體化，讓讀者更易理解人物在頓悟時刻的內(nèi)心變化。語言升級方案復(fù)合修辭組合運(yùn)用復(fù)合修辭可以使語言更加生動形象，增強(qiáng)文章的感染力和表現(xiàn)力。在寫作中，我們可以巧妙地運(yùn)用比喻、擬人、通感等修辭手法，為文章增色。 She was so tired that her eyelids felt very heavy, like they had weights on them. But her voice was very clear, just like the sound of a bell.（她太累了，眼皮感覺非常沉重，就好像上面壓了重物一樣。但她的聲音卻很清晰，就像鐘聲一樣。）解析：felt very heavy和like they had weights on them用簡單的語言和比喻，描述出疲憊時眼皮的沉重感。just like the sound of a bell將聲音比作鐘聲，使讀者能更直觀地感受到聲音的清晰，通過觸覺和聽覺的對比，讓讀者更深刻地體會到人物的狀態(tài)。 The finish line was like a beating heart, and its rhythm was the same as his heavy breathing.（終點(diǎn)線就像一顆跳動的心臟，它的節(jié)奏和他沉重的呼吸一樣。）解析：like a beating heart運(yùn)用比喻，將終點(diǎn)線比作跳動的心臟，形象地展現(xiàn)出終點(diǎn)線的吸引力和緊張感。the same as簡單地表達(dá)出節(jié)奏的同步，通過通感的手法，讓讀者仿佛能感受到人物在接近終點(diǎn)時的緊張氛圍。動詞爆破公式選擇具有沖擊力的動詞，可以使文章的畫面感更強(qiáng)，讓讀者更能感受到人物的力量和決心。 She climbed up the cliff with her hands, leaving marks of her determination on the stone.（她用手爬上懸崖，在石頭上留下了她決心的痕跡。）解析：climbed up是常見的表達(dá)，簡單直接地描述了攀爬的動作。leaving marks of her determination用更易懂的方式表達(dá)出人物的決心，雖然替換了原句中較具沖擊力的動詞，但仍然能讓讀者感受到人物攀爬時的堅定。 His dreams inspired him a lot and helped him overcome all the difficulties.（他的夢想極大地激勵了他，幫助他克服了所有困難。）解析：inspired和helped...overcome這些常用詞表達(dá)出夢想對人物的作用，簡單明了。雖然沒有原句中torpedoed等詞的新奇感，但更符合高中生的表達(dá)習(xí)慣，能清晰地傳達(dá)出夢想的力量。背精彩句子，讓表達(dá)出彩 With a strong determination to succeed, she worked tirelessly towards her goal, even when faced with numerous setbacks. 憑借對成功的堅定決心，即使面臨無數(shù)挫折，她也孜孜不倦地朝著自己的目標(biāo)努力。 Despite the challenges that lay ahead, he refused to give up and continued to strive towards his dreams. 盡管面臨挑戰(zhàn)，他拒絕放棄，繼續(xù)朝著自己的夢想努力。 Setting realistic goals and staying focused on her studies, she was able to achieve academic success and pursue her desired career path. 通過設(shè)定切合實際的目標(biāo)并專注于學(xué)習(xí)，她能夠取得學(xué)業(yè)成功并追求自己想要的職業(yè)道路。 Having overcome numerous obstacles in his life, he remained steadfast in his pursuit of success and never lost sight of his goals. 在克服了生活中的無數(shù)障礙后，他仍然堅定不移地追求成功，從未忘記自己的目標(biāo)。 Through hard work and perseverance, she was able to turn her dreams into reality and achieve great success in her chosen field. 通過努力工作和毅力，她能夠?qū)粝胱優(yōu)楝F(xiàn)實，并在她選擇的領(lǐng)域取得巨大成功。 It was with her teacher's encouragement that Jane eventually accepted the fact that she would have to get around in a wheelchair. 在她老師的鼓勵下，簡最終接受了必須坐輪椅的事實。 No matter what happens I will insist on chasing my dream and making every effort. 不管發(fā)生什么，我會堅持追逐我的夢想，竭盡全力。 It's a golden rule that he who has aims and purposes will be successful. 有目標(biāo)和目的的人會成功，這是一條黃金法則。 Everyone can be a useful person only if he would never give up and do something for society. 只要永不放棄和奉獻(xiàn)社會，每個人都能成為一個對社會有用的人。 The only way out of despair and negativity for me was to put one foot in front of the other. 對我來說，走出絕望和消極的唯一方法就是腳踏實地前進(jìn)。 There are angels all around us, not just spiritual ones, but real ones that we can see. 我們周圍都有天使，不僅是精神上的，而且是我們可以看到的真實的天使。 I never thought that my little act of kindness should light her up greatly, which, indeed, encouraged me to carry on spreading kindness under any circumstance. 我從來沒有想過我的一個小小的善舉會給她帶來巨大的鼓舞，這確實鼓勵了我在任何情況下都要繼續(xù)傳播善良。 Despite facing countless obstacles, she never lost sight of her goals, and worked tirelessly towards achieving them. 盡管面臨無數(shù)障礙，但她從未忘記自己的目標(biāo)，并為實現(xiàn)這些目標(biāo)而不懈努力。 With a burning desire to succeed, he pushed himself to the limits and never gave up, even when the going got tough. 懷著對成功的強(qiáng)烈渴望，他將自己推向極限，即使情況變得艱難，他也從未放棄。 With an unwavering determination to succeed, she refused to let setbacks and failures hold her back, and continued to push forward. 她懷著堅定不移的成功決心，不讓挫折和失敗阻礙她，繼續(xù)前進(jìn)。 Despite being told that he would never make it, he remained resolute in his pursuit of success and proved his critics wrong. 盡管被告知他永遠(yuǎn)不會成功，但他仍然堅定地追求成功，并證明他的批評者是錯誤的。 Staying focused and committed, he was able to turn his weaknesses into strengths and achieve great success in his career. 保持專注和承諾，他能夠?qū)⒆约旱娜觞c(diǎn)轉(zhuǎn)化為優(yōu)勢，并在職業(yè)生涯中取得巨大成功。 With a clear vision of what she wanted to achieve, she worked tirelessly to make it happen, never losing sight of her goals. 她對自己想要實現(xiàn)的目標(biāo)有著清晰的愿景，她孜孜不倦地努力實現(xiàn)它，從未忘記自己的目標(biāo)。 Learning from her mistakes and remaining resilient, she was able to achieve success in the face of adversity. 從錯誤中吸取教訓(xùn)并保持韌性，她能夠在逆境中取得成功。 With a deep sense of purpose and a desire to make a difference, he pushed himself to achieve great things and inspire others to do the same. 懷著深刻的使命感和有所作為的愿望，他推動自己取得偉大的成就，并激勵其他人也這樣做。 Staying motivated and dedicated, she was able to achieve her goals and become a role model for others. 保持動力和奉獻(xiàn)精神，她能夠?qū)崿F(xiàn)自己的目標(biāo)并成為他人的榜樣。 Despite facing numerous setbacks and obstacles, he remained driven and focused, never losing faith in his abilities. 盡管面臨無數(shù)挫折和障礙，他仍然保持動力和專注，從未對自己的能力失去信心。 With a strong sense of perseverance and determination, she was able to overcome every challenge and achieve her dreams. 憑借強(qiáng)烈的毅力和決心，她能夠克服每一個挑戰(zhàn)，實現(xiàn)自己的夢想。 With an unwavering commitment to excellence, she worked tirelessly to achieve her goals, never settling for mediocrity. 憑借對卓越的堅定承諾，她孜孜不倦地努力實現(xiàn)自己的目標(biāo)，從不滿足于平庸。高考真題演練 2022年6月新高考卷（身殘志堅的男孩） It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路線)through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.” I bit back my frustration(懊惱). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意： 1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右; 2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答. We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【參考范文】 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. I said gently and quietly, “No one can change your mind, except yourself. If you desire to challenge yourself, there is nothing to do with others’ thoughts.” He sat still with a deep breath. “You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here”, I added with a sincere tone. Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run. His coach heard what David said and gave me a look—the kind that was more determined than anyone else’s. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The race started. It seemed that the runway was extremely long for young children, not to mention a child with a heart disease. David insisted on running as if he had forgotten all his weaknesses, though he was tripped over within the a few kilometers. It didn’t take long before he picked himself up again and continued his mission. Classmates all appeared on the racing track, cheering for him. “Come on! You can make it! We are proud of you!” they shouted enthusiastically. To everyone’s joy, he reached the final line and ranked the 20th. It was no more important whether he won the first place or not. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally. 【解析】【導(dǎo)語】本文以賽跑為線索展開。作者是一名特殊教育教師，在大型越野賽跑那天，發(fā)現(xiàn)患有大腦疾病大衛(wèi)獨(dú)自站在一旁。作者問其原因，他說準(zhǔn)備放棄比賽。從教練口中得知，因為擔(dān)心同學(xué)們會嘲笑大衛(wèi)，所以教練想讓大衛(wèi)自己去決定是否參加賽跑。作者讓大衛(wèi)追尋自己的內(nèi)心，不理會別人的看法，大衛(wèi)最終參賽，盡管遇到困難，他戰(zhàn)勝了自己，這已經(jīng)無關(guān)名次，而是他的勇敢和堅定讓這一切成為可能。【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我們挨著坐著，但大衛(wèi)不愿看我一眼?！焙偷诙问拙鋬?nèi)容”我看著大衛(wèi)和其他選手一起走到起跑線上。”可知，第一段可描寫作者鼓勵大衛(wèi)繼續(xù)完成比賽，大衛(wèi)經(jīng)過強(qiáng)烈的心理斗爭，最終決定參加比賽。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我看著大衛(wèi)和其他選手一起走到起跑線上。”可知，第二段可描寫大衛(wèi)開始參賽，雖然中途遇到困難，仍然堅持到最后，完成比賽。 2.續(xù)寫線索：鼓勵大衛(wèi)——心理變化——決定參賽——克服困難——加油助威——完成比賽 3.詞匯激活：行動類： ①深呼吸：with a deep breath/breathe deeply ②堅持做：insisted on doing/be stick to doing 情緒類： ①熱情：enthusiastically /with great passion ②驕傲：be proud of/take pride in 【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]. You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here. (由which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句和 why引導(dǎo)的限制性定語從句) [高分句型2]. Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run. (現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語和省略that的賓語從句) [高分句型3]. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally. (含有It was…that結(jié)構(gòu)的強(qiáng)調(diào)句型) 模擬演練 01 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 For many years, I had a recurring dream. I was a little girl again, rushing about, trying to get ready for school. “Hurry, you'll be late for school,” my mother called to me. “I am hurrying, Mom! What did I do with my books?” Deep inside I knew where the dream came from. It was about some unfinished business in my life. As a kid, I loved everything about school. I loved books, teachers, tests and homework. Most of all I longed to someday march down the aisle to receive my diploma. That seemed more appealing even than getting married. But at 15, I had to drop out because my parents couldn't afford tuition. My hope of getting a diploma was dead, or so I thought. Pretty soon, I married and had three children, and I thought: “There goes my diploma.” Even so, I wanted my children to be educated. But Linda, our youngest child, had juvenile arthritis in her hands and knees, which made it impossible for her to function in a normal classroom. I felt sorry for her and I didn't want her to live her life with regret. I didn't give up hope of her being back to school in some way. One day, I saw an ad in the newspaper for evening courses. “That's the answer,” I said to myself. Linda always feels better in the evening, so I'll just sign her up for night school. Linda was busy filling out enrollment forms when the secretary said: “Mrs. Schantz, why don't you come back to school?” I laughed: “There's no way! I'm 55!” But he persisted, and before I knew what I had done, I was enrolled for classes in English and crafts. “This is only an experiment,” I warned him, but he just smiled. So, I told myself to try for just a semester and to see if it would work. Anyway, my dream was still there in my heart. 1．寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Paragraph 1： It was exciting to go to school again but ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Linda and I saw each other through the time. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Paragraph 1: It was exciting to go to school again but it was no game. Sitting in a classroom full of kids was awkward, even if most of them were respectful and encouraging. During the day, I was still a busy married woman having loads of housework to do. In the evening, I was a hardworking student working on my courses. To my surprise, both Linda and I did very well in night school. I went back again the next semester, and my grades steadily improved. Paragraph 2: Linda and I saw each other through the time. When I was down, Linda encouraged me. “Mom, you can't quit now!” And when she was down, I encouraged her. I have to say it was a time which was really hard on both of us. But neither of us gave up. At last, I got my diploma. To my surprise, almost all of my classmates voted for me to be class speaker, and I got a $3,000 college scholarship. The unfinished business in my dreams was eventually finished. 【解析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者15歲時因為父母付不起學(xué)費(fèi)，不得不退學(xué)，后來結(jié)了婚生了三個孩子。作者在為最小的孩子琳達(dá)報夜校的時候，自己也打算嘗試一個學(xué)期，但作者堅持了下來并最終取得了畢業(yè)證書，實現(xiàn)了自己的學(xué)業(yè)夢想。【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“再去上學(xué)是令人興奮的，但這不是游戲。”可知，第一段可描寫作者去上學(xué)時的感受和學(xué)業(yè)進(jìn)步情況。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“琳達(dá)和我經(jīng)常見面。”可知，第二段可描寫作者和琳達(dá)是如何互相鼓勵的，以及作者最后如何取得了畢業(yè)證書的。 2．續(xù)寫線索：感到興奮——白天做家務(wù)——晚上上學(xué)——成績穩(wěn)步提高——和琳達(dá)互相鼓勵——取得畢業(yè)證書 3．詞匯激活行為類充滿：be full of / be filled with 回去：go back /return 完成：finish /complete 情緒類尷尬：awkward /embarrassed 驚訝：surprise /astonishment 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1] Sitting in a classroom full of kids was awkward, even if most of them were respectful and encouraging. (運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語) [高分句型2] When I was down, Linda encouraged me. (運(yùn)用了when引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句) 02 Days of January were passing and every girl of the girls’ school was very happy as the selections for plays and dances for the annual function were started. Sneha’s class teacher, Pravina, asked Sneha, her favorite student, to play the leading character in a play. Because she was never allowed to play a male character, Sneha jumped with joy, but suddenly she became so serious about the costumes (戲服). “How many times I have to tell you not to participate in plays and dances! Can’t you understand that we can’t buy or borrow the costly costume? You can take part in debates, quizes, or essay competitions in which you don’t have to spend money and you can enrich your knowledge,” her mother said angrily when Sneha told her about it. The reason behind all this was their financial condition. Sneha always had an idea about it in her home and she was mature enough to say NO to any money demanding condition. This time, however, the desire of fame and the excitement of the activity were overcoming her fear. Sneha went in her room hiding her sadness deep in her heart. She was so nervous about what was going to happen when she would tell Pravina about leaving the play. Would she warn her not to allow her in any competition? Now it was clear that she had to leave the play. The next day, downhearted Sneha acted like nothing had happened and got ready for school. Her mom ordered her to say NO for the play. Sneha always loved Pravina because whenever there was a play or dance, the girls did not need to be worried about anything related with money. She would find a way to help. But Sneha didn’t want to tell her the truth. Paragraph l: Sneha went to the teacher,“I don’t want to take part in the play and I’m leaving.” ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Pravina stood patiently, waiting for the performance to begin. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Sneha went to the teacher, “I don’t want to take part in the play and I’m leaving.” Her voice was so determined that Pravina wondered why she had such a change in her attitude. “Mum says I can learn more if I take part in a debate,” she looked away, trying to hide her unwillingness. Soon, Pravina made out what really was shouting in Sneha’s deep heart. With a smile on her face, Pravina promised not only could she perform in the play but she would get the chance to join in the debate. She offered a hand to her, saying there happened to be a costume at home which could be lent to her. Excited secretly, she knew she was going to attend the show. Pravina stood patiently, waiting for the performance to begin. She was waiting for the precious moment when Sneha appeared in the costume she bought for Sneha’s dream. As the light faded out, the lead role came on stage and caught the attention of all the audience. Confident and brave, she vividly brought the character to life. Everyone cheered and applauded when the show ended as Sneha’s first male character turned out a big success. When Sneha was ready to give back the costume to Pravina, she was told to keep it as a reminder of not easily letting go of dreams. 【解析】本文以人物為線索展開。Sneha的班主任老師Pravin要求Sneha在一部戲里扮演主要男性角色，但是由于購買或者租賃戲服的經(jīng)濟(jì)問題，母親不同意她參加這次演出，并強(qiáng)烈要求她拒絕Pravin的邀請。她向Pravin提出不參演這次的演出?？闯鯯neha的心思之后，Pravin表示可以拿家里的戲服給她用。最后演出獲得了成功。當(dāng)Sneha要將戲服還給Pravin時，Pravin將戲服送給她，提醒她不要輕易放棄夢想。【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Sneha對老師說:“我不想?yún)⒓舆@個戲了，我要離開?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫Sneha拒絕老師的邀請，老師看穿后，表示可以借給她戲服。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“Pravin耐心地站著，等待演出開始?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懷莩霁@得成功，Pravin將戲服贈予她留作紀(jì)念。 2．續(xù)寫線索：拒絕邀請——明白真相——提供幫助——表演開始——表演成功——贈予戲服 3．詞匯激活行為類 ①.掩蓋：hide/cover up/conceal ②.歸還：go back/return 情緒類 ①.不情愿：unwillingness/reluctance ②.興奮：excited/trilled 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1].Her voice was so determined that Pravina wondered why she had such a change in her attitude.（由連接詞so…that…引導(dǎo)結(jié)果狀語從句和why引導(dǎo)賓語從句） [高分句型2].Confident and brave, she vividly brought the character to life.（運(yùn)用了形容詞作狀語） 03 Every girl dreams and Jasmine is no exception. When Jasmine was young, she had read dozens of books on how to be a ballerina（芭蕾舞者）, Suan Lake was her favorite and she had always wanted to become the white swan in it. Later, she started taking ballet lessons and all her teachers confirmed she was a good student. In the hope of becoming a great ballerina, she trained hard on a daily basis. One day, she saw an advertisement that a famous ballerina troupe（舞團(tuán)）would be performing in her hometown. And the whole town was talking about the troupe leader, who was said to be the best ballet dancer in the world. Her thoughts ran wild. "I must meet the leader of the troupe and show him my skills" she murmured to herself. She dressed herself in her best ballerina costume and managed to slip in the backstage without being noticed. To her luck, the leader entered the dressing room and she timidly knocked at the door "Come in" said a gentle voice. Opening the door, Jasmine saw a tall and slim man with a calm look on his face. She bravely approached him and handed him a bunch of red roses and in her excitement the thorns pricked（刺痛）her hand but she did not pay much attention to the pain. The leader observed her action as she told him her dream. "Alright, you dance and I will give you my advice." But half way through the dance he stopped her and said, "I'm sorry you're not good enough!" On hearing this, Jasmine's eyes opened wide in shock. It was seconds before she could absorb what was said to her, "Not good enough?!" she asked in disbelief. "Yes, not good enough." replied the leader. Boiled in shame and rage, Jasmine ran out of the dressing room as fast as her legs could carry her. The leader's words were a huge blow to her confidence. Despite being so sad, she didn't give up her dream. 注意： 1．所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。 Paragraph 1: Six months later, she heard that the same ballet troupe was performing in her town again. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Within three years, Jasmine had become a famous ballerina as she wanted. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Six months later, she heard that the same ballet troupe was performing in her town again. Bitter memories of the leader's harsh words came flooding back to her. This time she was determined to find out why the leader had told her she was not good enough when all her teachers thought otherwise. He replied, “I tell this to every student.” She angrily shot back, “You've ruined my life!” Then she got a further shock, “I remember your gift of roses and how the thorns had pricked your fingers but you carried on bravely.” He said if she did not give up so easily, it might be a different story. Within three years, Jasmine had become a famous ballerina as she wanted. Guided by the troupe leader, she succeeded in attaining the leading position in the Swan Lake. Her elegant appearance and excellent performance on the stage was so amazing that she gained power over all the audiences. Despite being so famous, Jasmine still felt nervous sometimes. But one word would always calm her down: “If you want to pick roses, don’t be afraid of the thorns.” 【解析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了Jasmine的夢想是成為一名偉大的芭蕾舞演員，一天，她看到一則廣告，說一個著名的芭蕾舞團(tuán)將在她的家鄉(xiāng)表演。她找到了團(tuán)長，她勇敢地走近他，遞給他一束紅玫瑰。激動之下，玫瑰的刺扎到了她的手，但她并沒有太在意它的痛，她向團(tuán)長展示了自己的舞蹈才能。團(tuán)長說她跳的不夠好，在羞愧和憤怒中，Jasmine飛快地跑出了更衣室。領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的話對她的信心是一個巨大的打擊。盡管如此悲傷，她沒有放棄她的夢想。【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫： 1．由第一段首句內(nèi)容“六個月后，她聽說那個芭蕾舞團(tuán)又在她的鎮(zhèn)上演出了”可知，第一段可以繼續(xù)寫沒有放棄夢想的Jasmine 又去找團(tuán)長，這次她決心要弄清楚為什么領(lǐng)導(dǎo)說她不夠好以及他們之間的對話。 2．由第二段首句內(nèi)容“三年之內(nèi)，Jasmine如愿以償?shù)爻蔀榱艘幻陌爬傥柩輪T?！笨芍?，第二段可續(xù)寫Jasmine成功后的狀態(tài)和心理、情感變化。 2．續(xù)寫線索：找到團(tuán)長問清楚原因——獲得了成功——有時會感到緊張——一句話激勵著她 3．詞匯激活行為類 1．下定決心做某事：be determined to do sth /make up one’s mind to do sth 2．放棄：give up/abandon 3．獲得：acquire/attain 情緒類 1．害怕的：afraid/frightened 2．緊張的：nervous/anxious 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1].Her elegant appearance and excellent performance on the stage was so amazing that she gained power over all the audiences. （so…that引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語從句） [高分句型2]. If you want to pick roses, don’t be afraid of the thorns. （if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句） 04 My family immigrated to Canada when I was about one year old. In those early years, we did not have much money. Our home was a simple rented apartment, which was rather poorly furnished. There certainly was not enough money for expensive outings. As a result, our weekends were filled with simple pleasures that we could do for free, like picnics, bike rides, and my favorite—trips to the library. Thanks to the library’s children’s section, I fell in love with stories—silly ones, moving ones, and even educational ones. I would have my parents read the books that we borrowed over and over again until we needed to return them, or I would page through them myself, imagining the stories in my head, even though I was too young to read the words. When I was about five years old and finally started to read on my own, I had a curious thought: I knew we could get books from the library or buy them in store s if we had the money, but where did books come from? I asked my mother this question, to which she replied that the stories I loved were created in the imaginations of people called “writers” These people then wrote them down so they could be s hared with others. Four decades later, I still remember that moment. It was as though I had been struck by lightning. Then and there, I knew my purpose in this world. I would be one of those writers. I would create stories and share them with the world. 注意： 1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．開頭已給出。 Paragraph 1: ???????As a young child, I began writing by making up stories about animals or my toys. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: ???????After a few years of constant writing practice, my hard work eventually paid off. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Paragraph 1: ???????As a young child, I began writing by making up stories about animals or my toys. I described the cute animals I saw and wrote them into short stories. The toys I often played with every day were so interesting that I wrote articles about them and introduced them to people. I showed people the positive energy and positive things in life with my small pen.??? Paragraph 2: ???????After a few years of constant writing practice, my hard work eventually paid off. My teacher told me that my writing was novel in conception and unique in language. She read my composition aloud in front of the whole class and spoke highly of me, which inspired me greatly. The teacher also recommended my composition to the newspaper, and my article appeared in the newspaper. Recently, I won the first prize in the national primary and secondary school composition contest, awarded the title of the future little writer and praised by the principal in the conference, which made me glad. I would work harder to become a real writer, and write more and better works. 【解析】本文以人物的成長為線索展開，作者在很小的時候隨家人移民到加拿大，把去圖書館看書，去商店買書當(dāng)成快樂的事，作者創(chuàng)作故事，和世人分享，努力成為一名作家。【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)我還是個孩子的時候，我就開始寫關(guān)于動物或玩具的故事?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懽髡邔懼車l(fā)生的事，看到的事。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“經(jīng)過幾年不斷的寫作練習(xí)，我的努力終于得到了回報?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作者的努力所得到的回報，夢想得以實現(xiàn)。 2．續(xù)寫線索：寫動物、玩具——典型的人和事——回報——老師表揚(yáng)——獲獎——作家 3．詞匯激活行為類 ①高度評價：speak highly of /think highly of ②鼓舞、鼓勵：inspire/encourage ③推薦：recommend/advise 情緒類 ①積極的：positive/optimistic ②快樂的：glad/delighted/happy 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1] The toys I often play with every day are so interesting that I write articles about them and introduce them to people. (由連接詞so…that引導(dǎo)結(jié)果狀語從句) [高分句型2] She read my composition aloud in front of the whole class and spoke highly of me, which inspired me greatly. (由關(guān)系代詞which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句) [高分句型3] Recently, I won the first prize in the national primary and secondary school composition contest, awarded the title of the future little writer and praised by the principal in the conference, which made me glad. (過去分詞作伴隨狀語和關(guān)系代詞which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句) 05 My father asked me to chat with him for a while. Actually, I was unwilling to listen to his talking endlessly as he always did. My father was a lawyer, but I never wanted to go to law school or follow his path through life. As was expected, he cleared his throat and started to say, “Er... What... What do you really want to do in the gorgeous(燦爛的) future?” I was silent for a moment playing with the cell phone. I kept thinking, “Should I tell him my true thoughts? What if he gets angry? What if I let him down?” later I replied, “Well, I want to be a writer.” I guessed this may be not the answer he would expect. But surprisingly, “Interesting idea!” he answered. I was shocked, speaking in a low voice with hesitation. “Are you serious, dad?” “Well, you need confidence and good preparations, and you still have plenty of time. You need to find out what you really enjoy now. Look, it’s late. Let’s take the boat out tomorrow morning, just you and me. Maybe we can catch some crabs (螃蟹) for dinner, and we can talk more.” Early next morning we packed up the equipment and set off for the coast. We didn’t talk much, but enjoyed the sound of the seabirds and the sight of the coastline. There were no big waves and blinding sunlight at that time. “Let’s see if we are lucky,” he said, picked up a web basket with a rope tied and threw it into the sea. We waited a while, then my father stood up and said, “Give me a hand with this,” and we pulled up the crab cage onto the deck. To our joy, the cage was filled with dozens of soft shell crabs. Squatting (蹲) down, we watched them for a moment. At first they fought against each other to climb out hard, trying to escape. Many were pulled back into the cage. Later, some gave up, but there were still some crabs trying to escape again and again. 注意： 1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 At that moment, my father pointed to the cage, “Look at that crab, there!” ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ From that day on, I was determined to make my dream come true ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】At that moment my father pointed to the cage, “Look at that crab, there!” Staring at the crab, I found that every time he wanted to escape, he was pulled back into the cage. However, he didn't give up his fight. Fortunately, he survived from the struggle eventually. Shocked and amazed, I suddenly understood why my father had suggested catching crabs that morning. I thought the future would be filled with many possibilities. Everyone would need to find out what he enjoyed and held on to it. From that day on, I was determined to make my dream come true. Besides my devotion to school work, I spent all my spare time making full preparations for becoming a writer. Reading, collecting materials and writing made my life busy but fulfilled, which laid a good foundation for me. Meanwhile, I contributed to literature journals. Gradually, some achievements as a writer increased my confidence. I always think of the crab whenever faced with difficulties. What my father said also encouraged me on my way to success. Now I am grateful for sticking to the thing I truly dreamed of. 【解析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者向父親訴說自己想要成為作家的夢想，出乎作者意料，作者的父親非常支持。作者的父親帶作者去捉螃蟹，有一只螃蟹一直鍥而不舍最終成功逃離。作者從中學(xué)到了堅持和努力，最終在成為作家的道路上取得了越來越多的進(jìn)步和成就。【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“就在那一刻，爸爸指著籠子說：‘看那只螃蟹，在那兒！’”可知，第一段可描寫這是螃蟹一直不放棄最后成功逃離以及作者的感想。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“從那天起，我就下定決心要實現(xiàn)我的夢想。”可知，第二段可描寫作者為實現(xiàn)成為作家的夢想所付出的努力、取得的進(jìn)步和成就。 2．續(xù)寫線索：說出夢想——支持——捉螃蟹——感悟——追求夢想——進(jìn)步——成就 3．詞匯激活行為類 ①凝視：stare at/gaze at ②建議：suggest/propose ③投稿：contribute to/submit to 情緒類 ①震驚：shocked/surprised ②感激：grateful/thankful 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1]Reading, collecting materials and writing made my life busy but fulfilled, which laid a good foundation for me. (由關(guān)系代詞which連接的非限制性定語從句) [高分句型2]I always think of the crab whenever faced with difficulties. (whenever引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句的省略)

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