讀后續(xù)寫：救人型TOC \o "1-3" \h \u   HYPERLINK \l "_Toc27808" Part1：經(jīng)典例文（鐵軌救嬰兒）  PAGEREF _Toc27808 \h 1  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc11154" Part2：救人故事構(gòu)造三部曲  PAGEREF _Toc11154 \h 4  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc28076" 第一步：救人之前（惡劣環(huán)境+負面情緒）  PAGEREF _Toc28076 \h 4  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc15875" 第二步：救人之中（努力+救人動作+如釋重負）  PAGEREF _Toc15875 \h 5  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc3773" 第三步：救人之后（感激+升華）  PAGEREF _Toc3773 \h 6  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc5577" Part3：靈活應(yīng)用  PAGEREF _Toc5577 \h 7  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc11105" 例1：河中救人  PAGEREF _Toc11105 \h 7  HYPERLINK \l "_Toc27334" 例2：海邊救人  PAGEREF _Toc27334 \h 9  讀后續(xù)寫很多時候會涉及自然災(zāi)害與防范、安全常識與自我保護的話題，會經(jīng)常涉及到危難之際，挺身而出救助他人的故事。在這個話題中有時會寫到危難之際，利用所學急救知識，成功救人脫離生命危險的故事；有時會寫到樓內(nèi)突發(fā)火災(zāi)，警察/群眾舍己救人的故事；有時會寫到群眾/路人遇到有人不幸溺水，鼓足勇氣跳入水中施救的的故事。 Part1：經(jīng)典例文（鐵軌救嬰兒） It was 7 a.m. on 12 May 1998.Mohr had already scanned several packages listing dangerous materials aboard the train. The presence of gas would mean taking extra precaution when braking the 6,200-ton train. With explosive gas on board, it would be disastrous if the train came off the track. After a final inspection, Mohr jumped aboard. He was heading east, into a sun that promised a beautiful day for their 276-km run to Peru, Indiana. At around noon that day, Marshall prepared to tackle some yardwork. It was a beautiful day for it, she thought, gazing past the houses across the street. Some 45 meters away, railroad tracks shone in the sun. Marshall began working in a patch (地塊） of soil. Sitting next to her, cheerfully running her hands through dirt, was her 19-month-old daughter, Emily. For a while, she kept turning to check on Emily, who played close at hand. Eventually, though, Marshall's absorption in her work became total. Mohr approached the town where Marshall lived at about 1:45 p.m. and slowed the train to the 40-kmph speed limit. He activated the flashing lights and warning bell. Mohr had been through the town hundreds of times, but he grew extra cautious rounding the first curve. As the train came out of the curve, Mohr noticed a small dot on the track about 200 meters ahead. He thought it might be a dog. Although it was against the rules to do so in the town, he began lightly tapping his horn. "Come on, puppy, move," he urged. The toots (嘟嘟響） of a train whistle startled (使受驚嚇） Marshall from her yardwork. That's odd, she thought. They don't usually blow the whistle through town. She glanced over to check her daughter, and her heart skipped. Emily was nowhere in sight. Now, as the train approached within 100 meters of the object on the rail, Mohr narrowed his eyes, trying to make out what exactly was lying ahead. Then shock ran through him like electric current. 注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2.應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語： 3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好； 4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。 Para 1 "My God!" he yelled as a tiny face turned towards him. “It's a baby!" ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ Para 2 The child was now just 36 meters ahead. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Para 1 "My God!" he yelled as a tiny face turned towards him. “It's a baby!" Mohr had an instant decision to make, applying full emergency brakes with half the train still wrapped around a curve. He had to risk an emergency stop. Hard as he try, the train kept moving just as a cat saw a fish, whose enticing smell attracted the cat to approach the baby.Meanwhile, Marshall rushed towards her daughter, nervous but desperate, fearing the train would run into her beloved. “我的上帝??！”他像一張小臉轉(zhuǎn)向他時大聲喊道?！斑@是個嬰兒！”莫爾立即做出了決定，實施了緊急剎車，一半的火車仍然繞在彎道上。他不得不冒著緊急停車的危險。在他的努力中，火車繼續(xù)移動，就像一只貓看到了一條魚，它誘人的氣味吸引了貓接近嬰兒。與此同時，馬歇爾沖向緊張但絕望的女兒，擔心火車會撞到她的愛人。 Para 2 The child was now just 36 meters ahead. Mohr pulled the brake with his whole efforts.The sound of wheels grinding against the rails rang through the sky. The situation was quite dangerous.As the train was almost stopped, he immediately opened the left door of the engine cab quickly and swiftly jumped from the moving train and ran back to the child. She lay crying by the tracks.A great relief sweeping over Mohr, he lifted her from the dirt hurriedly. It was only then that Mohr noticed the train had stopped and Marshall was just coming to her baby.With the baby in his arms,Mohr began to walk towards the mother. 這個孩子現(xiàn)在只有前面36米遠。莫爾竭盡全力地拉下了剎車。車輪撞擊鐵軌的聲音響徹天空。情況很危險。當火車快停下來時，他立即打開駕駛室的左門，迅速從行駛的火車上跳下來，跑回孩子身邊。她躺在鐵軌邊哭泣。他使莫爾松了一口氣，急忙把她從泥土里抬了起來。直到那時，莫爾才注意到火車已經(jīng)停了下來，馬歇爾正要來接她的孩子。莫爾抱著孩子，開始向母親走去。 【分析】 本文以人物為線索展開，講述了火車司機Mohr，在一次駕駛火車全速前進時，他注意到遠處的鐵軌上有個黑點，他以為是一條狗，后來證實這個黑點是一個嬰兒。他要在保證火車安全的情況下，救下這個嬰兒。 【詳解】 1.段落續(xù)寫： ①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我的上帝! ”當一張小臉轉(zhuǎn)向他時，他大叫起來?！笆莻€嬰兒！”，可知，第一段可描寫火車司機Mohr的心理感受及其采取的措施，同時可以描寫嬰兒媽媽Mashall的現(xiàn)場反應(yīng)。 ②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“這時火車距離嬰兒只有36米了?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懟疖囁緳CMohr努力減速火車直至火車停下，然后救嬰兒，最終嬰兒平安得救。 2.續(xù)寫線索：看見嬰兒——決定剎車——跳車救孩子——孩子得救 3.詞匯激活 行為類 ①.做決定：make a decision/make up his mind/keep in mind that ②.剎車：pull the brake/stop the train with effort ③.救孩子：save the child/ rescue the child/save the baby's life 情緒類 焦急：anxious/have one's heart in one's mouth 【點睛】 [高分句型1]. Mohr had an instant decision to make, applying full emergency brakes with half the train still wrapped around a curve. （applying...為現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語） [高分句型2]. Hard as he try, the train kept moving just as a cat saw a fish, whose enticing smell attracted the cat to approach the baby.（as引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句，whose之后為非限制性定語從句） Part2：救人故事構(gòu)造三部曲 第一步：救人之前（惡劣環(huán)境+負面情緒） 1、惡劣環(huán)境 （1）一到晚夏，池塘就會被綠色的起泡浮渣覆蓋。有時候，池塘里冒出一陣強烈的難聞的味道。In late summer, the pond would be covered by a green and bubbly scum（起泡的浮渣）. Sometimes a strong, unpleasant smell rose from it. （2）在池塘中間，冰面忽然露出了一條裂縫。 In the middle of the pond, the ice gave way with a sudden crack. （3）空氣里彌漫著濃厚灼熱的味道。A thick burning smell filled the air.? 2、負面情緒：害怕 (1) Watching the shore in the distance, I felt powerless(無力的) as if we were broken tiny boats at the mercy of strong waves. (2) Exhausted and cold, the thought that we might die here flashed across my mind， which made me quiver with an uncontrollable terror/horror/fright(難以控制地發(fā)抖) Looking at the vast sea, I felt a sense of fear surging through my whole body (在身體涌動) 第二步：救人之中（努力+救人動作+如釋重負） 1、.掙扎努力 Tom looked thoughtful(若有所思) “We need to think out a way!” I muttered (喃喃自語), scratching my head.(絞盡腦汁) ...,We swam tooth and nailspared no effort to tooth and nail spared no effort to (全力以赴地). 2. 救人有關(guān)的驚險場面描寫 (1) The next thing I knew I was hanging on to the edge of a hole in the ice by arms outstretched on the ice. From my shoulders down I hung in icy water. (2) I tried to climb out of the hole, but when I got a knee on the ice, it broke like window glass(像玻璃一樣破裂). （浙江省十校聯(lián)盟考試續(xù)寫2020.10） (3)As the coat became completely wet, it dragged me down(把我拖下水). I was tired of the struggle and rested with my arms stretched out on the ice.（浙江省十校聯(lián)盟考試續(xù)寫2020.10） 3實施救援的過程 “幫我把西蒙斯弄下車！”諾伍德對驚慌失措的朋友們大聲喊道。（2021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟） “Help me get Simmons out of the car!” Norwood yelled loudly to her friends, who were left in a panic. 諾伍德和朋友們把西蒙斯從車里拉了出來，把他放在一個安全并且離車有點遠的地方。 盡管緊張而焦慮，諾伍德努力讓自己鎮(zhèn)靜下來，對西蒙斯進行了急救。（2021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟） Nervous and anxious, Norwood struggled to calm herself down and carried out first aid to Simmons. 諾伍德和她的朋友們把西蒙斯放到平躺的位置，打開了她的呼吸道。（2021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟） 4、如釋重負 Ensuing their safety, I felt a surge of triumph .(感到一陣勝利的喜悅) Hearing the news, I couldn't help restraining my excitement.(情難自抑) It thrilled us to hear the good news (聽到新消息很高興). On hearing the good news, Tom and I sighed in great relief(如釋重負地嘆了口氣), grinning merrily at each other. 第三步：救人之后（感激+升華） 1、感激 如果我沒有得到急救，我就會死了。西蒙斯感激地對諾伍德說。（2021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟） “If I had not been given first aid, I would have dead.” Simmons said to Norwood gratefully. Simmons showed her gratitude to Norwood, saying “It was you who came to my aid and saved my life.” 西蒙斯對諾伍德表示了感謝，她說：“是你來幫助我，救了我一命?！保?021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟） “謝謝你進入我的世界，我會永遠記住你為我所做的?！?西蒙斯對諾伍德說。（2021年山東新高考質(zhì)量測評聯(lián)盟） “Thank you for entering my world and I will always remember what you have done for me.” Simmons whispered to Norwood. 2、升華句 (1) 花點時間來學習急救和心肺復(fù)蘇術(shù)。拯救了生命，而且很有效。 Take some time to learn the knowledge of first aid. It saves lives, and it works. (2) 這個故事表明，良好的急救知識真的可以起作用。 The story shows that a good knowledge of first aid can make a real difference. (3) 每個人都應(yīng)該學點急救知識，因為在緊急情況下每一秒都很重要。 Everyone should learn something about first aid, for every second will count in an emergency. (4) 了解基礎(chǔ)的急救知識有助于你對緊急情況作出迅速的反應(yīng)。Knowing basic first-aid techniques will help you respond quickly to emergencies. Part3：靈活應(yīng)用 例1：河中救人 Boys like to be considered to be brave, but what kind of things can be considered to be brave? It is not a question that can be answered by words, but by the actual deed. A boy with the name Henry gave us a good example. Ronny and Henry were two friends in the same class. They always played together and went home together. One day as Ronny and Henry were going home after school, they saw some people fighting in the street corner. Ronny said excitedly, “Some people are fighting! Let's go and have a look!” But Henry refused, “It's none of our business. We'd better go home and don't get close to them. Also our parents are expecting to have dinner with us together at home and I don't want them to worry about me.” “You are a coward, and afraid to go,” said Ronny, and off he ran to the spot with some other boys. Henry had to go home alone and didn't think about it anymore. But Ronny thought Henry was a coward and told all the boys that. They laughed at him a great deal. From then on, they looked down upon Henry and didn't want to play with him. Henry was sad but he wasn't angry with Ronny for his rude behavior, because he had learned that true courage was shown most in bearing misunderstanding when it was not deserved, and that he ought to be afraid of nothing but doing wrong. Thus, he just ignored the other boys' laughter and continued to stick to his thought and go to school and study as well. However, Ronny didn't invite Henry to go home with him anymore. Instead, he had his new friends who also thought Henry was a coward. Every day after school, they didn't go home directly but went to the river or somewhere to play games and had lots of fun. 注意： 1.所續(xù)寫的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右； 2.應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語； 3.續(xù)寫部分分為二段，每段的開頭語已經(jīng)為你寫好； 4續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。 Paragraph 1: A few days later, something terrible happened to Ronny. Paragraph 2: At that moment, Henry happened to pass by. Paragraph 1 A few days later, something terrible happened to Ronny. That afternoon after school, Ronny was bathing with some of his new friends in the river happily. Suddenly, he was stuck in the mud and couldn't get out. He struggled hard but he was still trapped. He screamed for help, but all in vain. The boys who had called Henry a coward got out of the water as fast as they could. They were so scared and did not even try to help him. Paragraph 2: At that moment, Henry happened to pass by. He heard the screams and ran to the river as soon as possible. Seeing Ronny was almost drowned, Henry took off his clothes immediately and jumped into the water without any hesitation. He reached Ronny just as he was sinking the last time. With great effort, and with much danger to himself, he brought Ronny to the shore in time. Henry was happy to help his friend, though he was extremely tired. 第1段 幾天后，羅尼發(fā)生了一件可怕的事情。那天下午放學后，羅尼和他的一些新朋友在河里快樂地洗澡。突然，他被困在泥里，無法出來。他努力掙扎，但仍然被困住了。他尖叫著呼救，但都沒有成功。那些叫亨利是懦夫的孩子們盡可能快地離開了水面。他們很害怕，甚至沒有試圖幫助他。 第2段： 就在那一刻，亨利碰巧經(jīng)過了。他聽到了尖叫聲，就盡快跑到河里去了?？吹搅_尼差點被淹死，亨利立即脫下衣服，毫不猶豫地跳進了水里。他上次就在羅尼下沉時，到達了羅尼。他費了巨大的努力，對自己也很危險，及時把羅尼帶到了岸邊。亨利很樂意幫助他的朋友，盡管他非常累。 例2：海邊救人 閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。 On July 8，2017，eight members of a family in total，were enjoying an evening together at the beach in Panhandle，F(xiàn)lorida．As the sun sank lower on the horizon，the two boys Noah，11，and Stephen，8—swam into the waves without the grown-ups noticing．Soon they realized that the ocean had pulled them into the sea．After trying and failing to swim back，they started waving and screaming for help．But the lifeguards had been off duty for the evening． The boys had been struggling for several minutes when Jacky and Tabatha，a couple from Georgia，heard them．They dived into the water and soon reached the two brothers．But after a few minutes，they were all trapped in a rip current(離岸流)—a powerful one that could sweep even the strongest swimmer out to sea! By then，some teenagers had heard the cry．One of the teens rushed into the water，grabbed Jacky，and pulled him back to shore．Meanwhile，Tabatha could feel herself being pulled farther out．She was already exhausted and beginning to feel desperate as she was trying to save both boys alone． Onshore，Jacky was terrified．A man stopped．“What’s wrong?”asked Shaun，who was heading back to his car．“My wife is drowning!”Brittany said．Shaun immediately strode(大步跨)into the water．But several minutes later，a gaping 15 feet still lay between him and Tabatha and the boys．He knew that if he continued，he’d become another victim．He turned around to seek help． It was about that time that Roberta，the boys’mother，returned from the bathroom and looked around for her children．She was shocked to spot them floating much farther out than they were allowed to go．She fought the waves to get to her screaming sons and the stranger who was trying to save them，but she quickly discovered it was nearly impossible to make headway in any direction．Looking around，Roberta sighed with relief to see some more people coming to help． Paragraph 1 When they tried in vain to rescue the brothers and Tabatha, a risky idea came to them. _______________________________________________________________________________ By then, more swimmers had also noticed the group in trouble and rushed to join the human chain. _______________________________________________________________________________ 【答案】 Paragraph 1 When they tried in vain to rescue the brothers and Tabatha，a risky idea came to them．To keep themselves from losing their footing in the rip current，they began holding on to one another to form a human chain extending from the beach all the way out to the struggling and Tabatha．They stayed linked tightly and managed to ensure they were safe by making their feet firmly planted in the sand．However，that required more links—probably dozens of them．Shaun spotted other swimmers on the beach and shouted，“Don’t just stand there! Come and help．” 當他們試圖營救塔巴塔兄弟和塔巴塔兄弟時，他們想到了一個危險的主意。為了防止自己在激流中站穩(wěn)腳跟，他們開始互相抓住，形成一條人鏈，從海灘一直延伸到掙扎中的塔巴塔。它們緊緊地聯(lián)系在一起，并把腳牢牢地放在沙子里，以確保自己的安全。然而，這需要更多的鏈接——可能有幾十個。肖恩發(fā)現(xiàn)海灘上還有其他游泳者，他喊道：“不要只是站在那里！”來幫忙吧?！?Paragraph 2 By then，more swimmers had also noticed the group in trouble and rushed to join the human chain．One by one，link by link，total strangers walked into the waves and grasped one another by the wrists，determined that no one would die on that beach．At last，they made it and Tabatha and the two brothers were saved! “Those people on the beach are angels on earth，”said Roberta．“Whether it is the first person or the last person in the chain，they are all our heroes，who helped get our family out of trouble． 到那時，更多的游泳者也注意到這群人陷入了麻煩，于是沖去加入。一個接一個地，一個接一個地走進海浪，抓住手腕，決定沒有人會死在海灘上。最后，他們成功了，塔巴塔和兩兄弟得救了！“海灘上的那些人都是地球上的天使，”羅伯塔說，“無論是鐵鏈上的第一人還是最后一個人，他們都是我們的英雄，他們幫助我們的家人擺脫了麻煩。

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