內(nèi)容要前后銜接，上下連貫語言表達(dá)風(fēng)格一致。
故事情節(jié)應(yīng)跌宕起伏，其中人物會遇到困難或問題，但最終能解決。
故事內(nèi)容一定要正能量，弘揚社會主義核心價值觀。如迷路了但最終一定回到了家；失敗了或遇到困難了，但最終一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言歸于好，和睦相處；犯錯了，最后一定會改過自新，重新做人；賊逃了，最后一定是繩之以法，等等。
讀后續(xù)寫 閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段， 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。
Jenny was the nly child in her hme. She had a quarrel with her mther that afternn and she ran ut f the huse angrily. She culdn’t help weeping when she thught f the sclding frm her mther. Having wandered in the street fr hurs, she felt a little hungry and wished fr smething t eat. She std beside a stand fr a while, watching the middle-aged seller busy ding his business. Hwever, with n mney in hand, she sighed and had t leave.
The seller behind the stand nticed the yung girl and asked, “Hey, girl, yu want t have the ndles?”“Oh, yes…but I dn’t have mney n me,” she replied. “That’s nthing. I’ll treat yu tday,” said the man. “Cme in.”The seller brught her a bwl f ndles, whse smell was s attractive. As she was eating, Jenny cried silently. “What is it?” asked the man kindly.
“Nthing, actually I was just tuched by yur kindness!” said Jenny. “Even a stranger n the street will give me a bwl f ndles, while my mther drve me ut f the huse. She shwed n care fr me. She is s merciless cmpared t a stranger!”Hearing the wrds, the seller smiled, “Girl, d yu really think s? I nly gave yu a bwl f ndles and yu thanked me a lt. But it is yur mther wh has raised yu since yu were a baby. Can yu number the times she cked fr yu? Have yu expressed yur gratitude t her?”
Jenny sat there, speechless and numb with shck; she remembered Mther’s familiar face and weathered hands. “Why did I nt think f that? A bwl f ndles frm a stranger made me feel grateful, but I have never thanked my mum fr what she has dne fr me.”O(jiān)n the way hme, Jenny made up her mind t make an aplgy t her mther fr her rudeness as sn as she arrived hme.
Paragraph 1 Nearing the drway, Jenny tk a deep breath. Paragraph 2 A gentle tuch n her hair called her mind back.
主要是根據(jù)記敘文的六要素弄清文章大意，特別要弄清故事的人物，時態(tài)(通常是一般過去時)，事件(故事的起因和經(jīng)過)，語言特色(以便在續(xù)寫時語言特色前后一致，保持不變)，等等。
人物時態(tài)和事件 語言特色不要變
Jenny, her mther, the seller
●Jenny quarreled with her mther, left hme and a few hurs later, felt a little hungry.
●The seller gave a bwel f ndles and Jenny thanked the seller a lt.
●The seller asked her hw many times her mther cked fr her and if she thanked her mther.
●She realized her mistakes and decided t g hme t make an aplgy t her mther.
simple past tense
●珍妮跟母親吵架，離家出走，街上游蕩幾個鐘后，感覺饑餓。
●好心人給她一碗面吃，她感動流淚。
●這位陌生人告訴她，母親將她養(yǎng)大，給她做了無數(shù)次飯菜，應(yīng)當(dāng)感謝她的母親。
●珍妮意識到自己錯了，決定回家向媽媽道歉。
1.分詞短語作狀語（1）Having wandered in the street fr hurs, she felt a little hungry and wished fr smething t eat. （2）She std beside a stand fr a while, watching the middle-aged seller busy ding his business. （3）Hearing the wrds, the seller smiled…
2.形容詞短語作狀語(有的學(xué)者認(rèn)為是補語)Jenny sat there, speechless and numb with shck.
3.with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)Hwever, with n mney in hand, she sighed and had t leave.
4.定語從句The seller brught her a bwl f ndles, whse smell was s attractive.
兩段首句定一框 由續(xù)寫的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架。
二框二首正能量 第二段的框架，由第二段首句與正能量結(jié)尾來確定。
Nearing the drway, Jenny tk a deep breath. (走到門口，珍妮深吸了一口氣)A gentle tuch n her hair called her mind back. (輕輕一碰她的頭發(fā)，她的思緒又回來了)
兩段首句定一框 即根據(jù)所給兩段的首句確定第一段的框架。 從第一段首句可知，珍妮應(yīng)是鼓起勇氣敲門回家，但從第二段首句來看，“輕輕碰她的頭發(fā)”的應(yīng)是母親，因為人物就三個，續(xù)寫中一般不要隨意冒出一個新的人物，除非情節(jié)發(fā)展的確需要；“思緒回來”說明第一段中，珍妮回家沒見母親(根據(jù)常識，母親可能去找女兒了)，在回憶跟母親吵架的事，或在回憶母親多年的關(guān)愛，等等。
二框二首正能量 即第二段的框架，由第二段首句與故事正能量結(jié)尾，來確定框架。 由第二段首句“輕輕一碰她的頭發(fā)，她的思緒又回來了”即母親回家，與“母女和好”這一正能量來確定第二段的框架。
在已定框架范圍內(nèi)，依據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展和生活常識，推斷故事中人物所見、所聞、所思、所說、所做等給每段增加5至8個具體細(xì)節(jié)，我們稱之為叫“58細(xì)節(jié)添加法”。
Paragraph 1
根據(jù)構(gòu)思的大致框架，推斷故事中人物所見、所思、所說、所做等每段增加五至七個具體細(xì)節(jié)或叫“57細(xì)節(jié)法”。
Nearing the drway, Jenny tk a deep breath. (走到門口，珍妮深吸了一口氣)
Paragraph 2
根據(jù)一致性原則，除內(nèi)容上要語義銜接，上下連貫外，語言風(fēng)格也要一致，應(yīng)使用分詞語短和形容詞作狀語， 同時注意使用從句。
A gentle tuch n her hair called her mind back. (輕輕一碰她的頭發(fā)，她的思緒又回來了)
審讀初稿，注意語義是否銜接，前后是否連貫，事件是否符合邏輯，語言特色是否與前文一致。在修改潤色之后，整齊工整地謄寫在答卷上。
Paragraph 1:Nearing the drway, Jenny tk a deep breath. When she pushed the dr pen and entered the huse, she fund her mther was nt in. Tired and sad, she sank dwn nt the sfa. “Where culd my mther be?” she wndered. “Was she still angry with me?” Again, the scene f the quarrel appeared in her mind. She remembered her rudeness t her mther. Realizing that all the sclding frm her mther was due t the fact that her mther really cared a lt abut her, she felt rather ashamed, and tears began t rll dwn her cheeks.
Paragraph 2: A gentle tuch n her hair called her mind back. She raised her head and saw the familiar face f her mther. “Here yu cme! I’ve been lking fr yu,” she said, tired and relieved. Jenny culdn’t help thrwing herself int her mther’s arms. “Mum, I’m s srry and thank yu fr all yu have dne fr me.” She expressed her sincere aplgy and great gratitude. Hearing this, her mther smiled, patting her back gently.
范文語言風(fēng)格與原文基本一致1.分詞短語作狀語Realizing that all the sclding frm her mther was due t the fact that her mther really cared a lt abut her, she felt rather ashamed…Hearing this, her mther smiled, patting her back gently.2.形容詞短語作狀語(有學(xué)者認(rèn)為是主補)Tired and sad, she sank dwn nt the sfa.… she said, tired and relieved.

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