
1.原文一致原則內(nèi)容要前后銜接,上下連貫語(yǔ)言表達(dá)風(fēng)格一致。2.正能量原則故事內(nèi)容一定要正能量,弘揚(yáng)社會(huì)主義核心價(jià)值觀。如迷路了但最終一定回到了家;失敗了或遇到困難了,但最終一定成功了;吵架了但最后一定是言歸于好,和睦相處;犯錯(cuò)了,最后一定會(huì)改過(guò)自新,重新做人;賊逃了,最后一定是繩之以法,等等。3.曲折性原則凡是故事都應(yīng)有跌宕起伏,其中人物會(huì)遇到困難或問(wèn)題,但最終能解決。
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。
We ften take fr granted the very things that mst deserve ur gratitude. Grwing up, I wanted t be just like my mm. Kind and caring, she always seemed t make peple cmfrtable in her presence. Fr years she was a vlunteer in ur cmmunity. I lved ging t the lcal nursing hme t help with her until I hit my preteen years. Suddenly, I was t caught up in my adlescent wrld t wrry abut helping thers.
One particular summer day when I was twelve, Mm came int my rm and tld me t get up and meet her at the car. I had planned t spend the day at the lake with friends. Why did she have t ruin everything? Eventually, I made my way utside. I imagined the lake water cling my skin. Annyed, I climbed int the car and slammed the dr shut. I sat in silence, t upset t make a cnversatin.
“Tasha, wuld yu like t knw where we are ging?” Mm asked calmly. “I guess…” I murmured under my breath. “Sweetheart, we are ging t a children’s shelter, I have been there befre and I think it wuld benefit yu,” she explained. I felt a knt slwly frm in my stmach. Hw was I suppsed t help there?
When we reached the shelter, I was rather surprised. It was a large white Victrian hme. As we apprached the large frnt prch, wind bells played a calming tune while trees and blssms welcmed us. Maybe this wasn’t ging t be s bad. Mm rang the drbell. The dr flew pen and we were led t the frnt rm, where all f the children were playing. Tys were spread ut acrss the flr. I nticed a baby whse bdy was scarred with wunds.
The majrity f the children had nticeable physical scars (傷疤) such as cuts, scratches and bums. What a terrible life they had had befre they mved here! My heart sank. Paragraph 1:As I was lking arund, I felt a gentle pull n my shirt. Paragraph 2:I returned t the shelter with Mm several times.
主要是根據(jù)記敘文的六要素弄清文章大意,特別要弄清故事的人物,時(shí)態(tài)(通常是一般過(guò)去時(shí)),事件(故事的起因和經(jīng)過(guò)),語(yǔ)言特色(以便在續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)語(yǔ)言特色前后一致,保持不變),等等。
人物時(shí)態(tài)和事件 語(yǔ)言特色不要變
●多年來(lái),我的媽媽一直是一名志愿者,我很喜歡給她幫忙,直到青少年時(shí)期?!裣募镜囊惶欤掖蛩愫团笥褌円黄鹜?。但媽媽要帶我去兒童收容所,她覺(jué)得這對(duì)我有好處。 ●我一開(kāi)始很生氣,很沮喪。●當(dāng)我們到達(dá)那里時(shí),我注意到大多數(shù)孩子身上都有明顯的傷痕?!裎腋械诫y以置信,我的心沉了下去。
●We ften take fr granted ... that...●Grwing up, I wanted t...●Kind and caring, she always seemed t...●I lved... help with her until I...●Suddenly, ...●Eventually, ...●I sat in silence, t upset t make a cnversatin. ●I murmured under my breath.
由續(xù)寫(xiě)的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架。
第二段的框架,由第二段首句與正能量結(jié)尾來(lái)確定。
As I was lking arund, I felt a gentle pull n my shirt. (當(dāng)我環(huán)顧四周時(shí),我感到襯衫被輕輕拉扯了一下。)I returned t the shelter with Mm several times. (我和媽媽回到收容所好幾次。)
Paragraph 1:1. 由正文末段結(jié)尾可知,“我”為孩子們的遭遇感到難以置信以及深刻同情。接著由續(xù)寫(xiě)的第一段首句可知,有個(gè)孩子輕輕扯了下“我”的襯衫。2. 由第二段首句可知,我們回到收容所好幾次,說(shuō)明上一段“我”認(rèn)識(shí)了收容所里的孩子后,一起愉快地玩耍過(guò)。 說(shuō)明本段要增加新人物,一個(gè)小孩子。主要寫(xiě)這個(gè)小孩子希望與“我”一起玩耍,“我”欣然答應(yīng)后,我們一起度過(guò)了快樂(lè)充實(shí)的一天。注意結(jié)尾要與下段語(yǔ)義銜接。
由第一段框架可知,第一段中“我”認(rèn)識(shí)了一個(gè)小孩子,與其度過(guò)了充實(shí)快樂(lè)的時(shí)光。那么本段應(yīng)是“我”對(duì)孩子們的遭遇的同情和對(duì)友誼的珍視,以及“我”對(duì)此的感悟。Paragraph 2:1. 由續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段首句可知,“我”和媽媽回了好幾次收容所。2. 由正能量結(jié)尾可知,“我”深切同情孩子們過(guò)去的遭遇,也非常珍視和他們的友誼,也擁有了感恩的心。
在已定框架范圍內(nèi),依據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展和生活常識(shí),推斷故事中人物所見(jiàn)、所聞、所思、所說(shuō)、所做等給每段增加5至8個(gè)具體細(xì)節(jié),我們稱之為“58細(xì)節(jié)添加法”。
Paragraph 1As I was lking arund, I felt a gentle pull n my shirt. (當(dāng)我環(huán)顧四周時(shí),我感到襯衫被輕輕拉扯了一下。)
從所給材料結(jié)尾和本段首句可知,孩子們都在房間里玩游戲,這時(shí)“我”的襯衫被輕輕扯動(dòng)。由下段首句I returned t the shelter with Mm several times.可知我們回了收容所好幾次。所以本段應(yīng)是寫(xiě)有個(gè)小孩子希望與“我”一起玩玩具,我們度過(guò)了非常愉悅的時(shí)光。由此承上啟下,讓“我”愿意再回收容所多次。因此,本段可以這樣構(gòu)思:
環(huán)顧四周,襯衫輕扯低頭一看,棕眼女孩笑容滿面,手臂有傷邀玩彈弓,望向媽媽微笑點(diǎn)頭,欣然接受玩得盡興,充實(shí)愉悅
Paragraph 2I returned t the shelter with Mm several times. (我和媽媽回到收容所好幾次。)
從本段首句可知,“我”與媽媽多次再回收容所探望孩子們。那么,本段應(yīng)是寫(xiě):因?yàn)榛亓撕脦状?,孩子們有時(shí)間向我們傾訴他們的過(guò)往。“我”對(duì)此深表痛心,也珍惜與他們的友誼,以及對(duì)此有深刻感悟。因此,可以這樣構(gòu)思:
探望多次,傾聽(tīng)煩惱痛心遭遇,珍視友誼愿意盡力,給予幫助擁有很多,心存感激意義深遠(yuǎn),銘記于心媽媽正確,寶貴一課
審讀初稿,注意語(yǔ)義是否銜接,前后是否連貫,事件是否符合邏輯,語(yǔ)言特色是否與前文一致。在修改潤(rùn)色之后,整齊工整地謄寫(xiě)在答卷上。
Paragraph 1
As I was lking arund, I felt a gentle pull n my shirt. I lked dwn t see a little girl with brwn eyes lking up at me. Her angelic face beamed, thugh, as I culd see, there were sme scars n her little arms. “Hi. I’m Ashley. Yu wanna play dlts with me?” she asked. I lked ver and saw Mm ndding t me with a smile. I bent tward Ashley and whispered, “Sure. I’d lve t. ” Her tiny hand reached up and tk mine, and we walked tward the dll huse. Our time tgether brught her great jy and fun and she als made my day.
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I returned t the shelter with Mm several times. During thse visits, sme f the children including Ashley shared their trubled pasts with me in great detail. I felt sre fr what had happened t them and treasured the friendship between us. I wuld like t d everything in my pwer t help the children there. At the same time, I learned t be grateful fr all that I had. It was a prfund time in my yung life that I will never frget. It was Mm wh taught me the valuable lessn that summer.
1.語(yǔ)義銜接:I lked dwn t see a little girl與上文語(yǔ)義銜接,表明拉扯襯衫的源頭; scars n her little arms與上文所述大部分孩子都有傷痕相對(duì)應(yīng),但也寫(xiě)出Her angelic face beamed形成強(qiáng)烈對(duì)比,即使身有傷痕,依舊笑容燦爛,樂(lè)觀生活。后文為“我”與小女孩的互動(dòng)。
第一段寫(xiě)一位小女孩請(qǐng)求與“我”同玩玩具,“我”欣然答應(yīng)后與其度過(guò)歡暢喜悅的一天;第二段寫(xiě)“我”深切同情孩子們的悲傷過(guò)去及珍視與他們的友情。同時(shí),與正文首段相呼應(yīng),學(xué)會(huì)了對(duì)擁有的一切心存感激。也與正文第二段首句呼應(yīng),是作為志愿者的媽媽帶自己上了寶貴的一課,前后一致。
2.語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格:wh引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句與材料中的where和whse引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句風(fēng)格一致。3.上下連貫:thugh, During和At the same time等表達(dá),也與所給材料中的As和Maybe等風(fēng)格一致?!觥拔摇毙r(shí)候非常樂(lè)意給身為志愿者的媽媽幫忙,直到青少年時(shí)期。夏季的一天,媽媽帶“我”去了兒童收容所。起初“我”非常不愿意。后來(lái)通過(guò)與孩子們的玩耍,“我”從中得到了深刻感悟,擁有了感恩的心,體現(xiàn)了故事的曲折性原則??傊段姆侠m(xù)寫(xiě)三原則。
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