【命題解讀】
結(jié)尾句是全文的收尾處,需要起到點(diǎn)睛的作用,給讀者留下深刻的印象。怎么做到呢?今天老師就帶著你靈活運(yùn)用首尾呼應(yīng)、直白敘述、應(yīng)用名言等多種方法進(jìn)行結(jié)尾,對(duì)故事主題進(jìn)行深化,使人物情感得到升華,讓你的文章的結(jié)尾更加出彩!今天分享三個(gè)常見的方法:收尾呼應(yīng)法;名言結(jié)尾法和情感升華法。
【思維導(dǎo)圖】
出彩收尾設(shè)計(jì)
【方法一:首位呼應(yīng)法寫】
請(qǐng)看第一例子,2017年高考真題,講述的是與健忘媽媽一塊去旅游的故事。
文章的開頭,是這么寫的:I had an interesting childhd. It was filled with surprise and amusements, all because f my mther--lving, sweet, yet absent-minded and frgetful. 我有一個(gè)有趣的童年,充滿了驚喜和娛樂(lè),都是因?yàn)槲业哪赣H——可愛,卻心不在焉,健忘。
那么續(xù)寫結(jié)尾的時(shí)候可以回到文章的開頭再次重申媽媽的性格,來(lái)深化主題。
文章結(jié)尾可以用首尾呼應(yīng)的寫作手法,請(qǐng)看這一句:Despite mm's being absent-minded and frgetful, she was still a kind and nice mm. 盡管媽媽總是心不在焉,健忘,但她仍然是一個(gè)和藹可親的媽媽。
再來(lái)看第二個(gè)例子,2018年高考真題 ,講述的是爸爸帶兒子去朋友家農(nóng)場(chǎng)游玩迷路的故事。
文章的開頭,是這么寫的:It was summer and my dad wanted t treat me t a vacatin like never befre. He decided t take me n a trip t the Wild West. 那是夏天,我爸爸想像以前一樣請(qǐng)我去度假。 他決定帶我去西部荒野之旅。
文章結(jié)尾可以用首尾呼應(yīng)的寫作手法,請(qǐng)看這一句:Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerus vacatin befre. The special trip t the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind. 我從來(lái)沒有過(guò)這么刺激又危險(xiǎn)的假期。那次去西部的特別旅行,深深地印在我的腦海里。
再來(lái)看第三個(gè)例子,2016年浙江高考樣題
開頭:A funny thing happened t Arthur when he was n the way t wrk ne day.一天,亞瑟在上班的路上發(fā)生了一件有趣的事情。
結(jié)尾:What a funny day. Arthur culdn't stp laughing whenever he lked back n this hilarius experience. 多么有趣的一天啊,每當(dāng)亞瑟回想起這次歡樂(lè)的經(jīng)歷,他就忍不住笑個(gè)不停。
【方法二:名言式結(jié)尾法】
使用名言結(jié)尾往往能給文章增添文采,同時(shí)也能起到凝煉中心,深化主旨的作用,這樣的結(jié)尾可以引出結(jié)論,即時(shí)抒情,凸顯主旨渲染氛圍等,合理使用名言可以為續(xù)寫文章畫龍點(diǎn)睛,因此在平時(shí)我們不僅要多加積累,也要明白名言蘊(yùn)含的道理,以便使其用在合適的語(yǔ)境中。需要注意的是:不可生搬硬套名言警句,一定要具體文本具體分析。
例1:Dn't judge each day by the harvest yu reap but by the seeds that yu plant.
(不要根據(jù)你每天的收獲來(lái)判斷每一天,而是根據(jù)你每天播種了多少。)
這則名言采用了比喻的手法,將人的付出和回報(bào)比作耕種和收獲。本質(zhì)上,是過(guò)程和結(jié)果之間的比較,強(qiáng)調(diào)過(guò)程的重要性大于結(jié)果,可以用于習(xí)慣養(yǎng)成類和或者長(zhǎng)期活動(dòng)類敘事的結(jié)尾,提升思想境界。
例2:It is during ur darkest mments that we must fcus t see the light.
(越是在最黑暗的時(shí)刻,我們?cè)揭獙ふ夜饷?。?br>這則名言通過(guò)前后反復(fù)概念的對(duì)比,突出光明的重要性,引申為在困境中保持積極樂(lè)觀的生活態(tài)度,可以用于主要人物經(jīng)歷重大坎坷,最后憑借樂(lè)觀心態(tài)度過(guò)艱難歲月的文章。
例子3:Tell me and I frget. Teach me and I remember. Invlve me and I learn.
(告訴我,我會(huì)忘記。教給我,我會(huì)銘記。讓我參與,我會(huì)掌握。)
這則名言通過(guò)排比和對(duì)比,揭示了學(xué)習(xí)的規(guī)律,闡明了實(shí)踐出真知的道理,可以用于總結(jié)學(xué)習(xí)經(jīng)歷,反思技能掌握的過(guò)程等。
例4:In the end, it's nt the years in yur life that cunt. It's the life in yur years.
(最后,重要的不是你生命中的歲月,而是你如何度過(guò)這些歲月的。)
這則名言通過(guò)巧妙的詞匯調(diào)換,改變句意,揭示了生活的真諦:只有認(rèn)真對(duì)待生活,人生才不會(huì)留下遺憾,由于本句涉及的時(shí)間跨度較大,寫作中最好有最好從長(zhǎng)者的視角提出。
我們來(lái)看下面的實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練,故事里,主人公在柔道比賽中,通過(guò)向?qū)κ直┞蹲约旱娜觞c(diǎn),充分發(fā)揮自己的力量,最終贏得了比賽。故事結(jié)尾,借用教練對(duì)他的鼓勵(lì),完成了升華,其中就用到了名言警句。我們以前來(lái)看一下。
It is yur biggest weakness that makes yu win the match. As a prverb says, ‘Every cin has tw sides.’ 是你最大的弱點(diǎn)讓你贏得了比賽。正如諺語(yǔ)所說(shuō),“每枚硬幣都有兩面性。”Making full use f yur strength is yur achievement. Please remember that in n case will yu give up especially in truble. Gd is fair t everyne.”充分利用你的力量就是你的成就。請(qǐng)記住,無(wú)論如何你都不會(huì)放棄,尤其是在麻煩中。上帝對(duì)每個(gè)人都是公平的?!?br>【方法三:情感升華法】
每一個(gè)故事的創(chuàng)作不止為了講清楚一件事情的來(lái)龍去脈,還要包含作者想要表達(dá)的寓意,想與讀者分享的感悟,這種思想往往貫穿全文,并在故事結(jié)尾時(shí)得到升華,在讀后續(xù)寫的結(jié)尾部分可以采用情感升華的方式,讓讀者產(chǎn)產(chǎn)生情感上的共鳴,激發(fā)讀者思考。
情感升華的結(jié)尾要求,要有較高的立意,它是故事的靈魂所在,這樣的結(jié)尾能夠產(chǎn)生強(qiáng)烈的藝術(shù)感染力,通常我們可以通過(guò)表現(xiàn)人生感悟、生活真諦、生活哲理、人生觀或價(jià)值觀來(lái)達(dá)到結(jié)尾部分的情感升華。
請(qǐng)看第一例子,仍然是2017年高考真題,講述的是與健忘媽媽一塊去旅游的故事。剛才我們用“首尾呼應(yīng)”法,現(xiàn)在我們?cè)囈辉囉谩扒楦猩A”法:在結(jié)尾處,表達(dá)母愛對(duì)我的深遠(yuǎn)影響。
Everyne has ne persn they lk up t as a rle mdel. T me there is nne ther than my mm. 每個(gè)人都有一個(gè)榜樣。對(duì)我來(lái)說(shuō),不是別人,正是我媽媽。She has beauty, brains, and ne f the best hearts I knw. 她很漂亮,很聰明,而且是我認(rèn)識(shí)的最用心的人之一。Withut her in my life, I wuld have n idea whether I can be a famus dancer. Smeday, when I am lder and have children f my wn, I hpe I can be just as great a parent as my mm.如果沒有她,我不知道我能不能成為一個(gè)著名的舞者。有一天,當(dāng)我長(zhǎng)大了,有了自己的孩子,我希望我能成為像我媽媽一樣偉大的母親。
我們來(lái)看看第二個(gè)例子,主人公在故事的結(jié)尾處,表達(dá)自己對(duì)價(jià)值觀:“幸?!钡睦斫?。來(lái)看看下面的表達(dá):
【舉例2】I am extremely unhappy abut it. I think mney desn’t equal happiness. 我對(duì)此非常不高興。我覺得金錢不等于幸福。And free life style als desn’t equal happiness. 自由的生活方式也不等于幸福。 The real happiness is that everyne lves each ther, and des everything useful fr ur sciety. Mst f my classmates supprt me.真正的幸福是每個(gè)人都有“愛”,為我們的社會(huì)做一切有益的事情。大多數(shù)同學(xué)都支持我。 But sme f them think mney is everything. In my pinin, mney can’t take the place f everything, such as yur life, yur time and yur happiness.但有些人認(rèn)為錢就是一切。在我看來(lái),金錢不能代替一切,比如你的生活,你的時(shí)間和你的幸福。
【情感升華萬(wàn)能句】
Seeing sth , I felt as if it had been ding and saying,””
看到某物,感覺某物好像在做某動(dòng)作,并且說(shuō)“(突出主題的話)”。
這個(gè)句子的亮點(diǎn)在于:首先該句是虛擬語(yǔ)氣句型結(jié)構(gòu),需要注意,動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)需要用had been ding,其次seeing sth是非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞做伴隨狀語(yǔ),另外句型中加入對(duì)話;最后,從修辭的角度,使用了“擬人”的手法。
需要明確的是seeing sth.中的sth.到底是什么呢?我們知道,在故事發(fā)展中,一般都會(huì)有一兩個(gè)線索詞。這些線索詞要么貫穿始終,要么是在推動(dòng)故事發(fā)展過(guò)程中,起到非常重要的作用。比如2020年新高考卷中,描述的是萬(wàn)圣節(jié)尷尬事:主人公的頭卡在了南瓜中。于是南瓜就是整個(gè)故事的線索詞。八省聯(lián)考中,主人公的車在路上壞了,遇一家人的熱心幫助。在主人公即將開車離開時(shí),熱心的小女孩還遞給他一個(gè)紙袋,紙袋里有食物。那么“紙袋paper bag”在推動(dòng)劇情發(fā)展中,就起到了的重要作用。所以,“南瓜”和“紙袋”可以用在seeing sth中。
我們先看第一個(gè)例子。主人公“我”是老年人,想回到學(xué)校學(xué)習(xí)識(shí)字,但是連字母表都不會(huì)讀。最終戰(zhàn)勝了自我懷疑,成功能識(shí)字看報(bào)紙。升華主題的時(shí)候,我們?cè)趺从眠@個(gè)萬(wàn)能句型來(lái)表達(dá)呢?請(qǐng)看這句:
Seeing the alphabet again, I felt as if it had been encuraging me and saying, ” it’s never t late t learn”.再次看到字母表,我覺得它好像在鼓勵(lì)我并說(shuō),“學(xué)習(xí)永遠(yuǎn)不會(huì)太晚”。
看第二個(gè)例子。主人公“我”是個(gè)頹廢少年,無(wú)意中通過(guò)自己的專長(zhǎng)“扔標(biāo)槍”,找到了自信,并成功逆襲。我們?cè)趺赐ㄟ^(guò)萬(wàn)能句型來(lái)升華呢?
Seeing the javelin, I felt as if it had been encuraging me and saying, “Yu’ve fund yur talent and I’ve fund yu”看到標(biāo)槍,我覺得它好像在鼓勵(lì)我,并說(shuō),“你找到了你的天賦,我找到了你”。這句話中,javelin是“標(biāo)槍”,talent是“天賦”
第三個(gè)例子。2016年高考真題,講述了夫妻倆野外露營(yíng),因小事發(fā)生爭(zhēng)執(zhí),女主人獨(dú)自走進(jìn)森林迷路的故事。最后如何用萬(wàn)能句升華呢?
Seeing the helicpter, Jane felt as if it had been cmfrting her with its thunderus vice, “Yur waiting pays ff.”看到那架直升機(jī),簡(jiǎn)覺得它好像在用雷鳴般的聲音安慰她,“你的等待是有回報(bào)的。”
第四個(gè)例子,2016年高考樣題,講述了主人公亞瑟遇到了銀行搶劫,他巧妙把可能藏有贓款的行李箱 suitcase運(yùn)到了警察局的故事。最后的升華句,能不能借用我們今天用到的句型呢?我們一起來(lái)看看
Seeing the suitcase, Arthur felt as if it had been praising him , “Yur did great jb!”看到手提箱,亞瑟覺得好像在稱贊他,“干得好!”
這個(gè)句型,我們主要講解的是它能起到情感升級(jí)的作用,主要用在故事結(jié)尾處,如果在故事發(fā)展中,你感覺用上這個(gè)句型也比較合適,完全也是可以的。
比如2017年高考真題,講的是主人公“我”與健忘媽媽一塊去旅游的故事。途中媽媽忘記了帳篷tent,媽媽執(zhí)意要返程尋找??吹綆づ竦哪且豢蹋憔涂梢杂蒙线@一句
Seeing the tent, I felt as it had been sighing and saying, “I want t experience the utside wrld.看到帳篷,我感覺它一直在嘆息著說(shuō),“我想體驗(yàn)外面的世界?!?br>信同學(xué)們對(duì)這個(gè)萬(wàn)能句型的用法或多或少有感悟,你可以把這個(gè)句型多默寫幾遍,直到百分百能用出來(lái)。
需要強(qiáng)調(diào)的是,我們學(xué)的“萬(wàn)能句”其實(shí)是把雙刃劍。可以讓起到化繁為簡(jiǎn)的作用,但是如果長(zhǎng)期依賴,也可能讓你的表達(dá)過(guò)于單一。所以說(shuō),對(duì)于基礎(chǔ)暫時(shí)不太好的同學(xué)而言,學(xué)會(huì)后,可以救急用。從長(zhǎng)遠(yuǎn)看,我們還是需要積累不同的素材,豐富我們的表達(dá)。
此外,需要強(qiáng)調(diào)另外一點(diǎn)是,當(dāng)你你在寫作中,覺得某個(gè)故事的立意和這個(gè)句型有不太一致時(shí),也不要強(qiáng)行使用該句型。其實(shí),在這個(gè)系列課程中,我講了很多出彩的句式結(jié)構(gòu),你都可以進(jìn)行仿寫。
助人型主旨升華句
自己幫助別人或者自己受到他人幫助,一直以來(lái)是我們讀后續(xù)寫的一個(gè)重要主題,我們今天分享的就是“助人型”的主旨升華句。一共有兩個(gè)。
我們先來(lái)看第一種句型,句式結(jié)構(gòu)比較簡(jiǎn)單,也很容易仿寫。算是一個(gè)入門級(jí)的升華句子。這個(gè)句型就是:frm then n +行動(dòng)。
我們先看例句:
Frm then n, I wuld try my best t help sb like sb.Only in this way, culd mre and mre peple help each ther in the future.
從那時(shí)起,我會(huì)盡我最大的努力幫助某些人,就像某人一樣。 只有這樣,將來(lái)才能有越來(lái)越多的人互相幫助。
從這個(gè)句型的內(nèi)涵上看:自己被別人幫助后,主動(dòng)把這種助人的行為進(jìn)行“傳遞”,即:去積極幫助他人。這種精神的升華具有正能量,是值得鼓勵(lì)的。從句式結(jié)構(gòu)來(lái)看,該句用到了倒裝,屬于高分亮點(diǎn)句。
下面我們舉一反三:
【示例1】
2020年山東卷中,講述了主人公和孩子們想出在社區(qū)賣爆米花的主意,來(lái)幫助窮人的故事。我們可以借鑒這個(gè)寫作公式,可以這么寫。
Frm then n, Bernard made up his mind t help smene wh needs help . Only in this way, culd mre and mre peple help each ther in the future.從那時(shí)起,伯納德決定幫助需要幫助的人。只有這樣,將來(lái)才能有越來(lái)越多的人互相幫助。
【示例2】
我們?cè)賮?lái)看八省聯(lián)考的作文,作者講述一次吉普車爆胎和維修經(jīng)歷。先是路邊標(biāo)語(yǔ)求助無(wú)果,失望之際墨西哥人伸出援手。續(xù)寫的第一段,主要要寫幫助的細(xì)節(jié)。第二段就可以升華主題:
Frm then n, I placed a jack and sme cmmn tls in my car.When meeting peple in need n the rad ,I wuld try my best t help them like the family.Only in this way, culd mre and mre peple help each ther in the future.
從那時(shí)起,我在我的車?yán)锓帕艘粋€(gè)千斤頂和一些常見的工具。當(dāng)我在路上遇到需要幫助的人時(shí),我會(huì)盡力像家人一樣幫助他們。只有這樣,將來(lái)才能有越來(lái)越多的人互相幫助。
我們?cè)賮?lái)看第二種句型:動(dòng)作+感動(dòng)+感悟
這個(gè)“動(dòng)作”可以是:看到了某情景,或者拿著一樣?xùn)|西。“感動(dòng)”很好理解,別人幫助了自己,產(chǎn)生的情緒就是“感動(dòng)”,最常見的就是“眼淚往下流”。“感悟”這一句,往往是“愛”“善行”“付出”等關(guān)鍵字的勵(lì)志句。
比如我們來(lái)看這一句:
sb lked at sth / held sth, tears rlling dwn withut cntrl. It is lve that makes the wrld g arund,which sb felt deep in ne’s heart.
某人看到了某物或者拿著某物,眼淚毫無(wú)控制地流了下來(lái)。 正是愛讓世界轉(zhuǎn)動(dòng),在某人的心里深深地感受到了這一點(diǎn)。
這個(gè)句子從句式結(jié)構(gòu)上:用到了一個(gè)獨(dú)立主格tears rlling dwn withut cntrl,眼淚毫無(wú)控制地流下來(lái);以及一個(gè)強(qiáng)調(diào)句It is lve that makes the wrld g arund(正是“愛”讓世界轉(zhuǎn)動(dòng)),還有一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句:which sb felt deep in ne’s heart.這三個(gè)語(yǔ)法現(xiàn)象都是我們作文中的高分亮點(diǎn)。
我們來(lái)實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練一下,
【示例1】
首先看一下八省聯(lián)考的試題。在續(xù)寫第二段開頭,文章提到那一家墨西哥人遞給作者一個(gè)紙袋,里面有食物。我們可以這么來(lái)寫主旨升華句。
I held the paper bag tightly, tears rlling dwn withut cntrl. It is lve that makes the wrld g arund,which I felt deep in my heart.
我緊緊地握著紙袋,眼淚毫無(wú)控制地流了下來(lái)。 正是愛讓世界轉(zhuǎn)動(dòng),在我心里里深深地感受到了這一點(diǎn)。
【示例2】
我們?cè)賮?lái)看山東卷“賣爆米花幫助窮人”的故事,我們借鑒這個(gè)寫作公式,可以這么寫。
He held the cins tightly, tears rlling dwn withut cntrl. It is lve that makes the wrld g arund,which Bernard felt deep in his little heart.
他緊緊地握著硬幣,眼淚毫無(wú)控制地流了下來(lái)。 正是愛讓世界轉(zhuǎn)動(dòng),伯納德在他的心里深深地感受到了這一點(diǎn)。
同學(xué)們剛開始,可以比較生硬的模仿,畢竟能先寫出來(lái)才是最重要的。隨著同學(xué)們積累的素材越來(lái)越多,我們就可以在“感悟”部分,加上更靈活的一些表達(dá),下面我就提供三句比較不錯(cuò)的句子給大家。
第一句:It dawned n me that a mment f kindness culd mean s much t anther,and that a simple act culd make the wrld s much better.
我恍然大悟,那一刻的善良對(duì)另一個(gè)人來(lái)說(shuō)意義重大,而一個(gè)簡(jiǎn)單的行為可以使世界變得如此美好。
第二句:Whether rich r pr, we shuld be happy t d smething fr sciety. Thus we can learn that giving is the surce f happiness.無(wú)論貧富,我們都應(yīng)該為社會(huì)做點(diǎn)什么。 因此,我們可以學(xué)會(huì)給予是幸福的源泉。
第三句:Smetimes, a small act f kindness may be pwerful enugh t make a huge difference.有時(shí)候小小的善行,可能足以帶來(lái)巨大的改變。
成長(zhǎng)型主旨升華句
“改變”和“成長(zhǎng)”是我們讀后續(xù)寫一個(gè)重要主題。在第二段的結(jié)尾處,我們?cè)鯓訉憽案淖兂砷L(zhǎng)”型的主旨升華句呢?我們可以根據(jù)“改變”的因素來(lái)學(xué)習(xí)不同的表達(dá)。比如克服困難,克服自卑等。今天我們要學(xué)習(xí)七類不同的改變模式。
【第一類:學(xué)習(xí)知識(shí)促“改變”】
知識(shí)就是力量!在改變的過(guò)程中,學(xué)習(xí)不同的知識(shí),然后才能面對(duì)各種困難和挑戰(zhàn)。比如屏幕前的你,不就是在學(xué)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫的技巧嗎?請(qǐng)看下面的例句,也是我送給正在學(xué)習(xí)的你。
It's never t late t learn. Each individual has the right t accept mre challenges and make mre attempts.學(xué)習(xí)永遠(yuǎn)為時(shí)不晚。每個(gè)人都應(yīng)該并且有權(quán)利去接受更多的挑戰(zhàn),做更多的嘗試。
【分析】individual這里表示“個(gè)人,個(gè)體”。make mre attempts 做更多嘗試。
【第二類:發(fā)揮天賦促“改變”】
認(rèn)識(shí)自身天賦,并且發(fā)揮天賦,這是改變我們的現(xiàn)狀的一個(gè)重要條件。請(qǐng)看下面的例句。
Actually, every individual pssesses talent. Be brave when yu find it and als make effrts. Yu can create miracles in the end.
事實(shí)上,每個(gè)人都有天賦,發(fā)現(xiàn)它的時(shí)候要勇敢,也要付出努力,最終你會(huì)創(chuàng)造奇跡。
【分析】pssess 擁有。create miracles表示創(chuàng)造奇跡。
【第三類:追逐夢(mèng)想促“改變”】
永遠(yuǎn)不要忽視了夢(mèng)想的力量!“做人如果沒有理想,跟咸魚有什么區(qū)別呢”。請(qǐng)看下面兩個(gè)例句。
It's never t late t g fr yur dream. As lng as yu grasp every pprtunity and take full advantage f it, yu will stand a chance t realize yur dreams.追夢(mèng)永遠(yuǎn)不晚。只要你抓住機(jī)會(huì),充分利用機(jī)會(huì),你就有機(jī)會(huì)實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想。
As lng as we dare t dream and dn't let difficulties get in ur way, anything is pssible.只要我們敢于夢(mèng)想,不被困難所阻擋,一切皆有可能。
【分析】take full advantage f 充分利用, realize yur dreams表示“實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想”
【第四類:克服困難促“改變”】
只有克服各種苦難,才能改變現(xiàn)狀。請(qǐng)看下面的例句。
The jurney t success is nt smth. It is full f challenges and difficulties. We shuld be brave t face them. As lng as we dn’t give up hpe and make every effrt t vercme all the difficulties, we will surely achieve ur gal (success) finally.
通往成功的路不會(huì)平坦,充滿挑戰(zhàn)和艱辛。我們要勇敢面對(duì)。只要不放棄希望并竭盡全力克服所有困難,我們最終會(huì)實(shí)現(xiàn)我們的目標(biāo)(成功)。
【分析】smth 表示“平坦的”vercme all the difficulties 表示“克服困難”;make every effrt 表示“做出努力”;as lng as,表示“只要”,引導(dǎo)條件狀語(yǔ)從句。
【第五類:戰(zhàn)勝恐懼促“改變”】
我們?cè)诟淖兊倪^(guò)程中,經(jīng)常需要克服自己內(nèi)心的恐懼。請(qǐng)看下面的例句:
Determinatin and ptimism are what it takes t cnquer yur fear and accmplish yur gal.戰(zhàn)勝恐懼和實(shí)現(xiàn)目標(biāo),需要決心和樂(lè)觀。
【分析】Determinatin 表示“決心”; ptimism表示“樂(lè)觀”。cnquer yur fear表示“克服你的恐懼”;accmplish yur gal表示“完成目標(biāo)”
【第六類:戰(zhàn)勝自卑促“改變”】
我們?cè)诟淖冎?,可能?huì)有一些自卑的心理阻礙著我們成長(zhǎng),比如自己的外貌的缺陷,性格內(nèi)向等,如何克服自卑,實(shí)現(xiàn)人生逆襲?請(qǐng)看下面的例句。
I smiled as I eventually realized the real surce f cnfidence.Nw, I am prud f what I lk like and much happier, because I have realized it is yur persnality that decides wh yu truly are.
我笑了,因?yàn)槲易罱K意識(shí)到了自信的真正來(lái)源?,F(xiàn)在,我為我的樣子感到驕傲,而且更快樂(lè),因?yàn)槲乙呀?jīng)意識(shí)到,決定你真正是誰(shuí)的是你的個(gè)性。
【分析】eventually表示“最后,終于”;persnality 表示“個(gè)性”。
【第七類:戰(zhàn)勝消極促“改變”】
積極的心態(tài)像太陽(yáng),照到哪里,哪里亮。“積極”思維,最終讓我們成長(zhǎng)改變,這種主題,是讀后續(xù)寫中比較常見的。請(qǐng)看下面的例句。
Attitude is mre imprtant than facts fr us. We cannt change ur past; we cannt change the fact. Hwever, the nly thing we can d is hld a psitive attitude.
態(tài)度對(duì)我們來(lái)說(shuō)比事實(shí)更重要。 我們不能改變我們的過(guò)去;我們不能改變事實(shí)。 然而,我們唯一能做的就是保持積極的態(tài)度。
【分析】Attitude表示“態(tài)度”;psitive attitude.就是“積極的態(tài)度”。
脫險(xiǎn)型主旨升華句
讀后續(xù)寫中會(huì)遇到火災(zāi),水災(zāi),森林迷路等內(nèi)容的故事,如果涉及到對(duì)生命造成了一定的威脅的情節(jié),我們就把這種類型的文章歸為“脫險(xiǎn)”型。在往年高考真題中,曾經(jīng)就考過(guò)三次:拍攝北極熊遇險(xiǎn);父子騎馬迷路;騎車游玩遇狼脫險(xiǎn)。
【主旨句一:入門句】
That day was s unfrgettable that it wuld stay in my memry frever.
那天是如此難忘,它將永遠(yuǎn)留在我的記憶。
遇到危險(xiǎn)并且最終成功脫險(xiǎn)的經(jīng)歷,想必對(duì)我們每個(gè)人來(lái)說(shuō)一定是一生中難忘的經(jīng)歷。所以這個(gè)句子使用的場(chǎng)合還是挺多的。句子中使用了的句式結(jié)構(gòu):如此以至于。unfrgettable是一個(gè)形容詞,表示“無(wú)法忘記的”。
【主旨句二:中級(jí)句】
Only then did I realize that it was bravery that can cnquer whatever difficulty came in the way. 直到那時(shí),我才意識(shí)到,正是勇敢才能克服一切困難。
遇到危險(xiǎn)后,勇敢面對(duì),才能解決問(wèn)題。這個(gè)句子突出了“勇敢”這個(gè)核心,這在“脫險(xiǎn)型”的故事里,是非常恰當(dāng)?shù)摹_@句話使用了倒裝的結(jié)構(gòu)和強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)結(jié)合的方式,也屬于高分亮點(diǎn)句。
【主旨句三:高級(jí)句】
It was this unique experience that made me understand whatever difficulty we are faced with (= we may face), we mustn’t give up ur hpe.
“正是這種獨(dú)特的經(jīng)歷使我理解了我們所面臨的任何困難,我們不能放棄我們的希望?!?br>這個(gè)句子也是把強(qiáng)調(diào)句,定語(yǔ)從句,賓語(yǔ)從句結(jié)合在一起,句式結(jié)構(gòu)比較高級(jí)。同學(xué)們不妨挑戰(zhàn)一下?
【主旨句四:綜合型】
即把前幾種方式進(jìn)行組合,我們可以記住這個(gè)組合公式:結(jié)果+難忘的經(jīng)歷+體悟
我們?cè)僬f(shuō)具體點(diǎn)兒,“結(jié)果”指的是獲救的結(jié)果,如走出森林,獲救后見到家人等?!半y忘的經(jīng)歷”就是我們剛剛學(xué)到的第一個(gè)主旨句?!绑w悟”在這種“脫險(xiǎn)型”里,無(wú)非就是突出冷靜,勇敢,不放棄希望等信念的重要性。
我們來(lái)一個(gè)例句:
Finally, we did sth. What an unfrgettable experience! It turns ut that there’s always a way ut f any plight as lng as we stay calm.
最后,我們做某事。(這里寫結(jié)果) 多么難忘的經(jīng)歷??! (這是一個(gè)萬(wàn)能句)事實(shí)證明,只要我們保持冷靜,就總有辦法擺脫困境。(作者的體悟,可以把“保持冷靜”,換成“不放棄希望”等。)
我們看2018年高考英語(yǔ)浙江卷的讀后續(xù)寫,爸爸帶兒子去朋友家農(nóng)場(chǎng)游玩迷路的故事。文章的最后,我們可以用這句:
Finally, we went ut f the frest that trapped us. What an unfrgettable experience! It turns ut that there’s always a way ut f any plight as lng as we stay calm.
最后,我們走出了困住我們的森林。 多么難忘的經(jīng)歷啊! 事實(shí)證明,只要我們保持冷靜,就總有辦法擺脫困境。
我們也可以把第一句改成:Finally, we arrived hme safely just in time fr supper(我們安全回家,正好趕上吃晚飯),也就是說(shuō),不管怎么寫,第一句是脫險(xiǎn)后的結(jié)果。
我們?cè)倏?016年10月高考英語(yǔ)浙江卷的讀后續(xù)寫,夫妻倆野外露營(yíng),因小事發(fā)生爭(zhēng)執(zhí),女主人獨(dú)自走進(jìn)森林迷路的故事。文章最后,我們也可以用上這句:
Finally, she saw her husband. As tightly as pssible, she hugged him and was t thrilled t say anything.What an unfrgettable experience! It turns ut that there’s always a way ut f any plight as lng as we never give up ur hpe. 最后,她看到了她的丈夫。 她盡可能地緊緊地抱著他,激動(dòng)得說(shuō)不出話來(lái)。 多么難忘的經(jīng)歷啊! 事實(shí)證明,只要我們不放棄我們的希望,任何困境都有出路。
2017年高考英語(yǔ)的讀后續(xù)寫,和朋友一起騎車游玩,途中遇狼的故事。我們可以這樣寫:
Finally, the wlf ran away ff the rad and disappeared in the distance .“We are safe!”Mac said in a pleasant tne. What an unfrgettable experience! It turns ut that there’s always a way ut f any plight as lng as we stay calm.最后,狼從路上跑開,消失在遠(yuǎn)處?!拔覀兒馨踩?!”麥克以一種愉快的語(yǔ)氣說(shuō)。 多么難忘的經(jīng)歷??! 事實(shí)證明,只要我們保持冷靜,就總有辦法擺脫困境。
【模擬題 1】(2022·遼寧實(shí)驗(yàn)中學(xué)模擬預(yù)測(cè))
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
I sat at my desk and stared at the screen. I waited patiently fr ideas t cme t me as I tried t think up exam questins fr a test I wuld give my English students. My wife was ff t a party smewhere, but I was nt alne. Meghan, ur 22-mnth-ld angel, kept my cmpany. Yet her plans seemed t g against mine.
She fllwed a daily rutine that was bth time-cnsuming and challenging. It included certain basic tasks: watching the fish, sweeping the flr in her rm, climbing up and dwn n her bed.
At first I was able t cncentrate n designing my test paper. But I was sn distracted. I had nt expected the arrival f the “bib-bibs”—“bib-bibs” were birds. “Bib-bibs!” Meghan screamed excitedly, her eyes alive with expectatin. She insisted that I cme with her t the windw.
“In a minute. Just let me finish this questin.” I said. She pulled me by the hand (tw fingers, actually) tward the windw. I saw myself as a fl, being led t watch the “bib-bibs”. They sang and leaped back and frth n the lawn just utside ur apartment windw. Meghan was absrbed, but as I watched them, I still thught abut my wrk. With her attentin ff me, I left the windw and went back t my desk.
Five minutes later, she returned. She reached up t my keybard and pressed a bunch f keys, adding a lng line f scrabbled (亂的) letters t my questin. I struggled t bring my annyance under cntrl. “N, thank yu, Meghan. Daddy’s seen yur wrk. I’ll d it myself.” She backed ff.
注意:1.詞數(shù)150字左右;
2.按照格式在答題卡相應(yīng)位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
A few minutes later, she std in frnt f me with her shes and scks in her hand.
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I finally decided t take Meghan t the park.
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【模擬題 2】(2022·廣東廣州·三模)
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
Peple use the prverb “seeing is believing” t describe situatins where it’s hard t believe smething is pssible if yu haven’t seen it happen. I am here tday t tell yu that the prverb is true and t share with yu hw a girl and her grandmther made a psitive transfrmatin in a cmmunity.
It was a year ag when I was studying life cycles in my science class. I wrte a paper abut the life cycle f the mnarch butterfly (帝王蝶) and received a perfect scre. I was s thrilled; I called my grandmther Nana and tld her the exciting news. My talk recalled memries frm Nana’s childhd. “I remember when I was a girl,” she said, “thse range and black butterflies were a cmmn sight. Cme late summer, there wuld suddenly be hundreds f them, and befre lng there were s many it felt like yu were standing in an range clud.”
“It sunds like yu witnessed a migratin (遷徙), but what happened t them?” I asked. “T be hnest, I’ve never knwn,” Nana admitted. “But there d seem t be fewer mnarchs arund the neighbrhd.” Nana and I decided t investigate.
That weekend, we met at the public library. Our research prduced plenty f infrmatin: sme fascinating and sme cncerning. Apparently, the number f mnarchs has been in decline fr the last several decades. Husing develpments have destryed much f their habitat (棲息地). Sme infrmatin was hpeful, thugh, like hw cnservatinists are wrking t save them.
The best was this — it desn’t take lts f mney r equipment t d s. It takes nly a little bit f land, sme seeds, and dedicated peple t create what’s called a Mnarch Waystatin (驛站).
“What if we set up ur wn Mnarch Waystatin?” I suggested. “We’ll need peple t help.” Nana respnded immediately and didn’t waste time t get started.
注意:
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
The next day, Nana presented the idea t her garden club and I talked t my friends.
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Nana and I created a blg and frequently updated abut the cmmunity’s effrts.
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【模擬題 3】(2022·湖北·荊州中學(xué)三模)
閱讀下面短文,根據(jù)所給情節(jié)和給定段落開頭語(yǔ)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫,使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。
When I was six years ld, I visited my grandfather’s farm in Kansas and he sent me int the wds t gather pecans (胡桃) fr us t enjy later. The pecans were abut the size f a man’s thumbnail and just abut the tastiest snack I’d ever had.
Hwever, pecan picking was really tiring and my little bucket was nly half full after wrking hard fr a lng time. I thught I wuldn’t let Grandpa dwn. Just then smething caught my eye. A large brwn squirrel was a few feet away. I watched as he picked up a pecan, hurried t a tree, jumped up t the trunk and disappeared in a large hle. A mment later the squirrel ppped back ut and climbed dwn t the grund t pick up anther nut. Once again, he tk the pecan back t his hiding place inside the hllw f the tree.
Nt s secret anymre, I thught. I dashed ver t the tree and lked int the hle. It was filled with pecans! Glden pecans were right there fr taking. This was my chance. Handful by handful, I scped all f thse pecans int my bucket. Nw it was almst full! I was s prud f myself that I culdn’t wait t shw Grandpa all the pecans.
I ran back and shuted, “Lk at all the pecans!” He lked int the bucket and asked, “Well, well, hw did yu find s many?” I tld him hw I’d fllwed the squirrel and taken the pecans frm his hiding place.
Grandpa cngratulated me n hw smart I’d been in bserving the squirrel and his habits. Then he did smething that surprised me. He handed the bucket back t me and put his arm gently arund my shulders.
注意:1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2. 請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
“That squirrel wrked very hard t gather his winter supply f fd,” he said.
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I picked up that little bucket full f pecans and carried it back t the tree.
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【模擬題 4】(2022·湖南師大附中三模)
閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
My daughter and I were fans f Mister Rgers’ Neighbrhd, an educatinal children’s televisin series that was created and hsted by Fred Rgers, mre cmmnly knwn as Mister Rgers.
Arund my daughter’s secnd birthday, I had a Mister Rgers-inspired idea. Why nt invite ne key persn in my daughter’s wrld t dinner each mnth? The lcal children’s librarian culd visit ne evening, and perhaps the brugh mayr (區(qū)長(zhǎng)) culd drp by a few weeks later.
But I wanted t start at the tp.
“Let’s invite Mister Rgers himself, ” I said t my wife. “After all, he lives just a few neighbrhds away. I bet he’d cme.”
She lked at me as if I wanted t invite the President. “Yu really think Mister Rgers wuld cme t ur huse fr dinner? Fat chance.”
Undeterred (不氣餒的), I sent a letter t Mister Rgers that fall, telling him f my newfund delight in his shw and my idea fr inviting neighbrhd peple ver t talk abut their lives, and asking him and Mrs. Rgers t be ur guests.
I tld my daughter abut the letter. Her eyes glistened (發(fā)光). “Mister Rgers cming? Really, Daddy?”
One mnth later, n reply. My daughter hadn’t frgtten and peridically asked when Mister Rgers wuld be visiting. I always tld her that he hadn’t called yet and that it was a gd pprtunity t learn abut patience.
Tw mnths later, n respnse. At the three-mnth mark, my wife simply rlled her eyes when I raised the tpic. I was beginning t lse ptimism. Mister Rgers had let me dwn.
Sadly, Mister Rgers passed away in late February f the fllwing year. I was unaware f his illness and nw understd why ur invitatin had gne unanswered. Mister Rgers wuld nt be cming t dinner after all. Yet, even after his passing, Mister Rgers gave us a far greater gift than I ever culd have imagined.
注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;
2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。
A week later, I was surprised t find a letter in ur mailbx frm Mister Rgers.
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The letter is a treasured gift and his kind wrds tuched my life and my daughter.
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