1.原文一致原則內(nèi)容要前后銜接,上下連貫語(yǔ)言表達(dá)風(fēng)格一致。2.正能量原則故事內(nèi)容一定要正能量,弘揚(yáng)社會(huì)主義核心價(jià)值觀。如迷路了但最終一定回到了家;失敗了或遇到困難了,但最終一定成功了;吵架了但最后一定是言歸于好,和睦相處;犯錯(cuò)了,最后一定會(huì)改過(guò)自新,重新做人;賊逃了,最后一定是繩之以法,等等。3.曲折性原則凡是故事都應(yīng)有跌宕起伏,其中人物會(huì)遇到困難或問(wèn)題,但最終能解決。
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。
I had never been mre anxius in my life. I had just spent the last three endless hurs trying t get t the airprt s that I culd travel hme. Nw, as I watched the bus driver set my luggage n the airprt sidewalk, I realized that my anxiety had nly just begun.
This was my first visit alne t the internatinal terminal f the airprt, and nthing was familiar. I culdn’t make sense f any f the signs. Where was the check-in cunter? Where shuld I take my luggage? I had n idea where t g, feeling as if I were deaf and blind and stupid. I began t panic. What time was it? Where was my plane? I had t find help because I culdn’t be late!
I tried t ask a passing businessman fr help, but my wrds all came ut wrng. He just frwned and walked away. What had happened? I had been in this cuntry fr a whle semester, and I culdn’t even remember hw t ask fr directins. This was awful! Anther bus arrived at the terminal, and the passengers came ut carrying all srts f luggage. Here was my chance! I culd fllw them t the right place, and I wuld nt have t say a wrd.
I dragged my enrmus suitcase behind me and fllwed the grup. We finally reached the elevatr. Oh, n! They all fit in it, but there was nt enugh rm fr me. I watched in despair as the elevatr drs clsed. I was abandned again! I had n idea what t d next. I gt n the elevatr when it returned and stared at all the buttns. Which ne culd it be? I pressed buttn 3, because I thught I saw thse passengers pressed 3, thugh it was n mre than a quick glance.
The elevatr slwly climbed up t the third flr and came t a stp. There were n check-in cunters! I lked arund shyly, nly t find an elderly man standing at the crner. He was an airprt emplyee. Paragraph 1:Tears frmed in my eyes as I saw the empty hall and realized that I wuld miss my plane. Paragraph 2:When I turned t thank him fr all his help, he was gne.
主要是根據(jù)記敘文的六要素弄清文章大意,特別要弄清故事的人物,時(shí)態(tài)(通常是一般過(guò)去時(shí)),事件(故事的起因和經(jīng)過(guò)),語(yǔ)言特色(以便在續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)語(yǔ)言特色前后一致,保持不變),等等。
人物時(shí)態(tài)和事件 語(yǔ)言特色不要變
●這是我第一次獨(dú)自去機(jī)場(chǎng)的國(guó)際航站樓?!裎以噲D向一位路過(guò)的商人尋求幫助,但我的話說(shuō)得不好,他走開(kāi)了?!窳硪惠v公交車(chē)的乘客走出來(lái)了,我想找到正確的地方,所以跟著他們?!竦撬麄?nèi)紨D滿了電梯,我只能等電梯下來(lái)時(shí)再進(jìn)去,接著按了第三層?!裨谌龢?,我只看到一位身為機(jī)場(chǎng)員工的老人。
● I had never been mre anxius in my life. ● Nw, as I watched...●... feeling as if I were deaf...●I had t find help because...● came ut carrying all srts f luggage.●I gt n the elevatr when it returned...● it was n mre than a quick glance.
由續(xù)寫(xiě)的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架。
第二段的框架,由第二段首句與正能量結(jié)尾來(lái)確定。
Tears frmed in my eyes as I saw the empty hall and realized that I wuld miss my plane.(當(dāng)我看到空蕩蕩的大廳,意識(shí)到我會(huì)錯(cuò)過(guò)飛機(jī)時(shí),我的眼睛里充滿了淚水。)When I turned t thank him fr all his help, he was gne.(當(dāng)我轉(zhuǎn)身要感謝他的幫助時(shí),他已經(jīng)走了。)
Paragraph 1:1. 由正文末端結(jié)尾可知,“我”只看見(jiàn)了一位身為機(jī)場(chǎng)員工的老人。接著由續(xù)寫(xiě)的第一段首句可知,“我”得不到任何幫助,覺(jué)得要錯(cuò)過(guò)飛機(jī)了,非常難過(guò)。2. 由第二段首句可知,老人默默離開(kāi),說(shuō)明上一段老人已把“我”帶到“我”最想去的地方——登記柜臺(tái),才會(huì)放心離開(kāi)。 說(shuō)明本段寫(xiě)老人對(duì)焦慮無(wú)助的“我”伸出援手,帶領(lǐng)“我”成功找到乘機(jī)處。注意結(jié)尾要與下段語(yǔ)義銜接。
由第一段框架可知,第一段中老人幫助“我”找到了機(jī)場(chǎng)登記柜臺(tái)。那么本段應(yīng)是“我”對(duì)老人的感謝和對(duì)將來(lái)的希冀。Paragraph 2:1. 由續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段首句可知,“我”正要好好感謝老人,他卻不知何時(shí)默默離去。2. 由正能量結(jié)尾可知,“我”對(duì)老人充滿感激及感動(dòng)之情,決定將來(lái)也要為像當(dāng)時(shí)的“我”同樣煩惱的人施以援手。
在已定框架范圍內(nèi),依據(jù)情節(jié)發(fā)展和生活常識(shí),推斷故事中人物所見(jiàn)、所聞、所思、所說(shuō)、所做等給每段增加5至8個(gè)具體細(xì)節(jié),我們稱(chēng)之為“58細(xì)節(jié)添加法”。
Paragraph 1Tears frmed in my eyes as I saw the empty hall and realized that I wuld miss my plane.(當(dāng)我看到空蕩蕩的大廳,意識(shí)到我會(huì)錯(cuò)過(guò)飛機(jī)時(shí),我的眼睛里充滿了淚水。)
從所給材料結(jié)尾和本段首句可知,折騰了一番,以為有登記柜臺(tái)的地方只看到一位老人,“我”孤立無(wú)援,急得焦頭爛額。由下段首句When I turned t thank him fr all his help, he was gne.可知有人幫助了“我”,從正文結(jié)尾看出,應(yīng)是這位老人;續(xù)寫(xiě)中一般不要隨意冒出一個(gè)新的人物,除非情節(jié)發(fā)展的確需要。所以本段應(yīng)是寫(xiě)老人幫助我找到乘機(jī)處的過(guò)程。因此,本段可以這樣構(gòu)思:
白費(fèi)周折,淚眼汪汪善良老人,伸出援手手帕止淚,和藹可親減輕焦慮,找到柜臺(tái)穿過(guò)人海,放好行李
Paragraph 2When I turned t thank him fr all his help, he was gne.(當(dāng)我轉(zhuǎn)身要感謝他的幫助時(shí),他已經(jīng)走了。)
從本段首句可知,“我”正要感謝身為機(jī)場(chǎng)員工的老人的無(wú)私幫助時(shí),他卻不辭而別。那么, 本段應(yīng)是寫(xiě)“我”對(duì)老人的感激之情以及希望把老人的助人之心傳遞下去,在將來(lái)某天也幫助同樣有煩惱的人們。因此,可以這樣構(gòu)思:
轉(zhuǎn)身道謝,不告而別善人義士,銘記心頭緊要關(guān)頭,伸出援手愿在將來(lái),傳遞美德
審讀初稿,注意語(yǔ)義是否銜接,前后是否連貫,事件是否符合邏輯,語(yǔ)言特色是否與前文一致。在修改潤(rùn)色之后,整齊工整地謄寫(xiě)在答卷上。
Paragraph 1
Tears frmed in my eyes as I saw the empty hall and realized that I wuld miss my plane. Just then the elderly airprt emplyee walked twards me frm the crner. He saw that I was lst and asked if he culd help in any way. He gave me his handkerchief t dry my tears. He smiled kindly. He patted my shulder t ease my anxiety befre leading me dwn a lng hallway. We walked up sme stairs, turned a crner, and at last, there was the check in cunter! He led me past all the lines f peple and pushed my luggage t the inspectin cunter.
Paragraph 2
When I turned t thank him fr all his help, he was gne. I never gt an pprtunity t knw that kind man’s name, but I wuld always remember his unexpected kindness. He helped me when I needed it mst. Withut his timely help, I wuld have certainly missed my plane. I can nly hpe that ne day I will be able t d the same fr anther traveler wh is suffering a terrible jurney.
1.語(yǔ)義銜接:Tears frmed in my eyes... 與上文語(yǔ)義銜接;Just then the elderly airprt emplyee walked twards me ... 體現(xiàn)老人發(fā)現(xiàn)“我”著急落淚,過(guò)來(lái)給予幫助,后文為找登機(jī)處的過(guò)程。第一段寫(xiě)身為機(jī)場(chǎng)員工的老人對(duì)“我”的親切關(guān)懷和幫助;第二段寫(xiě)當(dāng)“我”對(duì)默默離開(kāi)的老人充滿感激之情,并希望自己也能像老人一樣幫助他人,前后一致。2.語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格:kindly, certainly和twards 與材料中的shyly和behind風(fēng)格一致。3.上下連貫:Just then, at last but和frm the crner等表達(dá),也與所給材料中的Nw, finally, because, thugh和at the crner等風(fēng)格一致。
■因?yàn)榈谝淮为?dú)自去國(guó)際機(jī)場(chǎng),對(duì)一切都不熟悉的“我”想通過(guò)一位路過(guò)的商人和一群大巴乘客找到正確的乘機(jī)點(diǎn),卻不能如愿以償,心急如焚。最終一位機(jī)場(chǎng)老員工幫助了“我”,“我”成功找到登記柜臺(tái),體現(xiàn)故事的曲折性原則。總之,范文符合續(xù)寫(xiě)三原則。

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