課件專題13 旅游見聞類新高考英語讀后續(xù)寫主題分類突破（原卷版+解析版）-課件下載-教習網(wǎng)

旅游見聞類故事寫作導圖一、觀察順序法通過時間/空間順序組織描寫，增強畫面邏輯性 The sun slowly peeked over the mountain ridge, painting the valley with golden strokes. （太陽緩緩從山脊探出，用金色筆觸為山谷上色）解析：使用"peeked over"擬人動詞，通過時間順序展現(xiàn)日出過程 We followed the winding path upwards, passing wildflowers at ankle level, then chest-high shrubs, until finally reaching ancient pines towering above. （我們沿蜿蜒小徑上行，先見腳踝高的野花，再經(jīng)齊胸灌木，最終抵達高聳的古松）解析：空間順序"ankle-chest-towering"形成垂直視覺層次 Morning fog lingered in the hollows, but by midday, every dewdrop on spiderwebs sparkled under direct sunlight. （晨霧縈繞山谷，正午時分蛛網(wǎng)露珠在直射陽光下閃爍）解析：時間詞"morning-midday"構(gòu)成自然過渡 From the cable car window, the cityscape shrank to miniature: matchbox cars crawled on ribbon roads, skyscrapers stood like colored pencils in a cup. （纜車窗外，城市縮成微景：火柴盒汽車在緞帶路上爬行，摩天樓如彩鉛插筆筒）解析：空間視角由近及遠，比喻生動二、感官描寫法調(diào)動五感讓場景立體可感 The sea breeze carried saltiness that clung to our lips, while seagulls' cries mingled with waves' rhythmic applause. （海風裹挾咸味粘住雙唇，海鷗啼叫與浪濤節(jié)拍相和）解析：味覺"鹽味"+聽覺"叫聲/掌聲"營造海濱氛圍 Crunching through autumn leaves, we caught whiffs of woodsmoke from distant cottages, their chimneys sketching thin lines against lavender sky. （踩著沙沙秋葉前行，遠處木屋炊煙飄來柴火香，煙囪在淡紫天空勾畫細線）解析：聽覺"crunching"+嗅覺"woodsmoke"激活多重感官 My fingers traced the temple's weathered stones, their cool roughness whispering stories of eight centuries. （手指撫過寺廟風化石材，涼意粗糙感低語八百年滄桑）解析：觸覺描寫賦予歷史厚重感 The night market assaulted our senses: sizzling satay smoke stung eyes, chili aroma tickled nostrils, vendors' chants competed with pop music blaring from shops. （夜市沖擊感官：沙爹油煙刺痛眼睛，辣椒香撓癢鼻腔，攤販叫賣與店鋪流行樂爭鳴）解析：視覺/嗅覺/聽覺交織呈現(xiàn)市井活力三、情感融入法通過環(huán)境描寫反映人物心境 Each step on the cobblestone alley echoed my hesitation, shadows lengthening like doubts as sunset bled across medieval walls. （卵石巷腳步聲回應(yīng)猶豫，夕陽染紅古墻時陰影如疑慮蔓延）解析：環(huán)境描寫"陰影/夕陽"映射心理活動 Laughter bubbled from the plaza fountain, its merry splash a stark contrast to the heavy suitcase dragging at my arm. （廣場噴泉迸發(fā)歡快水聲，與我臂上沉重行李箱形成鮮明對比）解析：用歡快環(huán)境反襯疲憊心境 The abandoned lighthouse stood sentinel on the cliff, its cracked lens staring vacantly seaward, mirroring my sense of directionless. （廢棄燈塔如哨兵矗立懸崖，裂痕鏡頭茫然望海，映照我的迷失）解析：擬物手法實現(xiàn)情景交融 Cherry petals snowed around us, their fleeting beauty tightening my throat - tomorrow we would part at this very station. （櫻瓣如雪飄落，轉(zhuǎn)瞬即逝的美景扼住咽喉——明日我們將在同個車站分別）解析：自然現(xiàn)象觸發(fā)情感共鳴四、語言提升技巧運用修辭增強文字表現(xiàn)力 Twilight draped the savanna in indigo velvet, acacia trees silhouetted like nature's calligraphy. （暮色為草原披上靛藍天鵝絨，金合歡樹影宛如自然書法）解析：比喻"velvet/calligraphy"提升畫面美感 The glacier groaned and cracked, ancient ice cubes clinking in nature's cocktail shaker. （冰川呻吟開裂，古老冰塊在自然調(diào)酒器中叮當作響）解析：擬聲詞+新奇比喻創(chuàng)造聽覺意象 Dawn tiptoed across rice terraces, gilding each watery step with liquid gold. （黎明躡足走過梯田，為每層水階鍍上流動金箔）解析：擬人+"liquid gold"創(chuàng)新表達 Our campfire danced with orange tongues, swallowing twilight stars whole while birthing constellations in rising sparks. （篝火舞動橘色火舌，吞噬暮星卻在飛濺火星中孕育新星座）解析：矛盾修辭法制造詩意張力背精彩句子，讓表達出彩 1．After hours of hiking, we finally reached the summit of the mountain and were rewarded with a breathtaking view. 經(jīng)過幾個小時的徒步旅行，我們終于到達了山頂，并欣賞到了壯麗的景色。 2．My brother and I harvested a meaningful exploration and it was really a brand new weekend. 我和哥哥收獲了一次有意義的探索，這真是一個全新的周末。 3．Our being lost added a special taste to my adventurous vacation which I would remember all my life. 我們的迷路給我的冒險假期增添了一份特別的滋味，我將終生難忘。 4．Very tired as they were, they had to strengthen up to spend a night there. 雖然他們很累，但他們不得不鼓起勇氣在那里過夜。 5．The first thing he did was to shelter from the freezing wind and snow. 他做的第一件事就是躲避寒風和雪。 6．She tried to make her way quietly through the underbrush, but she was nearly scared to death when she saw a large snake coil up before her.她試圖悄悄地穿過灌木叢，但當她看到一條大蛇盤繞在她面前時，她幾乎嚇死了。 7．The only thing we could do was just sitting in the cold air and wondering how to get out of the forest. 我們唯一能做的就是坐在寒冷的空氣中，想著如何走出森林。 8．Whether it's a weekend getaway or a month-long adventure, there's nothing like the excitement of planning a trip. 無論是周末度假還是為期一個月的冒險，沒有什么比計劃旅行更令人興奮的了。 9．Despite feeling weak, Nicholas was generally in a good condition, and he was really happy as he was carried back to the ski resort to reunite with his family. 盡管感覺很虛弱，但尼古拉斯總的來說狀態(tài)很好，當他被抬回滑雪場與家人團聚時，他真的很開心。 10.Finally, we went out of the forest that trapped us．What an unforgettable experience! It turns out that there's always a way out of any difficult situation as long as we stay calm. 最后，我們走出了困住我們的森林。多么難忘的經(jīng)歷??！事實證明，只要我們保持冷靜，就總有辦法擺脫困境。 11.Traveling to new destinations is an adventure that always fills me with excitement.前往新的目的地是一次冒險，總是讓我興奮不已。 12.Whether it's hiking through the mountains or surfing on the beach, every adventure brings its own unique challenges and rewards. 無論是在山上徒步旅行還是在海灘上沖浪，每一次冒險都會帶來自己獨特的挑戰(zhàn)和回報。 13.Near the top, thick snow blanketed the path．Excitedly, the kids raced across the hard surface. 在山頂附近，厚厚的積雪覆蓋了這條小路。孩子們興奮地在堅硬的表面上奔跑。 14.When the sun disappeared behind heavy gray clouds, they suddenly felt lost, cold and hungry. 當太陽消失在厚重的灰色云層后面時，他們突然感到迷茫、寒冷和饑餓。 15.Exhausted and bloodied，he emerged from the forest and bumped into a family of hikers，who called 911.他筋疲力盡，渾身是血，從森林里出來，撞見一群徒步旅行者，他們撥打了911。高考真題演練 2017年11月浙江卷（和媽媽去旅行） A?vacation with my mother I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprises?and amusements, all because of my mother?— loving, sweet, yet?absent-minded?and?forgetful. One strange family?trip?we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her. My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached,?David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games,?camping?equipment, and a?tent?into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the purse and traveler’s checks?Mom?had forgotten. David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while?Dad?slept: “You stand outside the door and play lookout (放哨) while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gosh… I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances. On the fourth or fifth night, we had?trouble?finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections.?If a strange family showed up on her front doorstep, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world is as?nice?as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.? 注意： 1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2. 至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語； 3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好； 4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。 Paragraph 1:??The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.? _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2:?We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.? _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【解析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者11歲的一次家庭旅行讓作者了解了自己的母親。在路上作者和弟弟一直擔心遇到危險，而媽媽卻堅持要在外面搭帳篷睡覺，最后他們搭好了帳篷，在外面度過了美好的一個假期。【詳解】 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“第二天，我們想起了我們帶來的新帳篷?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫他們回去取帳篷的經(jīng)過。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我們開車經(jīng)過了幾個州，沿途看到了許多美麗的景色?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懰麄冊趹敉獯顜づ褡鲲埖氖虑?。 2．續(xù)寫線索：想起帶來的新帳篷——媽媽堅持回去取帳篷——看見美麗的風景——搭帳篷準備飯菜——作者感悟 3．詞匯激活行為類建議：recommend/suggest 回去：go back/return 發(fā)現(xiàn)：find/discover 情緒類準備好的：ready /prepared 令人愉快的：pleasant /pleasing 【點睛】 [高分句型1] But then we were half an hour away from the hotel, where the tent was left behind. (運用了where引導非限制性定語從句) [高分句型2] If Mom hadn’t been that absent-minded, it would have saved us the trouble of going back again and again. (運用了虛擬語氣) 參考范文1 The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. Thinking of this tent, Mom suggested that we go camping in the next village in excitement, with her eyes glittering. Considering her enthusiasm, we all agreed. When the door of our car opened, Mom stormed out instantly and urged us to put up the tent. David and I were asked to pick up some branches to build a fire. And when we came back, Dad and Mom had already lain down the grass comfortably in front of the tent, talking merrily with a local boy at our age, who kept glancing at this tent curiously. Soon we learnt that the boy in rags even didn’t have a home to live in. Of course, Mom “forgot” to take this tent with us again. We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. And we also had a nice time living with my grandparents during that trip. But what impressed me most was that tent, which was forgotten deliberately by Mom. Though she did love going camping, she presented that poor boy with this tent out of sympathy. It was Mom that made my childhood colorful. And it was also she that showed me the true meaning of giving. 參考范2 The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.?But then we were half an hour away from the hotel, where the?tent?was left behind.?Dad?recommended buying a new one, while?Mom?insisted on our going back to fetch it, saying “Forgetful?people like me may lose things repeatedly, so it’s unwise to give up the tent.” Finally, we got back the tent and hit the road again. If Mom hadn’t been that?absent-minded, it would have saved us the?trouble?of going back again and again. We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.?One day, towards evening, we found a great?camping?site at the foot of a high mountain.?David?and I helped Dad put up the tent, and Mom was busy preparing supper. When the setting sun cast an orange light over the mountains, the tent was set up and the meal was ready. Sitting around the camp fire, we talked and laughed. Every time we mentioned the funny incidents of the journey a pleasant smile would spread over Mom’s face.? 參考范文3 The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.?To our delight,?Mom?gave up the idea of?camping?in some stranger’s backyard. Instead, we found a wonderful camping site in the wild. It was a clearing in the woods by a small lake, where?Dad?could catch some fish for dinner. We had no?trouble?setting up our?tent, but we were disappointed to find that Mom forgot to pack up pillows. Needless to say, we all woke up with a sore neck the next morning. We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way.?It was a fantastic?trip. We crossed big rivers and vast plains, climbed high mountains, and overlooked deep valleys. During the trip, Mom’s being?absent-minded?not only got us into much trouble, but also gave us many funny moments. But luckily, she was not so?forgetful?as to leave me and?David?behind in the gas station bathrooms. We all arrived at grandparents’ home safe and sound.? 模擬演練 1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 Kathy’s family vacation to the beach was usually the highlight of her summer. This year, however, her parents announced a new rule: no phones for the entire week. “But my friends will be expecting updates about the trip,” Kathy complained. Kathy’s mom gave her a serious look. Unwillingly, Kathy handed her phone over and her mom locked it away. The drive to the beach house took most of the day. As they turned off the highway onto countryback roads, the clouds darkened. Rain started to pour. “Even more beautiful in the rain,” her mother said. “What do you think, Kathy?” Kathy glared at her mom. “Beautiful,” she muttered. That night after dinner, Kathy wandered into the kitchen, where her father was washing dishes. She gave her father a loving look and said in her sweetest voice, “Couldn’t I have my phone back, just for one second? Just so I can tell everyone what an amazing time I’m having?” “Can’t,” he said. “It’s not here. Remember?” Kathy was very annoyed. Having nothing better to do, she examined the dusty bookcase in the living room. The books looked as dull as the weather. On the top shelf, however, she spotted a puzzle. She took it, emptied the pieces on the table, and began to sort them. After what seemed like a few minutes, she looked up. It was past ten o’clock. She had been working for almost two hours! She yawned. The puzzle was less than half done, but she was exhausted. So, she went to bed. 注意： 1．所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好。 Paragraph 1: After a quick breakfast, Kathy headed to the beach. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Appreciating the finished puzzle, she realized she hadn’t thought of her cellphone for hours. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【參考范文】 After a quick breakfast, Kathy headed to the beach. Under no circumstances had Kathy expected the scenery to be so spectacular! With the sea wind blowing against her face, Kathy totally lost herself in the stunning views. After half an hour’s leisure walk along the beach, Kathy returned to the house. “How do I spend the rest of the day?” Kathy murmured to herself. Suddenly, the unfinished puzzle caught her attention. She felt a little excited and buried herself in it once again. Every time the shapes met, Kathy was overwhelmed with happiness. Soon, all that were left were a few gaps. She quickly put the remaining pieces into place. The puzzle was completed! Appreciating the finished puzzle, she realized she hadn’t thought of her cellphone for hours. Trying to preserve the image in her mind, she quietly started taking it apart rather than taking pictures to update about the trip.That, she thought, was just for me. Without the distractions from her cellphone, she found herself engaged in story sharing session with mom and daddy willingly. They spent a high-quality family time together. On arriving home, mom gave her cellphone back. This time, however, she had no intention to share but to keep all the great memories in her mind. 【寫作指導】本文以人物為線索展開，講述Kathy一家去旅行，媽媽要求旅行中不用手機，開始Kathy十分不習慣但又不得不遵守規(guī)則。Kathy完成了拼圖，并且欣賞到了平時看不到的美景，還盡情享受了和父母在一起的時間和溫暖。 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Kathy快速吃完早飯后就跑去海邊?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼慘athy在海邊看到了美景，然后，回家完成昨晚沒有完成的拼圖。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“欣賞著自己完成的拼圖，她意識到自己已經(jīng)好幾個小時沒有想起手機這回事了?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫沒有手機的打擾，一家人在這里度過的溫馨生活，是在平時感受不到的，回到家后媽媽把手機還給Kathy后，她似乎已經(jīng)不需要了。 2．續(xù)寫線索：去海邊欣賞到美景——回家完成拼圖——在腦海保存拼圖——和父母度過高質(zhì)量的假期——漸漸地已經(jīng)不需要手機 3．詞匯激活行為類 ①回家：returned to the house/go back to the house ②吸引注意力：catch her attention /draw her attention ③保存：preserve/keep 情緒類 ①激動的：excited/thrilled ②十分高興：be overwhelmed with happiness/be bathed in happiness 【典型句式】 [句型1]. With the sea wind blowing against her face, Kathy totally lost herself in the stunning views. (運用了with的復合結(jié)構(gòu)) [句型2]. Every time the shapes met, Kathy was overwhelmed with happiness. (由every time引導的時間狀語從句) 2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 Winter break was approaching, and all Scott wanted to do was go snowboarding. Unfortunately, Scott's parents had different plans. They had booked a weeklong tropical cruise (熱帶船游). Scott hated warm weather and asked if he could just stay at his best friend's house so he could snowboard every day at the local mountain. His parents didn't want to hear anything of it. He kept debating them about the topic, but they would not change their minds. Family time was important to them, and it was tradition that they spend winter break together. The week of the cruise arrived, and Scott continued to mumble (咕噥) his complaints as he and his family left their house to head south. Scott's dad told him that he would only make the vacation worse for himself if he didn't change his attitude and open his mind to a new experience. Scott still couldn't stop thinking about all of the snow he was leaving behind. When they arrived at the port to board the ship, Scott had a hard time admitting that he was actually impressed with the size of the ship. He had seen the brochures but seeing the ship in person was a whole different animal. Then he remembered that the brochure said something about a surfing pool. Maybe surfing would be somewhat like snowboarding. After all, it involved riding a board. Scott climbed aboard the ship with his parents, and then they walked around to check everything out. He couldn't believe how fancy the accommodations were. The dining room looked like a royal hall; the game room had all of his favorite games; the ship's deck (甲板) had several different swimming pools for different purposes. Then Scott saw the surfing pool. It was incredible. It wasn't a big pool, but it had big waves, and the young man who was demonstrating how to ride the waves made it look like a ton of fun. 注意： 1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右; 2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Scott asked his parents if he could try surfing. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Gradually, Scott began to love the cruise. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【參考范文】 Scott asked his parents if he could try surfing. They said, "Of course. And much to Scott's surprise, they wanted to try surfing too. When Scott and his parents had their swim suits on, Scott's dad went first and only lasted about five seconds before he wiped out.Then it was his mom's turn.She actually made it longer than his dad did. When it was Scott's turn, he was excited but a little bit nervous. He hopped on the board and took a stance similar to his snowboarding stance. Then the waves started. It felt similar to snowboarding but different at the same time. On his first ride, Scott rode for almost 30 seconds before wiping out.He was crazy about it though. Gradually, Scott began to love the cruise. He got to know the people who often surfed there quite well. By the time the weeklong cruise was over, Scott had new friends he planned to keep in touch. Scott is the brave and lucky one since only eight percent of the experiencer or so really fell in love with it among a lot of the passengers who tried surfing the first day of the cruise. With a new hobby, and great memories, he apologized to his parents for earliest moaning and groaning and told them it was his best vacation ever. 【寫作指導】本文以時間為線索展開，講述了作者斯科特和父母像往常一樣在寒假出去度假。但他想要滑雪，但父母卻訂了為期一周的熱帶船游。斯科特無奈妥協(xié)，但最終在體驗的過程中愛上了這項新運動并結(jié)交了很多新朋友，度過了最開心的假期。 1．段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“斯科特問他的父母他是否可以嘗試沖浪。”可知，第一段描述了斯科特和父母一起嘗試沖浪的體驗過程。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“漸漸地，斯科特開始喜歡上了這次航行”可知，第二段可描寫作者改變了自己的態(tài)度，從沖浪中獲得了快樂且有了很多收獲。 2．續(xù)寫線索：詢問是否可以嘗試——穿上裝備做好準備——父母和斯科特的第一次體驗——逐漸體驗到快樂——慢慢愛上運動，并收獲頗多——跟父母道歉并承認是最開心的一次旅行 3．詞匯激活(一個詞匯要寫出相近的表達) 行為類 ①嘗試做某事：try doing sth/make attempts to do sth/attempt to do sth ②保持聯(lián)系：keep in touch/stay in touch/keep contact ③被淘汰：wipe out /be knocked out 情緒類 ①令某人吃驚：to one's surprise/surprise sb/to one's astonishment ②緊張：nervous/tense/strained 【典型句式】 [句型1] When Scott and his parents had their swim suits on, Scott's dad went first and only lasted about five seconds before he wiped out.(由連接詞when和before引導的時間狀語從句) [句型2] With a new hobby, and great memories, he apologized to his parents for earliest moaning and groaning and told them it was his best vacation ever.(運用with復合結(jié)構(gòu)表伴隨) 3．閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 It was August. We were on vacation, just my six-year-old son Kevin and I, for my husband was always busy. Having driven from our home in the city to a remote and peaceful place, we wouldn’t see friends or family—it would be a nice, safe, socially distanced week away. We had hiked about half mile to an attractive spot called Diana’s Baths, which afforded visitors an expanse of transparent water. The water flows and then falls off a series of big flat stones, making itself a small waterfall, about 7 inches high. Several couples and their kids in swimsuits were playing to their heart’s content in the water. We joined them. I watched as some younger parents nervously drove their babies away from the stones edges. Fast-moving water made standing there quite dangerous, for I saw a certain kid with curly hair missed a step and almost fell down. The air was full of shouts and laughter. I felt so lucky that I didn’t always need to fix my eyes on my son. Kevin could navigate his physical space with more confidence and care. But I was still terrified when I saw Kevin jump between the slippery rocks. But with the passing of time, I soon relaxed, and we were both having fun, my kid splashing and kicking in the cool water, laughing heartily as I put my head under the cold running water. Then seconds later, every fear I’d ever had rose to the surface. I lifted my head, turned and saw Kevin sitting between two stones, with the rushing water flowing around him. I could see he was shaking sometimes because of the water rapids. I yelled at him to get out. He yelled back something that I couldn’t hear. 注意: 1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右; 2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Suddenly he disappeared in front of my eyes. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ When Kevin returned to normal. I learned the woman was a nurse. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【參考范文】 Suddenly he disappeared in front of my eyes. Jumping to my feet, I let out screams, “Somebody help my son!” Hardly had I yelled when a woman rushed to the stones’ edge and jumped down. Following her with unsteady steps, I went down too, seeing her scooping up my son. His eyes remained closed. Having laid my son on his back, she checked his pulse and began to perform first aid. Suddenly, I saw my son opened his eyes. Indescribable delight filled my heart. When Kevin returned to normal, I learned the woman was a nurse. “Your son just suffered a minor back injury. Don’t worry,” she comforted me. “It was you that saved my son,” I said, tears flooding down my cheeks. She held my hands, a big smile shining from her face, and said that anyone would have done the same. We had a very pleasant chat, and I knew her name was Lisa. Her random kindness indeed made a big difference and I would follow her example. 【寫作指導】本文以度假為線索展開。作者帶著只有六歲的兒子凱文去度假。從城里的家開車到一個遙遠而平靜的地方，我們看不到朋友或家人——這將是一個美好的、安全的、社交距離較遠的一周。作者講述了度假所發(fā)生的事情。 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“突然，他消失在我的眼前?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者在戴安娜浴場發(fā)現(xiàn)兒子消失時，接下來向人們求助，營救兒子。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“當凱文恢復正常。我知道那女人是個護士?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼憙鹤拥氖軅闆r，接下來作者和這位護士的談話。 2．續(xù)寫線索：在戴安娜浴場玩?！獌鹤酉Аε隆笾镁取勗?3．詞匯激活(一個詞匯要寫出相近的表達) 行為類安慰，使舒適：comfort /relieve 叫喊：yell /shout 實施，執(zhí)行：perform /carry out 情緒類高興的：pleasant /pleasing/delighted 難以置信的：indescribable /unbelievable 【典型句式】 [句型1] Following her with unsteady steps, I went down too, seeing her scooping up my son. (句中現(xiàn)在分詞作方式狀語和伴隨狀語) [句型2] It was you that saved my son.(句中使用強調(diào)句型) [句型3] She held my hands, a big smile shining from her face, and said that anyone would have done the same.(句中使用并列謂語和賓語從句) 4．閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。 Adventures Through the Gorge We put the raft in the calm,cold water.I looked down.The water was like a mirror.It was a foggy morning,so I could barely make out what was down the river.When we took our places in the raft,I was in the back with my dad right across from me.Our tour guide was telling us the basics of rafting,and it seemed she was patronizing us!I was terrified.Since I was in the back,I was sure I would be the one to fall out.But I have always been an optimist,so I thought it would turn out okay. Then I looked up and saw a big,gray cloud.I looked down at the river,and it started to get louder and closer to us;soon raindrops pelted us.Once we moved out of the rain,the clouds faded away,and the sun was shining down on us for the rest of the day.As I looked around,I saw the monstrous,green trees standing over me.It was beautiful. As we moved farther down the river,I heard the water flowing gracefully.When we moved deeper into the gorge,it got louder and louder.This was our first rapids.It seemed that we were approaching the rapids slowly,but we were at the top of the rapids in the blink of an eye.It felt like time frozen.I was so excited and nervous;I thought I was going to die.It was a bumpy ride down.Getting splashed with water,we raced up and down the rocks.There was not a patch of dry skin on us by the time we hit the bottom. After we got through the rapids,I was so excited!Going down made me feel I could do anything.Our tour guide told us we were going to approach Category V rapids.It was more intense than the Category I rapids,and I got a little more nervous.It took us a little while to get to the rapids because we had to go down a long river.We were allowed to jump o? the raft and swim down the river until we had to get back in. Paragraph 1: About three minutes later,the Category V was coming. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: After racing down all of the rapids,I was no longer scared. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【參考范文】 Paragraph 1: About three minutes later,the Category V was coming.The raft raced down the rapids.Water was splashing on the rocks,letting out louder noise.Screaming all the way down,I saw white water all over.I was so nervous because there were five big solitary rocks sticking out.If a little careless,we might hit one and get turned upside down.In the blink of an eye,we turned around the last huge rock,entering a small calm ride.When we settled at the bottom,I wanted to go back up and do it all again. Paragraph 2: After racing down all of the rapids,I was no longer scared.“What did you think about that Category V rapids?” my dad asked.“I was super nervous at first.But when we hit the bottom,I wanted to do it once more.” “Would you say you become more confident of yourself?” he continued.“Yes,I would say I become much more confident of myself.” I smiled.We walked towards our campsite. 【寫作指導】本文以事件發(fā)展為線索展開。講述了作者與爸爸游覽三峽險境，一開始跟著導游坐木筏前進，慢慢地接近一級級的急流，直到五級，作者與爸爸對三峽的險峻感到非常震撼，這次體驗讓作者變得更加勇敢，自信，并且還想再次體驗。 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段內(nèi)容“大約三分鐘后，第五類急流要來了?！笨芍谝欢卫m(xù)寫的內(nèi)應(yīng)該是在到達第五類急流之后發(fā)生的事情。 ②由第二段內(nèi)容“在沖下所有的急流后，我不在害怕了。”可知第二段續(xù)寫應(yīng)該描述沖下急流后發(fā)生了什么，以及作者和爸爸對本次體驗的感想。 2．續(xù)寫線索：接近五級急流——在五級急流的體驗和感受——沖過急流之后——體驗的感悟，變得更加勇敢和自信。 3．詞匯激活行為類 ①移位：turn around/rolling over/up and down ②考慮：think about/ consider/feel like ③接觸：get to/touch/hit 情緒類 ①信心：become confident about/ brave/courageous ②恐懼：frightened/fear/horror 【典型句式】 [句型1]. I was so nervous because there were five big solitary rocks sticking out. (由because引導原因狀語從句。) [句型2]. But when we hit the bottom, I wanted to do it once more. (由when引導時間狀語從句。) 5．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 This past summer, I joined my sister's family for their annual Adirondack vacation in a rented cottage on a lake, the same place my family has stayed since I was a little kid. There are plenty of activities to keep everyone busy: swimming, fishing and sand castle building on the beach. By the third day, I had noticed that my ten-year-old niece, Jannie, had spent most of her time watching cable TV and browsing through the gift shops in town. Not exactly the wilderness experience I remembered from my youth. So, at dinner, I told Jannie we should hike to the top of the mountain across the lake the following morning, which was called Rocky Point because the peak is bare and rock-covered. "Well." replied Jannie, "Tomorrow there are some shows on the Disney Channel, so I'm going to be pretty busy." "When your mother and I used to come here when we were your age, we were too busy swimming and hiking up mountains." "Sounds more like punishment than a vacation." She shrugged her shoulders. "Besides, I don't think I can walk that far." When I said it only took a half-hour of steady walking to get to the top. She grumbled, "Fine, I'll go." I knew she was agreeing just to shut me up, but I would take anything I could get. The next morning was a perfect day for a hike, with sunshine and clear skies. I got up early and took some sandwiches and water bottles, which I tucked into my backpack along with the bug spray and the camera. Jannie came shuffling downstairs, sighed dramatically, rolled her eyes and announced in a very unenthusiastic, robot-like voice. "I'm ready to go hiking, Uncle David." Anyway, we climbed into my car and drove to the trailhead about ten minutes away. As we stood at the edge of the parking lot and looked down the shaded trail that led into the woods. "I am still not sure this is a good idea, but if you and Mom could do it, I can too, I guess." 注意： 1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Paragraph l: For the moment she was determined to start our journey. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: A while later we did it to the top. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【參考范文】 For the moment she was determined to start our journey. About 200 yards into the forest, the trail began to climb a steep slope. I pointed out some rarely-seen trees and flowering plants, which I explained were endangered species. She didn’t share my enthusiasm. She was thirsty, tired, sweaty and bored. I handed her the water bottle as she sat on a fallen log and took a break. “You know, I think we’re almost to the top,” I told her. “You already said that three times, and we’re not there yet.” she replied. She grumbled another complain as we continued on. She might not have been happy, but at least I was proud that she had the determination not to quit before we reached the top. A while later we did make it to the top. Jannie looked up, noticing we were no longer under the trees. When she stopped, looked around and saw where we were, her jaw dropped, her eyes opened wide and she shouted: “Oh, I don’t believe it. We’re on top of the world. It’s awesome!” A refreshing breeze brushed the mountaintop, not a cloud was in the sky and miles and miles of trees and lakes spread out below us. We sat on a large rock and took it in the view, while eating our sandwiches and pointing out islands and roads and, of course, the cottage where we were staying. It had taken us almost an hour to make the climb, but it was worth it. 【寫作指導】【分析】本文以人物為線索展開，故事講述了作者鼓勵帶動10歲的甥女一起爬山，開始的時候外甥女有些不情愿，但當?shù)竭_山頂時，一覽眾山小，有了成功的喜悅。 1．段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“她一時決定開始我們的旅行?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫甥女叫苦叫累的抱怨和作者的鼓勵和幫助。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“過了一會兒，我們爬到了山頂?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作者和甥女到達山頂后，一覽眾山小，成功的喜悅。 2．續(xù)寫線索：帶動爬山——抱怨——鼓舞——觀景——驚喜 3．詞匯激活行為類 ①帶動爬山：climb a steep slope / climb a hill / go up the mountain ②.觀景：look around / look at the vie/ view the scenery 情緒類 ①. 抱怨：complain / grumble ②. 鼓舞：enthusiasm /inspiring /encouraging ③. 喜悅：happy/joyful/ surprised /awesome 【典型句式】 [句型1]. I pointed out some rarely-seen trees and flowering plants, which I explained were endangered species. (由which引導的非限制性定語從句) [句型2]. We sat on a large rock and took it in the view, while eating our sandwiches and pointing out islands and roads and, of course, the cottage where we were staying.(while引導的時間狀語從句的省略以及where引導的限制性定語從句)

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