比賽收獲類故事 寫作導(dǎo)圖 一、建立緊張氛圍 寫作要點(diǎn)：用感官描寫和心理活動(dòng)鋪墊賽前緊張感 例句與解析： Emily felt her throat tighten and her palms grow clammy as she stepped onto the stage. （艾米麗走上舞臺(tái)時(shí)感到喉嚨發(fā)緊，手心冒汗。） → 解析：用身體反應(yīng)（throat tighten/palms clammy）直接傳遞緊張感，適合描寫人物心理。 The deafening silence before the race made Mike's heartbeat echo loudly in his ears. （比賽前震耳欲聾的寂靜讓邁克的心跳聲在耳邊轟鳴。） → 解析：矛盾修辭（deafening silence）強(qiáng)化緊張氛圍，比喻心跳聲體現(xiàn)感官細(xì)節(jié)。 "What if I forget the lyrics?" The thought circled endlessly in her mind like a trapped bird. （"要是忘詞怎么辦？"這個(gè)想法像被困住的鳥兒般在她腦海中不斷盤旋。） → 解析：內(nèi)心獨(dú)白+比喻（trapped bird）展現(xiàn)焦慮，使讀者產(chǎn)生共鳴。 As the judge's eyes scanned the competitors, Lucy's knees trembled like leaves in a storm. （當(dāng)評(píng)委掃視選手時(shí)，露西的雙膝像暴風(fēng)雨中的樹葉般顫抖。） → 解析：明喻（like leaves）生動(dòng)刻畫肢體語(yǔ)言，暗示人物脆弱感。 二、刻畫比賽過(guò)程 寫作要點(diǎn)：用動(dòng)態(tài)動(dòng)詞和比喻增強(qiáng)場(chǎng)景畫面感 例句與解析： He surged forward like a torpedo, cutting through the water with powerful strokes. （他像魚雷般猛然向前，用有力的劃水動(dòng)作劈開波浪。） → 解析：比喻（torpedo）和動(dòng)詞（surged/cutting）結(jié)合，突顯速度和力量。 Her fingers danced across the piano keys, weaving a melody that brought tears to the audience. （她的手指在琴鍵上舞動(dòng)，編織出令觀眾落淚的旋律。） → 解析：擬人化（danced/weaving）賦予音樂(lè)生命力，側(cè)面烘托表演感染力。 Sweat poured down his face as he strained toward the finish line, every muscle screaming in protest. （汗水從他臉上淌下，他奮力沖向終點(diǎn)線，每塊肌肉都在痛苦抗議。） → 解析：感官細(xì)節(jié)（sweat poured）和擬人（muscles screaming）強(qiáng)化身體極限。 The ball arced through the air in a perfect parabola before swishing through the net. （籃球在空中劃出完美的拋物線，最后"唰"地穿過(guò)籃網(wǎng)。） → 解析：專業(yè)術(shù)語(yǔ)（parabola）和擬聲詞（swishing）提升場(chǎng)景真實(shí)感。 三、表現(xiàn)收獲成長(zhǎng) 寫作要點(diǎn)：通過(guò)反思和象征物體現(xiàn)精神升華 例句與解析： The trophy felt light in her hands compared to the heavyweight of confidence she had gained. （獎(jiǎng)杯在她手中顯得很輕，遠(yuǎn)不及她收獲的沉甸甸的自信。） → 解析：對(duì)比（trophy輕 vs confidence重）點(diǎn)明無(wú)形收獲比有形獎(jiǎng)勵(lì)更重要。 Though they didn't win, the shared smiles on their sweat-streaked faces spoke louder than any medal. （盡管沒有獲勝，但他們掛著汗水的臉上共享的笑容比任何獎(jiǎng)牌都更有說(shuō)服力。） → 解析：細(xì)節(jié)描寫（sweat-streaked faces）暗示團(tuán)隊(duì)合作，傳遞超越輸贏的主題。 The torn sneakers in the corner weren't just shoes—they were maps of every mile she had conquered. （角落里的破舊運(yùn)動(dòng)鞋不僅是鞋子，更是她征服的每一公里的地圖。） → 解析：象征手法（sneakers as maps）將物品轉(zhuǎn)化為成長(zhǎng)見證，引發(fā)情感共鳴。 As the applause faded, she realized true victory wasn't about beating others, but surpassing her own fears. （掌聲漸息時(shí)，她意識(shí)到真正的勝利不是擊敗他人，而是超越自己的恐懼。） → 解析：哲理式結(jié)尾（true victory）提升故事立意，適用于比賽類主題升華。 四、使用高級(jí)句式 寫作要點(diǎn)：通過(guò)倒裝、分詞結(jié)構(gòu)等增強(qiáng)語(yǔ)言表現(xiàn)力 例句與解析： Not until the last note faded did she dare to breathe, her heart pounding like a war drum. （直到最后一個(gè)音符消散，她才敢呼吸，心臟像戰(zhàn)鼓般轟鳴。） → 解析：倒裝句（Not until...）制造懸念，比喻（war drum）強(qiáng)化緊張余韻。 Exhausted yet exhilarated, he collapsed onto the track, staring at the sky painted in twilight gold. （筋疲力盡卻興奮不已的他倒在跑道上，凝望暮色鎏金的天空。） → 解析：分詞結(jié)構(gòu)（Exhausted yet exhilarated）濃縮復(fù)雜情感，環(huán)境描寫烘托心境。 Harder than the physical pain was the mental battle—to keep going when every cell begged to stop. （比身體疼痛更艱難的是心理斗爭(zhēng)——當(dāng)每個(gè)細(xì)胞都在哀求停止時(shí)仍要堅(jiān)持。） → 解析：比較級(jí)前置（Harder than）強(qiáng)調(diào)精神挑戰(zhàn)，擬人（cells begged）增強(qiáng)感染力。 Soaring above the roaring crowd was a single white dove, its wings reflecting the stadium lights like hope incarnate. （在喧鬧人群上空翱翔著一只白鴿，它的翅膀反射著體育場(chǎng)的燈光，如同希望的化身。） → 解析：倒裝句（Soaring...was）營(yíng)造詩(shī)意畫面，象征手法（dove as hope）深化主題。 使用建議： 情感遞進(jìn)：按照"緊張→拼搏→轉(zhuǎn)折→感悟"四階段搭建故事框架 細(xì)節(jié)選擇：每段聚焦1-2個(gè)感官細(xì)節(jié)（如顫抖的手、汗水氣味、觀眾呼喊聲） 主題呼應(yīng)：在結(jié)尾通過(guò)物品（獎(jiǎng)牌/舊鞋）或環(huán)境（日落/空曠場(chǎng)地）呼應(yīng)開頭 語(yǔ)言升級(jí)：將簡(jiǎn)單句改寫為復(fù)合句，如把"I won"擴(kuò)展為"The realization that I had outgrown my self-doubt hit me harder than any victory cheer." 背精彩句子，讓表達(dá)出彩 1．As the final whistle blew, a sense of triumph flooded over me as I realized that all of our hard work had paid off. 當(dāng)終場(chǎng)哨聲吹響時(shí)，一種勝利的感覺涌上心頭，因?yàn)槲乙庾R(shí)到我們所有的辛勤工作都得到了回報(bào)。 2．The cheers from the crowd echoed through the stadium, and I couldn't help but feel a rush of excitement as I basked in the glory of our victory. 人群的歡呼聲回蕩在體育場(chǎng)內(nèi)，當(dāng)我沉浸在勝利的榮耀中時(shí)，我不禁感到一陣興奮。 3．Despite the physical and mental exhaustion, I couldn't wipe the smile off my face as I reflected on the incredible memories and lessons learned from the competition. 盡管身心疲憊，當(dāng)我回想起了從比賽中學(xué)到的令人難以置信的回憶和教訓(xùn)，我還是無(wú)法抹去臉上的笑容。 4．As we celebrated our win, I couldn't help but feel grateful for the opportunity to be part of such an amazing team and to have pushed myself to my limits. 當(dāng)我們慶祝勝利時(shí)，我不禁感到感激有機(jī)會(huì)成為這樣一個(gè)了不起的團(tuán)隊(duì)的一員，并將自己推向極限。 5．After months of training and hard work, I finally crossed the finish line of the marathon, my heart bursting with pride and satisfaction. 經(jīng)過(guò)幾個(gè)月的訓(xùn)練和努力，我終于沖過(guò)了馬拉松的終點(diǎn)線，心中充滿了自豪和滿足。 6．As the final whistle blew, our team erupted into cheers and high-fives, basking in the glory of our hard-earned victory. 隨著終場(chǎng)哨聲吹響，我們的團(tuán)隊(duì)爆發(fā)出歡呼聲和擊掌聲，沉浸在我們來(lái)之不易的勝利的榮耀中。 7．Despite the rain pouring down on us, the thrill of competing in the championship game kept our spirits soaring, and we emerged triumphant in the end. 盡管下著傾盆大雨，但參加冠軍賽的快感讓我們精神振奮，最終我們?nèi)〉昧藙倮?8．With beads of sweat running down my face and my heart pounding in my chest, I knew that the grueling hours of practice had paid off as I claimed the top spot on the podium. 汗珠順著我的臉流下來(lái)，我的心在胸腔里砰砰直跳，我知道艱苦的練習(xí)時(shí)間得到了回報(bào)，因?yàn)槲以陬I(lǐng)獎(jiǎng)臺(tái)上占據(jù)了頭把交椅。 9．Even in defeat, I felt a sense of accomplishment and growth, knowing that every moment on the field had taught me something new and valuable. 即使失敗，我也感到成就感和成長(zhǎng)感，知道球場(chǎng)上的每一刻都教會(huì)了我一些新的和有價(jià)值的東西。 10.When my turn came, I mustered up courage and stepped onto the platform． 輪到我的時(shí)候，我鼓足勇氣走上了講臺(tái)。 11.I spoke in a nervous voice and even stuttered a few times as I forgot parts of the story. My legs trembled and so did my voice . 我說(shuō)話聲音緊張，甚至結(jié)巴了幾次，因?yàn)槲彝浟斯适碌囊徊糠?。我的腿在顫抖，我的聲音也在顫?12.Then, along with the first note of music, Emily began to sing her heart out. Her voice was like a nightingale ringing in the auditorium. ? 接著，隨著音樂(lè)的第一個(gè)音符，愛米麗開始放聲歌唱。她的聲音像夜鶯在禮堂里鳴叫。 13.So dynamic was he that he swam swifter than ever．With his arm waving, he cut through the water smoothly like a flying fish. 他活力四射，游得比以前更快了。他揮動(dòng)著手臂，像飛魚一樣平穩(wěn)地劃水。 14.It takes me a while to notice the roar of the audience’s cheers thundering all around the landscape. 過(guò)了一段時(shí)間，我才注意到觀眾的歡呼聲響徹了整個(gè)舞臺(tái)。 15.After I finished, the audience burst into thunderous applause. 我說(shuō)完后，全場(chǎng)爆發(fā)出雷鳴般的掌聲。 16.Upon finishing the talk, I trotted towards Mareya and gave her a bear hug. Meanwhile, thunderous applause rang through the classroom. 演講結(jié)束后，我快步走向瑪瑞婭，給了她一個(gè)大大的擁抱。與此同時(shí)，教室里響起了雷鳴般的掌聲。 When the curtain opened up, the eyes of the whole audience fell upon Emily. "Emily White!" Someone whispered .幕布拉開時(shí)，所有觀眾的目光都落在了埃米莉身上?！鞍惏?”有人小聲說(shuō)。 18.One woman got up and began to animatedly dance about the room. Some of the people swayed in their chairs to the beat of the music while others tapped theirs toes. The performance ended up with a storm of applause from the crowd. 一個(gè)女人站了起來(lái)，開始在房間里活躍地跳舞。有些人隨著音樂(lè)的節(jié)拍在椅子上搖擺，而另一些人則用腳尖敲擊。演出在觀眾暴風(fēng)雨般的掌聲中結(jié)束。 No cheers filled the air when I finished my show. The end of our run was met with surprised silence. \ 當(dāng)我結(jié)束我的節(jié)目時(shí)，沒有歡呼聲。我們的表演遭遇到了令人不可思議的沉默。 I could feel that all the eyes were fixed on us. A strong sense of nervousness surged through me. 我能感覺到所有的眼睛都盯著我們。一種強(qiáng)烈的緊張感涌上我的全身。 20.Then the next few minutes witnessed fierce competition between other groups. 接下來(lái)的幾分鐘里，其他組之間展開了激烈的競(jìng)爭(zhēng)。 21. Standing in front of the line, Emily felt her throat tight and her palms sweating. 站在隊(duì)伍前面，埃米莉感到喉嚨發(fā)緊，手心冒汗。 22.With that and all the high fives and the cheers of the day, the best prize that I walked away with was my confidence. 有了這些和今天所有的擊掌和歡呼，我?guī)ё叩淖詈玫莫?jiǎng)品就是我的信心。 23.With heart pounding quickly, Mike was nervous that his legs and arms began to lose power. 隨著心跳的加快，邁克很緊張，他的腿和胳膊開始失去力量。 24.Then they were all clapping, yelping their praises, telling me how proud I'd made them all. 然后他們都鼓掌，大聲贊揚(yáng)，告訴我我讓他們感到多么自豪。 25.It is not the lucky charm brought by ice-cream but his own diligence, persistence and confidence that contributes to his success in swim meet. 不是冰激凌帶來(lái)的幸運(yùn)魅力，而是他自己的勤奮、堅(jiān)持和信心，使他在游泳比賽中獲得成功。 高考真題演練 2022年6月新高考卷（身殘志堅(jiān)的男孩） It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路線)through thick evergreen forest. I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run. What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event! I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.” I bit back my frustration(懊惱). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward. David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination. 注意： 1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右; 2. 請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答. We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【參考范文】 We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. I said gently and quietly, “No one can change your mind, except yourself. If you desire to challenge yourself, there is nothing to do with others’ thoughts.” He sat still with a deep breath. “You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here”, I added with a sincere tone. Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run. His coach heard what David said and gave me a look—the kind that was more determined than anyone else’s. I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The race started. It seemed that the runway was extremely long for young children, not to mention a child with a heart disease. David insisted on running as if he had forgotten all his weaknesses, though he was tripped over within the a few kilometers. It didn’t take long before he picked himself up again and continued his mission. Classmates all appeared on the racing track, cheering for him. “Come on! You can make it! We are proud of you!” they shouted enthusiastically. To everyone’s joy, he reached the final line and ranked the 20th. It was no more important whether he won the first place or not. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally. 【解析】 【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文以賽跑為線索展開。作者是一名特殊教育教師，在大型越野賽跑那天，發(fā)現(xiàn)患有大腦疾病大衛(wèi)獨(dú)自站在一旁。作者問(wèn)其原因，他說(shuō)準(zhǔn)備放棄比賽。從教練口中得知，因?yàn)閾?dān)心同學(xué)們會(huì)嘲笑大衛(wèi)，所以教練想讓大衛(wèi)自己去決定是否參加賽跑。作者讓大衛(wèi)追尋自己的內(nèi)心，不理會(huì)別人的看法，大衛(wèi)最終參賽，盡管遇到困難，他戰(zhàn)勝了自己，這已經(jīng)無(wú)關(guān)名次，而是他的勇敢和堅(jiān)定讓這一切成為可能。 【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我們挨著坐著，但大衛(wèi)不愿看我一眼?！焙偷诙问拙鋬?nèi)容”我看著大衛(wèi)和其他選手一起走到起跑線上?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者鼓勵(lì)大衛(wèi)繼續(xù)完成比賽，大衛(wèi)經(jīng)過(guò)強(qiáng)烈的心理斗爭(zhēng)，最終決定參加比賽。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我看著大衛(wèi)和其他選手一起走到起跑線上?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懘笮l(wèi)開始參賽，雖然中途遇到困難，仍然堅(jiān)持到最后，完成比賽。 2.續(xù)寫線索：鼓勵(lì)大衛(wèi)——心理變化——決定參賽——克服困難——加油助威——完成比賽 3.詞匯激活： 行動(dòng)類： ①深呼吸：with a deep breath/breathe deeply ②堅(jiān)持做：insisted on doing/be stick to doing 情緒類： ①熱情：enthusiastically /with great passion ②驕傲：be proud of/take pride in 【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]. You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here. (由which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句和 why引導(dǎo)的限制性定語(yǔ)從句) [高分句型2]. Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run. (現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)和省略that的賓語(yǔ)從句) [高分句型3]. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally. (含有It was…that結(jié)構(gòu)的強(qiáng)調(diào)句型) 模擬演練 01 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 I had always prided myself on my sharp tongue and brilliant response whether in class debates or casual arguments. Thus, when I was selected to represent the school in the national debate series, I was naturally extremely confident of myself. All the members in my team were good speakers. We had an experienced teacher who trained us well. But I was undoubtedly the most outstanding speaker. In each of the rounds that I debated in, all the judges selected me as the best one. This meant that my confidence was the highest by the time we found ourselves with one week to train before the finals. I had every reason to believe that I would be voted the best speaker for the debate series. I began to be self-important about the whole business and started behaving that way with my team-mates. I would laugh at Eton’s poor debating style. I would complain of Vivian’s slow response. I saw myself as the natural debater who would be disappointed by their bad performance. As the finals drew near, I became more and more dissatisfied with my team. I began missing practices. My teacher was worried. My teammates were panicked. However, they had no choice but to rely on me to win the finals. Even if they would love to remove me from the team they could not because there was no replacement good enough. The day of the finals finally came. I was very excited that I was able to finally show off my debating skills. Everyone was expecting my performance.They knew that I was praised to be the one most likely to win the best speaker for the debate series. 注意： 1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。 Paragraph1: But the reality was not something that I had ever imagined. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Suddenly,a comforting hand from behind held mine. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Paragraph1: But the reality was not something that I had ever imagined. Due to lack of training, I failed to get the key point of my speech, for which I wasn’t well prepared. I didn’t know what to say and my mind just went blank. I was so nervous that I just stood there. I felt all the people present were looking at me with strange eyes. I was very embarrassed and shed big big sweat. Paragraph 2: Suddenly, a comforting hand from behind held mine. It came from one of my teammates. He whispered to me, “Don’t be nervous and don’t be afraid. All of us are here to support you and cheer you up. I’m here to help you.”???At this time, I realized the mistakes I had made before. I shouldn’t be too confident in myself. I should have humbly trained more with my teammates. At the moment, I was forgiven by my teammates. I pulled myself together, quickly straightened out my ideas and finished my speech. I saw all my teammates applaud for me and I was moved to tears. 【解析】 本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者為自己辯論方面的才能感到自豪，在準(zhǔn)備參加全國(guó)辯論系列節(jié)目時(shí)，作者的信心達(dá)到了空前的高度，開始缺席訓(xùn)練，這使作者和隊(duì)友產(chǎn)生了隔閡，決賽到來(lái)時(shí)，作者很興奮，因?yàn)樗梢哉故咀约旱霓q論技巧了。 【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“但現(xiàn)實(shí)是我從未想象過(guò)的?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者在決賽時(shí)的表現(xiàn)令人失望。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“突然，一只安慰的手從后面抓住了我。”可知，第二段可描寫作者在隊(duì)友的鼓勵(lì)下幡然醒悟。 2．續(xù)寫線索：表現(xiàn)不佳——隊(duì)友鼓勵(lì)——反省——完成演講 3．詞匯激活 行為類 ①不能：fail to do/be unable to do ②支持：support/be back ③振作：pull oneself together/shake oneself together ④鼓掌：applaud/clap one’s hands 情緒類 ①緊張的：nervous/tense ②害怕的：afraid/fearful 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1]Due to lack of training, I failed to get the key point of my speech, for which I wasn’t well prepared.(由“介詞+which”引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句） [高分句型2]At this time, I realized the mistakes I had made before.(由關(guān)系代詞that引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，省略了關(guān)系代詞that） 02 How exciting! Today is my basketball Grand-final! My team of six enthusiastic boys led by our coach, Jack, has worked extremely hard just to make the finals. My heart was pounding a hundred kilometres an hour as I walked into our home ground. As I hurried to our team bench, our opponents caught my attention. They seemed a lot taller and “meaner” looking. Whistle blew. Five of us started on the court. Our opponent got hold of the ball first. They were unbelievably fast. They kept breaking our defences and kept scoring goals. Excited parents were cheering so much that their faces were as red as beetroots. Even our best, Bryce, could not stop our opponents from scoring, which annoyed him a lot. By half time, both teams were extremely exhausted and our opponents were ten goals ahead, which presented us with an enormous but achievable challenge. Jack was awfully anxious as we were not playing anywhere near our best. He told us that we could still win if we made our transitions much quicker so that penalty shots came our way.He also directed us to rebound (搶斷籃板) and position ourselves better to receive and score goals. Most important, he reminded us to play as a team. Our team was all fired up. The second half started in our favour. We were as quick as lightning on the court. We were dribbling (運(yùn)球), passing, shooting and rebounding without any mistakes. We caught our opponents by surprise. The scores were almost level. We were trailing only by one point. The crowd was growing wild with excitement, fuelling our confidence. At the same time, our opponents switched back to attention and started playing like what they did in the first half, making it harder for us to score. One minute left! Our opponent threw in the ball but I managed to steal it! Our team was bursting with happiness! More opponents were heading my way and I had to pass the ball to Bryce. Instead of passing on the ball, he did the most unexpected thing. He tried to score from half court! He missed by miles! 注意: 1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Then I noticed Jack signaled to the referee for a pause. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Whistle blew again and we came back to the court. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Then I noticed Jack signaled to the referee for a pause. So we headed towards Jack and gathered around him. Somehow one of teammates began complaining about Bryce. Feeling frustrated and aggrieved, Bryce argued that he just tried to get scores. Jack looked into our eyes,saying, “It is easy to blame someone for mistake, but remember that basketball game is a team effort. We win together or lose together!” So ashamed was Bryce that he promised to keep calm and cooperate. Whistle blew again and we came back to the court. Though our opponents had possession of the ball, I stole it once again and passed it to Bryce. Finding he got double teamed, Bryce managed to pass the ball to one of us. He shot. Yes! We made it! The final buzzer rang! We screamed with excitement and hugged together. Since this memorable basketball match, we have been ready for every battle. There is no limit to what we can accomplish as long as we play a team. 【解析】 本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者和他們的隊(duì)友在一場(chǎng)籃球賽中，上半場(chǎng)處于劣勢(shì)，對(duì)方速度特別快，負(fù)了十個(gè)球。中場(chǎng)休息時(shí)間，在Bryce和教練的指導(dǎo)下調(diào)整戰(zhàn)略，總結(jié)教訓(xùn)，準(zhǔn)備下半場(chǎng)挽回局面。下半場(chǎng)我們奮力拼搏，只差一份持平比分。在最后一分鐘里，球到了Bryce手中，他是我們球隊(duì)最棒的，卻失誤錯(cuò)失一個(gè)機(jī)會(huì)。 【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“然后我注意到杰克示意裁判暫停一下?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懡酉聛?lái)團(tuán)隊(duì)聚在一起，和教練交流。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“哨聲又響了，我們回到了球場(chǎng)?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懽詈笠环昼姷钠床趫?chǎng)上團(tuán)隊(duì)協(xié)作，取得成功。 2．續(xù)寫線索：申請(qǐng)暫停——和隊(duì)友教練交流——策略——上場(chǎng)——團(tuán)隊(duì)合作——進(jìn)球 3．詞匯激活 行為類 ①向……走去：walk towards/head towards ②牢記：remember/memorize/keep in mind ③完成，實(shí)現(xiàn)：accomplish/achieve/fulfil 情緒類 ①沮喪：sad/frustrated/depressed/discouraged ②難忘的：memorable/unforgettable 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1]Feeling frustrated and aggrieved, Bryce argued that he just tried to get scores.（運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語(yǔ)，及賓語(yǔ)從句） [高分句型2]So ashamed was Bryce that he promised to keep calm and cooperate.（運(yùn)用了so…that…句型及部分倒裝） [高分句型3]There is no limit to what we can accomplish as long as we play a team.（運(yùn)用了what引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句及as long as引導(dǎo)的條件狀語(yǔ)從句） 03 Jenny is a fifth - grader. She is one of the most popular girls in her class because she is among the brightest in her class . She can do the most cartwheels (側(cè)手翻) in a row , but most of all , she has the talent to dance well . Last year, she entered the school’s dance competition and won first place. Since that day, she has been the class attraction. This year, the school is holding another dance competition, but there has been a change. The competition has to be done in pairs. Jenny’s class was expecting her to win again this year. But Jenny was unsure. She wanted to enter the competition, but she had never danced with a partner before. She decided to ask some of the boys in her class to enter with her. They all said no because they did not know how to dance . She finally decided to turn to one of her closest friends, Carl. Carl was unwilling to join at first because he also didn’t know how to dance. But Jenny insisted and he finally agreed. However, she was still worried because she knew it was going to be more of a challenge because Carl was not a good dancer. The competition was in two months , and only time could tell whether they would win or not. Jenny and Carl spent the first two weeks memorizing the steps of their dance with the help of their teacher. Carl was pretty clumsy at first . Jenny had to devote some time to helping Carl improve his skill. Fortunately, he finally got the hang of it. They spent the rest of the time perfecting their moves. The day of the competition was near . Jenny and Carl were beginning to get nervous. 注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右; 2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。 The day of the competition arrived. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ They came to a perfect start.??? ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 The day of the competition arrived. Since Jenny won last year’s competition, she was to perform with Carl last. As each pair took the stage one by one, Jenny grew more anxious. Carl noticed this and told her, “ It’ll be okay, Jenny. You are great, and I’ m sure we’ ll win.” Jenny felt better after hearing Carl’s words. Soon, it was their turn. They walked on stage and began to dance as soon as their song started to play. They came to a perfect start. The crowd began cheering them on. Suddenly , Jenny tripped and nearly fell. Carl managed to get her back up in time for their ending pose. Jenny was upset because of her fault. Shortly after their performance, the judges were ready to announce the winner. To Jenny’s great surprise, they won! But it was a close competition. If it hadn’t been for Jenny’s talent and Carl’s quick reaction, they wouldn’t have won. Jenny and Carl were really excited. 【解析】 本文以人物為線索，講述了五年級(jí)學(xué)生Jenny去年舞蹈比賽獲得了第一名，成為了班上最吸引人的人。今年的舞蹈比賽要求兩人一組，班內(nèi)同學(xué)希望她再次獲勝，卻不能提供合適的舞伴。最后Jenny求助于她最親密的朋友之一Carl，雖然Carl不擅長(zhǎng)跳舞，但是在老師的幫助下，他們還是掌握了舞步，并且提高了技能和竅門，最終參加比賽，并且成功獲勝的故事。 【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫 ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“比賽的日子到了?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫Jenny和Carl去參加比賽的的賽前心態(tài)和開場(chǎng)的表現(xiàn)。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“他們有了一個(gè)完美的開始?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懺诒荣愔谐霈F(xiàn)困難，在Jenny和Carl的共同努力下克服困難并且成功獲勝。 2．續(xù)寫線索：比賽的日子到了—Jenny開始焦慮，Carl進(jìn)行安慰—比賽完美開始—出現(xiàn)困難—努力克服困難—兩人獲勝，皆大歡喜 3．詞匯激活 行為類 ①注意到：notice/see ②獲勝：win/make it ③絆倒：trip/stumble ④設(shè)法成功做某事：manage to do/succeed in doing 情緒類 ①焦慮：anxious/worried ②沮喪：upset/depressed 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1] As each pair took the stage one by one, Jenny grew more anxious.（運(yùn)用了as引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句） [高分句型2] If it hadn’t been for Jenny’s talent and Carl’s quick reaction, they wouldn’t have won.（運(yùn)用了虛擬語(yǔ)氣） 04 In old times, there was a story about a young athletic boy hungry for success, for whom winning was everything. One day, the boy was preparing himself for a running competition in his small native village. He and two other young boys were to compete. A large crowd had gathered to witness the competition and a wise old man, upon hearing of the little boy, had traveled far to see it too. The race started. The boy showed his determination, strength and power and he was first. The crowd cheered and waved at the boy. The wise man remained still and calm. The little boy, however, felt proud and important. A second race was called, and two new young challengers came forward to run with the little boy. The little boy finished first once again. The crowd again cheered and waved at the boy. The wise man expressed no opinion. The little boy, however, felt proud and important. “Another race, another race!” shouted the little boy. The wise old man stepped forward and presented the little boy with two new challengers, a frail old lady and a blind man. “What is this?” asked the little boy. “Race!” said the wise man. The race was started and the boy was the only finisher. The little boy raised his arms in delight. The crowd, however, was silent showing no happiness. “What has happened? Why don’t they join in my success?” he asked the wise old man. “Race again, ” replied the wise man. “This time, all three of you, finish together,” continued the wise man. 注意:1、所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為 150 左右； 2、續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好； Paragraph1: The little boy thought a little, ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph2: “Old man, I don’t understand! Who are the crowd cheering for? Which one of us?” asked the little boy. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Paragraph1: The little boy thought a little, stood between the blind man and the frail old lady, feeling hesitant. Finally, he held the two special challengers' hands and started moving towards the winning line together. The race began. He walked more slowly than any other race he had participated in before. When they reached the finishing line,???a great cheer went up from the crowd, which made him confused instead of feeling proud and important as before. Then he went to the wise old man in puzzlement. Paragraph 2: "Old man, I don't understand! Who are the crowed cheering for????Which one of us?" asked the little boy."They're cheering for you, my little boy," the wise old man answered,smiling gratifyingly, “what really matters is the process to success but not the result." Lost in deep thought for a while,???the boy thanked the wise old man for making him realize the real meaning of success. From then on, he could be regarded as a truly successful athletic. 【解析】 本文以人物為線索展開，講述了一個(gè)年輕的渴望成功的運(yùn)動(dòng)員視勝利為一切，在贏了兩場(chǎng)比賽后，智者給男孩帶來(lái)了兩個(gè)特殊的挑戰(zhàn)者。男孩勝之不武，村民們也沒像前兩次一樣為他歡呼。智者要求他第四場(chǎng)比賽時(shí)要與這兩個(gè)特殊的挑戰(zhàn)者一起到達(dá)終點(diǎn)。當(dāng)男孩拉著這兩位特殊挑戰(zhàn)者的手，慢慢地一起到達(dá)終點(diǎn)時(shí)，人們?yōu)樗僖淮伪l(fā)出一陣歡呼聲。智者使男孩明白了一個(gè)道理：真正重要的是成功的過(guò)程，而不是結(jié)果。從那時(shí)起，他就被認(rèn)為是一個(gè)真正成功的運(yùn)動(dòng)員。 【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①.由第一段首句內(nèi)容“小男孩想了想，”可知，第一段可描寫男孩想辦法做到了和這兩位特殊的挑戰(zhàn)中一起到達(dá)終點(diǎn)，人們?yōu)樗炔省?②.由第二段首句內(nèi)容“老人家，我不明白！觀眾在為誰(shuí)歡呼呢？我們中的哪一個(gè)？小男孩問(wèn)?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫智者點(diǎn)撥他，使他認(rèn)識(shí)到作為運(yùn)動(dòng)員，成功的真諦。 2．續(xù)寫線索：思考——攜手——慢速到終點(diǎn)——不理解眾人的喝彩緣由——請(qǐng)教——感悟 3．詞匯激活 行為類 ①.前往：move toward/head for ②.參加：participate in/take part in ③.感謝：thank/appreciate 情緒類 ①.困惑的：confused/puzzled ②.滿足地：gratifyingly/with satisfaction 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1].The little boy thought a little, stood between the blind man and the frail old lady, feeling hesitant. （現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語(yǔ)） [高分句型2]. When they reached the finishing line, a great cheer went up from the crowd, which made him confused instead of feeling proud and important as before. （由關(guān)系代詞which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句） [高分句型3].Lost in deep thought for a while, the boy thanked the wise old man for making him realize the real meaning of success.（過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)） 05 “Number 7, Jobie Nymble, takes the lead,” cried the announcer. “Just one more hurdle (跨欄) and-Jobie Nymble from Riverside Middle School takes first place in the girls’ 100-meter hurdles！” “County championships, here we come.” yelled Jobie, patting (輕拍) her worn green track spikes (釘鞋). They were her lucky shoes and she loved them. “Next Saturday, we’re taking the gold home,” Jobie whispered to her spikes. “Don’t forget, guys.” said Marisol, one of her teammates. “My birthday party is next Friday at Hidden Park. You should all come.” The day of Marisol’s party came. Jobie put on her favorite clothes: her blue shorts, an old track T-shirt, and her lucky spikes. The party had begun when Jobie arrived at Hidden Park. She stopped by the track first, planning to do some running exercise. Even at that end of the park, music and the smell of grilled food filled the air. Two of Jobie’s teammates rushed toward her, breathless and barefoot. “Come on,” they shouted. “You have to try the slide.” Jobie’s eyes shot toward the party area. “Slide? What sli ...?” Suddenly, she saw it. The BIGGEST inflatable (充氣的 ) slide she had ever seen was on the far side of the park. Smiling kids zoomed down the slide at unspeakable speeds. Without thinking twice, Jobie threw off her spikes and ran fast toward the slide. Its ladder rose to the sky, but she reached the top in no time. She slid down, sped to the edge, and closed her eyes as she let go. Jobie couldn’t get enough fun from the slide. When it was finally time to go home, she unwillingly made her way back to the track where she’d left her shoes. As she eyed the area from a distance, panic set in. Jobie picked up the pace, her heart pounding louder the closer she got. When she reached the place she’d left them. her heart stopped. “They’re gone!” she screamed. “My lucky spikes are gone.” Jobie’s teammates helped her search the park. No lucky spikes. “So long, gold,” Jobie groaned (嘆息). 注意： 1，續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2，請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Paragraph 1: The next day, the best track teams in the county gathered at Hidden Park for the championships. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2： Buhhhhh (比賽的信號(hào)聲) went the starting signal. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Paragraph 1: The next day, the best track teams in the county gathered at Hidden Park for the championships. Jobie turned up, a new pair of spikes under her arm. As a girl lacking in confidence, the loss of her lucky spikes meant the loss of the gold medal. So absent-minded was she that she even didn’t notice when her match would begin. Noticing her blank expression, all her teammates came around. “Next up is the girls’100-meter hurdles,” said the announcer again. Her teammates encouraged her as she bent down to put on her new spikes. Then she took several deep breaths, nodded her head to them and walked down to the starting line. Paragraph 2： Buhhhhh (比賽的信號(hào)聲) went the starting signal. Jobie didn’t regain her sense until two seconds later, which puzzled her teammates. Anyway, rather than give up, she began to run desperately and cleared hurdle after hurdle. Soon, she caught up with her competitive opponents, and then surpassed them, leaving them far behind. She got closer and closer, and cheers broke out. Wearing a wide smile, Jobie whispered,“No lucky spikes. Lucky me.” 【解析】 本文以人物為線索展開，講述了在女子100米跨欄比賽中獲得第一名的Jobie Nymble躊躇滿志，對(duì)于周六的縣冠軍志在必得，豈料，周五去公園參加隊(duì)友生日派對(duì)時(shí)，因沉迷于玩滑梯而丟了幸運(yùn)釘鞋。第二天參加錦標(biāo)賽，Jobie Nymble因沒了幸運(yùn)釘鞋而失魂落魄，隊(duì)友鼓勵(lì)她。最終她穿上了新鞋，走上賽道。比賽開始信號(hào)響起，Jobie Nymble剛開始拉在后面，但是她奮起直追，超過(guò)了一個(gè)個(gè)強(qiáng)勁的對(duì)手，憑實(shí)力成為幸運(yùn)的新晉縣冠軍。 【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“第二天，本縣最好的田徑隊(duì)聚集在隱蔽公園參加錦標(biāo)賽?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼慗obie Nymble因沒了幸運(yùn)釘鞋而不自信，隊(duì)友鼓勵(lì)她，她最終穿上了新鞋，走上賽道。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“比賽開始信號(hào)響起?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫Jobie Nymble剛開始落在后面，但很快，她奮起直追，超過(guò)了一個(gè)個(gè)強(qiáng)勁的對(duì)手，成為幸運(yùn)的新晉縣冠軍。 2．續(xù)寫線索：拿著新鞋——不在狀態(tài)——受到鼓勵(lì)——穿上新鞋走上賽道——落后——超越——奪冠 3．詞匯激活 行為類 ①激勵(lì)：encourage/inspire/stimulate/motivate/urge ②放棄：give up/abandon/withdraw ③超越：surpass/exceed/defeat 情緒類 ①失魂落魄的：absent-minded/lose one’s wits??? ②困惑：puzzle/confuse 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1] So absent-minded was she that she even didn’t notice when her match would begin. (運(yùn)用so引導(dǎo)的倒裝句，when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句) [高分句型2] Jobie didn’t regain her sense until two seconds later, which puzzled her teammates. (運(yùn)用not...until...結(jié)構(gòu)，which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句) [高分句型3] Soon, she caught up with her competitive opponents, and then surpassed them, leaving them far behind. (現(xiàn)在分詞做伴隨狀語(yǔ))

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