專題19 概要寫作之記敘文 -高考英語二輪熱點題型歸納與變式演練（上海專用）-試卷下載-教習網(wǎng)

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（一）題型解讀
1. 題型特點
材料類型：通常為一篇完整的記敘文，內(nèi)容涉及人物、事件、時間、地點和情感等要素。
寫作要求：要求考生根據(jù)原文內(nèi)容，用簡潔的語言概括文章的主要內(nèi)容，通常要求在60詞左右。
評分標準：主要考察考生對文章內(nèi)容的理解、信息提取和語言表達能力。要點完整、語言簡潔、語法正確是關鍵。
2. 常見主題
人物故事：描述某個人物的經(jīng)歷、成長或轉(zhuǎn)變。
事件經(jīng)過：敘述某個事件的發(fā)生、發(fā)展和結果。
情感體驗：展現(xiàn)人物在特定情境下的情感變化。
寓意啟示：通過故事傳達某種道理或啟示。
（二）寫作步驟與技巧
1. 通讀全文，把握主旨
快速瀏覽：先快速瀏覽文章，了解大致內(nèi)容和結構。
標記關鍵信息：在閱讀過程中，標記出人物、時間、地點、主要事件和情感變化等關鍵信息。
2. 提煉要點，去次留精
提取關鍵要素：根據(jù)文章內(nèi)容，提煉出人物、事件、情感和結果等核心要點。
忽略細節(jié)：避免過多涉及文章中的具體細節(jié)，如對話、描述性語言等。
3. 組織語言，簡潔表達
使用簡單句：盡量使用簡單句和短句，避免復雜句式。
合理轉(zhuǎn)換表達：可以用同義詞或短語替換原文中的關鍵詞，但要保持原意。
注意連貫性：使用適當?shù)倪B接詞（如“and”“but”“then”等）使內(nèi)容連貫。
4. 檢查核對，確保準確
核對要點：檢查是否遺漏了關鍵信息。
語法檢查：確保句子結構正確，時態(tài)一致。
字數(shù)控制：嚴格控制在60詞左右。
（三）模板及句型
1.通用模板示例
開頭：The stry mainly tells abut...（點明故事主要圍繞什么展開，填入主要人物及大致主題）
主體內(nèi)容：Firstly, （描述故事開頭的關鍵事件及人物行為）. Then, （接著闡述事件的發(fā)展情況）. After that, （繼續(xù)說明后續(xù)重要情節(jié)，比如遇到的問題或轉(zhuǎn)折等）.
結尾：Finally, （總結故事的結局，如人物最終的情況、問題的解決結果等）.
2.常用句型
描述人物行為：
The main character decided t...（主要人物決定做……）
He/She tried hard t...（他 / 她努力去……）
體現(xiàn)事件發(fā)展順序：
At the beginning f the stry,...（在故事開始時……）
As the stry went n,...（隨著故事的發(fā)展……）
表達結果或結局：
In the end, he/she managed t...（最后，他 / 她成功地……）
Eventually, the prblem was slved and...（最終，問題被解決了并且……）
轉(zhuǎn)折與對比：
Hwever, things didn't g as expected.（然而，事情并沒有如預期那樣發(fā)展。）
Unlike what he/she thught befre,...（不像他 / 她之前所想的那樣……）
總之，上海高考英語記敘文概要寫作需要考生仔細分析文本，遵循合理的步驟和運用恰當?shù)募记?、句型，準確概括出文章的核心內(nèi)容，達到概要寫作的要求。

記敘文體的閱讀材料，相比其他文體而言，寫概要相對容易。在寫概要前，除明確文章主題外，還應抓住六個要素：when, where, wh, what, why, hw。在這六個要素中，所占內(nèi)容比重最大的是what。一般來說，記敘文的故事概要可以用這樣的模板來表示：
記敘文：what / wh / when / where / why / hw
Wh did what by…because…
當然，不是說每個故事概要都包含hw或why，有時兩者選其一即可。
(2025屆上海市普陀區(qū)高三上學期一模考試英語試題)
Directins: Read the fllwing passage. Summarize the main idea and the main pint (s) f the passage in n mre than 60 wrds. Use yur wn wrds as far as pssible.
The Price f Winning
Furteen-year-ld Angus sits n the bench, watching his baseball team play. He’s ut f the game because he made a mistake. Fr his cach, that's unacceptable — mistakes dn’t win games. But fr mst teens, the fcus n winning isn’t as imprtant. In a recent study, 90% f teenagers said they wuld rather play and lse than sit n the sidelines and nt play at all. Fr them, sprts are abut fun, learning, and being part f a team. Hwever, fr many caches and parents, winning is everything, and they expect perfectin frm yung players.
Unfrtunately, this pressure t win drives many kids away frm rganized sprts early n. In cmpetitive events, nearly every actin a player makes is examined. Parents and caches cnstantly shut instructins, smetimes yelling at kids fr errrs r missed shts. This intense envirnment desn’t let kids make their wn chices r learn frm their mistakes. Instead f enjying the game, yung players feel watched and judged every secnd. They lse the freedm t explre their abilities and develp naturally as athletes and individuals.
The emphasis n winning creates deeper issues, t. Many kids feel anxius because they’re nly praised fr scring gals r winning races, nt fr trying hard r imprving. Over time, this fcus n results can harm their self-cnfidence, especially if they’re ften benched. They start t believe they’re nly valuable if they perfrm perfectly, which can make sprts feel like a burden instead f a jy.
Tw mnths later, Angus is back playing baseball — but nt n a team. He’s at the park with friends, playing just fr fun, and he’s much happier. This raises an imprtant questin: Hw many ptential champins will quit sprts unless adults change their attitude? Fr yung athletes t thrive, they need supprt and encuragement, nt the pressure t always win.
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【導語】本文是一篇夾敘夾議文。文章通過講述棒球選手安格斯因為被過度要求獲勝，而產(chǎn)生巨大的心理壓力，因此導致球場失誤，被罰下場的故事，講述了盲目追求獲勝的弊端：過早離開有組織的體育運動，引起自身焦慮。強調(diào)運動過程中，運動員需要更多的支持和鼓勵，才能避免焦慮，提升自信，進而自由地探索自己的能力，更加享受運動帶來的樂趣，激發(fā)出自己的潛力。
解題步驟
第一步：讀懂原文，明確篇章結構
本文的篇章結構為“總—分—總”式：
第1段：介紹背景，年輕人對輸贏的看法與教練和家長的看法不同。
第2段：分析過度強調(diào)勝利對孩子的負面影響。
第3段：指出這種壓力對孩子的心理影響。
第4段：總結問題，并提出對孩子真正有益的支持方式。
第二步：去次留精，提煉關鍵信息
第三步：歸納要點，合理轉(zhuǎn)換表達
第1段：Angus sits n the bench because he made a mistake. Teens fcus n fun, but caches and parents fcus n winning.
（安格斯因失誤被罰坐板凳。青少年注重樂趣，而教練和家長注重勝利。）
第2段：Pressure t win drives kids away. Caches and parents cnstantly shut instructins and criticize errrs.
（對勝利的壓力使孩子們遠離運動。教練和家長不斷喊叫指令并批評錯誤。）
第3段：Kids feel anxius and lse cnfidence because they’re nly praised fr results. Sprts becme a burden.
（孩子們因只被表揚結果而感到焦慮，失去信心，運動變成負擔。）
第4段：Many kids quit sprts. Yung athletes need supprt and encuragement, nt just pressure t win.
（許多孩子放棄運動。年輕運動員需要支持和鼓勵，而不僅僅是勝利的壓力。）
第四步：句式多樣，注意過渡銜接
使用“Hwever”連接青少年和教練/家長的不同觀點。
使用“Instead f”和“Rather than”表達對比。
使用“Because”和“s”連接因果關系。
概要寫作答案（60詞左右）
Angus sits n the bench because he made a mistake. Teens fcus n fun, but caches and parents fcus n winning. Pressure t win drives kids away. Caches and parents cnstantly shut instructins and criticize errrs. Kids feel anxius and lse cnfidence because they’re nly praised fr results. Sprts becme a burden. Many kids quit sprts. Yung athletes need supprt and encuragement, nt just pressure t win.
In cmpetitive events, yung players are always expected perfectin by their caches and parents, which has a negative impact n teenagers. Nt nly des it cause that teenagers prefer t sit n the sidelines instead f taking a psitive in the events, but als the fcus n results can als make them feel frustrated. If adults change their attitude, yung athletes will build up cnfidence and inspire ptential.
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【來源】2023年上海交大附中嘉定分校高三英語階段練習卷
Directins: Read the fllwing passage. Summarize the main idea and the main pint(s) f the passage in n mre than 60 wrds. Use yur wn wrds as far as pssible.
After the sudden lss f her five-year-ld daughter, Elizabeth, Natalia Spencer felt she needed t d smething t hnr the little girl. That strng wish inspired Spencer t start what she calls a “Walk f Lve”, a 6,000-mile trek(長途旅行) alng the British castline.
“Elizabeth particularly lved the beach and the sea and we visited the seaside a lt. After she passed away, I went t the seaside and it was the first time that I had felt sme cmfrt,” Spencer said. “I knew this was what I had t d. It was smething I culd d and it wuld make life mre bearable.”
On Valentine’s Day, Spencer began walking Durdle Dr in Drset, England, the last beach she tk Elizabeth t befre she became ill. S far, Spencer has jurneyed abut 1,500 miles, walking thrugh Drset , Crnwall, Devn and the entire cast f Wales. Every day, except Saturday, Spencer walks 20 miles. Often lcals jin her; many times they share stries abut lsing their wn children.
Everything changed fr Spencer n Nv. 22, 2015. Spencer nticed Elizabeth was ill with what she thught was a chest infectin. But the girl’s health wrsened rapidly. Dctrs diagnsed her with a life-threatening immune cnditin where the immune cells damage the tissues and rgans. This caused Elizabeth’s rgans t shut dwn and stpped the bld supply t her arms and legs. She was mved t Bristl Children’s Hspital where she spent 18 days n life supprt befre passing away n Dec. 10.
After Elizabeth died, Spencer struggled. In January, a friend encuraged Spencer t g fr a walk and the tw ended up at the Gwer Peninsula in Wales. While walking prvides Spencer with time t grieve(悲傷), she’s als using the trip t raise ￡100,000 fr the Bristl Children’s Hspital.
Spencer expects t cmplete her walk next spring. She’d lve t finish n Valentine’s Day, but desn’t knw if that is realistic.
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【導語】本文是一篇記敘文。文章介紹一個叫Natalia Spencer的人為了紀念自己死去的女兒參加了一個步行項目，緩解自己生活的同時，也為兒童醫(yī)院籌錢，這次步行給她提供了與當?shù)厝朔窒黻P于失去小孩的故事的機會。（文章大意）
解題步驟
第一步：讀懂原文，明確篇章結構
本文的篇章結構為“總—分—總”式：
第1段：介紹Natalia Spencer因失去女兒Elizabeth而決定進行“愛的行走”。
第2段：描述Spencer選擇海邊行走的原因。
第3段：介紹行走的起點和目前的進展。
第4段：講述Elizabeth的病情和去世過程。
第5段：描述Spencer在行走過程中得到的支持以及她的目標。
第6段：總結Spencer的計劃和期望。
第二步：去次留精，提煉關鍵信息
第三步：歸納要點，合理轉(zhuǎn)換表達
第1段：Natalia Spencer started a 6,000-mile “Walk f Lve” t hnr her daughter Elizabeth.
（Natalia Spencer為紀念女兒Elizabeth開始了6000英里的“愛的行走”。）
第2段：Elizabeth lved the beach, and walking by the sea brught Spencer cmfrt.
（Elizabeth喜歡海灘，海邊行走讓Spencer感到安慰。）
第3段：Spencer began her walk n Valentine’s Day and has traveled 1,500 miles s far. Lcals ften jin her.
（Spencer在情人節(jié)開始行走，目前已走了1500英里，當?shù)厝顺＜尤胨?。?br>第4段：Elizabeth fell ill in 2015 and passed away after 18 days n life supprt.
（Elizabeth在2015年生病，經(jīng)過18天的生命支持后去世。）
第5段：Spencer uses the walk t grieve and raise ￡100,000 fr Bristl Children’s Hspital.
（Spencer通過行走哀悼并為布里斯托兒童醫(yī)院籌集10萬英鎊。）
第6段：She plans t finish the walk next spring, pssibly n Valentine’s Day.
（她計劃明年春天完成行走，可能在情人節(jié)。）
第四步：句式多樣，注意過渡銜接
使用“After”連接背景和原因。
使用“While”表達行走的雙重目的。
使用“and”連接目標和計劃。
概要寫作答案（60詞左右）
After lsing her daughter Elizabeth, Natalia Spencer began a 6,000-mile “Walk f Lve” alng the British castline. Elizabeth lved the beach, and walking by the sea brught Spencer cmfrt. Spencer started n Valentine’s Day and has walked 1,500 miles s far. She uses the walk t grieve and raise ￡100,000 fr Bristl Children’s Hspital. She plans t finish next spring, pssibly n Valentine’s Day.
T hnr her daughter wh recently died, Natalia Spencer started the 6,000-mile Walk f Lve alng the British castline, which she wishes t finish next spring. She did this t make life mre bearable and t raise￡100,000 fr the Bristl Children’s Hspital. The Walk prvided her chances t share with the lcals stries abut lsing children. (wrd cunt 58)
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【2023年上海市青浦區(qū)高三上學期期末英語試題】
In 2012, I set myself the challenge f trying t read a bk frm every cuntry f all 195 UN- recgnized states in a year. With n idea hw t find publicatins, I decided t ask the planet’s readers fr help. I created a blg called A Year f Reading the Wrld and put ut an appeal fr suggestins f titles that I culd read in English.
The respnse was amazing. Befre I knew it, peple all ver the planet were getting in tuch with ideas and ffers f help. Sme psted me bks. Others did hurs f research n my behalf. In additin, several writers, like Turkmenistan’s Ak Welsapar and Panama’s Juan David Mrgan, sent me unpublished translatins f their nvels. Even with such an extrardinary team behind me, hwever, surcing bks was n easy task.
But the effrt was wrth it. As I made my way thrugh the planet’s literary landscapes, extrardinary things started t happen. Far frm simply armchair travelling, I fund I was inhabiting the mental space f the strytellers. I discvered, bk packing ffered smething that a physical traveller culd hpe t experience nly rarely: it tk me inside the thughts f individuals living far away and shwed me the wrld thrugh their eyes. Mre pwerful than a thusand news reprts, these stries nt nly pened my mind t basic infrmatin f life in ther places, but pened my heart t the way peple there might feel. And that in turn changed my thinking. Thrugh reading the stries shared with me by bkish strangers arund the glbe, I realized I was nt an islated persn, but part f a netwrk that stretched all ver the planet.
One by ne, the cuntry names n the list that had begun as an intellectual exercise transfrmed int places filled with laughter, lve, anger, hpe and fear. Lands that had nce seemed freign and remte became clse and familiar t me — places I culd identify with. At its best, I learned, fictin makes the wrld real.
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【導讀】
本文是記敘文。文章主要介紹了自己設定了在一年內(nèi)閱讀195本來自195個國家的書籍的目標，并在網(wǎng)友的幫助下完成了目標，閱讀不僅開闊了視野，還拉近了自己與現(xiàn)實世界的距離。第一段講述了作者設定的目標是在一年內(nèi)閱讀195本來自195個國家的書籍，開設了博客，并呼吁大家給他推薦一些可以用英語閱讀的書籍。第二段講述了盡管很難買到所有的書，但他從博客的粉絲那里得到了很大的幫助。第三段主要講閱讀的過程被證明是有益的，這些書為作者打開了一個新的世界，改變作者的觀點。第四段講了拉近了與現(xiàn)實世界的距離。作過程中注意一些句式和短語的使用，并注意一些連接詞和過渡句，使上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。最后認真檢查是否有漏寫要點，有無拼寫錯誤，以及標點錯誤。盡量使用熟悉的單詞句式，同時注意使用高級詞匯和句型為文章增色。
解題步驟
第一步：讀懂原文，明確篇章結構
本文的篇章結構為“總—分—總”式：
第1段：介紹作者給自己設定的挑戰(zhàn)——在一年內(nèi)閱讀來自195個聯(lián)合國承認國家的書籍，并通過博客尋求幫助。
第2段：描述讀者的熱烈回應，包括提供書籍和翻譯作品。
第3段：強調(diào)尋找書籍的困難，但最終的努力是值得的。
第4段：講述閱讀這些書籍帶來的深刻體驗和感悟。
第5段：總結閱讀如何改變了作者的思維方式和對世界的認知。
第二步：去次留精，提煉關鍵信息
第三步：歸納要點，合理轉(zhuǎn)換表達
第1段：In 2012, the authr set a challenge t read bks frm all 195 UN-recgnized cuntries and sught help via a blg.
（2012年，作者設定了一個挑戰(zhàn)，即在一年內(nèi)閱讀來自所有195個聯(lián)合國承認國家的書籍，并通過博客尋求幫助。）
第2段：Peple wrldwide ffered suggestins, sent bks, and prvided translatins.
（全球各地的人們提供了建議、寄送書籍并提供了翻譯。）
第3段：Despite difficulties in surcing bks, the effrt was rewarding.
（盡管尋找書籍的過程困難重重，但這些努力是值得的。）
第4段：Reading these bks ffered deep insights int ther cultures and changed the authr’s thinking.
（閱讀這些書籍讓作者深入了解其他文化，并改變了她的思維方式。）
第5段：The experience made distant lands familiar and highlighted the pwer f fictin t make the wrld real.
（這種經(jīng)歷讓遙遠的國度變得熟悉，并凸顯了小說讓世界變得真實的力量。）
第四步：句式多樣，注意過渡銜接
使用“Despite”表達盡管……但……的對比關系。
使用“and”連接相關的內(nèi)容。
使用“highlighted”強調(diào)結果。
概要寫作答案（60詞左右）
In 2012, the authr set a challenge t read bks frm all 195 UN-recgnized cuntries and sught help via a blg. Peple wrldwide ffered suggestins, sent bks, and prvided translatins. Despite difficulties in surcing bks, the effrt was rewarding. Reading these bks ffered deep insights int ther cultures and changed the authr’s thinking. The experience made distant lands familiar and highlighted the pwer f fictin t make the wrld real.
A: The writer set a gal f reading 195 bks frm 195 cuntries in a year. He received great help frm fans f his blg, thugh it was hard t btain all the bks. Hwever, the prcess f reading prved rewarding. Nt nly did he braden his hrizn, but he became familiar with the places and identified with the peple there.
B: Attempting t read a bk frm 195 states in a year, I appealed t the peple wrldwide in a blg fr their suggestins. With their generus ffer and enthusiastic respnses, I started t read the bks recmmended, which pened a new wrld fr me and changed my thinking. Mst imprtantly, these bks brings the real wrld clser t me.
C: I challenged myself t read bks frm 195 cuntries in a year. Having difficulty finding all the bks, I sught wrldwide help, which was greeted with enthusiastic respnses. The whle experience turned ut rewarding. Nt nly did I feel cnnected t the wrld but the expsure t different peple’s life and feelings brught the real wrld clser t me.
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【2023屆上海市上海中學下學期高考英語階段模擬試卷】
The Paper Architect
Fr a lng time, Zaha Hadid was knwn as “the paper architect,” smene whse grand designs never left the page t becme real buildings. But in recent years her buildings have sprung up like mushrms all ver the wrld: the Guangzhu Opera Huse in China, a car factry in Germany, a cntemprary art museum in Rme, a transprtatin museum in Sctland, and the Aquatics Center fr the 2012 Olympics in Lndn.
Pinning dwn her individual style is difficult. Certainly Hadid has been influenced by the mdem trend in architecture that likes t play with the traditinal shape f buildings and fragment (分解) them, creating unpredictable angles and surfaces. Wrking in this way, she and her fellw architects have prduced sme spaceship-like structures that seem t g against the nrmal laws f engineering.
The idea f ffering the viewer multiple perspectives frm within the building is a theme that runs thrugh Hadid’s wrk. Her mst famus building, MAXXI—a museum fr the 21st century— in Rme, is a great example. It is a cmplex and spectacular structure f interlcking cncrete shapes. Inside spaces intercnnect Tike winding streets, s that the visitr is surprised and charmed at each turn. The Rsenthal Center in Cincinnati prduces a similar effect. Like an extensin f the street it sits n, it draws yu in, with walkways directing yu this way and that, and windws inviting yu t sample the view. “It’s abut prmenading” says Hadid, “being able t pause, t lk ut, lk abve, lk sideways.”
S what inspires smene like Hadid t prduce such different buildings? She speaks in cmplimentary terms abut the wrk f her cntempraries. She als cites the natural landscape and rganic gelgical patterns as an influence. But it is nt a questin that she seems t cncerned with and nr perhaps shuld we be. Hadid is an artist, sharing with us her visin f what buildings shuld be like and always, as she des s, trying t keep human interests—ur interests as users and viewers—at heart.
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【答案】 Recent years have seen an increasing number f Zaha Hadid’s buildings glbally. By breaking dwn traditinal building shapes t prduce seemingly impssible structures, Hadid has frmed her wn style. She hpes peple inside her wrks can appreciate them frm different angles. As an artist, she wants peple t knw mre buildings, which is why she has prduced such distinct wrks.
【解析】
【導語】本文是一篇記敘文。文章主要介紹了英國女建筑師扎哈·哈迪德。近年來，扎哈·哈迪德的建筑作品出現(xiàn)在全球各地，她的作品打破傳統(tǒng)的建筑造型，創(chuàng)造出看似不可能的結構，她希望人們能夠從不同的角度欣賞她的作品。同時，作為一名建筑師，她也希望人們更多地了解建筑。
【詳解】1.要點摘錄
①But in recent years her buildings have sprung up like mushrms all ver the wrld: the Guangzhu Opera Huse in China, a car factry in Germany, a cntemprary art museum in Rme, a transprtatin museum in Sctland, and the Aquatics Center fr the 2012 Olympics in Lndn.
②Certainly Hadid has been influenced by the mdem trend in architecture that likes t play with the traditinal shape f buildings and fragment (分解) them, creating unpredictable angles and surfaces.
③Wrking in this way, she and her fellw architects have prduced sme spaceship-like structures that seem t g against the nrmal laws f engineering.
④The idea f ffering the viewer multiple perspectives frm within the building is a theme that runs thrugh Hadid’s wrk.
⑤S what inspires smene like Hadid t prduce such different buildings? She speaks in cmplimentary terms abut the wrk f her cntempraries.
⑥Hadid is an artist, sharing with us her visin f what buildings shuld be like and always, as she des s, trying t keep human interests—ur interests as users and viewers—at heart.
2.縝密構思
將第②和③兩個要點進行重組，將第⑤和⑥兩個要點進行重組。
3.遣詞造句
①Recently, Hadid’s buildings have sprung up all ver the wrld.
②Hadid brke dwn traditinal building shapes t prduce seemingly impssible structures, which made her frm her wn style.
③Hadid’s wrks can ffer the viewer multiple perspectives frm within the building.
④Hadid has prduced such distinct wrks, because she wants peple t knw mre buildings.
【點睛】[高分句型1] By breaking dwn traditinal building shapes t prduce seemingly impssible structures, Hadid has frmed her wn style. （運用了“by ding”結構在句中作狀語，對原文第二段進行了概括）
[高分句型2] As an artist, she wants peple t knw mre buildings, which is why she has prduced such distinct wrks.（運用了which引導的非限制性定語從句，對原文第四段進行了概括）
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【2024屆上海市奉賢區(qū)格致中學高考英語階段模擬試卷】
On Sunday, the secnd day f Spring Festival, a man was killed after he fell int the tiger enclsure while trying t get int the z in Ningb, East China’s Zhejiang Prvince, withut paying fr a ticket.
The tragedy cst tw lives, as the tiger was sht dead when z emplyees tried t rescue the man.
As news f the incident spread, the majrity f vices nline blamed the dead man fr the animal’s death. Sme said this was a sign that peple are becming mre cld hearted. But they are wrng. Peple have been displaying increasingly mre enthusiasm fr helping thse in need and participating in charity wrk. In 2016, the China Charity Federatin received dnatins f 18.8 billin yuan ($2.7 billin) in ttal, 46 percent mre than the dnatins received in 2015, and they sent helping hands t ne tragedy after anther.
Peple are just tired f frgiving thse in the wrng. While sympathy is right, it has been abused t much. When smebdy cmmits a crime, n matter hw cruel the crime is, media utlets explain the criminal’s miserable childhd and there are calls fr frgiveness. When smene smkes in public, there are always peple calling fr tlerance.
Peple are fed up and angry with lawbreakers escaping their due punishments in the name f frgiveness and tlerance.
But ging back t the tragedy at the wildlife park in Ningb, the tiger’s death shws the park was nt well prepared fr such emergencies. They did nt have any tranquilizer guns that culd sedate the tiger immediately and save the lives f bth the man and the endangered animal.
In the meantime, it is necessary t raise peple’s awareness that the animals in zs and wildlife parks are nt dmesticated pets, and f the need fr visitrs t bserve rules fr their wn safety.
The man in the Ningb incident paid fr his fault with his life, but the tiger was killed fr his fault, t. We sincerely hpe n mre tigers r humans will pay fr such fault.
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【答案】A man, trying t avid admissin fee, climbed ver the wall, ending up csting his wn life and the life f the tiger eating him in the z in Ningb. (要點1) Many peple blame the rule ffender fr the death f the tiger nt because they are cld-blded but because rules shuld be respected and sympathy shuldn’t be abused. (要點2) T avid such tragedies, the park shuld take mre emergency precautins and the public shuld raise their awareness f beying rules. (要點3)
【導語】這是一篇夾敘夾議文。文章主要敘述了在寧波的動物園里，一名男子為了逃避門票費，翻墻后被老虎吃掉了。許多人將老虎的死亡歸咎于違規(guī)者，他們認為規(guī)則應該得到尊重，同情不應該被濫用。作責提出為了避免此類悲劇，公園應該采取更多的緊急預防措施，公眾應該提高遵守規(guī)則的意識。
【詳解】1.要點摘錄
①a man was killed after he fell int the tiger enclsure while trying t get int the z in Ningb, East China’s Zhejiang Prvince, withut paying fr a ticket. The tragedy cst tw lives, as the tiger was sht dead when z emplyees tried t rescue the man.
②the majrity f vices nline blamed the dead man fr the animal’s death. Sme said this was a sign that peple are becming mre cld hearted. But they are wrng. Peple are just tired f frgiving thse in the wrng. While sympathy is right, it has been abused t much.
③the tiger’s death shws the park was nt well prepared fr such emergencies.
④In the meantime, it is necessary t raise peple’s awareness
2. 縝密構思
將第1、2兩個要點進行重組，將第3、4兩個要點進行整合。
3.遣詞造句
A man, wh tried t avid admissin fee, climbed ver the wall, ending up csting his wn life and the life f the tiger eating him in the z in Ningb.
Many peple think the rule ffender is t blame fr the death f the tiger nt because they are cld-blded but because rules shuld be respected and sympathy shuldn’t be abused.
【點睛】【高分句型1】A man, trying t avid admissin fee, climbed ver the wall, ending up csting his wn life and the life f the tiger eating him in the z in Ningb. 用一個復雜的現(xiàn)在分詞trying作定語和現(xiàn)在分詞ending作結果狀語的句子，對原文第一段和第二段進行了概括，表達非常高級。
【高分句型2】Many peple blame the rule ffender fr the death f the tiger nt because they are cld-blded but because rules shuld be respected and sympathy shuldn’t be abused.用一個復雜的帶有兩個because引導的原因狀語從句的復合句，對原文第三段、第四段和第五段進行了概括，表達非常高級。
【高分句型3】T avid such tragedies, the park shuld take mre emergency precautins and the public shuld raise their awareness f beying rules.用一個帶有不定式T avid作目的狀語的句子，對原文第六段、第七段和第八段進行了概括，表達非常高級。
段落
關鍵詞
1.背景
①Angus，mistake，cach，winning，teens，fun，team
2.負面影響
②pressure，drives away，examined，shut，errrs，judged
3.心理影響
③anxiety，praised，self-cnfidence，burden
4.總結
④quit，attitude，supprt，encuragement
段落
關鍵詞
1.挑戰(zhàn)設定
①2012，challenge，195 cuntries，blg，A Year f Reading the Wrld
2.讀者回應
②respnse，ideas，help，bks，unpublished translatins
3.尋找書籍的困難
③surcing bks，difficult
4.閱讀體驗
④extrardinary things，mental space，emtins，changed thinking
5.總結感悟
⑤cuntries，familiar，fictin，real
段落
關鍵詞
1.挑戰(zhàn)設定
①2012，challenge，195 cuntries，blg，A Year f Reading the Wrld
2.讀者回應
②respnse，ideas，help，bks，unpublished translatins
3.尋找書籍的困難
③surcing bks，difficult
4.閱讀體驗
④extrardinary things，mental space，emtins，changed thinking
5.總結感悟
⑤cuntries，familiar，fictin，real

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