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專題19 書面表達 讀后續(xù)寫
備戰(zhàn)2023高考英語考試易錯題（新高考專用）（解析版）

一 易錯題類型


【易錯題01】 內(nèi)容
段首第一句話實際限制了續(xù)寫的主題，續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容不要與段首出現(xiàn)行文邏輯上的沖突。讀不懂原文，如不認識bear spray, 不理解a bright cloud enveloped the animal, 沒有理清任務關(guān)系，由于閱讀能力直接影響到續(xù)寫的發(fā)揮。還有的考試大面積抄寫試卷中的閱讀理解或完型填空等處的語句；還有一些考生描寫心理活動和場景過多，缺乏具體描寫，導致故事內(nèi)容不連貫，不完整。
【易錯題02】 語言不準確
考生偏向于刻意追求高級，新穎的詞匯，強行運用復雜句型等語法結(jié)構(gòu)，而忽略了與原文語言環(huán)境的符合度和連貫度。同時出現(xiàn)拼寫錯誤等，不能結(jié)合原文給出漂亮的轉(zhuǎn)折，起伏和故事性結(jié)尾，與讀后續(xù)寫的全新創(chuàng)作宗旨相違背。
【易錯題03】 篇章結(jié)構(gòu)
讀后續(xù)寫評分標準：先根據(jù)整體情況對文章進行定檔，然后依據(jù)該檔的相應要求來確定或調(diào)節(jié)檔次，最后打分。打分主要從續(xù)寫內(nèi)容、詞匯語法、篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三方面考慮。
【命題分析】
年份
主題
出處
2022.6
患病男孩自強之“跑”
新高考I &II
2022.1
迷糊學渣與傲嬌學霸
浙江高考
2021.6
“我”的打工薪水
浙江高考
2021.6
母親節(jié)給媽媽做飯
新高考I&II
2021.1
少女南瓜卡頭
浙江高考
2020.7
愛心幫助他人
山東高考
2020.7
拍照意外遇熊
浙江高考
2020.1
撫平狗狗心傷
浙江高考
2018.6
度假騎馬迷路
浙江高考
2017.11
健忘媽媽趣事
浙江高考

【重點考查】
1. 與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；
2. 內(nèi)容的豐富性；
3. 應用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準確性；
4. 上下文的連貫性。
【重點考查】
1. 仔細審題，字數(shù)限制，使用關(guān)鍵詞語，續(xù)寫段落的首句提示，做到“心中有數(shù)”。
2. 精讀文章，確定文章線索。如：who, when, where, why, what, how.
3. 回扣原文，揣摩續(xù)寫思路。確定續(xù)寫段落的內(nèi)容。
4. 擬寫草稿，修改錯詞病句。注意句子結(jié)構(gòu)的多樣性，語言的豐富性，并通過句與句之間連接詞的正確使用，使上下文連貫。
5. 最后，務必做到“字跡工整，清晰，卷面美觀”。
典例剖析
1. 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom, “I’m going to find a better spot for us to camp” and walked away.
With no path to follow, Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place, she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
“Tom!” she cried. “Help!”
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落) somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy, she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now, Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
But?no?more?helicopters?came?and?it?was?dark.?_________________________________
It?was?daybreak?when?Jane?woke?up.?_________________________________________
【寫作構(gòu)思】
1. 瀏覽所給信息，確定主題大意。
Who: Jane, Tom
What:Jane was lost
When:One weekend in July
Where: In a forest
Why: A quarrel with Tom, her husband
The main idea:Jane was lost in the forest for three days and survived in the end. Jane learned how to control emotions and deal with conflicts.
2. 確定主要情節(jié)所用關(guān)鍵詞和段落開頭語
開頭：start to quarrel
發(fā)展：kept moving...; had to stop for the night...；heard a helicopter
結(jié)尾：待定
Para.1 But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.(Jane是如何熬過那一晚的)
Para 2. It was daybreak when Jane woke up. (Jane是如何獲救的）
3. 添加細節(jié)
擴大Jane在夜晚內(nèi)心的沖突和Jane當晚與次日與環(huán)境之間的沖突。
4. 結(jié)構(gòu)完整，收尾呼應。
為了做到首尾呼應，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)更加完整，考生可以在第二段的結(jié)尾回扣文章開頭Jane與丈夫的爭吵和沖突，充分體現(xiàn)本次經(jīng)歷后二人的感受。
【佳作賞析】

But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family?at a distance.?All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn't help crying, "Hadn't I quarreled with Tom, walked away and?climbed?to the high place, I wouldn't be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying." She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
It was daybreak when?Jane?woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her?yellow blouse?and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others' attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and brought into the?helicopter. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.
【寫作思路】
首先，在邏輯上，要做到了合理合情：起初，主人公身陷森林，內(nèi)心充滿了悔恨，在面對困難時焦慮、畏懼；之后，主人公努力求生，最終獲救，并且領(lǐng)悟到了一定的人生道理?？v觀整個故事，情節(jié)發(fā)展不僅符合兩段給出的開頭所限定的情景要求，而且還設置了一定的懸念，增強了故事的可讀性。
文章第一句 "an absolute darkness ruled the forest" 中， "rule" 一詞就使用了擬人的修辭手法，讓森林陰森黑暗的一面展露無遺，同時描繪出主人公身處絕境的緊迫性。在 "Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse…" 一句中，直接將情緒形容詞放在句首，使用了非謂語動詞的語法，表達精練。
此外， "There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief." 一句中，使用了幾個短句，卻包含了兩處非謂語動詞語法，同時活用了 "wear" 一詞，把兩個人相見時的場景生動地描繪了出來。
【詞匯拓展】
1） 表示并列關(guān)系的過渡詞：and, as well as, or ，Not only … but also
2） 表示轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的過渡詞：but, yet, however , although , though …
3） 表示時間關(guān)系的過渡詞：first, second, third, and then, finally, after, before, after a few days, at last, at that time, later, in the past, immediately, in the meanwhile, when, while, then, after that …
二 舉一反三

1. (2022 新高考I卷讀后續(xù)寫)
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route（路線）through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn't with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school's coach and asked him what had happened. "I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him," he explained uncomfortably. "I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide."
I bit back my frustration（懊惱）. I knew the coach meant well — he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer — that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意：
1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；
2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn't look at me.



I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.





【寫作思路】
when
The day of the big cross-country run
where
Thick evergreen forest
who
David, I, the coach, other children
what
David最初選擇不參加比賽，后來重新站在了起跑線上
why
David患有腦補疾病 為什么不參加比賽？害怕什么？
文章大意
Jane was lost in the forest for three days and survived in the end
How
如何戰(zhàn)勝恐懼？比賽獲勝了嗎？其他孩子對David如何？

【范文賞析】
We sat down together on some steps, but David wouldn’t look at me.
I turned him around and looked him in the eye sincerely. I quietly said, “David, if you’re not running because you’re afraid someone is going to laugh, that’s not a good enough reason. Are you going to let them get in your way? If you really want to run, David, run!” I held my breath as David took this in. Then he looked at the field and said with a fierce but quiet determination, “I’m gonna run.”
I watched as David moved up to the starting line.
The starter’s gun sounded. But he had only gone a few metres before he tripped and fell flat on the ground. My heart sank. As I started to shout encouragement, other voices around me took up the call. “Come on David, you can do it!” David picked himself up and started again until he crossed the finish line to wild cheers and applause.
最后幾句結(jié)尾有三種：
第一種：（首選結(jié)尾）
That day, David got a special award for his courage. He also got respect of all students. To him, that was worth a whole lot more than an award. (169 words)
第二種：（原文結(jié)尾）
Then, when David’s coach slapped him on the back and said proudly, “Good job, David!” he caught my eye, flashed me a toothy grin and said, “That was easy!” （169 words）
第三種：
That day, David got a special award for his courage. He was shining on the winner’s podium. David, with so many birth problems, was a hero to all of us and most importantly, to himself! (175 words)
2. 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
One weekend in July, Jane and her husband, Tom, had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest. Unfortunately, on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel. By the time they reached the lake, Jane was so angry that she said to Tom. “I'm going to find a better spot for us to camp" and walked away.
With no path to follow,Jane just walked on for quite a long time. After she had climbed to a high place. she turned around, hoping to see the lake. To her surprise, she saw nothing but forest and, far beyond, a snowcapped mountain top. She suddenly realized that she was lost.
“Tom! "she cried. "Help!"
No reply. If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom. Jane kept moving, but the farther she walked, the more confused she became. As night was beginning to fall, Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night. Lying awake in the dark, Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family. She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him.
Jane rose at the break of day, hungry and thirsty. She could hear water trickling (滴落）somewhere at a distance. Quickly she followed the sound to a stream. To her great joy,she also saw some berry bushes. She drank and ate a few berries. Never in her life had she tasted anything better. Feeling stronger now. Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake.
As she picked her way carefully along the stream, Jane heard a helicopter. Is that for me? Unfortunately, the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above. A few minutes later, another helicopter flew overhead. Jane took off her yellow blouse, thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again.
注意:
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；
2.應使用5個以上短文文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語：
3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；
4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。
Paragraph 1
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2
It was daybreak when Jane woke up.
_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【范文賞析】
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again. Immediately, an absolute darkness ruled the forest. Jane, exhausted and scared, lay down near a stone, missing her family?at a distance.?All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn't help crying, "Hadn't I quarreled with Tom, walked away and?climbed?to the high place, I wouldn't be trapped in this awful place, confronted with the danger of dying." She regretted with endless anxiety, and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes.
It was daybreak when?Jane?woke up. Weak as she was, she struggled to her feet, continuing searching for assistance. To her great joy, a helicopter was flying overhead again and again. Eager and excited, she flagged her?yellow blouse?and spared no effort to yell so as to attract others'attention. Fortunately, she was eventually noticed and brought into the?helicopter. There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief. As tightly as possible, she hugged him and was too thrilled to say anything. Besides, they agreed never to quarrel again, determining to live the life to the fullest.
【寫作思路】首先，在邏輯上，要做到了合理合情：起初，主人公身陷森林，內(nèi)心充滿了悔恨，在面對困難時焦慮、畏懼；之后，主人公努力求生，最終獲救，并且領(lǐng)悟到了一定的人生道理?？v觀整個故事，情節(jié)發(fā)展不僅符合兩段給出的開頭所限定的情景要求，而且還設置了一定的懸念，增強了故事的可讀性。
文章第一句 "an absolute darkness ruled the forest" 中， "rule" 一詞就使用了擬人的修辭手法，讓森林陰森黑暗的一面展露無遺，同時描繪出主人公身處絕境的緊迫性。在 "Eager and excited, she flagged her yellow blouse…" 一句中，直接將情緒形容詞放在句首，使用了非謂語動詞的語法，表達精練。
此外， "There, she saw her husband, a man staring at her, wearing an expression of relief." 一句中，使用了幾個短句，卻包含了兩處非謂語動詞語法，同時活用了 "wear" 一詞，把兩個人相見時的場景生動地描繪了出來。
【詞匯拓展】
1） 表示并列關(guān)系的過渡詞：and, as well as, or ，Not only … but also
2） 表示轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的過渡詞：but, yet, however , although , though …
3） 表示時間關(guān)系的過渡詞：first, second, third, and then, finally, after, before, after a few days, at last, at that time, later, in the past, immediately, in the meanwhile, when, while, then, after that …
3. (2022年全國高考新高考II卷)
It was the day of the big cross-country run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route(路線)through thick evergreen forest.
I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasn’t with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.
What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!
I quickly searched the crowd for the school’s coach and asked him what had happened. “I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him,” he explained uncomfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide. ”
I bit back my frustration(懊惱). I knew the coach meant well—he thought he was doing the right thing. After making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him coming towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.
David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a regular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the cross-country team. It just took him longer—that’s all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always finished his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.
注意：
1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;
2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答.
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.
______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
【范文賞析】
We sat down next to each other, but David wouldn’t look at me. I said gently and quietly, “No one can change your mind, except yourself. If you desire to challenge yourself, there is nothing to do with others’ thoughts. ” He sat still with a deep breath. “You have a full preparation before this event, which is the most important reason why you show up here”, I added with a sincere tone. Hearing my words, David turned to me tremblingly with tears spilling out of his eyes and expressed he had made a firm determination to finish the cross-country run. His coach heard what David said
and gave me a look—the kind that was more determined than anyone else’s.
I watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners. The race started. It seemed that the runway was extremely long for young children, not to mention a child with a heart disease. David insisted on running as if he had forgotten all his weaknesses, though he was tripped over within the a few kilometers. It didn’t take long before he picked himself up again and continued his mission. Classmates all appeared on the racing track, cheering for him. “Come on! You can make it! We are proud of you!” they shouted enthusiastically. To everyone’s joy, he reached the final line and ranked the 20th. It was no more important whether he won the first place or not. It was his brave heart and strong faith that could make something unusual happen finally.

模擬題通關(guān)

讀后續(xù)寫
1.（2022年1月浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫）
When Dr. Henderson was assigning（指定） project mates for his psychology class, I secretly hoped he would pair me with my best friend or at least a classmate I could have some fun with. Above all, I hoped he wouldn't assign me to work with the fiercely competitive, extremely serious fellow who always wore dark clothes and apparently had a personality to match. As fate （命運）would have it, Dr. Henderson very deliberately matched everyone in class and announced that I would be working with the one person in class I wanted to avoid.
I went up to my new teammate and introduced myself. He looked at me as though I weren't there. I felt he treated me as though I would hold him back and probably make him fail to get an A in the course. He wasn't mean or abusive; he just gave me the impression he could do whatever project we dreamed up better if he did it alone.
Needless to say, I didn't look forward to an entire term of being brushed off, but I tried to make the best of it and didn't say anything for fear that I would make things worse.
The project required each team to develop a hypothesis （假說）, set up an experiment to test the hypothesis, do the statistical analysis and present the findings. Whatever grade the team received would be shared by both students.
When my teammate and I met to discuss our project, I was uneasy. Here was this challenging student who had a reputation for single-mindedness and good grades—the exact opposite of me. I was outmatched. I actually wanted to drop the class at one point, but stopped short because I didn't want to give him the satisfaction of my chickening out. I decided to stick to it no matter what.
After long discussions we somehow agreed to do a study on the psychological well-being of teenagers. I wasn't sure what it meant exactly, but at least we had a topic.
注意：
1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；
2. 至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；
3. 結(jié)部分分為兩段, 每段的開頭語已為你寫好；
4. 續(xù)寫完成后, 請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。
Para 1. We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans.
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Para 2. One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease.
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【范文賞析】
We started to meet regularly to draw up our plans. Though I wanted to share my ideas with him fully, I failed to do so for fear that I would hold him back. I just kept nodding when he asked me whether it is ok to do this way or that way. I thought it was impossible to persuade him into accepting my views, so I didn’t want to waste our time to discuss. I started to wait to leave immediately we arrived at the place, and so did he. I just hoped that the presentation day could come earlier.
One day I got word that he was admitted to hospital for a serious disease. I felt so sorry to hear that and I thought I should visit him in any case. He was a little surprised to see me when I stepped into his ward with some flowers and fruits. I offered to do the rest work of our project and he invited me to share my ideas to perfect it. We began to work as a fine team and finally finished our project on time. Our hard work paid off and Dr. Henderson’s was very satisfied with our wonderful findings. From this project, we also learned the significance of teammates. Just as the saying goes, one person can go far, but a group of persons can travel farther.
2.（2022湖南師大附中測試卷）
閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
My daughter and I were fans of Mister Rogers’ Neighborhood, an educational children’s television series that was created and hosted by Fred Rogers, more commonly known as Mister Rogers.
Around my daughter’s second birthday, I had a Mister Rogers-inspired idea. Why not invite one key person in my daughter’s world to dinner each month? The local children’s librarian could visit one evening, and perhaps the borough mayor (區(qū)長) could drop by a few weeks later.
But I wanted to start at the top.
“Let’s invite Mister Rogers himself, ” I said to my wife. “After all, he lives just a few neighborhoods away. I bet he’d come.”
She looked at me as if I wanted to invite the President. “You really think Mister Rogers would come to our house for dinner? Fat chance.”
Undeterred (不氣餒的), I sent a letter to Mister Rogers that fall, telling him of my newfound delight in his show and my idea for inviting neighborhood people over to talk about their lives, and asking him and Mrs. Rogers to be our guests.
I told my daughter about the letter. Her eyes glistened (發(fā)光). “Mister Rogers coming? Really, Daddy?”
One month later, no reply. My daughter hadn’t forgotten and periodically asked when Mister Rogers would be visiting. I always told her that he hadn’t called yet and that it was a good opportunity to learn about patience.
Two months later, no response. At the three-month mark, my wife simply rolled her eyes when I raised the topic. I was beginning to lose optimism. Mister Rogers had let me down.
Sadly, Mister Rogers passed away in late February of the following year. I was unaware of his illness and now understood why our invitation had gone unanswered. Mister Rogers would not be coming to dinner after all. Yet, even after his passing, Mister Rogers gave us a far greater gift than I ever could have imagined.
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A week later, I was surprised to find a letter in our mailbox from Mister Rogers.
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The letter is a treasured gift and his kind words touched my life and my daughter.
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【范文賞析】
A week later, I was surprised to find a letter in our mailbox from Mister Rogers. With my trembling hands, I fingered the letter and read it word for word. He appreciated my daughter’s enjoyment of his program and thanked us for our invitation, adding that he was much honored to be our “guest” . But he apologized for not responding sooner and not being able to make it to our dinner party then due to his stomach cancer treatment. In a delightful tone he expressed his wish to meet some day. The one-page typed letter was like something from an old friend: personal and caring.
The letter is a treasured gift and his kind words touched my life and my daughter. We could never imagine it was written when he was then suffering great pains. Mister Rogers is gone, but his remarkable talents are left behind. Rogers never came for dinner, but his belief in the importance of being good neighbors is passed on. His spirits will never die: caring for people including the unknown, hoping for the future, and most importantly, posing a positive attitude to life whatever happens. When least expected, sometimes the best presents in life come from a special neighbor.
【寫作思路】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者為了慶祝女兒的兩歲生日，臨時想到了一個主意：邀請著名的兒童節(jié)目主持人羅杰斯先生參加女兒的生日晚宴。經(jīng)過了漫長的等待，還是未能等到羅杰斯先生的到來，最后作者和家人們才得知，原來是羅杰斯先生去世了。但是讓他們意想不到的是，雖然他終究不會來吃晚飯，但是羅杰斯先生還是給了他們一份比作者所能想象的更大的禮物——原來是他親自寫了一封信解釋了未能到來的原因，以及用愉快的語氣表示希望有一天能見面。親切的話語感動了作者和家人。通過此事，作者明白了：羅杰斯的精神永不會消亡，他關(guān)心包括未知的人，對未來充滿希望，最重要的是，無論發(fā)生什么，都要向羅杰斯先生一樣，對生活都保持積極的態(tài)度。
1.段落續(xù)寫：
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“一周后，我驚奇地在信箱里發(fā)現(xiàn)了一封羅杰斯先生的信。”可知，第一段可描寫作者收到羅杰斯先生手寫信件的激動和驚訝。同時也需要講述到羅杰斯在信中交代為什么不能來參加作者女兒的生日晚宴的原因，以及表達對作者女兒的祝福。
②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“這封信是一份珍貴的禮物，他親切的話語感動了我和我的女兒?！笨芍诙慰擅鑼懽髡咦x到羅杰斯先生的信后深深的感動，并且表達了對羅杰斯先生的崇拜和尊敬，以及感悟。
2.續(xù)寫線索：打開信箱——驚訝——信件內(nèi)容——感動——贊美——學習——感悟
3.[高分句型1]. With my trembling hands, I fingered the letter and read it word for word.（使用復合結(jié)構(gòu)）
[高分句型2]. When least expected, sometimes the best presents in life come from a special neighbor.（由when引導的時間狀語從句，同時使用的非謂語動詞過去分詞expected做伴隨狀語）
3.（2021新高考全國I卷）
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A MOTHER’S DAY SURPRISE
The twins were filled with excitement as they thought of the surprise they were planning for Mother’s Day. How pleased and proud Mother would be when they brought her breakfast in bed. They planned to make French toast and chicken porridge. They had watched their mother in the kitchen. There was nothing to it. Jenna and Jeff knew exactly what to do.
The big day came at last. The alarm rang at 6 a.m. The pair went down the stairs quietly to the kitchen. They decided to boil the porridge first. They put some rice into a pot of water and left it to boil while they made the French toast. Jeff broke two eggs into a plate and added in some milk. Jenna found the bread and put two slices into the egg mixture. Next, Jeff turned on the second stove burner to heat up the frying pan. Everything was going smoothly until Jeff started frying the bread. The pan was too hot and the bread turned black within seconds. Jenna threw the burnt piece into the sink and put in the other slice of bread. This time, she turned down the fire so it cooked nicely.
Then Jeff noticed steam shooting out of the pot and the lid starting to shake. The next minute, the porridge boiled over and put out the fire. Jenna panicked. Thankfully, Jeff stayed calm and turned off the gas quickly. But the stove was a mess now. Jenna told Jeff to clean it up so they could continue to cook the rest of the porridge. But Jeff’s hand touched the hot burner and he gave a cry of pain. Jenna made him put his hand in cold water. Then she caught the smell of burning. Oh dear! The piece of bread in the pan had turned black as well.
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As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared.
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The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up.
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【范文賞析】
As the twins looked around them in disappointment, their father appeared. Father’s appearing was like a savior to the two children. Under the guidance of their father, they took positive actions and started all over again. They made the bread and then went on cooking porridge. Father helped them adjust the fire, which was the key to success. It was all right this time. Delicious breakfast was ready. How happy they were!
The twins carried the breakfast upstairs and woke their mother up. When their mother saw the delicious and perfect breakfast in front of her, she was very surprised. It was not only the gift, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much. The two children could finish cooking a breakfast, which she didn’t expect. The children said loudly, “Happy Mother’s Day!” Mother hugged them tightly and kissed them again and again.
【寫作思路】本文以母親節(jié)為線索展開，講述了雙胞胎Jenna和Jeff為了獻給母親一份美味的早餐，自己動手，做起飯餐來，但是不幸的是，他們連連失敗，后來在父親的幫助下，獲得成功，他們把早餐獻給親愛的母親，媽媽非常感動的故事。
1.段落續(xù)寫：
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“當雙胞胎失望地環(huán)顧四周時，他們的父親出現(xiàn)了?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫他們的父親指導幫助他們準備早餐。
②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“這對雙胞胎把早餐端到樓上，叫醒了他們的母親?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫母親收到孩子們的禮物早餐，非常感動。
2.續(xù)寫線索：幫助——指導——積極——獻禮——感動
3.詞匯拓展
行為類
①幫助：help/assist
②.指導：guide/conduct
③.獻禮：present a gift/give a gift
情緒類
①.積極：positive/positively/take positive actions
②.感動：moved/touched
[高分句型1] which引導的非限制性定語從句Father helped them adjust the fire, which was the key to success.
[高分句型2] 句型及強調(diào)句型)It was not only the breakfast, but the love of the children for her that moved her very much. 使用not only…but (also)
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When I was six years old, I visited my grandfather’s farm in Kansas and he sent me into the woods to gather pecans (胡桃) for us to enjoy later. The pecans were about the size of a man’s thumbnail and just about the tastiest snack I’d ever had.
However, pecan picking was really tiring and my little bucket was only half full after working hard for a long time. I thought I wouldn’t let Grandpa down. Just then something caught my eye. A large brown squirrel was a few feet away. I watched as he picked up a pecan, hurried to a tree, jumped up to the trunk and disappeared in a large hole. A moment later the squirrel popped back out and climbed down to the ground to pick up another nut. Once again, he took the pecan back to his hiding place inside the hollow of the tree.
Not so secret anymore, I thought. I dashed over to the tree and looked into the hole. It was filled with pecans! Golden pecans were right there for taking. This was my chance. Handful by handful, I scooped all of those pecans into my bucket. Now it was almost full! I was so proud of myself that I couldn’t wait to show Grandpa all the pecans.
I ran back and shouted, “Look at all the pecans!” He looked into the bucket and asked, “Well, well, how did you find so many?” I told him how I’d followed the squirrel and taken the pecans from his hiding place.
Grandpa congratulated me on how smart I’d been in observing the squirrel and his habits. Then he did something that surprised me. He handed the bucket back to me and put his arm gently around my shoulders.
注意：1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；
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“That squirrel worked very hard to gather his winter supply of food,” he said.
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I picked up that little bucket full of pecans and carried it back to the tree.
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【范文賞析】
“That squirrel worked very hard to gather his winter supply of food,” he said. “Now that all of his pecans are one, don’t you think that little squirrel will be hungry when it gets cold?” Grandpa asked me. “I didn’t think about that,” I murmured with shame, blood rushing to my face. Grandpa told me seriously that a good man should never take advantage of someone else’s hard work, even the squirrels. I drooped my head, feeling as hollow as that old tree.The image of that starving squirrel wouldn't leave my mind. There was only one thing I could do.
I picked up that little bucket full of pecans and carried it back to the tree. Lifting the bucket up, I poured all of the nuts back into the hole, refilling it with not only all of the squirrel’s pecans but also the ones I had collected on my own. I breathed a sigh of relief and returned home with the empty bucket. I didn’t eat any of the sweet pecans that night, but I had something much more filling, which was the satisfaction of knowing I had done just the right thing.
【寫作思路】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者六歲那年去爺爺農(nóng)場采摘胡桃發(fā)生的事情。在采摘的過程中，作者發(fā)現(xiàn)了一只松鼠，它的窩內(nèi)儲存了很多胡桃。當作者把松鼠的胡桃全部拿走展示給爺爺?shù)臅r候，爺爺?shù)脑捵屪髡呙靼椎剑阂粋€好人永遠不應該占別人的便宜，即使是松鼠。
1.段落續(xù)寫：
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“爺爺說，那只松鼠非常努力地收集冬天的食物?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫爺爺責備了作者，表達作者羞愧的情緒，同時也要闡述爺爺給作者講述的道理：一個好人永遠不應該占別人的便宜，即使是松鼠。
②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我撿起那一小桶山核桃，把它帶回樹上。”可知，第二段可描寫作者將山核桃還給松鼠，其中可以對動作和情緒變化進行描述。同時還可以表述：雖然作者在晚間并沒有食用任何食物，但是精神上和心靈上的收獲遠比食物的帶來的滿足更富足，即上升到文章的主旨，闡述作者的感悟。
2.續(xù)寫線索：爺爺講道理——我的羞愧——返還核桃——收獲感悟
3.詞匯拓展
行為類
①.一起走路：walk together/accompany him/keep him company
②.回家：go back home/return home
③.收集：gather/collect
情緒類
①.難過：disappointed/upset/depressed/frustrated
②.積極：positive attitude/act positively
[高分句型1]. I murmured with shame, blood rushing to my face. （運用了獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)作伴隨狀語）
[高分句型2]. I had something much more filling, which was the satisfaction of knowing I had done just the right thing. (由關(guān)系代詞which引導非限制性定語從句）
[高分句型3]. Lifting the bucket up, I poured all of the nuts back into the hole.（使用現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語）
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My dad, George, only had an eighth grade education. A quiet man, he didn't understand my world of school activities. From age 14, he worked. And his dad, Albert, took the money my dad earned and used it to pay family expenses.
I didn't really understand his world either: He was a livestock trucker, and I thought that I would surpass (超過) anything he had accomplished by the time I walked across the stage at high school graduation.
Summers in the mid-70s were spent at home shooting baskets, hitting a baseball, or throwing a football, preparing for my future as a quarterback on a football team. In poor weather, I read about sports or practiced my trombone (長號).
The summer before my eighth grade I was one of a group of boys that a neighboring farmer hired to work in his field. He explained our basic task, the tractor fired up and we were off, riding down the field looking for weeds to spray with chemicals. After a short way, the farmer stopped and pointed at a weed which we missed. Then we began again. This happened over and over, but we soon learned to identify different grasses like cockleburs, lamb's-quarters, foxtails, and the king of weeds, the pretty purple thistle. It was tiring work, but I looked forward to the pay, even though I wasn't sure how much it would amount to.
At home, my dad said, "A job's a big step to growing up. I'm glad you will be contributing to the household." My dad's words made me realize that my earnings might not be mine to do with as I wished.
My labors lasted about two weeks, and the farmer said there might be more work, but I wasn't interested. I decided it was not fair that I had to contribute my money.
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Paragraph 1：The pay arrived at last
Paragraph 2：I understood immediately what my parents were worried about.
【范文賞析】The pay arrived at last. Although the job was very?tiring, I was very happy in my heart for I got something from my work. The toil of labor was forgotten for the time being. I thought I should have my own money and planned how to spend it. “How much money have you earned?” Dad asked. I was surprised, reluctant to say my income. The next morning, my dad’s livestock truck started running. I saw my father’s hard-working figure and thought of his words “A job’s a big step to growing up”.
I understood immediately what my parents were?worried about. They were worried that I was too selfish to give. I realized that my labor was very hard, but my growth and our whole family had been depending on the hard work of my parents! Dad never complained about unfairness! He even seemed to think that was fair. I thought, “I’ve only worked for two weeks, but how many years my father has worked!” In the evening, Dad came back. I proudly took out my own money and handed it to Dad.
【寫作思路】
本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者高中畢業(yè)后，參加農(nóng)場工作，辛辛苦苦掙到的錢，不情愿貢獻給家庭，后來在看到父親的辛勞之后，理解了父母擔心的是自己太過自私而不知奉獻，終于想通，并自豪地將自己勞動所得交給父親的故事。
1.段落續(xù)寫：
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“工資終于到了?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者的工資到手后，高興地計劃自己用這筆錢，不愿意交給父親，然后看到父親的辛勞。
②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我立刻明白了父母的擔心。”可知，第二段可描寫作者明白了父母擔心自己不懂得奉獻，想通了，然后自豪地把錢交給了父親。
2. 續(xù)寫線索：高興——計劃——不情愿——發(fā)現(xiàn)——奉獻——自豪
3.詞匯拓展
行為類
①計劃：programme/plan
②.奉獻：give/devote
③發(fā)現(xiàn)：see/find
情緒類
①.不情愿的：unwilling/reluctant
②.自豪地：proudly/with pride
[高分句型1]. I thought I should have my own money and planned how to spend it. (運用了疑問詞加動詞不定式作賓語)
[高分句型2]. I?realized?that my labor was very hard, but my growth and our whole?family?had (that引導的賓語從句以及過去完成進行時)
6.（2022廣東廣州測試）
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People use the proverb “seeing is believing” to describe situations where it’s hard to believe something is possible if you haven’t seen it happen. I am here today to tell you that the proverb is true and to share with you how a girl and her grandmother made a positive transformation in a community.
It was a year ago when I was studying life cycles in my science class. I wrote a paper about the life cycle of the monarch butterfly (帝王蝶) and received a perfect score. I was so thrilled; I called my grandmother Nana and told her the exciting news. My talk recalled memories from Nana’s childhood. “I remember when I was a girl,” she said, “those orange and black butterflies were a common sight. Come late summer, there would suddenly be hundreds of them, and before long there were so many it felt like you were standing in an orange cloud.”
“It sounds like you witnessed a migration (遷徙), but what happened to them?” I asked. “To be honest, I’ve never known,” Nana admitted. “But there do seem to be fewer monarchs around the neighborhood.” Nana and I decided to investigate.
That weekend, we met at the public library. Our research produced plenty of information: some fascinating and some concerning. Apparently, the number of monarchs has been in decline for the last several decades. Housing developments have destroyed much of their habitat (棲息地). Some information was hopeful, though, like how conservationists are working to save them.
The best was this — it doesn’t take lots of money or equipment to do so. It takes only a little bit of land, some seeds, and dedicated people to create what’s called a Monarch Waystation (驛站).
“What if we set up our own Monarch Waystation?” I suggested. “We’ll need people to help.” Nana responded immediately and didn’t waste time to get started.
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The next day, Nana presented the idea to her garden club and I talked to my friends.
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Nana and I created a blog and frequently updated about the community’s efforts.
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【范文賞析】?????The next day, Nana presented the idea to her garden club and I talked to my friends. Many people started to plant flowers in their gardens. Nana’s garden club convinced the city government to plant a butterfly garden next to the city fountain. My friends and I spread leaflets telling people how to build Monarch Waystations. More and more people took action to make our community monarch-friendy. As spring turned into summer, we found our efforts started to work! A few dozen orange and black butterflies were spotted visiting the waystations. As summer progressed, the monarchs grew more plentiful.
Nana and I created a blog and frequently updated about the community’s efforts. Monarch enthusiasts from across the country contacted us with their own observations, ideas and reflections. Then it happened one day when the sun was shining and the sky was a deep blue, just like Nana remembered a few fluttering (顫動的) orange wings soon became hundreds of soaring butterflies. As monarchs sailed above and around us, Nana cried tears of happiness and gave me an enormous hug. It was truly a spectacular experience. Now I know what it means to stand in an orange cloud of monarchs. I know what people mean when they say, “Seeing is believing.” I learn that if we believe in something strong enough and work to make it happen, we will see our goal become a reality.
【寫作思路】本文講述了一個關(guān)于“眼見為實”的故事。作者在科學課上寫了一篇關(guān)于帝王蝶生命周期的論文并且得了滿分，作者和祖母分享了這個好消息。祖母告訴作者自己小時候曾經(jīng)見過很多帝王蝶，但不知道為什么，隨著時間的推移，帝王蝶越來越少了，作者和祖母開始研究為什么會有這種現(xiàn)象。調(diào)查發(fā)現(xiàn)，住房開發(fā)破壞了帝王蝶的大部分棲息地，導致帝王蝶數(shù)量減少，但“帝王蝶驛站”可以緩解這一現(xiàn)象，于是，作者和祖母決定建立他們自己的“帝王蝶驛站”。
1.段落續(xù)寫：
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“第二天，娜娜把這個想法介紹給了她的花園俱樂部，我和朋友們聊了聊?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者和祖母如何建立他們自己的“帝王蝶驛站”。
②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我和娜娜創(chuàng)建了一個博客，并經(jīng)常更新社區(qū)的努力?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫作者和祖母的努力獲得收獲，他們再次看到了大量的帝王蝶。
2.續(xù)寫線索：我們的努力——努力開始奏效——少量帝王蝶出現(xiàn)——全國各地的支持——大量帝王蝶出現(xiàn)——明白了“眼見為實”
3.詞匯拓展
行為類
①.開始做某事：start to do sth./begin to do sth.
②.說服：convince/persuade
③.聯(lián)系某人：contact sb./get in touch with sb.
情緒類
①.愉快：happiness/pleasure
②.令人驚嘆的：spectacular/amazing
[高分句型1]. As spring turned into summer, we found our efforts started to work!（由As引導的時間狀語從句）
[高分句型2]. Now I know what it means to stand in an orange cloud of monarchs.（由what引導的賓語從句）
7.閱讀下面材料, 根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段, 使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy -his name was Bernard-had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish(完成).”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. “I tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of corn Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn(爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
注意:
1. 續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右:
2. 請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
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With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.
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【范文賞析】When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too. So, they went to the local supermarket together. They bought a bag of corn and some special bags for popcorn. When they got home, they made a lot of popcorn and put it in the special bags. With the popcorn, they went to Bernard’s home. They told Bernard how to sell the popcorn. Bernard and his parents were very grateful. And the Meredith family also felt very happy to help this family.
With everything ready Bernard started out on his new business. He took the popcorn around to the houses and sold all his popcorn. He earned a lot of money. Then, he wanted to be self-dependent. Therefore, he asked Mrs. Meredith to teach him how to make popcorn. After that, not only did he sell popcorn, but he also added cream and salt to the popcorn to make it taste better. Bernard grew up to be a remarkable man. He did not forget the help of Meredith’s family, and he also did what he could to help those in need.
【寫作思路】1.認真讀懂所給提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一個小社區(qū)里，他們想幫助一個貧困的家庭。那家的男主人生病臥床，女主人要照顧丈夫、無法外出賺錢，家中的小男孩Bernard也做不了什么事情，生活十分困難。后來，Meredith的孩子想出了一個主意--制作爆米花，讓Bernard去賣爆米花。
2.根據(jù)所給材料確定文章主題:Meredith如何通過制作和賣爆米花幫助Bernard一家擺脫困境的。
3.續(xù)寫部分和前面的文章銜接得上，并且與原文情節(jié)發(fā)展和人物性格相一致，故事情節(jié)的向后延續(xù)發(fā)展要合乎情理。
4.根據(jù)第一段首句When Mrs. Meredith heard of John’s idea, she thought it was a good one, too.(當Meredith太太聽到John的主意時，她也認為這是個好主意)可以針對如何實現(xiàn)制作爆米花這個提議展開構(gòu)思；根據(jù)第二段首句With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business.(一切準備就緒后，Bernard開始了他的新生意)可以針對Bernard如何通過賣爆米花讓家庭擺脫困境展開構(gòu)思。
8.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
I sat at my desk and stared at the screen. I waited patiently for ideas to come to me as I tried to think up exam questions for a test I would give my English students. My wife was off to a party somewhere, but I was not alone. Meghan, our 22-month-old angel, kept my company. Yet her plans seemed to go against mine.
She followed a daily routine that was both time-consuming and challenging. It included certain basic tasks: watching the fish, sweeping the floor in her room, climbing up and down on her bed.
At first I was able to concentrate on designing my test paper. But I was soon distracted. I had not expected the arrival of the “bib-bibs”—“bib-bibs” were birds. “Bib-bibs!” Meghan screamed excitedly, her eyes alive with expectation. She insisted that I come with her to the window.
“In a minute. Just let me finish this question.” I said. She pulled me by the hand (two fingers, actually) toward the window. I saw myself as a fool, being led to watch the “bib-bibs”. They sang and leaped back and forth on the lawn just outside our apartment window. Meghan was absorbed, but as I watched them, I still thought about my work. With her attention off me, I left the window and went back to my desk.
Five minutes later, she returned. She reached up to my keyboard and pressed a bunch of keys, adding a long line of scrabbled (亂的) letters to my question. I struggled to bring my annoyance under control. “No, thank you, Meghan. Daddy’s seen your work. I’ll do it myself.” She backed off.
注意：1.詞數(shù)150字左右；
2.按照格式在答題卡相應位置作答。
Paragraph 1:
A few minutes later, she stood in front of me with her shoes and socks in her hand.
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I finally decided to take Meghan to the park.
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【范文賞析】???????A few minutes later, she stood in front of me with her shoes and socks in her hand. I got it—she wanted me to take her out to the park. I pretended I hadn’t paid attention. She stepped forward, staring at me with her innocent eyes. “Leave me alone for a while, Meghan.” I said without looking at her. After a few seconds, out of the corner of my eye, I saw tears rolling down her cheek. I felt so terrible that I regretted what I had said. I had to correct my mistake.
I finally decided to take Meghan to the park. I turned to her and said, “Sorry, let’s go to see more ‘bib-bibs’!” She was so excited that she smiled through tears. I held her hand as we walked outside. Wandering through the park, Meghan was like a free bird enjoying herself in the wide blue sky. Seeing her smiley face, I felt much happier than I would have been doing my work. I could catch up on it in the evening. Work can always wait, but love cannot.
【寫作思路】本文講述了一個關(guān)于愛的故事。一天，作者坐在桌前為學生出試卷，因為妻子外出，家里只有22個月大的女兒陪著他，作者需要分心去照顧女兒。正在作者集中精力設計試卷時，女兒興奮地叫著讓作者陪她去窗前看鳥，當女兒看鳥時，作者仍在思考工作，并再次回到桌前。五分鐘后，女兒回到作者身邊，用手在鍵盤上亂按，這讓作者有些生氣。
1.段落續(xù)寫：
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“幾分鐘后，她站在我面前，手里拿著鞋子和襪子。”可知，第一段可描寫女兒的請求和作者的反應。
②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“我最終決定帶梅根去公園。”可知，第二段可描寫父女二人在公園做了什么及作者的感悟。
2.續(xù)寫線索：女兒想去公園——作者拒絕——女兒流淚——作者后悔——來到公園——享受快樂時光——作者的感悟
3.詞匯拓展
行為類
①.明白：get it/understand
②.盯著：stare at/fix one’s eyes on
③.玩得愉快：enjoy oneself/have fun
情緒類
①.興奮的：excited/thrilled
②.更高興的：happier/more pleased
[高分句型1]. She was so excited that she smiled through tears.（由so…that…引導的結(jié)果狀語從句）
[高分句型2] I held her hand as we walked outside.（由as引導的時間狀語從句）
9.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
The Meredith family lived in a small community. As the economy was in decline, some people in the town had lost their jobs. Many of their families were struggling to make ends meet. People were trying to help each other meet the challenges.
Mrs. Meredith was a most kind and thoughtful woman. She spent a great deal of time visiting the poor. She knew they had problems, and they needed all kinds of help. When she had time, she would bring food and medicine to them.
One morning she told her children about a family she had visited the day before. There was a man sick in bed, his wife, who took care of him and could not go out to work, and their little boy. The little boy - his name was Bernard - had interested her very much.
“I wish you could see him,” she said to her own children, John, Harry, and Clara. “He is such a help to his mother. He wants very much to earn some money, but I don't see what he can do.”
After their mother left the room, the children sat thinking about Bernard. “I wish we could help him to earn money,” said Clara. “His family is suffering so much.”
“So do I,” said Harry. “We really should do something to assist them.”
For some moments, John said nothing, but, suddenly, he sprang to his feet and cried, “I have a great idea! I have a solution that we can all help accomplish (完成).”
The other children also jumped up all attention. When John had an idea, it was sure to be a good one. I’ll tell you what we can do,” said John. “You know that big box of com Uncle John sent us? Well, we can make popcorn (爆米花), and put it into paper bags, and Bernard can take it around to the houses and sell it.”
注意：
1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為l50左右；
2. 至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語：
3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；
4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。
Paragraph 1
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too.
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Paragraph 2
With everything ready. Bernard started out on his new business.
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【范文賞析】
When Mrs. Meredith heard of John's idea, she thought it was a good one, too. Very soon the children were busy popping the corn, while their mother went out to buy paper bags. When she came back, she brought Bernard with her.
With everything ready, Bernard started out on his new business. Unexpectedly, he returned quickly with an empty basket and ten nickels in his mittens. After he ran home to take the money to his mother, John asked Mrs. Meredith if they could continue to help Bernard. Mrs. Meredith said "Yes"?and asked John to take charge of the work. For many weeks, John saw that the corn was all popped, the paper bags filled and arranged in the basket when Bernard arrived. Every week Bernard had at least fifty cents to take home, and often more. And all this was because of John's bright idea, and the way he carried it out.
【寫作思路】
本篇書面表達為讀后續(xù)寫，給定的閱讀材料主要講述了Meredith夫人鼓勵她的孩子們?nèi)椭粋€窮人家的孩子Bernard去賺錢，然后她的兒子約翰想通過爆米花來幫助Bernard。續(xù)寫的第一段可以圍繞Meredith夫人的孩子們所做的準備工作來展開，比如準備爆米花、紙袋等；續(xù)寫的第二段可以圍繞Meredith夫人的孩子們（尤其是約翰）在成功幫助Bernard賺取第一桶金后如何繼續(xù)助力。由于描述的是發(fā)生過的事情，因此續(xù)寫的兩段的時態(tài)都應以一般過去時為主，人稱以第三人稱為主。
詞匯拓展：
1. be busy doing sth. 忙于做某事
2. ask sb. to do sth. 讓某人做某事
3. take charge of sth. 負責某事
5. carry out 實施，執(zhí)行
10. （2022江蘇南京測試卷）
閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。
Flora and her dad were going to move to a new house. Friday, a truck would come for the furniture. Then the next week, workers would dig up the yard. Where Flora and Papi had grown flowers, the workers would put in a parking lot.
“Our poor flowers,” Flora sighed to herself, looking at the bright purple blooms and soft and green weed coming out of the soil. She sat outside, selling things she didn’t want to take to the new house. Beside her hung a sign that said “Yard Sale”. Her yard sale was the first one of the year on Apple Street, and several of her neighbors had come over to have a look.
Papi came out. He held a dish piled high with nuts. “Here’s a snack for everyone,” he said. Flora’s dad loved sharing things. Most of all he loved sharing jokes. He smiled when he saw Flora’s sign and winked (眨眼) at the customers gathered around.
“Yard sale? What are you selling yards of? Or meters of?” he asked. “Ribbons? Carpet? Cloth? Where’s your ruler?”
“Not that kind of yard,” joked Mrs. Ciro. “It must be this nice grassy yard we’re standing on that’s for sale.”
“How much for the weed by your sign?” asked Mr. Johnson, joking.
Flora gave no response. She didn’t think their jokes were funny. She felt extremely in low spirits at the thought that the lovely yard was already sold, and soon their poor flowers and weed would be ruined.” Deader than a doorknob,’ Papi’s papi would say”, she thought to herself bitterly, “What’s worse, the new house doesn’t have any flowers at all.”
With a sigh, Flora dug her heels deep into the grass. But when she felt the soft earth move under her heels, she knew what she could do.
She whispered her clever plan to Papi. He nodded, smiling, and sat down in her seat instead.
注意:
1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右;
2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。
Flora fetched old flowerpots and found a trowel (園藝鏟) to dig with.
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Now she was ready for selling the yard and joking with customers.
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【范文賞析】
Flora fetched old flowerpots and found a trowel to dig with. She walked to the yard, knelt down, and found the right place to shovel. Carefully she dug up chunks of earth that had flowers growing out of them. Then, she gently packed each chunk and more soil in a pot, deciding to carry two inside. They would come along to the new house. The others she lined up near her sign. All the work finished, she came back. “Thanks, Papi,” Flora said with smile, taking her seat again.
Now she was ready for selling the yard and joking with customers. Mr. Johnson was picking some toys from the stand. Mrs. Ciro picked several story books. And the two asked jokingly again, “But how much for the yard?” This time, Flora smiled. Her smile was just like Papi’s. “Zero cents!” she said, “Pick any pot of yard you like!” Hearing this, all the neighbors burst into laughter. “Now our yard can survive,” Flora thought to herself delightedly, “both in my new house and on Apple Street” she added.
【寫作思路】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了一個叫做Flora的女孩跟爸爸要賣掉房子及其舊物，搬去新家，但Flora對院子里的花草十分不舍，害怕會被遺棄，因此將這些花草移植到花盆里贈送給購買舊物的人，因而保存了這些花草的故事。
1. 段落續(xù)寫
①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Flora拿來舊花盆，找了一把鏟子來挖”可知，第一段描寫Flora想把花草移植到花盆里，然后將它們帶到新房子去。
②由第二段句首內(nèi)容“現(xiàn)在她準備賣掉院子，和顧客開玩笑”可知，第二段描寫了Flora將花草移植到花盆之后，將等待買房人來并且計劃把這下花草送給喜歡它們的人。
2. 續(xù)寫線索：挖土——移植花草——等待買家——贈送花草——變得開心
3. 詞匯拓展
行為類：
①跪下來：kneel down→get down on one’s knees
②包裹：pack→wrap up
③完成：finish→complete
④坐下：take one’s seat→sit down
情緒類：
①笑：smile→laugh
②欣喜地：delightedly→excitedly
【高分句型1】Flora said with smile, taking her seat again.(運用了非謂語動詞作狀語)
【高分句型2】Hearing this, all the neighbors burst into laughter.(運用了非謂語動詞作狀語)

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