課件專題10 智慧解困型新高考英語讀后續(xù)寫主題分類突破（原卷版+解析版）-課件下載-教習(xí)網(wǎng)

智慧解困型故事寫作導(dǎo)圖危機(jī)場景構(gòu)建（一）環(huán)境渲染 The moonless night swallowed the lake, turning its surface into a treacherous black mirror. （無月之夜吞噬了湖面，將其化作危險(xiǎn)的黑色鏡子）解析：用"swallowed"擬人化黑夜，"treacherous"暗示危險(xiǎn)，比喻句增強(qiáng)畫面感。 A shrill crack echoed across the frozen river, spiderweb fractures spreading beneath my boots. （刺耳的碎裂聲在冰河上回蕩，蛛網(wǎng)般的裂紋在我靴底蔓延）解析：擬聲詞"shrill crack"制造緊張感，比喻句"spiderweb fractures"形象描繪冰裂。 Thick smoke coiled like venomous snakes, stinging our eyes and clogging our throats. （濃煙如毒蛇般纏繞，刺痛眼睛堵塞喉嚨）解析：比喻句強(qiáng)化危機(jī)感，現(xiàn)在分詞結(jié)構(gòu)"stinging/clogging"增強(qiáng)臨場感。 The raging current tugged at my ankles, its cold fingers threatening to drag me under. （洶涌的急流撕扯腳踝，冰冷手指般要將我拽入水下）解析：擬人化"tugged/threatening"，觸覺描寫增強(qiáng)代入感。（二）情緒鋪陳 My heart hammered against my ribs like a caged bird desperate for escape. （心臟如困鳥擊打肋骨，拼命想要逃脫）解析：明喻+擬人手法，生動表現(xiàn)恐慌生理反應(yīng)。 A cold sweat trickled down my spine as the reality of our predicament sank in. （當(dāng)意識到困境現(xiàn)實(shí)時(shí)，冷汗沿脊背滑落）解析："trickled"細(xì)膩描寫身體反應(yīng)，"sank in"體現(xiàn)心理變化過程。 Trembling fingers fumbled with the safety buckle, each failed attempt fueling my desperation. （顫抖手指笨拙摸索安全帶，每次失敗都加劇絕望）解析：現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語，動作描寫反映心理狀態(tài)。 The deafening silence pressed down on us, magnifying every panicked heartbeat. （震耳欲聾的寂靜壓迫而來，放大每次慌亂心跳）解析：矛盾修飾法"deafening silence"，通感手法增強(qiáng)感染力。救援過程描寫（一）決策時(shí)刻 "Think, think, think!" I chanted under my breath, scanning the surroundings for anything usable. （"思考！思考！思考！"我低聲念咒般環(huán)視可用之物）解析：重復(fù)修辭增強(qiáng)緊張感，現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語。 My training kicked in - assess, plan, act. Three steps to cling to sanity. （訓(xùn)練記憶蘇醒：評估、計(jì)劃、行動，三步抓住理智）解析：破折號引出專業(yè)流程，數(shù)字列舉增強(qiáng)條理性。 Ripping my scarf into strips, the idea crystallized: we could fashion a lifeline. （撕開圍巾成布條時(shí)，想法明晰：我們能制作救生索）解析：動作伴隨心理活動，冒號引出關(guān)鍵方案。 "Form a human chain!" My voice cut through the chaos, surprisingly steady. （"組成人鏈！"我的聲音穿透混亂，意外沉穩(wěn)）解析：祈使句體現(xiàn)領(lǐng)導(dǎo)力，副詞"surprisingly"制造反差。（二）動作細(xì)節(jié) Gritting my teeth, I inched forward, belly flat against the thinning ice. （咬緊牙關(guān)匍匐前進(jìn)，腹部緊貼漸薄的冰面）解析：現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語，觸覺描寫增強(qiáng)真實(shí)感。 Her hand slipped from mine once, twice - on the third grasp, our fingers interlocked like puzzle pieces. （她的手滑脫一次、兩次——第三次抓緊時(shí)，手指如拼圖緊扣）解析：數(shù)字推進(jìn)制造懸念，比喻句強(qiáng)化成功瞬間。 The makeshift raft wobbled precariously, each wave threatening to capsize our fragile hope. （臨時(shí)木筏危險(xiǎn)搖晃，每個(gè)浪頭都可能掀翻脆弱希望）解析：擬人化"threatening"，抽象概念具象化。 Adrenaline surged as I heaved the child onto the bank, his shallow breaths fogging the frigid air. （腎上腺素飆升中將孩子拖上岸，他淺弱的呼吸在寒霧中成霜）解析：生理反應(yīng)+視覺細(xì)節(jié)，救援成功的復(fù)合描寫。結(jié)局升華處理（一）情感收束 Collapsing onto the snow, laughter and tears mingled - the sweet taste of survival. （癱倒雪地，笑淚交融——存活的甘美滋味）解析：破折號點(diǎn)睛，通感手法"taste"強(qiáng)化體驗(yàn)。 Her trembling embrace spoke volumes where words failed. （她顫抖的擁抱勝過萬語千言）解析：擬人化"spoke"，留白手法引發(fā)共鳴。 The paramedic's nod was all the confirmation we needed; we'd beaten the odds. （醫(yī)護(hù)人員的點(diǎn)頭就是最好確認(rèn)：我們戰(zhàn)勝了概率）解析：分號連接結(jié)果，專業(yè)術(shù)語提升真實(shí)度。 In the ambulance's rotating lights, our silent hand squeeze conveyed more than any speech. （救護(hù)車旋轉(zhuǎn)燈光中，無聲的緊握勝過千言萬語）解析：環(huán)境細(xì)節(jié)+動作描寫，克制表達(dá)情感。（二）主題升華 That day taught me: courage isn't the absence of fear, but action despite it. （那天我學(xué)到：勇氣不是毫無畏懼，而是雖懼猶行）解析：冒號引出金句，對比結(jié)構(gòu)強(qiáng)化哲理性。 Every CPR training session matters - you never know when life hands you a chance to be someone's hero. （每次心肺復(fù)蘇訓(xùn)練都重要——你永遠(yuǎn)不知道何時(shí)獲得成為他人英雄的機(jī)會）解析：破折號深化主題，第二人稱拉近距離。 Emergency preparedness is like carrying an umbrella - its true value shines when storms hit. （應(yīng)急準(zhǔn)備如同帶傘——暴雨來襲時(shí)方顯真價(jià)值）解析：生活化比喻，復(fù)雜概念簡單化。 Our trembling hands that day proved: ordinary people can summon extraordinary strength when lives hang in the balance. （當(dāng)日顫抖的手證明：當(dāng)生命懸于一線，普通人也能爆發(fā)非凡力量）解析：冒號引出結(jié)論，專業(yè)短語"hang in the balance"提升表達(dá)。寫作技巧總結(jié)：感官混合：視覺（swirling smoke）+聽覺（crackling ice）+觸覺（numbing cold）聯(lián)動動詞升級：把"run"替換為"stumble/trudge/bolt"增強(qiáng)畫面感比喻階梯：具體比喻（ice like glass）→抽象比喻（fear like poison）情緒弧線：panic→determination→relief→reflection 完整閉環(huán) 本指南通過分級描寫（環(huán)境→動作→情感）和多樣修辭（比喻/擬人/通感），幫助學(xué)生在詞匯量范圍內(nèi)構(gòu)建緊張感與情感張力并存的救人故事。每個(gè)例句均標(biāo)注高中核心詞匯（如precarious, adrenaline, CPR等），適合模仿運(yùn)用。高考真題演練 2020年7月浙江卷（拍照北極熊遇險(xiǎn)） One fall, my wife?Elli?and I had a single goal: to?photograph?polar bears. We were staying at a research camp outside “ the polar bear capital of the world ” — the town of Churchill in Manitoba, Canada. ? Taking?pictures?of polar bears is amazing but also dangerous. Polar bears — like all wild animals — should be photographed from a?safe?distance. When I’m face to face with a polar bear, I like it to be through a?camera?with a telephoto lens. But sometimes, that is easier said than done. This was one of those times. As Elli and I cooked dinner, a young male polar bear who was playing in a nearby lake sniffed, and smelled our garlic?bread. The hungry bear followed his nose to our camp, which was surrounded by a high wire?fence. He pulled and bit the wire. He stood on his back legs and pushed at the wooden fence posts. Terrified, Elli and I tried all the bear defense actions we knew. We yelled at the bear, hit pots hard, and fired blank shotgun shells into the air. Sometimes loud?noises?like these will scare bears off. Not this polar bear though — he just kept trying to tear down the fence with his massive paws (爪子). I radioed the camp manager for help. He told me a helicopter was on its way, but it would be 30 minutes before it arrived. Making the best of this close encounter (相遇), I took some pictures of the bear. Elli and I feared the fence wouldn’t last through 30 more minutes of the bear’s punishment. The camp manager suggested I use pepper?spray. The spray burns the bears’ eyes, but doesn’t hurt them. So I approached our uninvited guest slowly and, through the fence, sprayed him in the face. With an angry roar (吼叫), the bear?ran?to the lake to wash his eyes. 注意： 1.?所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2. 至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語； 3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好； 4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。 Paragraph 1:?A few minutes later, the bear headed back to our camp.? _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2:?At that very moment, the helicopter arrived.? _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 2017年6月浙江卷（騎行遇狼） On a bright, warm July afternoon,?Mac?Hollan, a primary school teacher, was cycling from his home to Alaska with his?friends. One of his friends had stopped to make a?bicycle?repair, but they had encouraged Mac to carry on, and they would catch up with him soon. As Mac?pedaled?(騎行) along alone, he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at?home. He hoped to show them this beautiful place someday. Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him. “Man, that’s a big dog!” he thought. But when he looked to the side, he saw instantly that it wasn’t a dog at all, but a?wolf, quickly catching up with him. Mac’s heart?jumped. He found out his can of bear spray. With one hand on the bars, he fired the spray at the wolf. A bright red cloud enveloped the animal, and to Mac’s relief, it fell back, shaking its head. But a minute later, it was by his side again. Then it attacked the back of Mac’s bike, tearing open his tent bag. He fired at the wolf a second time, and again, it fell back only to?quickly restart the chase (追趕). Mac was pedaling hard now. He waved and yelled at passing?cars?but was careful not to slow down. He saw a steep uphill?climb?before him. He knew that once he hit the hill, he’d be easy caught up and the wolf’s teeth would be tearing into his flesh. At this moment,?Paul?and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska. They didn’t think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road. A bit later, they spotted what they, too, assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike. As they got closer, they realized that the dog was a wolf. Mac heard a large vehicle behind him. He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast, just a dozen yards away now. 注意： 1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2. 應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語； 3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好； 4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。 Paragraph 1:?The car abruptly stopped in front of him. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2:?A few minutes later, the other two cyclists arrived. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 模擬演練練習(xí)（一）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。 Ever since he was a kid, Colin had taken great interest in hiking (遠(yuǎn)足）. To celebrate his 40th birthday, he planned to climb Mountain Sunshine. The night before his journey, Colin filled his backpack with hiking poles, a homemade hamburger, and some other necessities. He drove off at 7 am the next day, his mountain bike in the trunk(后備箱）。When he was already on the way, he suddenly realized there was a possibility of bear attack. About an hour later, he arrived at a camp and checked in.“Is there anything you need?”Vito,the camp manager, asked him. “Bear spray(驅(qū)熊噴霧），”said Colin. After finding a bottle, Vito offered him a ride. They trucked along a road until the forest got too thick. As Colin put his mountain bike against a bush so that he could recover it on the way back, Vito said, “I'll come for you if you're not back when the night falls." “Nothing to worry about,” Colin replied in a confident voice. With the bear spray in one pocket,Colin started hiking.He marked his trail(足跡，蹤跡） and made lots of noise to drive away any curious animals. Before he knew it, it was getting dark. Not wanting to get caught in the dark, and satisfied with what he'd finished that day, he started to climb down the mountain, and soon recovered his bike. As he passed a marker showing 3 kilometers away from the camp, he suddenly stopped his bike-a bear stood in the middle of the narrow road,some hundred meters away. Knowing it could easily attack him if he sped up, Colin decided not to anger the bear. 注意： 1．寫作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Paragraph 1: The animal came in his direction, closer and closer. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph 2: At that very moment, a truck stopped right in front of him. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 練習(xí)（二）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。 It was a hot July day in Philadelphia. The five boys I was with had been sick of playing marbles and burning holes in dry leaves. So when little Ned suggested climbing the cliff, the rest of kids all agreed excitedly, except me. I hesitated. I longed to be brave and active, like them, but I’d been a sickly child most of my eight years and I actually wasn’t as strong as the other boys. “Come on!”Called Jerry, my best friend. “Just being sick is no reason to be a coward（膽小鬼）.” “I’m coming!” I yelled, and ran along after them. Through the park and into the woods we went, finally we stood beneath the near vertical（垂直的）wall of the cliff, about 60 feet high. To me it looked like the very symbol of the Forbidden and Impossible. One by one, the other boys climbed upward, finding handholds and toeholds on rocks. I hung back until the others were partway up; then trembling and sweating, I began to climb. A hand here, a foot there, my heart pounding in my skinny chest, I made my way up and up. At some point, I looked back and was horrified. The ground at the base of the cliff seemed very far below; one slip and I would fall. But the boys were talking loudly and happily above me. In a few minutes they started up to the top while I still struggled and crawled, far behind. “Hey, wait,” I begged. Sadly, they ignored my request and continued their way to the top, from where they would walk home by an easier route. Before they left, they glanced down at me. “You can stay if you want to”, teased Ned. Jerry looked concerned, but he went with the others. I looked down and was overcome by dizziness; a nameless force seemed to be dragging me to fall off. I grasped the rock as the world spun around. I could never climb back down. It was much too far to go, too dangerous. 注意：1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Paragraph 1: However the way up to the top was even worse—higher, steeper, more challenging. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph2: I didn’t know how long it had passed until a familiar voice came below. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 練習(xí)（三）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 At first, Michael didn’t see the black smoke or flames shooting from the windows of his neighbors’ home. He and his wife had just parked around the corner from their own house when they got a call from one of his daughters: “The house next door is on fire!” He went to check. That’s when he saw two women and a girl helpless and heartbroken on their doorway. “The baby’s in there!” one of the women cried. Though the fire department had been called, Michael, then 64, immediately ran inside. “The baby” was 8-year-old Tiara, the woman’s granddaughter and a playmate of Michael’s three youngest kids. Entering the burning house was like “running into a bucket of black paint”. The thick smoke caused Michael to stumble blindly around, burned his eyes, and made it impossible to breathe. The conditions would have been dangerous for anyone, but for Michael, who has severe lung disease, they were life-threatening. After a few minutes in the smoke-filled house, he retreated outside to catch his breath. “Where is Tiara?” he asked desperately. “The second floor,” her aunt shouted back. Michael knew he couldn’t hold his breath for long. However, taking a deep breath, he went in a second time. The darkness was overwhelming. Yet because the house had a similar design to his, he made it to the second floor. He turned to the right and was met by intense heat. He was already out of breath. “Baby girl, where are you?” His throat and lungs burned as if he’d inhaled fire instead of the smoke in the air. Every blink stung his eyes. All he could hear was the crackling and popping of burning wood. Then a soft but distinct moan emerged. Still unable to see, Michael fell to his knees on the hot wood floor. He crawled toward the sound, feeling around for any sign of the girl. An unlucky thought crossed his mind: I’m probably gonna die up here. 注意： 1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Paragraph 1: Finally, Michael touched something. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Tiara was safe now; however, Michael fainted down to the ground, unconscious. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

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