Strategies
Thery &Slutin
Teaching Prcedures
9月聯(lián)考學生續(xù)寫主要問題
學生在續(xù)寫中遇到最大的問題是：1.不知道選什么詞來表達自己的意思?2.語言不準確不豐富3.續(xù)寫內容語言風格與前文不協(xié)調
Analysis f prspsitinal intentin
Cntinuatin writing is a new text type in the Cllege Entrance Examinatin, which first appeared in the Zhejiang Cllege Entrance Examinatin f 2016 . Cntinuatin writing will clsely cmbine reading and writing, fcus n the accuracy and richness f language use, test students' ability t grasp the key infrmatin and language characteristics f the passage, and the ability t cntrl text structure and creative thinking. (Liu Qingsi, 2016). It als will help students build mral integrity and a healthy utlk n life.
學生在閱讀所給故事的基礎上，在關鍵詞和/或段首句的提示下續(xù)寫兩段話，要求學生在續(xù)寫部分的故事內容和語言表達上和閱讀材料保持一致，使兩者產生協(xié)同性，促進學生的綜合語言運用能力。
Analysis f Grading Criteria 評分標準
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王初明教授提出：“內容要創(chuàng)造，語言要模仿，創(chuàng)造與模仿要緊密結合?！狈治鲈牡恼Z言特色對增加原文協(xié)同性非常重要。對語言風格的分析應包括語言中高級詞匯、長難句的使用和各種細節(jié)描寫的運用。
語言風格協(xié)同(Linguistic Synergy)
如何構建一堂以單元主題為依托的讀后續(xù)寫課
依托高考真題結合單元語境讀后續(xù)寫 課例分享
教學重點：如何研讀文本語言特征，在原文中獲取豐富地道的語言表達？教學難點：如何基于語言協(xié)同原則查找語言素材，在續(xù)寫中實現(xiàn)模仿與創(chuàng)新？
雪夜圣誕December strde (闊步走) int the muntains f Clrad, shting snwflakes and blwing them int a thick blanket f white. As Christmas apprached, the farmers there clsed dwn mst wden huses fr a hliday cheer. Nt all were clsed, hwever. There was still wrk t be dne, and smene had t stay. That smene was Slim Carter.Old Jake, anther farmer there, had ffered t keep him cmpany, but Slim shk his head. “After all, a yung man like me has gt plenty f Christmases ahead," Slim jked. Befre Jake ffered t stay again, Slim hurried n. “I'll just have a private Christmas this year, and that's the way I want it." S he was left alne at the huse. Alne, with his hrse in the farm and the wlves raring in the frest nearby.Truth was, Slim had decided nt t celebrate Christmas at all. It wasn't that he didn't like Christmas. In fact, his Christmas memries were gd nes. His mther wuld fill their huse with the light f candles and the smell f candy. His father wuld make their Christmas tree hunt an all-day, men-nly affair. Slim smiled as he remembered sitting n the brad back f their hrse with the freshly cut tree alng behind. Back hme, they wuld cver the tree with paper snwflakes and hmemade decratins and sing all the Christmas sngs they knew. And that's the way he liked it. Thse were the memries he pulled ut n nights when he was wrking alne. Such memries warmed him inside, even if his utsides were aching with cld.
1.體裁：記敘文 Text Type: Narrative2.主題語境：人與社會Theme Cntext: Human and Self3.話題：獨自留守山中圣誕-美麗的雪景，孤單的回憶，夜里的敲門聲，會是誰呢？4.主題：體現(xiàn)圣誕精神：愛，善良，溫暖（Reflect the spirit f Christmas）
1.It is very instructive and educatinal.
2.It accrds with the scialist value.
Bk2U4 Festival
This was Slim's first year away frm hme. “Christmas is nthing if nt spent with family," Slim declared t the empty huse. That was the real reasn he'd sent Jake away. He figured he wuld handle Christmas better if he just pretended it was an rdinary winter wrkday.But n Christmas Eve, as Slim headed back with snw beneath his feet and stars verhead, his head hung lw. It was Christmas, even withut the tree and the gifts. Christmas, and he was all alne.?Para.1: Then he remembered decrating the tree with his family again. ______________________________________________________________________________?Para.2: While singing t his decrated Christmas tree, Slim heard a knck n the dr. _____________________________________________________________________
03
Outline the plt
Read fr basic elements
Build the framewrk
如何讀？（教學過程略）
從三個角度1.詞句選擇 Wrd selectin（提高語言表達的豐富性準確性）2.場景描寫Scene descriptin （確保語言運用的的得體性）3.修辭手法Rhetrical device applicatin （關注語言運用的有效性 ）
如何研讀文本語言，在原文中獲取豐富地道的語言表達？
Step3分析原文語言特征：
如何寫？（這節(jié)課要解決的重點問題）
大量動詞短語（verb phrase）動作鏈（actin chain）clsed dwn ffered t keep cmpanyffered t stay againfill with cver the tree withpulled ut declared theaded back非謂語動詞（nn-finite verb） snwflakes and
一：Wrd selectin（詞句選擇）
各類從句（varius clauses）With復合結構（單元主題句式）with Christmas his hrse in the farm and the wlves raring in the frest the freshly cut tree alng snw beneath his feet and star
二.Scene descriptin(場景描寫)
語言描寫：對話（dialgue）獨白（mnlgue）
“After all, a yung man like me has gt plenty f Christmases ahead," “I'll just have a private Christmas this year, and that's the way I want it.‘’ “Christmas is nthing if nt spent with family,"心理描寫：Such memries warmed him inside, even if his utsides were aching with cld.with snw beneath his feet and stars verhead, his head hung lw. S he was left alne at the huse. , and he was all alne.
三.Rhetrical device applicatin (修辭手法應用）
無靈主語（Inanimate subject）+比喻（metaphr）December strde (闊步走) int the muntains f Clrad, shting snwflakes and blwing them int a thick blanket f white. 對比：（cntrast）Such memries warmed him inside, even if his utsides were aching with cld.with snw beneath his feet and stars verhead, his head hung lw.
Step4.如何構建續(xù)寫語料（模仿+創(chuàng)新）從四個方面入手1.?沿用fllw（主要體現(xiàn)在時態(tài)上）2.?借用brrw（直接在原文中搬用單詞，短語和結構，是語言協(xié)同的基本方法）3.?仿用imitate（通過感知原文語言特色，在續(xù)寫時，應于原文風格保持一致，但應避免為了博人眼球，故意使用長難句和特殊句型的做法）4.?創(chuàng)新innvate（語言水平較高的同學，可以根據原文中使用的語言結構，進行更加靈活自如的表達，更好的展示學生的語言水平。）
仿寫練習：模仿+創(chuàng)新 （搭建續(xù)寫語言支架）Para1:砍樹+裝扮圣誕樹1.with復合結構：燭光在屋里閃爍著（仿用）2.感嘆句：他多么想念蠟燭和新砍的樹所散發(fā)的香味?。。▌?chuàng)新）3.非謂語動詞：決定即使是自己一個人也要慶祝圣誕節(jié)，他動身前往森林深處尋找圣誕樹。（仿用）4.動作鏈：他穿上厚外套，抓起斧頭，然后打開大門。（仿用）5.倒裝：一扛著新砍的樹到家，他就迫不及待的開始裝扮。（創(chuàng)新+借用）6.夸張修辭手法：似乎過了一個世紀，他終于裝扮好了圣誕樹（創(chuàng)新）7.with復合結構：臉上露出了燦爛的微笑（仿用）
仿寫練習：模仿+創(chuàng)新 （搭建續(xù)寫語言支架）Para2：二人歡度圣誕節(jié)+主題升華（體現(xiàn)圣誕精神）1.語言描寫（獨白）：這么晚了，會是誰呢？（仿用）2.with復合結構：籃子里裝滿了酒（仿用）3.語言描寫（對話）：Old Jake笑的合不攏嘴，大聲說：“圣誕節(jié)快樂！”（仿用）4.心理描寫+無靈主語：一陣巨大的驚訝和感激感淹沒了他。（仿用）5.with復合結構：在ld Jake的陪伴下，他過了一個難忘的圣誕節(jié)。（仿用）6.定語從句：他也是他的家人，用溫暖，善良和愛裝滿了他的心靈。（創(chuàng)新）
Step5學生作品賞析：
根據寫作提綱，模仿續(xù)寫原文語言風格并創(chuàng)新形成續(xù)寫成品。
Step6：Hw t plish the writing
Para 1: Then he remembered decrating the tree with his family again. At thatmment, his family were sitting arund the table and enjying the big feast, With the light f candles flickering in the huse.(燭光在屋內閃爍著). Hw?he missed the smell f lighted candles and newly-cut tree !（感嘆句） All f a sudden, Slim Carter put n?his thick cat, grabbed?an axe and?pened?the dr.（動作鏈） Determined t?celebrate the Christmas even n his wn, Slim headed fr the dark frest in the hpe f finding an ideal tree .（非謂語動詞） It didn’t take a lng time befre(沒過多久) he fund and cut a small tree. N sner?had he carried the freshly cut tree int the wden huse than?he began t decrate it with paper snwflakes, hme-made decratins , just as his family did befre.（倒裝句） After what seemed like centuries (似乎幾個世紀的時間), he finished the jb f decrating the tree,a big smile blming acrss his face.(臉上露出了燦爛的笑容).Para2: While singing t his decrated Christmas tree, Slim heard a knck n the dr.?“Wh culd it be?” Slim?sighed?and?stepped up?t pen the dr. The mment the?dr pened, a head pked in. It was Old Jake,?with a basket filled with a bttle f wine,?candies and several gift packages in his hands. Overwhelmed by?an enrmus sense f surprise mingled with gratitude, Slim invited Jake in. Old Jake grinned frm ear t ear, saying “Merry Christmas!” （語言描寫）the tw ear-catching wrds eched in the small huse and warmed the lnely Slim（心理）. With Old Jake’s cmpany, Slim Carter spent an unfrgettable Christmas Eve in the muntains f Clrad. It dawned n him?(他突然醒悟到)that?Old Jake was mre than a c-wrker. He was als his family, wh filled his heart with warmth, kindness and lve.（主題句）
Step7：Sample appreciating :（賞范文，欣賞語言協(xié)同點）
Step8.Hmewrk：用語言協(xié)同法完成2024全國1卷續(xù)寫
能熟練運用上節(jié)課所講內容學生作業(yè)展示，作品與原文協(xié)同性高
1.堅持回歸教材，取法于教材，堅持構建以單元主題語境為依托的讀后續(xù)寫課。
2.按話題加強訓練，注重讀后續(xù)寫微技能的點撥與訓練引導學生構建讀后續(xù)寫語料庫
3.在周測和日常練習題中實現(xiàn)續(xù)寫語言積累。
4.在每周英語早自習中落實續(xù)寫語料背記和仿寫。

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