讀后續(xù)寫：趣事類 TOC \o "1-3" \h \u  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc22444" Part1：經(jīng)典例文（姐弟重逢）  PAGEREF _Toc22444 \h 1  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc22417" Part2：趣事類描寫“兩大核心技巧”  PAGEREF _Toc22417 \h 3  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc4122" 核心技巧1：矛盾塑造（尷尬+緊張）  PAGEREF _Toc4122 \h 3  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc23042" 核心技巧2：快樂結(jié)局塑造（感激+開心）  PAGEREF _Toc23042 \h 4  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc3375" Part3：靈活應(yīng)用  PAGEREF _Toc3375 \h 4  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc16046" 例1：成功的“復(fù)仇”  PAGEREF _Toc16046 \h 4  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc4114" 例2：做家務(wù)  PAGEREF _Toc4114 \h 7  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc21875" Part 4: 高考真題再現(xiàn)  PAGEREF _Toc21875 \h 9  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc22297" 【真題1】2021年1月浙江卷：萬圣節(jié)南瓜卡頭  PAGEREF _Toc22297 \h 9  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc8571" 【真題2】2017年浙江卷：健忘而可愛的媽媽  PAGEREF _Toc8571 \h 12  Part1：經(jīng)典例文（姐弟重逢） 閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。 One day, I found a wallet on the street. The wallet contained only three dollars and a very old letter. The envelope was worn and the only thing on it was the return address. I started to open the letter, hoping to find some information. Then I saw the date-1990, and the signature-Beatrice. The letter was written several decades ago. Then I made every effort and found out that Beatrice was now working in a hospital. I showed her the letter. The second she saw the letter, she took a deep breath and said, “Young man, this letter was the last contact I ever had with Henry. He is my only brother. I loved him very much. I was only 16 at the time and my brother is two years younger than me. If you can find him, tell him I'm still looking for him,” she said and tears began to well up in her eyes. “Mother is waiting for him to come back home.” When I walked out of the building with the wallet in my hand, the guard of the building recognized the wallet, and with his help, I finally found its owner, Henry. I handed the wallet to Henry and he said, “Yes, that's mine! It must have dropped out of my pocket this afternoon.” “I read the letter in the hope of finding out who owned the wallet.” I said. The smile on his face suddenly disappeared. He asked, “You read that letter?” “Not only did I read it, but also Beatrice read.” I replied. He suddenly became excited. “Beatrice? You know where she is? How is she? Please tell me,” he begged. “She's fine. She has been looking for you.” I said softly. He grabbed my hand and said, “Sir, you know she is my only sister in this world. I've always missed her.” Henry and I took the elevator (電梯) down to Beatrice's room. I walked over to her. “Beatrice,” I said softly, pointing to Henry, who was waiting with me in the doorway. “Do you know the man?” 注意： 1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Beatrice adjusted her glasses, looked for a moment, but didn't say a word． ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ About three weeks later I got a call at my office from Beatrice． _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Paragraph 1： Beatrice adjusted her glasses, looked for a moment, but didn't say a word．Henry said softly, almost in a whisper, “Beatrice, it’s Henry. Do you remember me? ” She said excitedly, “Henry! I don’t believe it! Henry! It's you! My Henry! ” He walked slowly towards her and they hugged. The nurse and I left with tears falling down our faces. 比阿特麗斯調(diào)整了一下眼鏡，看了一會(huì)兒，但一句話也沒說。亨利輕聲說，幾乎是輕聲說，“比阿特麗斯，是亨利。你還記得我了嗎？她興奮地說，“亨利！”我不相信！亨利！是你的名字！我的亨利先生！他慢慢地向她走去，他們擁抱在一起。護(hù)士和我離開了，眼淚流了下來。 Paragraph 2： About three weeks later I got a call at my office from Beatrice．“Can you break away on Sunday to attend a party? Henry and Beatrice are going to have a party in the home! ” It was a beautiful party with all the people dressed up to join in the celebration. If you ever wanted to see a woman and a man acting like two teenagers, you had to see this elder sister and younger brother. It was a perfect ending for a family affection that had lasted nearly several decades. 大約三周后，我接到比阿特麗斯的電話?！澳阈瞧谔炜梢詤⒓泳蹠?huì)嗎？”亨利和比阿特麗斯將在家里舉辦一個(gè)聚會(huì)！“這是一個(gè)美麗的派對(duì)，所有人都盛裝參加慶祝活動(dòng)。如果你想看到一個(gè)女人和一個(gè)男人像兩個(gè)青少年，你必須看到這個(gè)姐姐和弟弟。這是一個(gè)持續(xù)了近幾十年的家庭感情的完美結(jié)局。 【解析】 本文以信封為線索展開，講述了作者在街上發(fā)現(xiàn)了一個(gè)錢包，在里面發(fā)現(xiàn)一封破舊的信，通過努力找到信主人的姐姐，通過保安大叔找到了錢包主人，最后，姐弟重逢的故事。 1.段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“比阿特麗斯扶了扶眼鏡，看了一會(huì)兒，但沒有說一句話?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫姐弟兩人重逢的溫馨場(chǎng)景。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“大約三周后，我在辦公室接到比阿特麗斯的電話?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作者對(duì)重逢事件的感慨。 2.續(xù)寫線索：發(fā)現(xiàn)信封——找到信封主人姐姐——找到主人——姐弟重逢——感謝——感悟 3.詞匯激活 行為類 接電話：get a call at/put sb on to/pick up the telephone/answer the phone 抽出時(shí)間：break away on/take time off/spare one’s time 情緒類 興奮：did excitedly/thrilled 淚流滿面：tears bathe/stream down/one’s cheeks 【點(diǎn)睛】 [高分句型1]：The nurse and I left with tears falling down our faces.這句話運(yùn)用了with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)。 [高分句型2]：It was a perfect ending for a family affection that had lasted nearly several decades這句話運(yùn)用了that引導(dǎo)的定語從句。 Part2：趣事類描寫“兩大核心技巧” 核心技巧1：矛盾塑造（尷尬+緊張） So nervous was he that （他太緊張了）he dropped the electric carving knife.（2021.04 臺(tái)州高三調(diào)考） I got into a panic（ 陷入驚慌之中）as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. （2021年1月浙江高考） 3. Sweating and nearly tearing（汗流浹背，眼淚差點(diǎn)流下來）, I could imagine how silly and strange I was at that moment based on the continuing laughter from my parents and Jason. （2021年1月浙江高考） 她立刻漲紅了臉，感到尷尬幾乎把她整個(gè)包圍起來。 Blushing scarlet instantly, she felt embarrassment almost wreathed her entirely. 核心技巧2：快樂結(jié)局塑造（感激+開心） 1. 他們聳了聳肩，咧著嘴笑，這就驅(qū)散了她的一切煩惱，給了她安慰。 They shrugged and grinned, which dissipated all her distress and consoled her. 謝謝。她緊緊抓住打開的袋子，充滿了感激和溫暖。 ‘Thanks.’ Clinging her hands to the bag opening, she was overwhelmed by a surge of gratitude and warmth. 這兩個(gè)強(qiáng)壯的陌生人點(diǎn)亮了她的一天。 The two strong strangers undoubtedly lit her day up. 3. We all jumped to our feet, dancing and screaming with joy（開心得歡呼雀躍）. （2021.04 臺(tái)州高三調(diào)考） 4. Though I was dissatisfied with my ugly gesture and stupid image, I was satisfied with the happiness and fun that I brought to others（對(duì)我?guī)Ыo別人的快樂和樂趣感到滿意）. （2021年1月浙江高考） 5. 她停了下來，心中洋溢著歡快的心情，拿出一把硬幣，扭頭把它們攥在他們的手里，盡管兩個(gè)男人的表情都很驚訝。（2021嘉興二模） Brimming over with bright feeling and joy, she stopped, fished out a handful coins and tuned around to squeeze them in their fists despite two men's astonished expression. Part3：靈活應(yīng)用 例1：成功的“復(fù)仇” 閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。 “I will have revenge(復(fù)仇) on him, and make him regret what he did to me,” said Philip to himself, his face red with anger. Stephen, who happened at that moment to walk past and hear him talking to himself. “Who is that you want to take revenge on?” asked Stephen. Philip looked at his friend and said, “You remember my new ball given by my father? Look! It is punctured! It was farmer Robinson’s son who did this!” Stephen asked him why young Robinson had ruined it. “I was walking and kicking my ball.” Philip replied, “By accident, when I was opposite the gate, my ball bumped over a bucket of water left in the pathway by him.” “He came up and began to yell at me. I assured him that what I had done was an accident, and that I was terribly sorry for it. I also offered to fetch another bucket of water for him. But despite all I had said, he took a nail out of his pocket and twisted it into the ball, as you see. I will make him pay for this.” “Honestly speaking,” said Stephen, “he is already punished for what he has done, because nobody likes him and he often walks around alone. He is just a lonely and miserable boy. This will be enough revenge for you.” “But the ball is my favorite gift and I enjoy playing with it so much…” murmured Philip. “Now Philip,” said Stephen, “I think you can act better than him in terms of getting revenge. I will tell you what happened to him not long ago.” “A while ago he saw a bee hovering about a flower. He caught the bee and was going to pull off its wings for fun. The bee, of course, stung him. The pain made him so angry that, like you, he decided to get revenge. He got a stick, and pressed it into the beehive (蜂巢).” “Immediately the whole swarm of bees flew out and stung him so badly that he had to spend a few days in bed.” “So you see, he was not very successful in getting revenge. What if he could act better and forgive the bee for stinging him?” asked Stephen. Paragraph 1: ????“I must say,” replied Philip, “that your advice seems very good”. ?___________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: ????A few days afterward, Philip saw this young Robinson fall as he was carrying home a heavy log of wood. ___________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________ ___________________________________________________________________ 2.答案： ?“I must say,” replied Philip, “that your advice seems very good. So come with me please, and I will tell my father what happened to the ball, and I think he will not be angry with me.” They went, and Philip told his father what had happened. He thanked Stephen for the good advice he had given his son, and promised Philip to give him another ball exactly the same as the first. “我得說，”菲利普回答說，“你的建議似乎很好。所以請(qǐng)跟我來，我要告訴我父親舞會(huì)發(fā)生了什么事，我想他不會(huì)對(duì)我生氣的。他們走了，菲利普把發(fā)生的事告訴了他父親。他感謝斯蒂芬給他兒子的好建議，并答應(yīng)菲利普再給他一個(gè)和第一個(gè)完全一樣的舞會(huì)。 A few days afterwards, Philip saw this young Robinson fall as he was carrying home a heavy log of wood. It was too heavy for him to lift up again. Philip ran to him, and helped him to put it on his shoulder again. The boy was embarrassed to be treated so kindly when he had ruined Philip’s ball the week before! He said that he was very sorry for his behavior. Philip went home quite happy. “This,” he said,“ is the best revenge I could take, in returning good for bad.” 幾天后，菲利普看見這個(gè)年輕的羅賓遜帶著一根沉重的木頭回家時(shí)倒下了。它太重了，他不能再抬不起來了。菲利普跑到他跟前，幫他又把它放在肩上。這個(gè)男孩在一周前毀了菲利普的球，對(duì)這樣友好感到很尷尬！他說他對(duì)自己的行為感到非常抱歉。菲利普很高興地回家了。“這是，”他說，“這是我所能得到的最好的報(bào)復(fù)?！? 解析： 通過閱讀所給文章可知,Philip因?yàn)檗r(nóng)夫Robinson的兒子用釘子刺穿了自己新買的球而非常生氣,揚(yáng)言要報(bào)復(fù)他。Stephen勸他說沒有人喜歡Robinson的兒子,他經(jīng)常一個(gè)人走來走去。他只是一個(gè)孤獨(dú)可憐的男孩。Stephen還告訴Philip,幾天前Robinson的兒子被蜜蜂蟄了,就去打蜜蜂巢,結(jié)果被一大群蜜蜂蟄了,不得不在床上躺了幾天的事情。 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,第一段開頭是:“我得說,” Philip回答說,“你的建議似乎很好?！彼院笪膽?yīng)該是講述Philip放棄了報(bào)復(fù)的計(jì)劃,告訴了父親實(shí)情,Philip的父親感謝Stephen給他兒子的忠告,答應(yīng)Philip再給他買一個(gè)球,和第一個(gè)一模一樣的。第二段開頭是:幾天后,Philip看到Robinson的兒子在把一根沉重的木頭搬回家時(shí)摔倒了。本段應(yīng)該寫Philip幫助了Robinson的兒子,Robinson的兒子為自己幾天前的行為道了歉,Philip高高興興地回了家,認(rèn)為以德報(bào)怨就是最好的報(bào)復(fù)。 最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。 【點(diǎn)睛】本文描寫詳略得當(dāng),使用了高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句子。如:be angry with;good advice;the same as;too…to…;embarrassed等高級(jí)詞匯;He said that he was very sorry for his behavior.賓語從句等高級(jí)句式。 例2：做家務(wù) 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。（滿分25分） During lunchtime，Emma suggested going to the zoo to feed the animals and her mom agreed. “We’ll stop by the bakery and pick some bread up. Now hurry and eat and then we’ll go. It’s going to be a lovely day. Grandma is coming with us. She’ll be here any minute，”mom said. Emma ate her lunch and then ran into her room to get her shoes.The problem was that she could only find one of them. She looked under her bed, but all she could see were dirty towels and pants. She moved some of her toys out of the way，but still couldn’t find her shoe. After she’d checked everywhere in her room，she ran into the kitchen. “Mom，I can’t find my shoe.Will you wait while I look for it？”she asked. Her mom thought about how many times she’d told Emma to clean her room up. She whispered something to Emma’s grandma and then said to Emma，“You will have to stay home.Your dad and I will take Ryan to the zoo. Grandma will stay here with you.” “No！Please wait for me. I want to go to the zoo，”Emma cried. “I’m sorry, Emma. I’ve told you a dozen times to clean your room and you ignored me.You can’t find your shoe now. It’s your own fault for not doing as I asked.You will stay home.” Emma ran into her bedroom, crying. Her mom came to the door and said，“Emma，clean that room of yours before I get home. I’ve told grandma not to give you any sweets until you finish the work.” She went out to the car with Ryan and Emma’s dad and then they drove away. 注意： 1．所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2．應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語； 3．續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好； 4．續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。 Paragraph 1： Emma sat on her bed and cried for a long time. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2： Emma and her grandma were sitting at the table，eating when her mom，dad，and Ryan came home. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Emma sat on her bed and cried for a long time. And then she wiped her eyes and started to clean her room. It took her two hours to clean up the room.“I did it！”she said proudly. She even found her missing shoe. She ran into the living room.“Grandma！Come and see. I cleaned my room and found my shoe.” Grandma looked in Emma’s room. “If you had kept it this way, you wouldn’t have lost your shoe.Come and have some sweets now，”she said. 艾瑪坐在床上哭了很長(zhǎng)時(shí)間。然后她擦了擦眼睛，開始打掃房間。她花了兩個(gè)小時(shí)才打掃房間?！拔易隽?！”她驕傲地說。她甚至找到了她丟失的鞋子。她跑進(jìn)客廳?！澳棠?！”來看看吧。我打掃了我的房間，找到了我的鞋子。奶奶看著艾瑪?shù)姆块g?！叭绻阋恢边@樣做，你就不會(huì)丟鞋了?，F(xiàn)在就來吃點(diǎn)糖果吧，”她說。 Emma and her grandma were sitting at the table，eating when her mom，dad，and Ryan came home.“Well，look at Emma’s room！It’s clean，”her dad said.“How was the zoo？Did you have fun？I wish I could have gone there with you，”Emma said.“If you keep your room clean，we may go and see animals again，”her mom said. From then on，Emma tried her best to keep her room clean. 艾瑪和奶奶坐在桌邊吃飯，媽媽、爸爸和瑞恩回家?！班?，看看艾瑪?shù)姆块g！它很干凈，”她爸爸說，“動(dòng)物園怎么樣？你玩得開心嗎？我希望我能和你一起去，”艾瑪說?！叭绻惚３址块g干凈，我們可以再去看動(dòng)物，”她媽媽說。從那時(shí)起，艾瑪就盡力保持她的房間干凈。 Part 4: 高考真題再現(xiàn) 【真題1】2021年1月浙江卷：萬圣節(jié)南瓜卡頭 ：閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。 Pumpkin (南瓜）carving at Halloween is a family tradition. We visit a local farm every October. In the pumpkin field, I compete with my three brothers and sister to seek out the biggest pumpkin. My dad has a rule that we have to carry our pumpkins back home, and as the eldest child I have an advantage — I carried an 85-pounder back last year. This year, it was hard to tell whether my prize or the one chosen by my 14-year-old brother, Jason, was the winner. Unfortunately we forgot to weigh them before taking out their insides, but I was determined to prove my point. All of us were hard at work at the kitchen table, with my mom filming the annual event. I’m unsure now why I thought forcing my head inside the pumpkin would settle the matter, but it seemed to make perfect sense at the time. With the pumpkin resting on the table, hole uppermost, I bent over and pressed my head against the opening. At first I got jammed just above my eyes and then, as I went on with my task, unwilling to quit, my nose briefly prevented entry. Finally I managed to put my whole head into it, like a cork (軟木塞) forced into a bottle. I was able to straighten up with the huge pumpkin resting on my shoulders. My excitement was short-lived. The pumpkin was heavy. “I’m going to set it down, now,” I said, and with Jason helping to support its weight, I bent back over the table to give it somewhere to rest. It was only when I tried to remove my head that I realized getting out was going to be less straightforward than getting in. When I pulled hard, my nose got in the way. I got into a panic as I pressed firmly against the table and moved my head around trying to find the right angle, but it was no use. “I can’t get it out!” I shouted, my voice sounding unnaturally loud in the enclosed space. 注意： 1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2. 至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語； 3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好； 4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。 Paragraph 1 I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2 That video was posted the day before Halloween. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 優(yōu)秀范文1 It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer.?The air inside the hollow vegetable was full of my anxious breath. I could hear my sister’s laughter and?Jason’s muffled voice talking about cutting the giant thing open. “No! Not my precious?pumpkin!” I protested. Eventually,?Dad?helped me adjust my body to a more relaxed position, and?pulled?the pumpkin gently off my?head. Hair in knots,?nose?and chain covered in pumpkin flesh, I let out a sigh of relief. That’s when I realized the camera had been rolling the whole time! The video was posted online the Monday before Halloween.I looked just like a pumpkin head in it. Embarrassed and a little annoyed, I fled to my room, but?Mom?stopped me. “You haven’t read the comments yet.” I scrolled down the screen and marveled at the stories the viewers shared about Halloween. One girl recalled celebrating it with her brothers and sisters, and thanked us for “bringing her home”. The words brought warmth to my heart and tears to my eyes. I felt lucky to be a part of this mischievous yet loving family. (171 words) 出彩表達(dá)積累（出自原文及范文） 1.hollow?adj.?中空的；空心的 2.muffled?adj.沉悶的；模糊不清的 3.sigh?n.嘆氣；嘆息 4.marvel?v.感到驚奇；大為贊嘆 5.mischievous?adj.頑皮的；搗蛋的 6.scroll down??向下滾動(dòng) 7.Eventually, Dad helped me adjust my body to a more relaxed position, and pulled the pumpkin gently off my head. 最后，爸爸幫我把身體調(diào)整到一個(gè)比較放松的姿勢(shì)，輕輕地把南瓜從我頭上扯下來。（對(duì)動(dòng)作的生動(dòng)描寫） 8.The words brought warmth to my heart and tears to my eyes. 這些話溫暖了我的心，使我熱淚盈眶。（對(duì)神態(tài)的生動(dòng)描寫） 優(yōu)秀范文2 It was five or six minutes though it felt much longer.Jason?suggested using a knife to cut the?pumpkin?open. I waved my hands wildly in protest at the plan. “Then you need to find a way of?pulling?yourself out.” My?dad?said in a calm, cool voice. His voice settled my nerves. I was conscious that my?nose?was acting as an impediment to my escape. With stretching out my face and biting into the pumpkin, I surmounted the large obstacle and?managed?to pull my?head?out. A ripple of excitement ran through us but the first thing I saw was the camera. The video was posted online the Monday before Halloween.?In the space of a week, it had been viewed over a million times. It filled?Mom?with greater astonishment. Rarely had a pumpkin’s video had so many hits as this one. Dangerous as it is, some viewers’ curiosity was too strong to resist. They left messages describing the feelings they had while watching it. Some laughed at me, while others praised my parents, who remained calm throughout. Looking through these reviews, the sunlight peeking through our , Dad’s calm smile reflected his motto “All’s well with us, never fear”. (186 words) 出彩表達(dá)積累（出自原文及范文） 1.?nerve?n.神經(jīng)質(zhì)；神經(jīng)緊張 2.?conscious?adj.意識(shí)到；注意到 3.?impediment?n.妨礙；阻礙；障礙 4.?surmount?v.克服；解決 5.?obstacle?n.障礙；阻礙；絆腳石 6.?ripple?n.波紋；細(xì)浪；漣漪 7.?His voice settled my nerves.? ?他的聲音使我安定下來。（無靈主語） 8.?It filled Mom with greater astonishment.這使母親尤為驚訝。（對(duì)情緒的生動(dòng)描寫） 【真題2】2017年浙江卷：健忘而可愛的媽媽 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。 A?vacation with my mother ? ? I had an interesting childhood: It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because of my mother-loving, sweet, and yet?absent-minded?and?forgetful. One strange family?trip?we took when I was eleven tells a lot about her. ? ?My two sets of grandparents lived in Colorado and North Dakota, and my parents decided to spend a few weeks driving to those states and seeing all the sights along the way. As the first day of our trip approached,?David, my eight-year-old brother, and I unwillingly said good-bye to all of our friends. Who knew if we’d ever see them again? Finally, the moment of our departure arrived, and we loaded suitcases, books, games,?camping?equipment, and a?tent?into the car and bravely drove off. We bravely drove off again two hours later after we’d returned home to get the purse and traveler’s checks?Mom?had forgotten. ? ?David and I were always a little nervous when using gas station bathrooms if Mom was driving while?Dadslept:” You stand outside the door and play lookout while I go, and I’ll stand outside the door and play lookout while you go.” I had terrible pictures in my mind: “Honey, where are the kids?” “What?! Oh, Gosh… I thought they were being awfully quiet.” We were never actually left behind in a strange city, but we weren’t about to take any chances. On the fourth or fifth night, we had?trouble?finding a hotel with a vacancy. After driving in vain for some time, Mom suddenly got a great idea: Why didn’t we find a house with a likely-looking backyard and ask if we could set up tent there? David and I became nervous. To our great relief, Dad turned down the idea. Mom never could understand our objections.If a strange family showed up on her front doorsteps, Mom would have been delighted. She thinks everyone in the world as as?nice?as she is. We finally found a vacancy in the next town.? 注意： 1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2. 應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語； 3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段開頭語已為你寫好； 4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。 Paragraph 1 ?The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2 ?We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 優(yōu)秀范文 The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brought with us.But then we were half an hour away from the hotel, where the tentwas left behind. Dad recommended buying a new one, while Mom insisted on our going back to fetch it, saying "Forgetful people like me may lose things repeatedly, so it's unwise to give up the tent." Finally, we got back the tent and hit the road again. If Mom hadn't been that absent-minded, it would have saved us the trouble of going back again and again. We drove through several states and saw lots of great sights along the way. One day, towards evening, we found a great campingsite at the foot of a high mountain. Davidand I helped Dad put up the tent, and Mom was busy preparing supper. When the setting sun cast an orange light over the mountains, the tent was set up and the meal was ready. Sitting around the camp fire, we talked and laughed. Every time we mentioned the funny incidents of the journey a pleasant smile would spread over Mom's face. 解析 文章中文大意：我的母親很健忘（absent-minded and forgetful），一家四口去祖父母在的省自駕旅游，途中發(fā)生了有趣的事情，比如爸爸叫我盯住媽媽，以防她開車的時(shí)候睡著： 第一段開頭句：我們拿出來新買的帳篷 第二段開頭句：我們愉快地欣賞路邊的景色 關(guān)鍵詞： mom dad? David （弟弟）, tent, camping, nice, trouble, forgetful, absent-minded 實(shí)戰(zhàn)解析 首先，根據(jù)文章當(dāng)中第二段內(nèi)容比較開心的基調(diào)，第一段的故事情節(jié)應(yīng)該比較偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我們?cè)诼稜I(yíng)過程中一起搭建帳篷的開心時(shí)光或露營(yíng)過程中的趣事（尤其是前文有鋪墊媽媽是個(gè)forgetful的人，這一點(diǎn)也可以埋下伏筆來表達(dá)后面過程中由于媽媽健忘而帶來的趣事）（也有同學(xué)在此處描述了露營(yíng)過程中對(duì)其他陌生人提供幫助，來集中體現(xiàn)nice這一個(gè)點(diǎn)）； 其次，第二段開頭說來描述欣賞風(fēng)景： 此處可以用一些描述景色環(huán)境的表達(dá)來烘托下氛圍，但是第二段不能僅僅只有景色描述； 例如：這里可以實(shí)寫和虛寫結(jié)合的方式，看到景色（同時(shí)回憶往事），最終把故事的落腳點(diǎn)放在 "家人的感情" "親情" "生活的樂趣" "與媽媽一起的趣事" 等等角度都可以的；當(dāng)然也有同學(xué)描述與陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意這個(gè)主題；總之這次的話題比較開放，情節(jié)可以寫的角度比較多； 再次，除了情節(jié)方面的內(nèi)容以外，以下幾個(gè)方面是考生需要著重關(guān)注的得分點(diǎn)：字跡清晰程度，語法多樣性和句式豐富性，銜接成分的使用，語言的場(chǎng)景恰當(dāng)程度；高考英語寫作中，考生所采用的句型結(jié)構(gòu)一定程度上影響了老師對(duì)考生寫作水平的判斷；說到語法豐富性方面，例如在作文中用到從句結(jié)構(gòu)、強(qiáng)調(diào)句、非謂語結(jié)構(gòu)等。尤其應(yīng)該注意的是：避免句型單一化，如通篇使用定語從句，這樣反而使閱卷老師覺得該考生對(duì)句型掌握的不夠充分。應(yīng)該在文章寫作中有意識(shí)地多使用不同的句型結(jié)構(gòu)。例如：They said it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever.（such… that結(jié)構(gòu)）。? 由于閱卷老師在評(píng)卷時(shí)的時(shí)間十分有限，在作文中放入顯耀的連接詞可以幫助老師快速抓住文章結(jié)構(gòu)，促使老師更好地理解文章主旨，同時(shí)清晰的連接詞可以顯示作者寫作時(shí)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)?shù)倪壿?。例如：upon one's arrival, then, however, besides, while等。

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