一、解讀特寫鏡頭
特寫鏡頭在故事創(chuàng)作中具有獨(dú)特的作用，主要體現(xiàn)在以下幾個方面：
突出關(guān)鍵細(xì)節(jié)：聚焦故事里的關(guān)鍵元素，比如某個重要物品、人物的顯著特征，或者情節(jié)轉(zhuǎn)折的關(guān)鍵節(jié)點(diǎn)，從而吸引讀者的注意力。
深化角色刻畫：通過特寫人物的面部表情、眼神、手勢等，深入挖掘角色的內(nèi)心世界，展現(xiàn)其情感變化，讓角色形象更加豐滿立體。
強(qiáng)化氛圍與情緒渲染：在營造特定氛圍或傳遞強(qiáng)烈情緒時，如恐怖、浪漫等場景，特寫鏡頭能夠增強(qiáng)讀者的感受，使其更深入地融入故事之中。
增強(qiáng)情節(jié)沖擊力：在故事的高潮或關(guān)鍵時刻運(yùn)用特寫，能夠加大情節(jié)的張力，引發(fā)讀者更強(qiáng)烈的情感共鳴，使故事更具吸引力。
推動情節(jié)發(fā)展：在需要細(xì)膩推進(jìn)情節(jié)時，特寫可以展現(xiàn)情節(jié)發(fā)展過程中的微妙變化，讓故事的邏輯性更強(qiáng)、更連貫。
創(chuàng)造視覺效果：借助特寫鏡頭，能讓讀者在腦海中構(gòu)建出清晰的畫面，提升文字的視覺表現(xiàn)力，使故事如同一幅生動的畫卷在讀者眼前展開。
二、特寫鏡頭的使用場景【FEDS】
F - Feelings（情感）：特寫鏡頭可用于深入刻畫和傳遞角色的情感細(xì)節(jié)，幫助讀者更好地理解角色的內(nèi)心感受。
E - Events（事件）：在關(guān)鍵事件中，特寫能夠突出重要細(xì)節(jié)，讓讀者更清晰地把握事件的關(guān)鍵之處。
D - Decisins/Lgic（決策/邏輯）：展示角色的思考過程、決策依據(jù)或邏輯推理，使讀者更深入地了解角色行為背后的原因。
S - Setting/Scene（設(shè)置/場景）：用于細(xì)致描繪環(huán)境，營造特定的場景氛圍，增強(qiáng)故事的代入感。
三、特寫鏡頭的運(yùn)用技巧【“細(xì)感情”】
細(xì)節(jié)聚焦：
- 面部描寫：著重關(guān)注眼神、嘴角的微笑或皺紋等面部細(xì)節(jié)，通過這些細(xì)微之處傳達(dá)角色的情感和性格特點(diǎn)。
- 動作描寫：留意角色的手勢、姿態(tài)及其他身體動作，以此展現(xiàn)角色的心理狀態(tài)，推動故事發(fā)展。
- 環(huán)境描寫：從場景中挑選重要元素，像桌上的一束花、墻上的一幅畫等，通過對這些元素的描寫營造出特定的氛圍。
感官體驗(yàn)：運(yùn)用視覺、聽覺、嗅覺、觸覺和味覺等多種感官進(jìn)行描述，讓讀者仿佛身臨其境，“看到”“聽到”“感受到”故事中的細(xì)節(jié)。
情感傳達(dá)：明確表達(dá)具體的情緒，并將情緒與動作相結(jié)合，為后續(xù)的動作和行為做好鋪墊，使故事的發(fā)展更加自然流暢。
四、特寫鏡頭案例展示
表情描寫案例：
- 案例一：
- 細(xì)節(jié)：眼睛瞪得很大，淚水在眼眶里打轉(zhuǎn)，嘴巴微微張開。
- 感官：看到角色驚訝和痛苦的神情。
- 情感：傳遞出驚訝與痛苦的情緒。
- 描述：中文：他的眼睛瞪得大大的，淚水在眼眶中打轉(zhuǎn)，最終無聲地滑落。他的嘴巴微微張開，露出驚訝和痛苦的神情。英文：His eyes were wide pen, with tears swirling in his sckets befre silently sliding dwn. His muth was slightly ajar, revealing an expressin f surprise and pain.
- 案例二：
- 細(xì)節(jié)：眼神犀利、目光集中、瞳孔縮小，嘴微微張開，耳朵豎起，肌肉緊繃。
- 感受：能感受到角色處于饑餓狀態(tài)。
- 情緒：緊張、激動且堅(jiān)定。
- 描述：中文：這只貓的眼神犀利且集中，瞳孔緊縮成一條細(xì)線，仿佛專注地盯著獵物。它的嘴微微張開，露出尖銳的牙齒。耳朵豎立，捕捉著周圍的每一個聲音。它的肌肉緊繃，像弓一樣拉緊，準(zhǔn)備隨時發(fā)力。英文：The cat had a sharp, fcused gaze, with its pupils narrwed t thin slits, as if intently watching its prey. Its muth was slightly pen, revealing sharp teeth. Its ears std erect, capturing every sund arund. Its muscles were taut, like a bwstring pulled tight, ready t spring int actin.
動作描寫案例：
- 細(xì)節(jié)：手指在鍵盤上輕柔滑動，彈奏緩慢而精確，指尖輕壓按鍵再慢慢抬起。
- 感官：能“聽到”輕柔的音樂。
- 情感：讓聽眾感受到舒緩、優(yōu)美。
- 描述：中文：手指輕柔地在鍵盤上滑動，每一次觸碰都那么緩慢而精確。指尖輕輕壓下每個鍵，慢慢地抬起，仿佛在空氣中揮舞著一支無形的指揮棒。英文：Fingers gently glided acrss the keybard, each tuch slw and precise. The tips pressed dwn each key sftly, lifting slwly as if waving an invisible batn in the air.
環(huán)境描寫案例：
- 細(xì)節(jié)：草葉上掛著露珠，露珠晶瑩剔透。
- 感官：視覺上，露珠在陽光下熠熠生輝，像珍珠鑲嵌在綠色絨毯上。
- 情感：傳遞出清新、美好的感受。
- 描述：中文：春雨剛過，每一株草葉都掛著晶瑩的露珠。這些小小的水珠在柔和的陽光下熠熠生輝，像珍珠般鑲嵌在綠色的絨毯上。露珠的形狀完美無瑕，透明清澈，仿佛大自然的珍寶。英文：After the spring rain, every blade f grass was adrned with sparkling dewdrps. These tiny drplets shne brilliantly under the gentle sunlight, like pearls embedded in a green velvet carpet. The dewdrps were flawlessly shaped, crystal clear, resembling nature's treasures.
模擬演練
On the first day f schl, I stared in awe at the huge buildings. This high schl was definitely bigger than the ne I had previusly attended.
This was my secnd year f high schl, but my first year f schl in St. Luis. I had decided the night befre that I wuld be much happier in a new schl if I made friends that were s-called “ppular”. Getting in with the right grup f peple wuld make my life a whle lt better. I even bught a new utfit and had my hair styled just s the first day wuld be perfect.
Scared, yet anxius t begin my new life, I walked up the stairs t the frnt dr. The halls were packed with kids yelling and laughing and telling stries f their summer adventures. My first class was gemetry, but where was that?
I was standing in the hall lking cnfused, when a shrt, blnd girl wearing glasses came up and asked, “Are yu new? Yu lk lst. D yu need help? My name is Diane. What’s yurs?” Even thugh she seemed a bit strange, definitely nt the kind f persn I wanted t be assciated with, I decided t answer her anyway. I was, after all, lst.
After exchanging names. I fllwed her up the stairs and dwn a hallway n the right, making plite cnversatin the whle way. When we reached my rm she said, “Well, here yu are. Welcme t JFK, and I hpe yur day ges all right.”
I said thanks and waved gd-bye. Once inside the classrm, I saw ne big grup f peple huddled arund smene wh seemed t be telling sme srt f stry. I walked ver and gt clse enugh t verhear. All eyes were glued t the guy in the middle f the circle wh was wearing a letter jacket cvered with patches. I decided that this guy was ppular, s I managed t get a seat right next t him. I said, “Hi, my name is Lisa and I’m new here.” He said, “Jhnny.”
注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右：
2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置答題。
At the end f the class, I turned t him and asked, “I’m nt sure where my next class is, culd yu help me?”
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Just at that time, smene came up and tapped me n the shulder.
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1．One Pssible Versin:
At the end f the class, I turned t him and asked, “I’m nt sure where my next class is, culd yu help me?” With a frwn, he lked at me and then said a quick n, turned back t his friends, and walked ut f the classrm. As they were walking ut I heard him say, “Did yu guys see that new girl trying t get int ur grup? That utfit was t strange.” They all laughed and sme f them turned arund and stared at me. My face ht with shame, I std stck-still, nt believing what had just happened.
Just at that time, smene came up and tapped me n the shulder. It was Diane. Like a ray f sunshine, the big smile n her face swept away my glm. I struggled t hld my feelings back and tld her what I had encuntered. A gleam f cncern in her eyes, she said she was srry and ffered t find my next class. At that mment I realized hw wrng I was in wanting t nly be friends with ppular peple. Maybe I shuldn’t decide whether a persn is wrth being my friend r nt by their reputatin, but by wh they are.
【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者高中第二年是在圣路易斯的第一年，作者在學(xué)校認(rèn)識了Diane，Diane給作者指路。結(jié)果作者因?yàn)榇┲话嗌系耐瑢W(xué)嘲笑，Diane也對作者表示了關(guān)心，作者也感悟到不應(yīng)該只和受歡迎的人交朋友。
【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“下課的時候，我轉(zhuǎn)向他問：‘我不知道下節(jié)課在哪里，你能幫我嗎？’”可知，第一段可描寫對方的反應(yīng)以及作者被嘲笑的經(jīng)過。
②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“就在那時，有人走過來拍了拍我的肩膀”可知，第二段可描寫Diane幫助作者以及作者的感悟。
2．續(xù)寫線索：詢問——拒絕——嘲笑——幫助——感悟
3．詞匯激活
行為類
①走出：walk ut f/step ut f
②融入：get int/fit int
③抑制：hld back/restrain
情緒類
①奇怪的：strange /dd
②擔(dān)心：cncern /wrry
【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1] My face ht with shame, I std stck-still, nt believing what had just happened.(運(yùn)用了what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句)
[高分句型2] Maybe I shuldn’t decide whether a persn is wrth being my friend r nt by their reputatin, but by wh they are. (運(yùn)用了whether引導(dǎo)賓語從句)
模擬演練
閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
I had been acting in schl fr a few years. When I gt a rugh rle in a play, I, nly a junir in my high schl, was excited that my inspiring drama teacher and directr had trusted me with the part.
We had little time t prepare and I wuld never frget reading the lines fr the first time. At first the dialgue was lively, but then it became quite lng and bring. T my surprise, my character had ne disrespectful line that cmplained abut his bad luck. I had never said smething like that n stage befre. Uncmfrtable as I felt abut it, I had never thught f making myself heard t make a change. I was weak, went silent, and accepted the line as it was.
At ur first rehearsal (彩排), I whispered, the line and hped with s many distractins n stage that the directr wuldn’t ntice. Luckily, she didn’t. Over three wild weeks f rehearsals, I cnvinced myself that I culd keep faking it. Then, when the curtain finally rse with an audience, maybe I wuld feel fine abut saying the line just nce as ludly as I culd.
On the night f the pen dress rehearsal, I was nervus t see an ld cuple, the Ehlers, seated in the hall. They were clse friends f ur family and I had n idea they wuld be there. When the big mment arrived, with nervusness racing thrugh my bdy, I went fr it. I remember the mment quite clearly. Where I std. Hw it sunded. Hw I felt.
After the shw, the Ehlers met me with cheers, a warm hug, and sme brief dialgue f their wn. While talking with them, I was verwhelmed by mixed feelings f regret and shame.
注意: 1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2． 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
“Jasn, that was quite sme language. Yu surprised us,” Mrs. Ehlers lked at me.
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I said gdbye t the cuple and waited in the drama rm until ur directr appeared.
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“Jasn, that was quite sme language. Yu surprised us,” Mrs. Ehlers lked at me. I tld Mrs. Ehlers frankly that I had been unwilling t say it. Mrs. Ehlers patted me n the shulder cnslingly, suggesting that I shuld have tld the directr t change it. I ndded my head, but still dubted whether the directr wuld let me. Mrs. Ehlers seemed t have read my mind and said with a sft smile, “Whatever yu get is a gain. We have t stand up and give it a try smetimes, dn't we?”
I said gdbye t the cuple and waited in the drama rm until ur directr appeared. With my heart racing, I std near her desk and casually asked if I might pssibly change the disrespectful line in the play t a mre decent ne. She sank int silence fr a mment and replied, “Yur replacement is indeed mre apprpriate. Thank yu!” Agreeably surprised by her respnse, I left with a mixture f gratitude, humility, respect and shame. Frm that mment n, I felt increasingly cnfident and prud t share my views with thers.
【導(dǎo)語】本文以故事的發(fā)展線索展開，講述了作者在中學(xué)時，老師和導(dǎo)演給了他一個角色讓他出演，在第一次讀臺詞時發(fā)現(xiàn)里面有一句不禮貌的臺詞。盡管作者自己讀到的時候感覺不舒服，但還是在一次一次的排練時用了那句臺詞，在公開彩排的時候，作者家的好朋友也來了，聽到了作者使用的那句臺詞后，與作者進(jìn)行了交流。
【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容““Jasn，你說的話真太厲害了。你讓我們大吃一驚，” Rhlers太太看著我?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者與Rhlers太太交流了那句臺詞的事情，給作者提出什么建議。
②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我告別了這對夫婦，在戲劇室里等著，直到我們的導(dǎo)演出現(xiàn)?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作者與導(dǎo)演交流了些什么，問題有沒有得到解決。
2．續(xù)寫線索：Ehlers太太的問候——作者坦白心情——Ehlers太太提出建議——等到導(dǎo)演——說出臺詞問題——解決問題——感想
3．詞匯激活
行為類
①.拍肩膀：patsb. n the shulder/tab sb n the shulder
②.理解某人：read ne’s mind/understand/grasp/catch sb.
③.陷入：sink int/be lst in
情緒類
①使.驚訝：surprise/amaze/astnish
②.有信心的：cnfident /secure
【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]. Ehlers patted me n the shulder cnslingly, suggesting that I shuld have tld the directr t change it. （運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語以及that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）
[高分句型2]. With my heart racing, I std near her desk and casually asked if I might pssibly change the disrespectful line in the play t a mre decent ne. （運(yùn)用了with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)和if引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）
[高分句型3]. Agreeably surprised by her respnse, I left with a mixture f gratitude, humility, respect and shame. （運(yùn)用了過去分詞作狀語）
模擬演練
閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
Our car ran ver the sand and rcks, leaving a clud f dust. It was a beautiful spring day. The sun was bright and the sky was clear—perfect cnditins fr ff-rading(越野). Back then, in 1984, my wife Sue and I were living in sutheastern Califrnia. The views were wnderful, but with dangers. The temperatures culd rise abve 50℃, and it was n place fr turists t g ff-rading withut enugh preparatin.
Sue and I always tk a bag with us, packed with snacks, water, and a first aid kit. We als had a car specially changed fr driving in the desert. With it, we culd g anywhere a jeep culd g.
That day, we drve abut 20 miles int the park. Arund midday,we stpped t have a rest. As usual, we culd see the desert befre us. When the spirit f adventure mved us, we went back int the car. But when I turned the key nthing happened. I tried again and again. Nthing happened. I culd see Sue was thinking the same thing—the engine wuldn’t start.
Our car had ne strange prblem. Abut nce a year, it wuld refuse t start. If left vernight, the engine wuld run just fine the next mrning. But n ne culd find anything wrng with ur car. Because it happened s rarely, we’d just learned t live with it. But it had never happened suddenly.
“What shuld we d?” I felt a little anxius. I hadn’t seen a persn n ur drive ut here, and we had n way t call fr help.“We culd walk back t twn,”Sue said. Eager nt t waste any mre daylight,we quickly packed ur things. We were abut t set ff when Sue called my name.“Lk!” she cried. Sure enugh, there was smething, getting clser.
注意：
1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
It wasn’t lng befre I culd make ut what it was—a jeep!
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He checked the engine and said, “I knw what’s wrng.”
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It wasn’t lng befre I culd make ut what it was—a jeep! And it was heading straight fr the place we stayed! There was a man in the driver’s seat. Nt a lcal. Our cmmunity was small, and I didn’t recgnize him at all. “Yu need help?” he asked. “Can yu give us a ride back int twn?” I asked cautiusly.”O(jiān)ur car wn’t start again until it sits vernight.“He thught fr a while and asked t take a lk at ur car. I knew it was hpeless, but I didn’t want t be rude t a stranger trying t help.
He checked the engine and said, “I knw what’s wrng.” The man cntinued t say, “Lucky fr yu. I have that tl with me.” He went t fetch the tl and gt t repair ur strange car, and after several minutes, the engine began t wrk again. I felt s surprised, and he tld us nt t stp again until we gt the car hme. We had n wrds t express ur gratitude and Sue wanted t pay him sme mney, but he shk his head and climbed int his jeep, cntinuing his way. Sue and I believed he was an angel wh happened t be passing by.
【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者和妻子驅(qū)車20英里離開城市去公園欣賞沙漠的美景，可中午休息后，發(fā)現(xiàn)車發(fā)動機(jī)無法啟動了。當(dāng)他們正準(zhǔn)備步行回城時突然看到有東西朝他們越來越近。
【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：
①由續(xù)寫第一段首句“沒過多久，我就弄清楚它是什么——一輛吉普車！”可以預(yù)測續(xù)寫第一段主要內(nèi)容：吉普車朝作者開過來，作者要求車主搭載他們回城，吉普車主主動提出幫他們看下車的問題。
②由第二段首句“他檢查了發(fā)動機(jī)，說：‘我知道出了什么問題?！笨梢灶A(yù)測續(xù)寫第二段主要內(nèi)容：吉普車主發(fā)現(xiàn)車的問題并修好，作者準(zhǔn)備支付錢作為報(bào)答，吉普車主拒絕了，這讓作者感到自己遇到天使一般。
2．續(xù)寫線索：作者發(fā)現(xiàn)吉普車開過來——請求車主搭載他們回城——吉普車主要求幫他們檢查下車——吉普車主發(fā)現(xiàn)車的問題并修好——作者提出現(xiàn)金報(bào)答——吉普車主拒絕任何報(bào)酬
3．詞匯激活
行為類
①.檢查：examine/check /inspect/lk clsely at
②.修理：mend/fix/repair
③.表達(dá)我們的感謝：shw ur thanks / express ur gratitude/express ur appreciatin
情緒類
①.謹(jǐn)慎地： cautiusly /prudently/carefully
②.絕望的： hpeless/desperate/in despair
③.驚訝的：surprised/ astnished/ amazed/in surprise
【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]. We had n wrds t express ur gratitude and Sue wanted t pay him sme mney, but he shk his head and climbed int his jeep, cntinuing his way. （運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語）
[高分句型2].Sue and I believed he was an angel wh happened t be passing by.（運(yùn)用了wh引導(dǎo)的定語從句）
模擬演練
閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
“What a crabby-lking lady (怨婦),” the cashier at my lcal cnvenience stre whispered t her cwrker. I was grabbing smething ff the shelf. I had a half dzen kids waiting fr me utside in the van, and here’s the thing: they were all my wn children. N time fr plite. N casual cnversatin with the checkut lady, n nd f apprval tward the stck by, n breathing. Just get the tilet paper, tw gallns f milk and sme Frsted Flakes and get back t my children!
But my interest was arused by the crabby-lking lady. Which ne was she? Taking a family pack f tilet paper under my arm, I scanned the tiny stre fr the crabby lady. Let’s see, there’s a middle-aged guy checking n prk, an lder gentleman at the checkut purchasing an egg salad sandwich and a cffee, and... just then I saw her, the crabby-lking lady.
Her eyes were small; her brwn hair was pulled back in a pnytail s tight that it lked like her frehead wuld drp. Her muth was shut serius. This lady lked like she had smelled smething really bad. Then, I turned away frm my wn reflectin in the cnvex security mirrr (安全反射鏡) at the back f the stre. The crabby-lking lady... was me!
That night, I cried. I was the crabby-lking lady! Me! The girl nce vted nicest smile by her high schl class! Things must get changed! Right then and there I reslved t d ne thing ver the next year. One simple reslutin: t smile. I didn’t need t wait fr January 1st — I wuld start right nw.
I reslved t smile at anyne and anything, even thugh they wuld let me dwn. And I als reslved t make a cnscius effrt t smile, at least ten times a day.
注意：
1． 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
2． 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
The first day f “Missin Smile” I practiced smiling as planned.
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After practicing a mnth, unexpectedly, smething different happened.
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One pssible versin:
The first day f “Missin Smile” I practiced smiling as planned. I smiled at a strange dg wh peed n my daughter’s new schl shes while she was in them, the salesman t the dr, three f my six children, a librarian wh asked me if I was aware f the glbal verppulatin prblem, and my bathtub. I even smiled at my husband ver the phne when he called t say he’d be late frm wrk. And I smiled at myself in the mirrr twice, just t remind myself what a smile lked like.
After practicing a mnth, unexpectedly, smething different happened. I didn’t even try t find things t smile at and I’d still ntice smile take ver my face. When my daughter laded the dishwasher with her scks, I smiled. When we were really late fr church, I smiled. One day I was meeting a cuple f friends at a lcal cffee shp. I verheard the cashier remark t her c-wrker, “What a happy-lking lady!" And I didn’t even have t lk arund t knw wh she was talking abut. It was me!
【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物線索展開，講述了作者在超市匆忙買東西時無意間聽到收銀員們評論一位女士脾氣暴躁，作者想知道這名女士到底是誰，結(jié)果從安全鏡中發(fā)現(xiàn)竟然是自己，晚上作者傷心地哭了，當(dāng)下決定要做一件事情：學(xué)會微笑。
【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫：
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“‘使命微笑’的第一天，我按計(jì)劃練習(xí)微笑?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼懽髡咴诰唧w不同的場景下開始練習(xí)微笑。
②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“練習(xí)了一個月后，出乎意料的是，不同的事情發(fā)生了?！笨芍径螒?yīng)該寫練習(xí)微笑一個月給作者帶來的影響和變化。
2．續(xù)寫線索：計(jì)劃練習(xí)微笑——在不同場景下學(xué)會微笑——練習(xí)微笑一個月后的變化——收銀員對作者的新評價
3．詞匯激活
行為類
①練習(xí)：practice/train
②穿：be in/wear/put n
③意識到：be aware f/be cnscius f
情緒類
①出乎意料地：unexpectedly/ surprisingly
【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1]. I smiled at a strange dg wh peed n my daughter’s new schl shes while she was in them, the salesman t the dr, three f my six children, a librarian wh asked me if I was aware f the glbal verppulatin prblem, and my bathtub. （運(yùn)用了wh引導(dǎo)的限制性定語從句、while引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句和if引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）
[高分句型2]. And I smiled at myself in the mirrr twice, just t remind myself what a smile lked like.（運(yùn)用了不定式短語作目的狀語和what引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）
[高分句型3]. And I didn’t even have t lk arund t knw wh she was talking abut.（運(yùn)用了wh引導(dǎo)的賓語從句）
模擬演練
閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
When Christmas rlled arund, I always gt the tree up. And Christmas Eve fund me placing an envelpe n the tree.
It was just a small, white envelpe with a nte f what I had dne, stuck amng the branches f ur Christmas tree. It all began because my husband Mike hated Christmas. Oh, nt the true meaning f Christmas, but the cmmercial aspects f it, verspending, the gifts given in desperatin because yu culdn’t think f anything else.
Knwing he felt this way, I decided ne year t bypass (避開) the usual shirts, sweaters, ties and s n. I tried t find a special present just fr Mike. The inspiratin came in an unusual way.
Our sn, Kevin, wh was 12 that year, was wrestling at the junir level at the schl he attended, and shrtly befre Christmas, there was a nn-league match against a team Spnsred by an inner-city church.
These yungsters, dressed in sneakers s ragged (襤褸的) that shes seemed t be the nly thing hlding them tgether, presented a sharp cntrast t ur bys in the spiffy blue and gld unifrms and sparkling new wrestling hes. As the match began I was alarmed t see that the ther team was wrestling withut headgear, a kind f light helmet designed t prtect a wrestler’s cars. It was a luxury the ragged team bviusly culd nt affrd. Well, we ended up defeating them. We tk every weight class.
Mike, seated beside me, shk his head sadly, “I wish ne f them culd have wn,” he said. They have a lt f ptential, but lsing like this culd take the heart right ut f them.”Mike lved kids, all kids, and he knew them, having cached little league ftball, baseball and lacrsse.
注意:
1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
That was when the idea f his Christmas present came.
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Feeling their dad’s happiness, my children jined me.
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That’s when the idea fr his present came. That afternn, I went t a lcal sprting gds stre and bught an assrtment f wrestling headgear and shes and sent them annymusly t the inner-city church. On Christmas Eve, I placed the envelpe n the tree, the nte inside telling Mike what I had dne and that this was his gift frm me. His smile was the brightest thing abut Christmas that year and in succeeding years.
Feeling their dad’s happiness, my children jined me. Each f ur children, unbeknwnst t the thers, had placed an envelpe n the tree fr their dad. The traditin has grwn and smeday will expand even further with ur grandchildren standing arund the tree with wide-eyed anticipatin watching as their fathers take dwn the envelpe. Mike’s spirit, like the Christmas spirit, will always be with us.
【導(dǎo)語】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者的丈夫并不喜歡圣誕節(jié)，于是作者想到了給她丈夫送一份特殊的圣誕禮物，一個信封，里面講述了作者所做的一切，為了使他的丈夫在圣誕感到快樂。
【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“就在這時，想到了給他送什么圣誕禮物。”可知，第一段主要寫送了什么圣誕禮物給Mike，并使他感到高興。
②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“感受到父親的幸福，我的孩子們也加入了我的行列。”可知，第二段可寫，我的孩子們也趁大家不注意的時候，在圣誕樹上放了一封寫給爸爸的信。并且把這個傳統(tǒng)延續(xù)下去。
2． 續(xù)寫線索：mike不喜歡圣誕——想到禮物——mike看到禮物感到高興——孩子們加入進(jìn)來——傳統(tǒng)延續(xù)。
3． 詞匯激活
行為類
①購買：buy/purchase
②放置：place/put/lay up
③擴(kuò)大：expand/enlarge/develp
情緒類
①幸福：happiness/gladness/cntentment
②預(yù)期：anticipatin/expectatin
【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1.] On Christmas Eve, I placed the envelpe n the tree, the nte inside telling Mike what I had dne and that this was his gift frm me.(what和that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句)
[高分句型2.]The traditin has grwn and smeday will expand even further with ur grandchildren standing arund the tree with wide-eyed anticipatin watching as their fathers take dwn the envelpe.(as引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句)

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