微觀剖析　突破讀后續(xù)寫
技法一　細讀原文　獲取有效信息
讀后續(xù)寫基本以記敘文為主，記敘文是以記人、敘事為主，以敘述人物的經(jīng)歷和事物的發(fā)展變化為主要內(nèi)容的一種文體。要寫好續(xù)寫文章，理解文本是第一步。
(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。When I was in middle schl，my scial studies teacher asked me t enter a writing cntest.I said n withut thinking.I did nt lve writing.My family came frm Brazil，s English was nly my secnd language.Writing was s difficult and painful fr me that my teacher had allwed me t present my paper n the sinking f the Titanic by acting ut a play，where I played all the parts.N ne laughed harder than he did.
S，why did he suddenly frce me t d smething at which I was sure t fail? His reply：“Because I lve yur stries.If yu’re willing t apply yurself，I think yu have a gd sht at this.” Encuraged by his wrds，I agreed t give it a try.I chse Paul Revere’s hrse as my subject.Paul Revere was a silversmith(銀匠) in Bstn wh rde a hrse at night n April 18,1775 t Lexingtn t warn peple that British sldiers were cming.My stry wuld cme straight frm the hrse’s muth.Nt a brilliant idea，but funny；and unlikely t be anyne else’s chice.
What did the hrse think，as he sped thrugh the night? Did he get tired? Have dubts? Did he want t quit? I sympathized immediately.I gt tired.I had dubts.I wanted t quit.But，like Revere’s hrse，I kept ging.I wrked hard.I checked my spelling.I asked my lder sister t crrect my grammar.I checked ut a half-dzen bks n Paul Revere frm the library.I even read a few f them.
When I handed in the essay t my teacher，he read it，laughed ut lud，and said，“Great.Nw，write it again.” I wrte it again，and again and again.When I finally finished it，the thught f winning had given way t the enjyment f writing.If I didn’t win，I wuldn’t care.注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。
A few weeks later，when I almst frgt the cntest，there came the news.__________________________________________________________ _______________________________________________________________ I went t my teacher’s ffice after the award presentatin._________ _______________________________________________________________
二、深層的文本分析1.理清故事的發(fā)展脈絡(luò)細讀文本，梳理文章的情節(jié)線和情感線，如下：情節(jié)線：拒絕參賽→嘗試參加→以馬的口吻寫作→想放棄→繼續(xù)堅持→不在乎是否能獲獎情感線：自我否定→自我嘗試→自我創(chuàng)新→自我懷疑→自我堅持→自我突破
可以清晰地在“情節(jié)山”上展示出來：
2.明確文本的主旨大意和寫作意圖本文主題是“人與自我：個人成長的故事”。概括文本大意可知，本不喜歡寫作的“我”在老師的鼓勵下，通過自己的努力，不但嘗試參加了寫作比賽，而且通過自己的堅持不懈完成了參賽作品，實現(xiàn)了自我突破。由此我們可以推斷出，“我”寫這篇文章的意圖是表達對老師的感激：感激老師的鼓勵和幫助讓“我”意識到心之所愿，無所不成。所以續(xù)寫部分應(yīng)該是作品獲獎和感恩老師。
3.研判故事的語言風(fēng)格和語言特色本文的主體時態(tài)是一般過去時，續(xù)寫部分也應(yīng)該延續(xù)使用。文本中運用了以下豐富的句式：(1)When I was in middle schl，my scial studies teacher asked me t enter a writing cntest.I said n withut thinking.(時間狀語從句；非謂語動詞)(2)Writing was s difficult and painful fr me that my teacher had allwed me t present my paper n the sinking f the Titanic by acting ut a play，where I played all the parts.N ne laughed harder than he did.(動名詞作主語；結(jié)果狀語從句；定語從句；“否定詞＋比較級”表示最高級)
(3) did he suddenly frce me t d smething at which I was sure t fail？(定語從句)(4)Encuraged by his wrds，I agreed t give it a try.(過去分詞短語作狀語)(5)If I didn’t win，I wuldn’t care.(虛擬語氣)由以上句子可知文本中分詞作狀語、狀語從句、虛擬語氣等句式的綜合運用使得語言具有一定的豐富性。配合著短句，形成了長短句結(jié)合的節(jié)奏感。除了這些句式以外，文章還通過對主人公動作鏈的描寫以及心理描寫等豐富了細節(jié)，刻畫了主人公在情感上對待英語寫作的轉(zhuǎn)變。續(xù)寫部分的文風(fēng)也要延續(xù)這些才行。
(2022·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。It was the day f the big crss-cuntry run.Students frm seven different primary schls in and arund the small twn were warming up and walking the rute(路線) thrugh thick evergreen frest.
I lked arund and finally sptted David，wh was standing by himself ff t the side by a fence.He was small fr ten years ld.His usual big tthy smile was absent tday.I walked ver and asked him why he wasn’t with the ther children.He hesitated and then said he had decided nt t run.What was wrng? He had wrked s hard fr this event!I quickly searched the crwd fr the schl’s cach and asked him what had happened.“I was afraid that kids frm ther schls wuld laugh at him，” he explained uncmfrtably.“I gave him the chice t run r nt，and let him decide.”
I bit back my frustratin(懊惱).I knew the cach meant well—he thught he was ding the right thing.After making sure that David culd run if he wanted，I turned t find him cming twards me，his small bdy rcking frm side t side as he swung his feet frward.David had a brain disease which prevented him frm walking r running like ther children，but at schl his classmates thught f him as a regular kid.He always participated t the best f his ability in whatever they were ding.That was why nne f the children thught it unusual that David had decided t jin the crss-cuntry team.
It just tk him lnger—that’s all.David had nt missed a single practice，and althugh he always finished his run lng after the ther children，he did always finish.As a special educatin teacher at the schl，I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was prud f his strng determinatin.注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。
一、淺層的信息定位閱讀文本并完成下列表格
David，I (a special educatin teacher)，the cach
n the day f the big crss-cuntry run
at the starting line
Thugh David practiced hard，he decided nt t take part in the crss-cuntry run.
David had a brain disease and he was wrried that students frm ther schls might laugh at him.
二、深層的文本分析1.理清故事的發(fā)展脈絡(luò)細讀文本，梳理文章的情節(jié)線和情感線，如下：(1)情節(jié)線：選手們在起跑線前熱身→David獨自站在遠離跑道的籬笆前→“我”詢問David和教練為什么David放棄比賽→“我”非常了解David面對的挑戰(zhàn)并為他的堅強感到自豪(2)情感線：happy→ →frustrated→___________
2.明確文本的主旨大意和寫作意圖(1)本文的主題語境屬于“ ”。文章講述了___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
學(xué)校正在舉辦越野賽，參賽選手是來自七所小學(xué)的學(xué)生。其中一名學(xué)生David患有腦部疾病，走路和跑步和其他學(xué)生不太一樣。同學(xué)校的學(xué)生們和他相處很和諧，并不覺得他有什么不一樣的。因此，David很自然地報名參加了比賽。但是，教練害怕來自其他學(xué)校的學(xué)生嘲笑David，讓他自己決定是否參加比賽，此時David猶豫了。“我”作為學(xué)校的特殊教育老師，清楚地知道David面對的挑戰(zhàn)。
(2)寫作意圖：_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.研判故事的語言風(fēng)格和語言特色(1)本文的主體時態(tài)是 ，續(xù)寫部分也應(yīng)該延續(xù)使用。
在“我”的鼓勵下，David參加比賽并獲獎，實現(xiàn)了個人突破。
(2)文本中運用了定語從句、名詞性從句、狀語從句、非謂語動詞等高級句式，并運用了豐富的動作描寫和情感描寫的句子，請找出來。
答案　運用了定語從句的句子：I lked arund and finally sptted David，wh was standing by himself ff t the side by a fence.David had a brain disease which prevented him frm walking r running like ther children，but at schl his classmates thught f him as a regular kid.
運用了名詞性從句的句子：I walked ver and asked him why he wasn’t with the ther children.He hesitated and then said he had decided nt t run.I quickly searched the crwd fr the schl’s cach and asked him what had happened.He always participated t the best f his ability in whatever they were ding.That was why nne f the children thught it unusual that David had decided t jin the crss-cuntry team.
運用了狀語從句的句子：Althugh he always finished his run lng after the ther children，he did always finish.運用了非謂語動詞的句子：After making sure that David culd run if he wanted，I turned t find him cming twards me，his small bdy rcking frm side t side as he swung his feet frward.
運用了動作描寫和情感描寫的句子：His usual big tthy smile was absent tday.He explained uncmfrtably.I bit back my frustratin(懊惱).As a special educatin teacher at the schl，I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was prud f his strng determinatin.
[參考范文]We sat dwn next t each ther，but David wuldn’t lk at me. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Sitting n the radside with his head dwn，David kept silent.“I knw yu have made full preparatins fr the run，” I put my palm n his back and persuaded him t take part in the run.“Ignre what the players frm ther teams wuld say and I believe yu culd make it！” Hearing my wrds，David beamed a big smile，std up and mved twards the starting line.
I watched as David mved up t the starting line with the ther runners._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
I fllwed him t the starting line.Lking at his determined face，I was tuched by his curage.When the run began，every runner rushed frward like a flash after hearing the starting pistl.Thugh trying hard，David was left far behind.Hwever，he went all ut t keep up with the thers，his small bdy rcking frm side t side，shwing n sign f giving up.Wrn ut，David reached the finishing line and all the students cheered up fr him.“Cngratulatins！”The cach came clser and prudly claimed.David shwed his usual big tthy smile.
對所給文本后面的故事情節(jié)及故事結(jié)尾的推斷是寫好讀后續(xù)寫的前提。高考所給的讀后續(xù)寫形式是半開放性的，這種形式既可以讓考生充分發(fā)揮想象力，又能讓考生有章可循?？衫谩皟啥问拙涠ㄒ豢?，二框二首正能量”確定續(xù)寫方向：
技法二　根據(jù)首句　構(gòu)建情節(jié)框架
續(xù)寫兩段的內(nèi)容框架確定下來以后，再根據(jù)續(xù)寫銜接原則來確定四句話的內(nèi)容(參考前面“4個銜接”原則)：確定以上內(nèi)容后，我們可以通過逆向思維的方式按以下步驟在草稿紙上寫出這些內(nèi)容：Step 1：寫第二段尾句(主題升華句)；Step 2：寫第一段尾句；Step 3：根據(jù)第一段首句寫第一段的第二句；
Step 4：根據(jù)第二段首句寫第二段的第二句；Step 5：補全續(xù)寫每段的中間細節(jié)內(nèi)容(技法三中講解)。還可以簡單畫幾條線設(shè)計一個作業(yè)紙來完成這一步驟：
文本材料見技法一[典例展示](2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)[定續(xù)寫情節(jié)框架]
[寫續(xù)寫銜接句]Step 1：主題升華句(段尾句)：(1)從感恩老師和老師的鼓勵的角度來寫①N mre wrds culd cnvey my gratitude t him.It was he wh made me realize nthing is impssible t a willing heart.②Since then，my teacher’s encuraging wrds，just like a lighthuse in the mist，wuld always be lighting in the sky f my life.③Then he pinted that my passin，devtin and persistence cntributed t my success.“Just like the hrse yu wrte，he gt tired and had dubts，but he kept ging.”
④I benefit a lt frm my lved teacher.His painstaking care and encuragement will influence my lifetime.⑤After that，his wrds have eched in my ears fr many years，and every time I start writing，I will think f my teacher.He taught me hw t believe in myself and guided me twards a bright future.(2)從個人努力的角度來寫①Frm then n，nt nly did I have a gd cmmand f writing，but I als knew the truth—fear never builds the future，but hpe des.②Only then did I realize that it was bravery and determinatin that can cnquer all the difficulties.Hard wrk paid ff eventually.
Step 2：銜接句1(第一段尾句)第二段第一句說領(lǐng)獎后“我”去了老師的辦公室，因此第一段尾句要涉及頒獎并提到老師。①When the award presentatin finished，I felt a mixture f feelings.I wanted t say smething t my teacher.②With the prize cup in ne hand and award certificate in the ther hand，I threw my eyes at my teacher，wh gave me a thumbs-up，with his eyes twinkling with pleasure and pride.It was at that mment that I was verwhelmed with gratitude t my teacher.
③I explained why I chse this special subject and even acted ut ne-rle play as Revere’s hrse n the stage，which made the audience laugh ut.In the end，I shwed my gratitude t the hrse rider—my scial studies teacher.④Everything went smthly and I was surrunded by flwers and applause.Hwever，the persn with whm I desired t share my jy was my teacher.⑤Patiently and cnfidently，I tld the audience hw I nce didn’t lve writing and nw enjyed writing and hw I realized the value f perseverance with the help f my teacher.
Step 3：銜接句2(第一段首句后的第一句)第一段所給首句是“A few weeks later，when I almst frgt the cntest，there came the news.”(幾個星期后，當(dāng)我?guī)缀跬洷荣惖臅r候，傳來了消息)。所以接著得寫消息的內(nèi)容，此消息一定和獲獎有關(guān)，再根據(jù)續(xù)寫情感要積極的原則，應(yīng)該是獲得非常高的獎項，告知此消息的方式可以多樣，電話告知，同學(xué)告知，老師宣布等都可以，也可以不提，直接寫消息的內(nèi)容即可。
①It was exciting t learn that I had gained the first prize and an award ceremny wuld be held in three days.②I received a phne call，and it was frm the rganizatin that said I had wn the grand prize.③“Yu wn the first prize in the writing cntest，” ne f my classmates rushed t my desk.④The mment I saw my name n the tp f the first prize list，surprise and jy ccupied my mind.
⑤My teacher walked int the classrm，a shining bright smile being n his face, annuncing I wn the first place in the writing cntest when everyne was surprised in disbelief firstly but then gave me thunderus applause.
Step 4：銜接句3(第二段首句后的第一句)第二段所給首句是“I went t my teacher’s ffice after the award presentatin.”(頒獎后我去了老師的辦公室)。所以應(yīng)該接著寫“我”到辦公室后的所見、所說、所做。也可以寫“我”走進辦公室后，老師見到“我”的反應(yīng)。①“Thank yu very much！” I shwed my certificate t him with my eyes watering，“Withut yu，I culdn’t have dne it.”
②Bathed in the enjyment，he waved at me and expressed his cngratulatins.③The teacher walked twards me excitedly and gave me a big hug，saying，“Cngratulatins，by.”
(2021·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISEThe twins were filled with excitement as they thught f the surprise they were planning fr Mther’s Day.Hw pleased and prud Mther wuld be when they brught her breakfast in bed.They planned t make French tast and chicken prridge.They had watched their mther in the kitchen.There was nthing t it.Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what t d.
The big day came at last.The alarm rang at 6 pair went dwn the stairs quietly t the kitchen.They decided t bil the prridge first.They put sme rice int a pt f water and left it t bil while they made the French tast.Jeff brke tw eggs int a plate and added in sme milk.Jenna fund the bread and put tw slices int the egg mixture.Next，Jeff turned n the secnd stve burner t heat up the frying pan.Everything was ging smthly until Jeff started frying the bread.The pan was t ht and the bread turned black within secnds.Jenna threw the burnt piece int the sink and put in the ther slice f bread.This time，she turned dwn the fire s it cked nicely.
Then Jeff nticed steam shting ut f the pt and the lid starting t shake.The next minute，the prridge biled ver and put ut the fire.Jenna panicked.Thankfully，Jeff stayed calm and turned ff the gas quickly.But the stve was a mess nw.Jenna tld Jeff t clean it up s they culd cntinue t ck the rest f the prridge.But Jeff’s hand tuched the ht burner and he gave a cry f pain.Jenna made him put his hand in cld water.Then she caught the smell f burning.Oh dear! The piece f bread in the pan had turned black as well.注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。
[定續(xù)寫情節(jié)框架]請根據(jù)“兩段首句定一框，二框二首正能量”的方法來確定續(xù)寫兩段的內(nèi)容框架。
根據(jù)第一段所給的段首句“As the twins lked arund them in disappintment，their father appeared.”使用“兩段首句定一框”策略可以推斷出，續(xù)寫的第一段應(yīng)寫爸爸進來后看到廚房里混亂的狀況(所見)，告訴孩子們他親自幫他們來做早餐(所說)，并帶著他們開始行動(所做)。由第二段首句“The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and wke their mther up.”可知，第一段最后應(yīng)寫孩子們準備好了早餐，所以很高興(所感)。
再根據(jù)“二框二首正能量”策略，確定第二段的內(nèi)容應(yīng)是媽媽見到早餐后吃驚的反應(yīng)，表示感謝，擁抱孩子們等(所見、所說、所做等)。
Seeing the mess in the kitchen，he immediately understd what had happened，but he wasn’t upset.
Befre lng，the prridge was ready.Their father instructed them t fry the rest f the bread.Sn，the bread was ready，t.
Opening her eyes，she culdn’t believe what she had seen.
Their father was standing in the drway，recrding this tuching scene.The whle rm was bathed in a happy Mther’s Day atmsphere.
As the twins lked arund them in disappintment，their father appeared.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Seeing the mess in the kitchen，he immediately understd what had happened，but he wasn’t upset.Instead，he applied sme medicine t Jeff’s hand，and then set ut t help them clean up the mess，thrwing away the burnt tast.Next，they began t make breakfast，and by nw the twins lked cheerful.Befre lng，the prridge was ready.Their father instructed them t fry the rest f the bread.Sn，the breakfast was ready，t.
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and wke their mther up.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Opening her eyes，she culdn’t believe what she had seen.Befre she culd ask any questin，their father turned up and tld his wife abut hw the twins had made preparatins t give her the surprise breakfast，and what truble they had gne thrugh when making the prridge and tast.Disbelief gave way t excitement and pride.Hugging them in her arms，she said，“Thank yu，children.It’s such an unfrgettable Mther’s Day fr me.”
一、“STEAL”法則
技法三　圍繞主旨　確定續(xù)寫細節(jié)
續(xù)寫部分中的主要人物的所說、所思、所感、所做和所見就是續(xù)寫中間部分要增加的內(nèi)容細節(jié)，這“五所”都需要用不同的細節(jié)描寫來體現(xiàn)。而且其中一個人物的這“五所”，也會有另一人物的反應(yīng)(Respnse)，也會成為增加的細節(jié)內(nèi)容。
二、增加細節(jié)的原則1.Actin—Respnse原則：一個人物的所言、所行、所感和所想會引起其他人物的一系列反應(yīng)。每段對話1－2句，不一定兩個人都要說話，無聲的動作也是一種respnse。2.Cnflict—Slutin原則：一般而言，第二段會有問題的slutin。(同時思考：能否在第一段出現(xiàn)一個問題，然后把它解決了或者沒有解決。一方面是增加看點，另一方面也是給第二段作鋪墊。)
3.Negative—Psitive原則：寫作中一定要有情感的變化，無論前面是怎樣的情感，最終都應(yīng)該是積極的。根據(jù)以上原則，續(xù)寫的每一段一般需要增加5－8個細節(jié)，所以又稱為“5·8細節(jié)法”。
三、伏筆與照應(yīng)(freshadwing-eching)除了上面提到的“5·8細節(jié)法”外，在閱讀文本的時候，也可以留意一些細節(jié)句子，看這些內(nèi)容是否能夠在續(xù)寫中用到，這就是我們常說的“伏筆(freshadw)與照應(yīng)(ech)”。伏筆與照應(yīng)的巧妙運用可以極大地增加語篇的思想深度和文學(xué)效果。
文本材料見技法一[典例展示](2023·新課示Ⅰ，Ⅱ)[增加續(xù)寫細節(jié)]
[伏筆與照應(yīng)]1.原文中當(dāng)老師讓“我”參加比賽時，“我”的反應(yīng)是馬上拒絕“I said n withut thinking.I did nt lve writing.”，續(xù)寫第一段中“我”得到獲獎消息后增加了自信，可以寫“The recgnitin cleared all my self-dubt and filled up my lack f self-cnfidence greatly.”，這樣就自然地照應(yīng)了文本中的伏筆內(nèi)容。2.原文第二段最后提到“Encuraged by his wrds，I agreed t give it a try.”，因此續(xù)寫的第一段作者在領(lǐng)獎時會想到老師的鼓勵，所以可以寫“The encuragement frm my scial studies teacher came int my mind.”來呼應(yīng)原文。
3.原文第四段提到“I asked my lder sister t crrect my grammar.”，故在第一段續(xù)寫中可以寫得知獲獎消息后第一時間分享給姐姐來照應(yīng)。4.原文中多次提及老師的笑。第一次“N ne laughed harder than he did.”；第二次“When I handed in the essay t my teacher，he read it，laughed ut lud，and said...”。第一次是被有趣的場景逗笑，第二次是看到“我”寫的文章而發(fā)笑。那么，我們在續(xù)寫中可以延續(xù)老師的笑。第二段老師打開辦公室的門見到“我”后高興的樣子可以寫“N ne laughed harder than he did in the ffice.But this time，instead f playing jkes n me，he cnveyed his sincere appreciatin f my achievements in that laughter.”。
5.原文第一段提到“My family came frm Brazil，s English was nly my secnd language.”，因此續(xù)寫第二段的結(jié)尾時可以寫“N lnger did I feel inferir t thers as a secnd language learner...”；原文第一段提到“I did nt lve writing.”，因此續(xù)寫第二段的結(jié)尾時可以寫“ never did I feel s keen n writing frm then n.”。
6.原文中多次提到“馬”，比如“I chse Paul Revere’s hrse as my subject.”“frm the hrse’s muth”“But，like Revere’s hrse，I kept ging.”。既然主人公參賽的作品是從“馬”的角度來敘述的，那么我們可以在續(xù)寫結(jié)尾處以“馬”來比喻主人公未來不知疲倦地繼續(xù)寫作之路“Despite the challenges and dds laying ahead，I never stpped writing，like Revere’s hrse never stpped speeding that night.”。
(2020·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。The Meredith family lived in a small cmmunity.As the ecnmy was in decline，sme peple in the twn had lst their jbs.Many f their families were struggling t make ends meet.Peple were trying t help each ther meet the challenges.
Mrs Meredith was a mst kind and thughtful wman.She spent a great deal f time visiting the pr.She knew they had prblems，and they needed all kinds f help.When she had time，she wuld bring fd and medicine t them.One mrning she tld her children abut a family she had visited the day befre.There was a man sick in bed，his wife，wh tk care f him and culd nt g ut t wrk，and their little by.The little by—his name was Bernard—had interested her very much.
“I wish yu culd see him，” she said t her wn children，Jhn，Harry，and Clara.“He is such a help t his mther.He wants very much t earn sme mney，but I dn’t see what he can d.” After their mther left the rm，the children sat thinking abut Bernard.“I wish we culd help him t earn mney，” said Clara.“His family is suffering s much.” “S d I，” said Harry.“We really shuld d smething t assist them.”
Fr sme mments，Jhn said nthing，but，suddenly，he sprang t his feet and cried，“I have a great idea！I have a slutin that we can all help accmplish(完成).” The ther children als jumped up all attentin.When Jhn had an idea，it was sure t be a gd ne.“I tell yu what we can d，” said Jhn.“Yu knw that big bx f crn Uncle Jhn sent us？Well，we can make ppcrn(爆米花)，and put it int paper bags，and Bernard can take it arund t the huses and sell it.” 注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。
答案Para.1：媽媽自豪→所感　　　　分配任務(wù)→所說喜接任務(wù)→所感/所做 著手忙碌→所做找來Bernard→所做 告訴真相→所說/所聞見到成果→所見 感動而泣→所感/所做
Para.2：懷抱爆米花→所做 集市處叫賣→所說/所做吸引一群人→所見 貨物售光→所見賺得一大筆錢→所做 歡喜速回家→所感/所做感激一家人→所說/所感 努力有回報→所感
[伏筆與照應(yīng)]1.[原文伏筆信息]“I wish yu culd see him，” she said t her wn children，Jhn，Harry，and Clara.[第一段續(xù)寫照應(yīng)]______________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.[原文伏筆信息]Well，we can make ppcrn(爆米花)，and put it int paper bags...[第一段續(xù)寫照應(yīng)]______________________________________________________________________________________________________________
When cming back，she brught Bernard with her wh had been tld everything.
Immediately，the children were busy making ppcrn when their mther went ut.
3.[原文伏筆信息]He wants very much t earn sme mney.[第二段續(xù)寫照應(yīng)]______________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.[原文伏筆信息]Mrs Meredith was a mst kind and thughtful wman.[第二段續(xù)寫照應(yīng)]______________________________________________________________________________________________________________
In n time，Bernard sld ut all ppcrn and earned quite sme mney.
On returning，he thanked the Meredith family with tears in his eyes.
When Mrs Meredith heard f Jhn’s idea，she thught it was a gd ne，t._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
S she praised Jhn fr his prpsal，and ffered him sme advice.Very sn the children were busy ppping the crn，while their mther went ut t buy the paper bags.When she came back，she brught Bernard with her.All the children came surrunding Bernard and they gave a basket t Bernard.The basket was full f paper bags which were filled with ppcrn.
With everything ready，Bernard started ut n his new business.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
And much sner than culd be expected，Bernard returned with an empty basket.Never befre had he earned s much mney in his life.When he fund that it was all t be his，he was s happy that he culd hardly speak，but his bright smiling face spke fr him.Peple began t watch fr the “l(fā)ittle ppcrn by”，wh earned sme mney t take hme every week.All this was because f Jhn’s bright idea.?
讀后續(xù)寫評分標準第五檔和第四檔首先要求內(nèi)容豐富完整，這樣文章讀起來才舒服流暢。完整是指要點齊全，豐富就是把這些要點充實地表達出來，這就要求考生具備熟練駕馭語言的能力，自然地道地運用高級句式和復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)，使我們添加的細節(jié)句從“骨感”到“豐盈”，化平凡為驚喜。我們?nèi)绻莆樟艘韵旅钫校湍苓_到這些要求。
技法四　打磨潤色　完成讀后續(xù)寫
妙招1　 善用高級句式1.無靈主語句[結(jié)構(gòu)1]　A wave f＋表情緒的名詞＋特定的動詞(短語)＋sb
(1)Uncntrllably，a wave f regret washed ver me as I heard the bad news.聽到這個壞消息時，一股悔恨的情緒無法控制地涌上我的心頭。(2)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)A wave f astnishment swept ver me.一陣驚愕席卷了我。(3)(2023·山東聊城二模)A wave f warmth surged ver Jennifer’s heart.一陣暖意涌上詹妮弗的心頭。(4)A wave f panic seized her，but she frced herself t leave the huse calmly.她感到一陣驚慌，但強迫自己安靜地離開了房間。
[結(jié)構(gòu)2]　The sight/thught f sth＋made＋sb＋表情緒的形容詞The sight/thught f sth＋filled＋sb＋with＋表情緒的名詞
(1)(2021·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)The sight f the breakfast tray made her shcked. 看到早餐托盤，她大吃一驚。(2)(2023·山東平度二模)The thught f parting with the little creature made Mrs Grant sad because the children lved it very much.一想到要和這個小家伙分開，格蘭特太太就很難過，因為孩子們非常喜歡它。
(3)The thught f the mment shared with my grandpa filled me with great jy.一想到和爺爺一起度過的時光，我就很快樂。注意：此句式也可以變?yōu)锳t the sight/thught f sth，sb did...，如上句可以換為：At the thught f the mment shared with my grandpa，I became greatly jyful.
[結(jié)構(gòu)3]　Sth struck/hit/ccurred t sb.某人突然想到某事。It struck/hit/ccurred t sb that...某人突然想到某事。(1)(2021·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)A gd idea struck the twins that they culd ask their father fr help.雙胞胎突然想到一個好主意，他們可以向父親求助。(2)(2023·山西忻州一模)It never ccurred t me that smething like this wuld happen t my sn years later.我從來沒有想過這樣的事情會在多年后發(fā)生在我兒子身上。
2.非謂語動詞句式[結(jié)構(gòu)1]　分詞作狀語，sb＋謂語...分詞作狀語，sb＋連續(xù)謂語A...＋B...＋and C...(形成動作鏈)(1)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)Patting my shulder，he smiled，“It is yur effrts that cunt mst.”他拍了拍我的肩膀，笑著說：“你的努力才是最重要的?！?2)Having experienced s many failures ne after anther，she finally picked herself up.接連經(jīng)歷那么多次失敗后，她終于振作起來了。
(3)(2023·山西運城二模)After filling ut sixty applicatins，ging thrugh three interviews，and winning just ne ffer，I tk what I culd get：t teach in a remte area in western New Jersey.在填寫了60份申請表，經(jīng)過了三次面試，只贏得了一份工作后，我接受了我能得到的：去新澤西州西部的一個偏遠地區(qū)教書。(4)(2023·湖南衡陽二模)Thinking that he culd die any minute，I stpped my car，rushed t him，and carefully examined his breath.想到他隨時可能死去，我停下車，沖到他身邊，仔細檢查他的呼吸。
(5)(2023·廣東佛山模擬)Encuraged by her，I tk a deep breath，pened my muth and sang ut as ludly as I culd.在她的鼓勵下，我深吸了一口氣，張開嘴，盡可能大聲地唱了出來。
[結(jié)構(gòu)2]　with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)：with＋賓語＋賓補(非謂語/形容詞/副詞/介詞短語)(1)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)There was nbdy inside.I slipped in and gingerly set the prize cup n my teacher’s desk with a nte attached，saying，“It’s a glry fr bth f us！Yur inspiratin seems a beacn guiding my way ahead.” 里面沒有人。我溜進去，小心翼翼地把獎杯放在老師的桌子上，并附上一張紙條，上面寫著：“這是我們倆的榮耀！你的鼓舞就像指引我前進的燈塔?！?br/>(2)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)“Thank yu very much！” I shwed my certificate t him with my eyes watering，“Withut yu，I culdn’t have dne it.” “非常感謝！”我眼含熱淚把我的證書給他看，“沒有你，我不可能做到?！?3)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)On hearing f the unexpected news，she was s surprised that she frze with her muth wide pen.聽到這個意外的消息，她驚訝得目瞪口呆。(4)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)With tears in my eyes，I said t him，“I wuld like t express my heartfelt gratitude t yu fr yur timely help.”我含著眼淚對他說：“我要向您表示衷心的感謝，感謝您的及時幫助?！?br/>[結(jié)構(gòu)3]　獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)：邏輯主語(表身體部位的名詞)＋非謂語/形容詞/副詞/介詞短語(1)The by rushed t the ld man’s huse，his face cvered with sweat.男孩沖到那位老人的家里，滿臉是汗。(2)As we hugged Ruth gdbye，she said nthing，her eyes filled with tears.當(dāng)我們和魯思擁抱告別時，她什么都沒說，眼里噙滿了淚水。(3)A yung man std in the street，hlding a small red flag，his face red with cld.一個年輕人站在街上，舉著一面小紅旗，他的臉凍得通紅。
(4)He raced t the bus stp，his heart punding vilently.他飛快地跑到公共汽車站，心怦怦猛跳。(5)Her eyes glittering with relief，my mther embraced me tightly.媽媽眼睛里閃現(xiàn)出欣慰的神色，緊緊地抱住了我。(6)My arms aching and knees trembling，I crawled ut f the cave and shuted fr help.手臂疼痛，膝蓋發(fā)抖，我爬出了洞，大喊救命。(7)S many eyes lking at her，Mary felt very shy.這么多雙眼睛盯著她，瑪麗感到很害羞。
(8)His heart filled with regret，he aplgized fr what he had dne.內(nèi)心充滿懊悔，他為自己所做的事情道歉。
3.副詞/形容詞/介詞短語作狀語的句式[結(jié)構(gòu)]　副詞/形容詞/介詞短語，sb＋謂語＋嵌入式介詞短語＋謂語...(1)(2023·山東濟南一模)I had gne ut t visit my friend living in anther cunty，but unfrtunately I gt stuck and was unable t drive further.我出去拜訪住在另一個縣的朋友，但不幸的是我被困住了，不能再往前開了。(2)(2023·吉林長春質(zhì)監(jiān))Obviusly，Callie had shared her ckie with my angel.很明顯，凱麗和我的小天使分享了她的餅干。
(3)Speechless with happiness，she held her sn tightly int her arms，with tears welling up in her eyes.她高興得說不出話來，雙臂緊緊地摟著她的兒子，熱淚盈眶。(4)Tired and hungry，they rushed int the shp and drank tea，ate biscuits and had a gd rest.又累又餓，他們就沖進商店里，喝茶，吃餅干，好好休息了一下。(5)Safe and sund，Mary gt ut f the frest and saw her husband with the help f a helicpter.在直升機的幫助下，瑪麗安然無恙地出了森林，見到了她的丈夫。
(6)(2023·湖南衡陽二模)In excitement，they held my hands，with a lump in their thrats.他們激動地握著我的手，哽咽著。(7)The helicpter，as expected，finally arrived.直升機終于如期到來了。(8)The bear，in return，yelled with an angry rar.那頭熊回應(yīng)了一聲憤怒的咆哮。
4.三大從句[結(jié)構(gòu)1]　常用定語從句：主句，which...(非限制性定語從句)主句，whse＋表身體部位的名詞＋謂語...主語，嵌入句中的定語從句，＋謂語...(1)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ) I firstly expressed my gratitude t my lved teacher and said，“What yu said gave me a great deal f encuragement，which inspired my mtivatin t write.I wuldn’t have wn the place withut yur help.” 我首先對我敬愛的老師表示感謝，并說：“您的話給了我很大的鼓勵，激發(fā)了我寫作的動力。沒有您的幫助，我不可能贏得這個名次?！?br/>(2)(2023·山東濰坊一模)Walking int the kitchen，I met my wife Laura，whse frwn indicated I’d missed smething.走進廚房，我遇到了我的妻子勞拉，她的皺眉表明我錯過了什么。(3)Mther hugged the twins tightly，whse faces were glwing with excitement.媽媽緊緊地擁抱雙胞胎，他們興奮得滿臉通紅。(4)Eagerly，the twins gazed at their mther，whse eyes were filled with tears f thrill.雙胞胎熱切地注視著媽媽，她的眼里充滿激動的淚水。
(5)Jhn，whse heart was racing wildly，stepped nt the stage and began his speech.約翰的心狂跳著，邁步走上舞臺，開始他的演講。(6)Bears，which are usually slitary creatures，can be dangerus.熊通常是獨居動物，會很危險。(7)My glasses，withut which I was like a blind man，fell t the grund and brke.我的眼鏡掉在地上摔壞了，沒有眼鏡的我就像個盲人。
[結(jié)構(gòu)2]　常用名詞性從句：what引導(dǎo)的主語從句或賓語從句That’s/This is/It’s why引導(dǎo)的表語從句(1)(2023·山西太原二模)What he said made me hesitate.Shuld I cunt n such a green hand？他說的話使我猶豫了。我能指望這樣一個新手嗎？(2)(2023·山東濟南二模)Since he cntinued speaking abut wanting t share his paintings with the wrld，I knew what had t be dne.因為他一直說想要與世人分享他的畫，我就知道必須要做什么。
(3)(2023·河北保定一模)That’s why Anna was surprised the fllwing day when Bbby had made several ads.這就是第二天鮑比做了幾個廣告時安娜感到驚訝的原因。
[結(jié)構(gòu)3]　常用狀語從句：讓步狀語從句　形容詞＋as＋主語＋謂語結(jié)果狀語從句：(1)Cld and tired thugh we were，the kids’ smiling faces cheered us up.雖然我們又冷又累，但孩子們的笑臉使我們振奮起來。(2)Reluctant as I was，I had n chice but t wash the dishes as tld.盡管我不情愿，但我別無選擇只能按囑咐洗碗。(3)(2023·湖北七市調(diào)研)Ezri and Oliver were s keen t climb the muntain that they begged t jin their dad Brandn fr anther hike.埃茲里和奧利弗非?？释郎线@座山，他們請求和他們的父親布蘭登一起再徒步旅行一次。
5.倒裝句式[結(jié)構(gòu)]　常用倒裝句式1.完全倒裝　副詞/介詞短語＋謂語＋主語2.部分倒裝　否定詞＋be/助動詞/情態(tài)動詞＋主語＋謂語Only＋副詞/介詞短語/狀語從句＋be/助動詞/情態(tài)動詞＋主語＋謂語S＋adj./adv.＋be/助動詞/情態(tài)動詞＋主語...＋ nly＋be/助動詞/情態(tài)動詞＋主語...＋but sner had＋主語＋dne...＋when/than...
(1)Away went the runners.賽跑選手們跑開了。(2)Nt until the rabbit gt cmpletely ut f ur sight did we stp chasing after it.直到那只兔子完全消失在我們的視線中，我們才停止追逐。(3)(2023·遼寧葫蘆島一模)Only after ne vercame the fear in his wn heart culd he embrace the real beauty f nature.只有當(dāng)一個人克服了內(nèi)心的恐懼，他才能擁抱真正的大自然之美。(4)(2022·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)Hwever，s determined was David that he ignred everything arund him，nly watching frward.然而，大衛(wèi)是如此堅定，他忽略了周圍的一切，只是看著前方。
(5)(2023·山西太原二模)I thanked him，saying that nt nly did he mend my shirt with his craftsmanship but he als repaired my dream with sprtsmanship.我感謝他，對他說，他不僅用手藝補好了我的襯衫，還用體育精神彌補了我的夢想。(6)(2020·浙江1月)Dad pened the bx and a sweet little dg appeared.Hardly had the little dg cme ut when Pppy came ver t lick it as if it were a lng-lst friend.爸爸打開盒子，一只可愛的小狗出現(xiàn)了。小狗剛出來，波比就過來舔它，好像它是一個久違的朋友。
6.強調(diào)句式[結(jié)構(gòu)]　It (1)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ) It was at that mment that I was verwhelmed with gratitude t my teacher.正是在那一刻，我對老師充滿了感激之情。(2)(2023·廣東深圳一調(diào))It was a reactin that she expected deep inside her heart.這正是她內(nèi)心深處所期待的反應(yīng)。(3)(2023·湖南懷化二模)Martin realized it was nt the quantity f friends but the quality that mattered.馬丁意識到重要的不是朋友的數(shù)量，而是質(zhì)量。
7.虛擬語氣[結(jié)構(gòu)1]　情態(tài)動詞(＋nt)＋have dne(1)(2023·廣東湛江一模)Maybe we left it in the buggy，r it might have fallen ut in the taxi? 也許我們把它落在嬰兒車里了，或者它掉在出租車里了？(2)(2023·河北滄州一模)“I’m srry，t，Mama.I shuld have believed what Shelly said when she tld me abut the watch，” I said t my Mama.“我也很抱歉，媽媽。當(dāng)雪莉告訴我手表的事時，我本應(yīng)該相信她的話?！蔽覍寢屨f。
(3)(2023·湖南常德模擬)I suddenly realized my mther must have hidden the Christmas presents smewhere in her bedrm.我突然意識到媽媽一定把圣誕禮物藏在她臥室的某個地方了。(4)(2023·吉林白山二模)If she had been the dancing queen，then I wuld have been the curt jester.如果她是舞后，那我就是宮廷弄臣了。(5)Remrsefully I thught t myself，“I shuldn’t have angered it.What a terrible try！”我懊悔地想：“不應(yīng)該惹怒它的。這真是個糟糕的嘗試！”
[結(jié)構(gòu)2]　if nly...要是……就好了(1)“If nly I had listened t my mther’s advice！” the little girl whispered t herself.“要是我當(dāng)初聽取了媽媽的建議該多好！”小女孩低聲對自己說。(2)Mm said delightedly，“If nly I culd have such a delicius breakfast every day！” 媽媽開心地說：“要是我每天都可以吃到這么美味的早餐就好了！”
[結(jié)構(gòu)3]　Withut ＋n.，sb wuld/culd/might (nt) have dne sth沒有……某人就(不)可能……(1)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)Withut his encuragement，I culdn’t have wn the prize.要是沒有他的鼓勵，我不可能獲獎。(2)Withut their father’s help，they wuldn’t have succeeded.沒有父親的幫忙，他們就不可能成功。
妙招2　 巧用情感細節(jié)描寫讀后續(xù)寫“5·8細節(jié)法”里面就有情感描寫，豐富的情感描寫會引起讀者的共鳴。下面表格中的情感描寫將會助力你的續(xù)寫。
妙招3　 適當(dāng)運用修辭手法靈活運用修辭手法有助于避免語言枯燥，提高語言表達效果，使續(xù)寫情節(jié)更為生動。常用的修辭手法有比喻、擬人和夸張等。1.明喻(simile)明喻是以兩種具有共同特征的事物或現(xiàn)象進行對比，表明本體和喻體的關(guān)系，常用的明喻標志詞有 like，as，as if等。常見的句型有：[結(jié)構(gòu)1]　主語＋be/謂語＋as＋形容詞＋as...(1)I reached ut t tuch her face，which was as cld as the ice.我伸手去摸她冰涼的臉。
(2)(2023·吉林白山二模)We laughed almst as hard as the peple wh were watching us.我們笑得幾乎和那些看著我們的人一樣厲害。(3)Her face turned as pale as snw.她的臉變得蒼白如雪。(4)The teacher’s cmfrt was as gentle as a spring breeze.老師的勸慰如春風(fēng)般溫柔。(5)At the sight f the bear，he went as white as a sheet.一看到那頭熊，他就面無血色。
(6)When we arrived at the lake eventually，we fund the water was as smth as glass.當(dāng)我們最終來到湖邊時，我們看到湖面水平如鏡。溫馨提示　在學(xué)習(xí)中有很多結(jié)構(gòu)都已經(jīng)當(dāng)作固定詞塊來記憶了，如：
[結(jié)構(gòu)2]　特定動詞短語＋表情緒的名詞，sb did sth like...
(1)(2023·安徽馬鞍山二監(jiān))Filled with fear，I walked frm the walking ledge t the ice like a leaf and there was nthing nearby t grab nt in rder t keep my balance.心里充滿了恐懼，我像樹葉一樣搖搖晃晃地從行走架到冰上走去，附近也沒有東西可以抓住以保持平衡。
(2)Falling int frustratin，Rse buried her face in arms like a deflated balln.滿心沮喪，羅斯把臉埋進雙臂，像泄了氣的氣球。(3)Drwned in happiness，Jimmy dashed ut f the schl gate like a free bird.吉米沉浸在歡樂里，像一只自由的小鳥一般沖出了校門。(4)Seized by curisity，Tm went ut f the rm n tipte like a cat.湯姆好奇心頓起，像貓一樣踮著腳走出房間。
(5)(2023·遼寧鞍山質(zhì)量監(jiān)測)Overwhelmed by anger and cnfusin，I shuted at Karina like a tiger，“Hw dare yu wish t destry such a wnderful frest？” 帶著滿腔的憤怒和困惑，我像只老虎一樣對卡瑞娜吼道：“你怎么敢想破壞這么美好的森林？”
[結(jié)構(gòu)3]　表情緒的名詞＋特定動詞短語＋sb like...
(1)Happiness washed ver him like warm sunshine/like a beam f warm sunlight/like a warm sunbeam.幸福像暖陽灑在他身上。(2)Anger tk hld f him like a wild beast.憤怒像野獸一樣控制了他。(3)Fear swept ver him like cld，dark sea water.恐懼像冰冷、黑暗的海水一樣淹沒了他。
2.暗喻(metaphr)暗喻是比喻修辭的一種，用一種事物比喻另一種事物，本體喻體都出現(xiàn)，中間常用喻詞“是”等連接，有時不用比喻詞。暗喻的典型形式為“甲是乙”而不用like，as等比喻詞。(1)Her hair was a flwing glden river streaming dwn her shulders.她的頭發(fā)像是一條流淌在她肩上的金色河流。(2)Life is an unexplred river，full f twists and turns.生活就像一條未被探索的河流，充滿著各種曲折。
(3)Laughter is the sun that drives winter frm the human face.笑是驅(qū)走人們臉上寒意的太陽。(4)I felt a lump in my thrat，tears welling up in my eyes.我如鯁在喉，淚水濕潤了眼眶。(5)The by was s hungry that he wlfed dwn the fd the kind-hearted wman brught.男孩太餓了，他狼吞虎咽地把好心的女士拿來的食物吃光了。
3.擬人(persnificatin)擬人就是賦予物以人的語言屬性。這種擬人化的修辭手法讀起來使人感到特別形象生動，富有情趣。(1)把自然現(xiàn)象當(dāng)作人來描寫The feathery snwflakes danced in the night air，making a beautiful picture.鵝毛般的雪花在夜空中飛舞，像一幅美麗的圖畫。The breeze gently kissed her cheeks.微風(fēng)輕柔地親吻著她的臉龐。The frest held its breath，and the trees seemed t listen intently.森林屏住呼吸，樹似乎在專心傾聽。
(2)把含蓄抽象的概念當(dāng)作人來描寫Fear seized/swallwed him.恐懼把他吞噬了。Anger chked my wrds.我氣得說不出話來。A gd idea suddenly struck me.我突然想到一個好主意。Anxiety trn him int pieces.焦慮把他撕成了碎片。
(3)把動物當(dāng)作人來描寫In the dead f night，the crickets played n the terrace f the huse.寂靜的夜里，蟋蟀們在房子的露臺上玩耍。Birds n the tree are singing a beautiful sng.樹上的小鳥正唱著一首美妙的歌曲。
4.夸張(hyperble)夸張是比喻修辭的一種，是以言過其實的說法達到強調(diào)的目的，它可以加強語勢，增加表達效果。She was half dead with fear.她嚇得半死。My heart sank when he left.當(dāng)他離開時，我的心一沉。It brught her heart int her muth.這讓她的心懸到了嗓子眼。
妙招4　 恰當(dāng)運用結(jié)尾升華句在讀后續(xù)寫中，結(jié)尾發(fā)揮著非常重要的作用，精彩的結(jié)尾好似畫龍點睛，讓人回味無窮。常見的結(jié)尾方式有景物描寫結(jié)尾、哲理性語言結(jié)尾、自然結(jié)尾等。根據(jù)文章的主題，借助豐富的句子結(jié)構(gòu)來打造完美結(jié)尾。下面簡要介紹一下常用的幾種讀后續(xù)寫的結(jié)尾方法。
1.首尾照應(yīng)法結(jié)尾與開頭照應(yīng)，有時可引用作者在開頭的觀點，甚至以與開頭語一模一樣的字眼結(jié)尾。結(jié)尾回到文章開頭闡明的中心思想或主題句上，深化主題，起到畫龍點睛的效果。但是注意一點，不要照搬開頭的句子，要變化句式或者用詞來表達相同的主題。(1)開頭：I had an interesting childhd.It was filled with surprises and amusements，all because f my mther—lving，sweet，yet absent-minded and frgetful.One strange family trip we tk when I was eleven tells a lt abut her.
結(jié)尾：Despite mm’s being absent-minded and frgetful，she is still a kind and nice mm.(2)開頭：It was summer，and my dad wanted t treat me t a vacatin like never befre.He decided t take me n a trip t the Wild West.結(jié)尾：Never had I had such a thrilling yet dangerus vacatin befre.The special trip t the Wild West was deeply engraved in my mind.(3)開頭：A funny thing happened t Arthur when he was n the way t wrk ne day.結(jié)尾：What a funny day！Arthur culdn’t stp laughing whenever he lked back n this funny experience.
2.哲理寓意法哲理式結(jié)尾，即在結(jié)尾用富含哲理性的語句總結(jié)全文，升華主旨，并給人以啟發(fā)。其一般用于引申文意，起到“言已盡而意無窮”的效果，使文章的中心更突出。同學(xué)們平?？梢苑e累一些富含哲理的段落或句子，若將之運用到文章的結(jié)尾，不僅能深化主題，而且能引人深思，給讀者以有益的啟迪。
(1)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ) Since then，my teacher’s encuraging wrds，just like a lighthuse in the mist，wuld always be lighting in the sky f my life.從那時起，老師鼓勵我的話語就像霧中的燈塔，永遠照亮著我生命的天空。(2)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)Only then did I realize that it was bravery and determinatin that can cnquer all the difficulties.Hard wrk paid ff eventually.那時我才明白，勇敢和決心可以戰(zhàn)勝一切困難。努力最終得到了回報。
(3)(2023·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)Frm then n，nt nly did I have a gd cmmand f writing，but I als knew the truth—fear never builds the future，but hpe des.從那時起，我不僅很好地掌握了寫作，而且我也知道了一個真理：恐懼永遠不會建立未來，但希望可以。(4) (2020·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)It is lve that makes the wrld g rund；just as a saying ges，“The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rse.” 是愛使世界轉(zhuǎn)動，正如一句諺語所說：“贈人玫瑰，手有余香?！?br/>(5)(2020·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ) It dawned n me that a mment f kindness culd mean s much t anther，and that a simple act culd make the wrld s much better.我突然意識到，那一刻的善意對另一個人來說意義重大，一個簡單的舉動可以讓世界變得更美好。
3.以景結(jié)情法在寫景結(jié)尾時，同學(xué)們要選擇具有美感的景物，在情景交融中回味文意，體會文章主旨。景物應(yīng)簡潔疏朗，結(jié)尾寫景抓住一兩個意象即可，景物過多顯得雜亂，沖淡了景物描寫的作用，難以表現(xiàn)景物中蘊含的情感，忌簡單羅列。(1)(2023·河北石家莊質(zhì)檢)With a shadw f a happy family cast n the windw，I felt my little sister was the best gift I’d ever gt.一個幸福家庭的影子投射在窗戶上，我覺得我的小妹妹是我得到的最好的禮物。
(2)N matter hw cld the winter was，all that they culd feel nw was the surpassing warmth.無論冬天多么寒冷，他們現(xiàn)在感受到的都是撲面而來的溫暖。(3)I believe in full blssm，Grandma’s sitting peacefully in the sun，every flwer carrying her previus hpe，with Grandpa beside her，giggling like a child.我相信在盛開的花朵中，奶奶正安詳?shù)刈陉柟庀?，每一朵花都承載著她以前的希望，爺爺在她身邊咯咯地笑著，像個孩子。
(4)The wind murmured in the trees and the sunlight flded in thrugh the windw，warming the whle rm，as if freezing ice was melted.風(fēng)在樹間低語，陽光透過窗戶灑進來，溫暖了整個房間，就像寒冰融化了。(5)In the heavy snw，passin and lve burnt as they hugged and smiled.在大雪中，當(dāng)他們擁抱并微笑時，激情和愛在燃燒。
4.對話收尾法對話式結(jié)尾指文章以對話結(jié)束，此對話的功能包括：緊扣主線、意味深長、反映人物心理、揭示謎底、首尾呼應(yīng)等。對話式結(jié)尾有時伴有相應(yīng)的動作收尾，因為說完話總會有肢體動作伴隨。使用這種結(jié)尾的前提是文章立意佳，否則就會弄巧成拙。(1)(2023·廣州天河區(qū)二模)She was s excited that she burst int tears and suddenly hugged me in her arms，sbbing，“This is the mst meaningful gift I have ever received，and the mst unfrgettable Christmas I have ever had！” 她激動得哭了起來，突然把我摟在懷里，抽泣著說：“這是我收到的最有意義的禮物，也是我度過的最難忘的圣誕節(jié)！”
(2)(2023·湖南衡陽質(zhì)檢)“That was pretty gd basketball match fr a math whiz，” said Len as he and Edward headed hme.“Just like yur math grade! It was a pretty gd grade fr a basketball all-star.” “對于一個數(shù)學(xué)天才來說，這真是一場精彩的籃球比賽，”萊昂和愛德華在回家的路上說?！熬拖衲愕臄?shù)學(xué)成績！對于一個籃球全明星來說，這是一個相當(dāng)不錯的成績。”
(3)(2023·吉林長春質(zhì)量監(jiān)測)On hearing that，her eyes widened with excitement and her muth pened.“Sissy (sister)! I lve yu t，” She said heartily，and the smile n her face shne like a diamnd.聽了這話，她興奮地瞪大了眼睛，張大了嘴。“妹妹！我也愛你?！?她由衷地說，臉上的笑容像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光。
(4)They hung all the things back t the wall.Jack asked Paisley，“Are yu really willing t lead a tugh life with me？” She patted away the ashes n hands and lked at the walls with lads f stuff n them with satisfactin，saying，“Yes! Fr me，it is nt a suffering t live.”他們把所有的東西都掛回墻上。杰克問佩斯利：“你真的愿意和我一起過艱難的生活嗎？”她拍了拍手上的灰，滿意地看著掛滿東西的墻，說：“是的！對我來說，這樣的生活并不是一種痛苦。”
5.回憶式結(jié)尾讀后續(xù)寫在末段經(jīng)常發(fā)出回憶式感慨，在一種輕松的環(huán)境中，回憶之前的經(jīng)歷也是一個不錯的選擇。常用這種句型來表達：Whenever I...，the sight f her ding sth will invariably appear vividly befre my eyes：...如：Whenever I stand lking abut n the steps leading t the rm，the sight f her saying gdbye t ur hme fr the last time will invariably appear vividly befre my eyes：Neatly dressed，she lked smewhat impatient and melanchly and meanwhile als seemed t feel quite hpeful abut things t cme.每當(dāng)我站在通向房間的臺階上向四周張望時，她最后一次告別我們家的情景總是歷歷在目：她穿戴整齊，顯得有些不耐煩和憂郁，同時又似乎對未來充滿希望。
6.主題升華法主題升華式結(jié)尾是指在續(xù)寫文章結(jié)尾時，通過一句高度精練的話來對主題進行升華，使文章主題上升到一定的高度，給讀者以啟示。這種話往往是一些名言或諺語。(1)助人型主題①(2020·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ) Frm then n，Bernard made up his mind t help smene wh needs help.Only in this way culd mre and mre peple help each ther in the future.從那時起，伯納德決定幫助需要幫助的人。只有這樣，將來才能有越來越多的人互相幫助。
②(2020·新課標Ⅰ，Ⅱ)He held the cins tightly，tears rlling dwn withut cntrl.It is lve that makes the wrld g arund，which Bernard felt deep in his heart.他緊緊地攥著硬幣，眼淚不受控制地流了下來。 正是愛讓世界轉(zhuǎn)動，伯納德在他的心里深深地感受到了這一點。③Whether rich r pr，we shuld be happy t d smething fr sciety.Thus we can learn that giving is the surce f happiness.無論貧富，我們都應(yīng)該樂于為社會做點什么。 因此，我們會知道付出是幸福的源泉。
④Smetimes，a small act f kindness may be pwerful enugh t make a huge difference.有時候小小的善行可能足以帶來巨大的改變。(2)成長型主題①As a prverb says，“Every cin has tw sides.” Making full use f yur strength is yur achievement.Please remember that in n case shuld yu give up，especially in truble.正如諺語所說，“事物都有兩面性?！背浞掷媚愕膬?yōu)勢就是你的成就。請記住，無論如何你都不要放棄，尤其是在困境中。
②It’s never t late t learn.Each individual has the right t accept mre challenges and make mre attempts.學(xué)習(xí)永遠為時不晚。每個人都有權(quán)利去接受更多的挑戰(zhàn)，做更多的嘗試。③Actually，every individual pssesses talent.Be brave when yu find it and als make effrts.Yu can create miracles in the end.事實上，每個人都有天賦。當(dāng)你發(fā)現(xiàn)它的時候要勇敢，也要付出努力。最終你會創(chuàng)造奇跡。④As lng as we dare t dream and dn’t let difficulties get in ur way，anything is pssible.只要我們敢于夢想，不被困難所阻擋，一切皆有可能。
⑤I smiled as I eventually realized the real surce f cnfidence.Nw，I am prud f what I lk like and much happier，because I have realized it is yur persnality that decides wh yu truly are.我笑了，因為我最終意識到了自信的真正來源?，F(xiàn)在，我為我的樣子感到驕傲，而且更快樂，因為我已經(jīng)意識到，決定你真正是誰的是你的個性。
(3)親情型主題①Smeday，when I am lder and have children f my wn，I hpe I can be just as great a parent as my mm.有一天，當(dāng)我長大了，有了自己的孩子，我希望我能成為和我媽媽一樣偉大的母親。②(2023·遼寧錦州質(zhì)檢)Ging thrugh hmelessness lets the family knw that there will always be bstacles，but nw with Dylan’s great news，the future lks much brighter than befre.無家可歸的經(jīng)歷讓這家人知道總會有困難，但現(xiàn)在有了迪倫的好消息，未來看起來比以前更加光明了。
③(2023·廣東佛山二模)It dawned n Alice that Dad was trying t tell her that rules are rules but lve between family members never fails.愛麗絲恍然大悟，爸爸是想告訴她，規(guī)則就是規(guī)則，但家庭成員之間的愛永不止息。④(2023·河北唐山保定一模)Time tk away s many happy mments f my family but left us smething mst imprtant—“Hney，everything will be just fine！” 時間帶走了我們家許多快樂的時刻，但留給我們最重要的東西——“親愛的，一切都會好起來的！”
⑤(2023·山東棗莊二模)With tears rlling dwn mther’s weather-beaten face，she smiled and scped her sn int her arms.淚水從母親飽經(jīng)風(fēng)霜的臉上滾落下來，她微笑著把兒子抱在懷里。(4)脫險型主題①She hugged her husband as tightly as pssible，t thrilled t say anything.What an unfrgettable experience! It turns ut that there’ s always a way ut as lng as we never give up ur hpe.她把丈夫緊緊地摟在懷里，激動得說不出話來。多么難忘的經(jīng)歷??！ 事實證明，只要我們不放棄希望，就總有辦法擺脫困境。
②Only then did I realize that actins can cure fear and bravery can cnquer difficulties.只有那時我才意識到，行動能治愈恐懼，勇敢能戰(zhàn)勝困難。③Never shuld we give up ur hpe whatever setbacks we are faced with.不管我們遇到什么樣的挫折，我們都不應(yīng)該放棄希望。④Never had I fallen int such a dangerus situatin befre.The experience was deeply engraved in my mind and reminded me t respect nature.過去我從來沒有遇到過那樣一種危險的情形。那次經(jīng)歷深深刻在我心中，它提醒我要尊重自然。
(5)人與動物主題①(2023·遼寧撫順一模)T her surprise，it lked as if all the peple in the hall had changed int her dll animals，and she even saw her smiling Zey the Zebra standing at the back.令她吃驚的是，大廳里的所有人似乎都變成了她的動物玩偶，她甚至看到微笑著站在后面的斑馬佐伊。②(2023·安徽皖南八校聯(lián)考)His wet dg smell lingered lnger and returned ften，reminding us f his herics and ur wn Christmas miracle.他那濕漉漉的狗味存留的時間更長了，而且還經(jīng)常出現(xiàn)，讓我們想起他的英雄事跡和我們自己的圣誕奇跡。
③Only when we humans and animals live tgether in perfect harmny can we live a peaceful life.只有當(dāng)我們?nèi)祟惡蛣游锖椭C相處時，我們才能過上平靜的生活。
Ⅰ.按要求完成下列句子1.“Dad，srry，it was such a mess.” Jeff murmured and lwered his head.(改為非謂語動詞作狀語)→“Dad，srry，it was such a mess.” Jeff murmured， girl was held by her mther and unwrapped her gift bx.(改為非謂語動詞作狀語)→ ，the girl unwrapped her gift bx.
lwering his
Held by her mther
3.The dg sat n the flr.(擴充句子)→The dg sat n the flr，_______________________ as if every time yu were mad at it.那只長著兩只大眼睛的可愛的狗靜靜地坐在地板上，使勁搖著尾巴，好像每次你對它生氣時都在請求你的原諒。4. ，with the guidance f father，they made the breakfast.令他們寬慰的是，在父親的指導(dǎo)下，他們成功做好了早餐。(完成句子)
with tw big eyes
its tail vilently
asking fr yur frgiveness
T their relief
successfully
5. ，their mther said in a sweet whisper，“Thanks，my kids.”母親既震驚又自豪，溫柔地低聲說：“謝謝，我的孩子們?！?形容詞作狀語)6.I std there and stared at it with tears rlling dwn my cheeks.(改為獨立主格)→I std there and stared at it, .
Shcked and prud
tears rlling dwn my cheeks
7.Tm delivered a speech n the stage t all the students and teachers present.(用定語從句擴充)→Tm， ，delivered a speech n the stage t all the students and teachers present.湯姆在臺上向在場的所有師生發(fā)表了演講，他的心怦怦直跳。8.David became determined t finish the race.(用as讓步狀語從句擴充)→ ，David became determined t finish the race.雖然大衛(wèi)有點緊張，但他決心要完成比賽。
whse heart punded wildly
Slightly nervus as he was
9. that she accidentally kncked ver the bx in an attempt t get clser.Pppy如此興奮，她想靠得更近，結(jié)果不小心撞倒了盒子。(倒裝結(jié)構(gòu))10.Whenever lking back n this incident，I feel extremely grateful t him. encuraged me t realize my ptential and thus changed the trajectry f my life.無論何時回想起這件事，我都非常感激他。是我的社會學(xué)老師鼓勵我認識到自己的潛力，從而改變了我的人生軌跡。(強調(diào)句)
S excited was Pppy
It was my scial studies teacher that/wh
11.當(dāng)彼得再一次看到這個無家可歸的男人，他感到無比愧疚和難過。(a wave f，verwhelm) as he saw the hmeless man and mentally exhausted，___________________________________with his eyes clsed.身心俱疲，他閉著眼睛像一根木頭一樣躺在地上。(比喻)
A wave f regret and sadness verwhelmed Peter
he lay n the grund like a lg f
13.Frm then n，the precius value f hard wrk tk deep rt in my heart， .(結(jié)尾升華句)從那以后，努力工作的珍貴價值深深扎根于我的心中，鼓勵著我在生活中繼續(xù)前進。
encuraging me t mve frward in my life
Ⅱ.完成續(xù)寫語篇運用所學(xué)的豐富的句式來潤色完成典例展示中的2023新課標卷的續(xù)寫。
[參考范文]A few weeks later，when I almst frgt the cntest，there came the news.__________________________________________________________ __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
T everyne’s surprise，I，an immigrant，wn the first place in the writing cntest.Hearing the gd news，I felt a sense f jy surging thrugh me.I leapt int the air and shuted ut lud，“I made it！” During the award presentatin ceremny，I was invited t deliver a speech.Patiently and cnfidently，I tld the audience hw I nce didn’t lve writing and nw enjyed writing and hw I realized the value f perseverance with the help f my teacher.
With the trphy in hand，I entered the ffice.My teacher rse frm the seat and came up t me.“Cngratulatins！” he said，slapping me n the back.He grinned frm ear t ear as I shwed him the trphy.“I we my success t yu.”I said sincerely，“Withut yur encuragement and belief，I wuldn’t have succeeded.”He laughed，his eyes shining with excitement.“I knew yu had it in yu.I’m prud f yu fr nt giving up.” Whenever lking back n this incident，I feel extremely grateful t him.It was my scial studies teacher wh encuraged me t realize my ptential and thus changed the trajectry f my life.
I went t my teacher’s ffice after the award presentatin.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

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