讀后續(xù)寫：友情類 TOC \o "1-3" \h \u   HYPERLINK \l "_Toc16069" Part1：經(jīng)典例文（朋友和解）  PAGEREF _Toc16069 \h 1  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc17754" Part2：友情類故事構(gòu)造“三步法”  PAGEREF _Toc17754 \h 4  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc10348" 第一步：友情出現(xiàn)危機(jī)或困難（故事沖突）  PAGEREF _Toc10348 \h 4  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc19252" 第二步：友情彌補(bǔ)（解釋、認(rèn)錯、彌補(bǔ)）  PAGEREF _Toc19252 \h 5  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc11670" 第三步：友情升華（懂得珍惜）  PAGEREF _Toc11670 \h 6  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc23083" Part3：靈活應(yīng)用  PAGEREF _Toc23083 \h 6  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc32107" 例1：三位好朋友與讀書俱樂部  PAGEREF _Toc32107 \h 6  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc27680" 例2：陌生地方的新友情  PAGEREF _Toc27680 \h 9  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc23634" 例3：結(jié)識到新朋友  PAGEREF _Toc23634 \h 12  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc17856" 例4：我們的友誼  PAGEREF _Toc17856 \h 14  Part1：經(jīng)典例文（朋友和解） 閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為 150 左右。 “Want to go to the pool tomorrow?” Rosa asked Stephanie during recess. The pool at the YMCA was one of their favorite places, where they learnt and practiced swimming. Rosa and Stephanie did everything together. They rode the school bus together. They sat together during lunch. They took dance lessons together and they even went to the same summer camp. Their classmates called them “twins”. They were best friends. Most of the time. Sometimes, though, when Stephanie was with other friends, she ignored Rosa or treated her like a little kid, even though they were the same age. Rosa and Stephanie had played together since they were babies, but sometimes Stephanie didn't act like a friend. Today was one of those times. “Sorry. I’m already going to the pool,” Stephanie said. “Toni and Vanessa and I are going.” She gave a broad smile, but in Rosa’s eyes, it wasn’t her nice smile. Saying nothing more, she walked straight away to join Toni and Vanessa, and Rosa was left standing alone, with her face burned and an angry tension coming into her limbs. After school, at dance class, Stephanie talked and giggled with the other dancers as they stretched in front of the mirror. When Rosa came in, Stephanie didn’t say hello to her, but just another smile. Rosa hesitated for a while about whether she should join them, but she still felt too upset. Then she noticed Kiara, the new girl. Rosa joined her and began stretching, too. Kiara smiled and Rosa smiled back. The two girls began to talk. Rosa discovered that Kiara was not the quiet girl she had thought she was. Kiara talked a lot — about her little brother, about the tree house her uncle had built and even about swimming. “I love swimming,” Kiara said. “I will hold a pool part at the YMCA.Would you like to come?” “Yes. It’s awesome.” Rosa responded. She tried not to check the mirror to see if Stephanie had noticed. She hoped Stephanie felt left out. 注意：1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 After the dance class, when Rosa boarded the bus, Stephanie was waiting in their usual seat. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ When Rosa saw Stephanie in low spirits, her heart sank. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】After the dance lesson, when Rosa boarded the bus, Stephanie was waiting in their usual seat. Seeing Rosa, Stephanie quickly moved her backpack off the seat to make room for her. But Rosa walked past and slid into the empty seat next to Kiara. They were talking about the pool party when Stephanie went over. “Do you still want to go swimming tonight?” Stephanie asked. “I’m already going,” she said without looking up. “Kiara and I are going together.” Rosa smiled. Stephanie nodded and looked at her feet. 舞蹈課結(jié)束后，羅莎上車時，斯蒂芬妮在他們通常的座位上等著?？吹搅_莎，斯蒂芬妮迅速把背包從座位上移下來，為她騰出空間。但羅莎走了過去，滑進(jìn)了基亞拉旁邊的空座位上。當(dāng)斯蒂芬妮過去的時候，他們正在談?wù)撚境嘏蓪?。“你今晚還想去游泳嗎？””斯蒂芬妮問?！拔乙呀?jīng)要走了，”她沒有抬起頭來地說。“基亞拉和我要一起去了。”羅莎笑著說。斯蒂芬妮點了點頭，看著她的腳。 When Rosa saw Stephanie in low spirits, her heart sank. Getting even didn’t feel the way she had expected. She could walk away with her new friend and not look back. But when she saw Stephanie's watery eyes, her heart beat painfully. "Maybe we could all go together.” Rosa said. Stephanie’s face lit up. “I’m sorry for ignoring you. Thank you for your tolerance.” Stephanie said. Rosa gave her a hug and said, “I was too sensitive. Thank you for your tolerance, too.” The two girls smiled at each other, which was their nice smile. 羅莎看到斯蒂芬妮情緒低落，心沉了。甚至沒有像她預(yù)期的那樣感覺到。她可以和她的新朋友一起走開，而不是回頭看。但當(dāng)她看到斯蒂芬妮流淚時，她的心痛苦地跳動著。“也許我們都可以一起去。”羅莎說。斯蒂芬妮的臉亮了起來?！拔液鼙负鲆暳四?。謝謝你的寬容?！彼沟俜夷菡f。羅莎給了她一個擁抱，并對她說：“我太敏感了。也感謝你的寬容。兩個女孩互相微笑，這是她們美好的微笑。 【分析】 本文以人物為線索展開，講述了Rosa和Stephanie是從小到大的好朋友，但有時Stephanie表現(xiàn)得不像朋友，有一天Rosa問Stephanie要不要一起去基督教青年會的游泳池游泳，Stephanie說她去過了就不去了，這讓Rosa很尷尬；之后在舞蹈課上Rosa結(jié)識了新來的女孩Kiara，Rosa邀請Kiara一起去游泳，想以此來報復(fù)Stephanie。 【詳解】 1.段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“舞蹈課結(jié)束后，Rosa登上公共汽車時，Stephanie正在她們平常的座位上等著。”可知，第一段可描寫Stephanie為Rosa騰位置，但Rosa并未坐在Stephanie身旁，而是與Kiara坐在了一起，Stephanie問Rosa還去不去游泳，Rosa說她和Kiara一起去，Stephanie很失落。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)Rosa看到Stephanie情緒低落時，她的心一沉?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懣吹绞涞腟tephanie，Rosa并沒有報復(fù)的快感，Rosa邀請Stephanie一起去游泳，最后兩個女孩和解，露出美麗的笑容。 2.續(xù)寫線索：座位——問話——失落——釋然——和好——笑容 3.詞匯激活 行為類 ①迅速移開背包：quickly moved her backpack off / swiftly moved her backpack off ②走過去：went over / walked over ③不回頭：not look back / not turn her head 情緒類 ①心跳得很痛苦：beat painfully / beat bitterly ②露出喜色：lit up / brightened up 【點睛】 [高分句型1]. Seeing Rosa, Stephanie quickly moved her backpack off the seat to make room for her.（用了現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語） [高分句型2]. The two girls smiled at each other, which was their nice smile.（用了which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句） Part2：友情類故事構(gòu)造“三步法” 第一步：友情出現(xiàn)危機(jī)或困難（故事沖突） 1、內(nèi)疚 1. Overwhelmed by guilt（充滿內(nèi)疚）, Asad quickly picked up the wallet and strode to Fahad, “I found it over there, and I think it is yours. ”（2020.12山水聯(lián)盟） 2. Murmuring in a low voice（小聲地低語）, he dodged Asad’s shining eyes, somehow even not daring to look into them. （2020.12山水聯(lián)盟） 3. She now could do nothing but feel the regret burning in her heart（感覺內(nèi)疚在她心里燃燒）. （2021濰坊一模） 4. Ariana nodded, beginning to feel guilty（開始感到內(nèi)疚）. （廣東省高三年級上學(xué)期調(diào)研考試） 2、困難與幫助 1. Not knowing what to do（不知道該做什么) , he walked out of the classroom and sat on a bench in front of the canteen. （2020.12山水聯(lián)盟） 2. “The best thing you can do for Ashley is to treat her with kindness and sympathy（用善意和同情對待她).”（廣東省高三年級上學(xué)期調(diào)研考試） 3. When Ariana gave the lunch to Ashley, she saw tears well up in Ashley’s eyes（眼淚都流出來了).（廣東省高三年級上學(xué)期調(diào)研考試） 3、破裂 1. Because these were the people I considered my friends. I broke down in front of her. She apologized. But I felt cheated on. I told her about my decision of not wanting to continue this friendship further（我不再繼續(xù)這份友誼的決定). We both missed each other. But neither of us wanted to give the last try.（2021濰坊一模） 2. During the trip, we intentionally avoided each other（有意避開彼此). However, I couldn’t help glancing at her when she turned back and I sensed the same. 10.（2021濰坊一模） 第二步：友情彌補(bǔ)（解釋、認(rèn)錯、彌補(bǔ)） 1、原諒/和好 1. Blushed, she broke the silence（打破沉默), “I am sorry again. I didn’t mean to hurt you.” Tears streaming down, she continued, “I should have talked to you earlier.” I stood up and reached out to hug her（伸出手擁抱她), “I am sorry, too. I should have been more generous.” （2021濰坊一模） 2. But deep down, we both know all the argument is just about helping us to grow into a better individual（幫助我們成長為更好的個體)instead of enemies.（2021濰坊一模） 3. Therefore, we both learned to be tolerant and brave enough to always forgive（足夠忍耐和勇敢去原諒). （2021濰坊一模） 2、開心描寫 1. 得知我們將有一個晚餐，我非常激動。（浙江省紹興市高三11月診斷性考試） I’m thrilled to know that we’ll have dinner together. 2.他非常激動，露齒而笑。（浙江省紹興市高三11月診斷性考試） Excitement crept over his heart and made him grin from ear to ear. 這頓飯使我激動不已。想象一下我們將在機(jī)場暢飲。（浙江省紹興市高三11月診斷性考試） ?I’m buzzing for the dinner. Imagine, we’re going to drink freely at the airport. 第三步：友情升華（懂得珍惜） 1. It was on that very day that Asad made his first friend in the new school, and he truly reckoned the value of sincerity and honesty（明白真誠和誠實的價值) in a relationship.（2020.12山水聯(lián)盟） 2. So as soon as the plane landed I called him and said, “Luke, that was such a wonderful thing you did for me（那是你為我做的最美妙的事情) . Thank you.”（浙江省紹興市高三11月診斷性考試） 3. 一個忠誠的朋友抵得上成千上萬的親戚。（浙江省紹興市高三11月診斷性考試） It dawned on me that one loyal friend is worth ten thousand relatives. 4. If we really value our friends and friendship, always cherish their presence and show willingness to maintain and nurture the relationship（愿意保持和培養(yǎng)這段關(guān)系).（2021濰坊一模） Part3：靈活應(yīng)用 例1：三位好朋友與讀書俱樂部 It was lunchtime, Jerry, David, Tom, and I went to the dining hall to have lunch. I glanced across the busy cafeteria and saw the new student, Jack. He was holding his plate and waiting in lines. David noticed him too. “Why’s the new kid dressed like the headmaster?” he asked. Tom and Jimmy laughed. “Jack’s cool. He’s in my English and history classes,” I said. However, I kept the truth that Jack and I had become friends when we worked on a project together. We discovered that we were both enthusiastic readers something I would never admit to Jerry, David, Tom. I saw that Jack was walking toward us. “Don’t do it,” I thought, but in seconds he was at our table. My friends raised their eyebrows. Jerry, David, Tom piled their backpacks on the table and chairs so that there was no space left for another person to sit down. David said. “I don’t think we have room.” This awkward situation froze the air. I could feel Jack looking at me, but I stared at my lunch as if it contained precious pearls of wisdom instead of rice and beans. After a long, uncomfortable pause, Jack left. I should have spoken up for him, but I couldn’t walk away from my three friends, could I? Jack didn’t speak to me after that meeting. He was soon hanging around with another group of kids. A few months later, I saw an announcement about Jack being chosen to be president of the school book club. I was happy for Jack’s achievements, but I realized I had made a big mistake when I said nothing at the lunch table that day. Why was I so afraid that my friends might find out that I like to read? As I stared at the announcement. I knew I needed to apologize to Jack — even if he did not want to become my friend again. I thought that my three friends would not agree. I also thought that I risked losing them as well. However, I knew that I would lose myself if I did nothing. 注意： 1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 As the dismissal bell rang, I gathered up my books, took a deep breath, and went to find Jack. _______________________________________________________________________________ Jack nodded, and then mentioned my three Mends. _______________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】As the dismissal bell rang, I gathered up my books, took a deep breath, and went to find Jack. A wave of uncertainty overwhelmed me. On the way to Jack’s classroom. I felt several butterflies still fluttering in my heart. However, urged by the strong desire to be a member of the reading club, I quickened my paces spontaneously. The classroom door opened. Here came Jack. Looking into his eyes, I made an apology, explaining that I wanted to join the school book club. 解雇鈴響了，我收拾起書，深吸了一口氣，去找杰克。一波不確定性淹沒了我。在去杰克的教室的路上。我感到很不安。然而，在渴望成為閱讀俱樂部成員的強(qiáng)烈愿望下，我自發(fā)地加快了步伐。教室的門開了。杰克來了?？粗难劬?，我道歉了一下，解釋說我想加入學(xué)校的讀書俱樂部。 Jack nodded and then mentioned my three friends. With hesitation, I had no idea how to answer him. Seeing through my mind, Jack smiled and put forward a good idea. The next day, we were having lunch when Jack approached, holding a notice to recruit new members, saying that if someone wanted to join the club, he must take three other students to form a group. To my surprise, my friends were also interested in the book club. In a flash, Jack and I beamed to each other. 杰克點了點頭，然后提到了我的三個朋友。我猶豫著，不知道該怎么回答他。透過我的腦海，杰克笑了笑，提出了一個好主意。第二天，我們在吃午飯時，杰克走過來，發(fā)出了招募新成員的通知，說如果有人想加入俱樂部，他必須帶其他三個學(xué)生組成一個小組。令我驚訝的是，我的朋友們也對這個讀書俱樂部很感興趣。一瞬間，杰克和我互相笑了起來。 【分析】 本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者和Jerry, David, Tom是好朋友，但是向他們隱瞞了和Jack在讀書俱樂部成為了朋友的事情，某天中午Jack想要和他們坐在一起，但是被其他三個朋友粗魯?shù)鼐芙^了，作者也沒有為Jack說話，之后Jack也沒跟作者說話，作者意識到自己犯了錯，需要向Jack道歉。最后作者鼓起勇氣和Jack道了歉，取得了原諒，最后發(fā)現(xiàn)其他三個朋友也對讀書俱樂部感興趣。 【詳解】 1.段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“下課鈴聲響了，我收拾好課本，深吸一口氣，去找杰克。”可知，第一段可描寫作者去找杰克道歉時的心理活動，以及訴說想?yún)⒓訉W(xué)校的讀書俱樂部的愿望。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“杰克點點頭，然后提到了我的三個朋友”可知，第二段可描寫杰克想到邀請作者其他三個朋友加入讀書俱樂部的辦法，解決了作者的困境，三個朋友也對俱樂部感興趣。 2.續(xù)寫線索：找杰克——感到不安——道歉——杰克邀請另外三個人加入俱樂部——另外三個朋友也感興趣 3.詞匯激活 行為類 走向：go to/ on the way to/ approach/ walk toward 提出：put forward/ come up with 道歉：make an apology / apologize 情緒類 驚訝：to one’s surprise / surprised 感興趣：be interested in / show interest in 【點睛】 [高分句型1] Looking into his eyes, I made an apology, explaining that I wanted to join the school book club. (運(yùn)用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語和that引導(dǎo)賓語從句) [高分句型2] The next day, we were having lunch when Jack approached, holding a notice to recruit new members, saying that if someone wanted to join the club, he must take three other students to form a group. (運(yùn)用了sb. be doing sth. when…句型) 例2：陌生地方的新友情 Lily was cleaning windows, and it was what she must do for her family's new Chinese restaurant. Everything had to be absolutely perfect: unique decorations, skillful employees, and delicious traditional food. Then customers would love the place, making the business a success. Lily's family had just moved here from San Francisco, having bought a small restaurant, which was opened yesterday. She was new in the neighbor and had few friends. The first few days at her new school hadn't been easy, either. She found it hard to talk to people she didn't know and it seemed like the students hadn't even noticed her. She was eager for a friendship, though. Lily shifted her vision to look outside the restaurant as a girl about her age, with abundant red hair, walked up the street. The girl paused to study the sign announcing their opening and then looked directly at Lily with a friendly smile. Lily smiled back shyly and lifted a hand, accidentally waving with the cleaning cloth. The girl smiled at her amusement and waved back happily. Lily hesitated, not accustomed to starting friendship, but she felt courageous, so she opened the door. "Hello," she said, adding the first thing that entered her head, “do you like Chinese food?” “I don't know, but I like to try new things," the girl remarked, and then she introduced herself as Gabriela. Lily could not think of additional conversation until she had a sudden idea. _______________________________________________________________________________ The following day, Lily was doing her restaurant routine when she heard an unexpected knock. _______________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】Lily could not think of additional conversation until she had a sudden idea. She ran into the kitchen and came back with a small package. “Some Chinese candy for you to try,” she explained. “If you enjoy it, I hope you’ll return and tell me.”“Excellent, I’ll see you around soon.” Gabriela headed down the street, glancing back with a cheerful wave. Lily spent the remaining afternoon hoping Gabriela really would return and not think Lily’s gift was strange. 莉莉突然有了一個想法，才想出再進(jìn)行多的談話。她跑進(jìn)廚房，帶著一個小包裹回來了?！耙恍┲袊枪屇阍囋?，”她解釋說?！叭绻阆矚g，我希望你能回來告訴我?！薄昂芎?，我很快就會見到你?！奔硬祭锇＠刂稚献呷?，愉快地?fù)]手回頭看了一眼。莉莉花了剩下的下午，希望加布里埃拉真的會回來，而不會覺得莉莉的禮物很奇怪。 The following day, Lily was doing her restaurant routine when she heard unexpected knocking. It was Gabriela with a plate covered with plastic wrap. Lily grinned with enthusiasm and opened the door with an excited greeting.Gabriela presented the plate and said, “I brought biscuits made from my grandmother’s recipe to thank you for the delicious candy.”“Come in, and we can have some biscuits right now,” Lily stammered, happy inside.Lily was now positive that the restaurant would make a wondrous impression on the customers and that she was going to enjoy life here immensely. 第二天，莉莉在餐廳做例行公事時，她聽到了意想不到的敲門聲。那是加布里埃拉和一個覆蓋著塑料包裹的盤子。莉莉熱情地咧嘴一笑，興奮地打招呼，打開了門。加布里埃拉遞給盤子說：“我?guī)Я俗婺甘匙V做的餅干，謝謝你提供的美味糖果。“進(jìn)來，我們現(xiàn)在可以吃點餅干了，”莉莉結(jié)結(jié)巴巴地說，里面很開心。莉莉現(xiàn)在肯定，這家餐廳會給顧客留下深刻的印象，她將非常享受這里的生活。 【解析】 【分析】 續(xù)寫應(yīng)該圍繞“陌生地的新友情”這一主題展開，需要充分挖掘文本中提供的信息，如中國餐館、文化背景、Lily個性特點等，把握主人公情感的需求和變化。一次偶然的邂逅通過何種方式發(fā)展成為二次見面，由此帶給女主人公什么樣的感受，這是續(xù)寫的落腳點。續(xù)寫部分需要對話的支撐，但更需注重表情神態(tài)、心理活動等描寫。 【詳解】1.段落續(xù)寫： ①第一段首句內(nèi)容“直到她突然有了個主意，Lily才想出其他的談話?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫Lily想辦法與Gabriela建立談話的過程。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“第二天，Lily正在餐館里做她的例行公事時，突然聽到一陣意外的敲門聲。”可知，第二段可描寫Gabriela再一次來訪的目的，Lily成功地交到了朋友，且心理得到了滿足和寬慰。 2.續(xù)寫線索：取餅干——贈送——盼望、等待——反饋禮物——感悟 3.詞匯激活 行為類 ①取餅干：run into/rush into the kitchen ②等待回應(yīng)：spend the remaining afternoon doing/wait for the reply anxiously 情緒類 ①積極：be positive/hold a positive attitude towards ②高興：grinned with enthusiasm/be enthusiastic about her return 【點睛】[高分句型1]. Gabriela headed down the street, glancing back with a cheerful wave.(現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語) [高分句型2]. The following day, Lily was doing her restaurant routine when she heard unexpected knocking.(when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句) 例3：結(jié)識到新朋友 閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成 一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150 左右。 “Now, parents and students separate into two groups. You will be reunited at the end of the campus tour. ” Groups of incoming freshmen happily left their parents upon hearing this announcement. I was less than thrilled about starting college, let alone leaving my mother's side to tour the campus with other freshmen；I felt a little anxious. We followed the senior tour guide. The other freshmen chatted and made casual introductions as I dragged behind. How could I have believed I was ready for this ？ After all, it had only been a few months since I left the hospital. I was feeling better for the first time in years. But college. . . ？ My thinking was interrupted by a sweet female voice, "Hi, I'm Jennifer. " "I'm Lauren, "I replied. "Where do you prefer to live？ At home or on campus？ "she smiled. "I'm not sure, "I said. "You should live on campus！It will be a lot of fun！ "she said. Before I could reply, the tour guide announced it was time to create our schedules and select the courses we wanted to take. We crowded into the Student Activity Center. Three seniors handed out thick course bulletins (課程公告)and forms that needed to be filled out. All around me, the sounds of turning papers and writing sounded like those given by an alarm clock. Others seemed to be moving through the process quickly but I hadn't even opened my course catalog (目 錄). "Focus, "I told myself. "Just read through the catalog and find the courses you like and a schedule that works. "Psychology A or B, Geology 101, English, History, sections 1, 2, 3. . . The list went on and on. I panicked and almost started to cry. How was I supposed to know how to complete it？I was just relearning how to live in the real world, and they wanted me to make a schedule. How I wished someone could help me. Paragraph 1: Soon, other freshmen were handing in their forms. _______________________________________________________________________________ Paragraph 2: Then, I felt a warm hand on my shoulder. _______________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Paragraph 1: Soon, other freshmen were handing in their forms. Many of them rushed out to meet their parents. I couldn’t breathe and was feeling anxious. My head was pounding. Moments later, I was crying. And several students started to stare at me. One of the seniors in charge walked over to my table. “What’s the matter?” she asked impatiently. “I... I can’t do this!” I said. “All you have to do is make your schedule, just like everybody else,” she said, clearly annoyed. 很快，其他的新生也交出了他們的表格。他們中的許多人沖出去去見他們的父母。我無法呼吸，感到焦慮。我的頭砰砰作響。過了一會兒，我哭了。有幾個學(xué)生開始盯著我看。其中一位負(fù)責(zé)我的老人走到我的桌子旁?！霸趺戳?？”她不耐煩地地問?！癐...我不能這樣做！””我說?！澳闼龅木褪窍衿渌艘粯影才湃粘贪才?，”她說，顯然很惱火。 Paragraph 2: Then, I felt a warm hand on my shoulder. I looked back and found Jennifer standing behind me. “Everything is alright,” she told the senior. “I’ll help her.” The senior walked away. “What’s wrong, sweetie?” Jennifer asked. Hearing Jennifer’s kind words, I cried even harder, saying, “It’s just too much!” Then Jennifer put her arm around me and said, “Let me instruct you.” She then guided me through the process step by step until I completed my schedule. Later, when saying goodbye, we made a promise to keep in touch. 然后，我感到一只溫暖的手放在我的肩上。我回頭一看，發(fā)現(xiàn)詹妮弗站在我身后?！耙磺卸己芎茫彼嬖V大四學(xué)生?！拔視退摹Ｄ俏焕先俗唛_了?！霸趺戳耍H愛的？””詹妮弗問。聽到詹妮弗的好話，我哭得更厲害，說：“太多了！”然后詹妮弗摟住我說：“讓我告訴你?！比缓笏徊揭徊降匾龑?dǎo)我完成這個過程，直到我完成日程安排。后來，當(dāng)我們說再見時，我們承諾要保持聯(lián)系。 【解析】 【分析】 本篇書面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，本文講述了作者的大學(xué)校園之旅，作者對開始上大學(xué)一點也不興奮，更不用說校園之旅了，作者開始感到焦慮；途中，作者認(rèn)識了珍妮弗，還沒來得及和她說很多話，校園導(dǎo)游宣布開始選課，作者驚慌失措，幾乎哭了起來，她很希望有個人能幫助她。 【詳解】續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：很快，其他新生都在交表格，本段應(yīng)該描述作者反應(yīng)，作者感到焦慮，不知所措，一位年長的老師過來要求作者交表格，作者沒有交出表格，那位老師很生氣。第二段開頭是：然后，我感到一只溫暖的手放在我的肩膀上。本段應(yīng)該描寫詹妮弗幫助作者完成選課，作者和詹妮弗最后成了好友。 續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運(yùn)用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。 【點睛】范文內(nèi)容完整，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。作者在范文中使用了較多高級句型，如：She then guided me through the process step by step until I completed my schedule.這句話運(yùn)用了until引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句；本文也使用了一些固定詞組，如rush out ; stare at; keep in touch等。全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。 例4：我們的友誼 閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文. Our friendship runs back to our college days when I first met Rishi. We had our own share “ first impression about each other. Mine was—she's a lovely, charming and full of life personality. Hers was—I look like an arrogant personality. I don't blame her for this. Many of my close friends had the same view when they first met me. Blame it on my bitch face and me being a shy person to some extent. We became really close within a short period of time. Ours was group of four people divided into 2 each during our final year when we both chose advertising as our specialization and the other two journalism. Back then, I was a regular user of BBM messenger and hardly used Whatsapp. On one specific occasion, we had really bad argument about a failed project. The usual blame game was on. We decided to put it past us and focus on our studies. During this time, she once handed me her phone to show me a picture. While I was going through that, I came across a message from a particular Whatsapp group that comprises of her and my other two friends. I asked her permission to view the group. She had a blank expression on her face. But she allowed me to go ahead. I was in shock while going through their messages. Not really positive things were said about me in particular. It shook me. Because these were the people. I considered my friends. I broke down in front of her. She apologised. But I felt cheated on. I told her about my decision of not wanting to continue this friendship further. We both missed each other. But neither of us wanted to give the last try. 注意： 1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。 Then came the Rajasthan IV trip which was our official last trip. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ It's been almost 7 years after graduation since we picked up our friendship. ___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Para 1: Then came the Rajasthan IV trip which was our official last trip.?During the trip, we intentionally avoided each other. However, I couldn’t help glancing at her when she turned back and I sensed the same. The embarrassment was heavy like a dark shadow. I was sitting alone with my head down when suddenly a figure approached. I looked up, surprised to find Rishi in front of me. Blushed, she broke the silence,?“I am sorry again. I didn’t mean to hurt you.”?Tears streaming down, she continued,?“I should have talked to you earlier.”?I stood up and reached out to hug her,?“I am sorry, too. I should have been more generous.”?At that moment, we both realized we were an indispensable part of each other’s life. 然后是拉賈斯坦邦四世之旅，這是我們的最后一次旅行。在旅途中，我們故意避開對方。然而，當(dāng)她轉(zhuǎn)過身來時，我忍不住看了她一眼，我也感覺到了同樣的感覺。尷尬像個陰影。我正獨(dú)自低著頭坐著，突然有一個人影走近了。我抬起頭來，驚訝地發(fā)現(xiàn)里希站在我面前。她臉色蒼白，打破了沉默，“我又很抱歉了。我不是要傷害你。眼淚流下來，她繼續(xù)說，“我應(yīng)該早點和你談?wù)劇！蔽艺酒饋?，伸手擁抱她，“我也很抱歉?！蔽覒?yīng)該更慷慨一些。“在那一刻，我們都意識到我們是彼此生活中不可或缺的一部分。 Para 2: It's been almost 7 years after graduation since we picked up our friendship.?Looking back, I am always grateful for her stepping up to make up with me. Till now, she has been?one of the few people I?can?trust and?count on.?Our major offered us the same background so that we supported each other in our professional development. Of course, we had argument from time to time. But deep down, we both know all the argument is just about helping us to grow into a better individual instead of enemies. Therefore, we both learned to be tolerant and brave enough to always forgive. If we really value our friends and friendship, always cherish their presence and show willingness to maintain and nurture the relationship.. 我們建立友誼已經(jīng)將近7年了。現(xiàn)在回想起來，我總是很感激她站起來跟我化妝。到目前為止，她一直是我為數(shù)不多的一個能信任和指望的人之一。我們的專業(yè)提供了我們相同的背景，以便我們在專業(yè)發(fā)展中互相支持。當(dāng)然，我們不時地會爭論。但在內(nèi)心深處，我們都知道，所有的爭論都是為了幫助我們成長為一個更好的個體，而不是敵人。因此，我們都學(xué)會了寬容和勇敢，以永遠(yuǎn)原諒我們。如果我們真的珍惜我們的朋友和友誼，總是珍惜他們的存在，表現(xiàn)出維持和培養(yǎng)關(guān)系的意愿。

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