思維導(dǎo)圖
第一招：副詞開頭
我們先來看兩個例句：
Carefully, he stepped ver all the brken glass.他小心翼翼地踩過了所有的碎玻璃。
Jyfully ，he skipped up the street.他很高興地跳過了街道。
這里的carefully和jyfully把后面的兩個動作“step踩”和“skip跳”描寫的更加細(xì)致和生動。
我們來看 2016年高考真題。故事大致是這樣的：夫妻旅游途中吵架，妻子獨(dú)自離開，迷路在樹林里，直升飛機(jī)來了幾次救援但沒有看見她，她感到很失望。
第一段開頭的提示句是：But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again.意思是：沒有直升機(jī)來了，天又黑了。同學(xué)們，可以想一想，我們該怎么接下來寫開頭呢？（停頓3秒鐘）我們來看看下面的寫法：
Immediately, an abslute darkness ruled the frest. 立刻，一片黑暗籠罩著森林。
這里就用了：時間副詞immediately銜接 + 環(huán)境描寫，烘托了森林里迷路的緊張氣氛。
第二招：形容詞短語開頭
我們先看兩個例句：
Curius t knw what was inside, he tipted int the dark cave.他好奇地想知道里面是什么，踮著腳尖走進(jìn)了黑暗的洞穴。
這里的“Curius t knw what was inside, 很想知道里面有什么東西”就是形容詞短語，表明他進(jìn)洞穴的原因。相當(dāng)于：He was curius t knw what was inside, and he tipted int the dark cave.
Unable t say a wrd, he was rted t the spt.一句話也說不出來，他就楞在了原地。
這里的“unable t say a wrd”也是一個形容詞短語，表現(xiàn)了“楞在原地”這個動作伴隨動作：說不出一個字。
我們來看2018年高考真題，講的是爸爸帶兒子去朋友家農(nóng)場游玩而迷路的故事。第一段開頭給的提示句是：Suddenly a little rabbit jumped ut in frnt f my hrse. 突然，一只小兔子跳到了我的馬前。
怎么接下來寫開頭呢？（停頓3秒鐘）我們可以這么寫：
Afraid that I might hurt the lvely small creature, I autmatically let ut a cry t stp my hrse. 意思是：我害怕我會傷害這個可愛的小生物，我自動發(fā)出一聲喊叫來阻止我的馬。這里用情緒形容詞+從句的形式，很好體現(xiàn)了后一個動作“喊叫cry”的原因。
我們來看這篇文章的 第二段開頭：
文章給的提示句是：We had n idea where we were and it gt dark.我們不知道自己在哪里，天變黑了。
怎么接下來寫開頭呢？（停頓3秒鐘）我們可以這么寫：
Exhausted and hungry, I wndered if we culd find ur way back. 我又累又餓，想知道我們能不能找到回去的路。
這里用情緒形容詞+從句的形式，很好體現(xiàn)了后一個動作伴隨的情況：又累又餓！
第三招： 非謂語開頭
先看這個例句：
Lking arund him cautiusly, he slipped int the rm and sftly clsed the dr.他小心翼翼地環(huán)顧四周，溜進(jìn)了房間，輕輕地關(guān)上門。
這里的“Lking arund him cautiusly”意思是：小心翼翼地環(huán)顧四周，是一個非謂語動詞短語。
我們來看 2016年高考真題第一段開頭，剛才提到過，講了妻子在森林里迷路的故事。
文章給的提示句是：But n mre helicpters came and it was getting dark again.但是沒有直升機(jī)來了，天又黑了。剛才我們用副詞開頭寫了一個句子?，F(xiàn)在我們用非謂語開頭，怎么寫呢？（停頓3秒鐘）我們可以這么寫：
Feeling disappinted, Jane had t stay alne fr anther night. 簡感到失望，不得不再呆一夜。本句中的開頭，用了ding的形式，即feeling disappinted感到失望。
我們再來看 2016年10月高考真題第二段開頭：
文章給的提示句是： It was daybreak when Jane wke up. 簡醒來的時候天已經(jīng)亮了。
怎么接下來寫開頭呢？（停頓3秒鐘）我們可以這么寫：
Feeling refreshed, she cntinued t walk alng the stream t find the way ut.她感到神清氣爽，繼續(xù)沿著小溪散步，尋找出去的路。
這里用feeling refreshed的形式，很好體現(xiàn)了后一個動作“walk”的伴隨狀態(tài)。
第四招：對話或獨(dú)白開頭
先看一個例句：“Let’s see wh gets there first!” Rachel shuted, as she pedaled fast and zmed past Jenny.“讓我們看看誰先到那里去！”瑞秋一邊叫著，一邊飛快地蹬著車從珍妮身邊沖過去。
類似的寫法，我們來看 2017年高考真題，文章主要講的是作者和朋友一起騎車游玩，途中遇狼的故事。第一段開頭文章給的提示句是：The car abruptly stpped in frnt f him. 汽車突然停在他面前。
怎么接下來寫開頭呢？（停頓3秒鐘）我們可以這么寫："Get int the car." Paul shuted at Mac. “上車！” 保羅對麥克喊道。
第五招：背景描寫
我們來看 2017年高考真題，文章講了作者與健忘的媽媽一塊去旅游的故事。
第二段開頭的提示語是這樣的：We drve thrugh several states and saw lts f great sights alng the way（我們開車穿過了幾個州，沿途看到了很多好風(fēng)景。）
怎么接下來寫開頭呢？（停頓3秒鐘）我們可以這么寫：
I lked ut f the car windw, winding rivers, lfty muntains, sunny beaches and deep valleys, hlding me entirely in their fascinatin.
我望著車窗外，蜿蜒的河流，高聳的山脈，陽光明媚的海灘和深邃的山谷，完全吸引了我的注意力。
這里用“視覺+環(huán)境描寫+擬人”的寫作手法，也成功地抓住了讀者的注意力！
第六招：行為描寫
Furry started wagging his tail and running arund in circles when he saw his master taking a leash ut frm the drawer. Furry was all ready fr his evening walk.
當(dāng)他看到他的主人從抽屜里拿出一條皮帶時，F(xiàn)urry開始搖，繞著圈跑。 Furry準(zhǔn)備好了晚上的散步。一連串有關(guān)Furry的動作鏈，像放電影一樣，印刻在讀者的大腦中。為后面情節(jié)發(fā)展做好了鋪墊。
我們來看 2017年高考真，仍然是作者與健忘媽媽一塊去旅游的故事。
文章的第一段的提示句是：The next day we remembered the brand-new tent we had brught with us.（第二天，我們想起了我們帶來的那個全新的帳篷。）怎么接下來寫開頭呢？（停頓3秒鐘）我們可以這么寫：
Dad exchanged a glance with me. Why nt camp t satisfy Mm? 爸爸和我相互看了一眼。 為什么不露營來滿足媽媽？
這里就用到了動作描寫+問句銜接。很好勾起了讀者的興趣。
模擬演練
讀后續(xù)寫模擬專練01
讀后續(xù)寫 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
On July 8，2017，eight members f a family in ttal，were enjying an evening tgether at the beach in Panhandle，F(xiàn)lrida．As the sun sank lwer n the hrizn，the tw bys Nah，11，and Stephen，8—swam int the waves withut the grwn-ups nticing．Sn they realized that the cean had pulled them int the sea．After trying and failing t swim back，they started waving and screaming fr help．But the lifeguards had been ff duty fr the evening．
The bys had been struggling fr several minutes when Jacky and Tabatha，a cuple frm Gergia，heard them．They dived int the water and sn reached the tw brthers．But after a few minutes，they were all trapped in a rip current(離岸流)—a pwerful ne that culd sweep even the strngest swimmer ut t sea! By then，sme teenagers had heard the cry．One f the teens rushed int the water，grabbed Jacky，and pulled him back t shre．Meanwhile，Tabatha culd feel herself being pulled farther ut．She was already exhausted and beginning t feel desperate as she was trying t save bth bys alne．
Onshre，Jacky was terrified．A man stpped．“What’s wrng?” asked Shaun，wh was heading back t his car．“My wife is drwning!” Brittany said．Shaun immediately strde(大步跨)int the water．But several minutes later，a gaping 15 feet still lay between him and Tabatha and the bys．He knew that if he cntinued，he’d becme anther victim．He turned arund t seek help．
It was abut that time that Rberta，the bys’ mther，returned frm the bathrm and lked arund fr her children．She was shcked t spt them flating much farther ut than they were allwed t g．She fught the waves t get t her screaming sns and the stranger wh was trying t save them，but she quickly discvered it was nearly impssible t make headway in any directin．Lking arund，Rberta sighed with relief t see sme mre peple cming t help．
注意：
1．所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
2．應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；
3．續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；
4．續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。
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When they tried in vain t rescue the brthers and Tabatha，a risky idea came t them．
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By then，mre swimmers had als nticed the grup in truble and rushed t jin the human chain．
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翻譯小練習(xí)：
1. 為了不讓自己在激流中失去立足點(diǎn)，他們開始互相抓住，形成一條從海灘一直延伸到掙扎的人和塔巴塔的人類鏈。
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2. 他們緊緊地聯(lián)系在一起，把腳牢牢地插在沙子里，以確保他們的安全。
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3. 然而，這需要更多的鏈接，可能有幾十個。
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4. 肖恩在海灘上發(fā)現(xiàn)了其他的游泳者，喊道：“別光站在那兒！來幫忙吧?！?br>______________________________________________________________________________________
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5. 一個接一個，一個接一個，完全陌生的人走進(jìn)海浪里，緊緊抓住對方的手腕，決心不讓任何人死在海灘上。
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6. 最后，他們成功了，Tabatha和兩個兄弟得救了！“海灘上的那些人是地球上的天使，”羅伯塔說。
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7. “不管是第一個人還是最后一個人，他們都是我們的英雄，幫助我們的家庭擺脫了困境。
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參考答案：
1. 為了不讓自己在激流中失去立足點(diǎn)，他們開始互相抓住，形成一條從海灘一直延伸到掙扎的人和塔巴塔的人類鏈。
T keep themselves frm lsing their fting in the rip current, they began hlding n t ne anther t frm a human chain extending frm the beach all the way ut t the struggling and Tabatha.
2. 他們緊緊地聯(lián)系在一起，把腳牢牢地插在沙子里，以確保他們的安全。
They stayed linked tightly and managed t ensure they were safe by making their feet firmly planted in the sand.
3. 然而，這需要更多的鏈接，可能有幾十個。
Hwever, that required mre links—prbably dzens f them.
4. 肖恩在海灘上發(fā)現(xiàn)了其他的游泳者，喊道：“別光站在那兒！來幫忙吧?！?br>Shaun sptted ther swimmers n the beach and shuted, “Dn’t just stand there! Cme and help.”
5. 一個接一個，一個接一個，完全陌生的人走進(jìn)海浪里，緊緊抓住對方的手腕，決心不讓任何人死在海灘上。
One by ne，link by link，ttal strangers walked int the waves and grasped ne anther by the wrists，determined that n ne wuld die n that beach．
6. 最后，他們成功了，Tabatha和兩個兄弟得救了！“海灘上的那些人是地球上的天使，”羅伯塔說。
At last，they made it and Tabatha and the tw brthers were saved! “Thse peple n the beach are angels n earth，”said Rberta．
7. “不管是第一個人還是最后一個人，他們都是我們的英雄，幫助我們的家庭擺脫了困境。
“Whether it is the first persn r the last persn in the chain，they are all ur heres，wh helped get ur family ut f truble．”
參考范文：
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When they tried in vain t rescue the brthers and Tabatha，a risky idea came t them. T keep themselves frm lsing their fting in the rip current, they began hlding n t ne anther t frm a human chain extending frm the beach all the way ut t the struggling and Tabatha. They stayed linked tightly and managed t ensure they were safe by making their feet firmly planted in the sand. Hwever, that required mre links—prbably dzens f them. Shaun sptted ther swimmers n the beach and shuted, “Dn’t just stand there! Cme and help.”
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By then，mre swimmers had als nticed the grup in truble and rushed t jin the human chain．One by ne，link by link，ttal strangers walked int the waves and grasped ne anther by the wrists，determined that n ne wuld die n that beach．At last，they made it and Tabatha and the tw brthers were saved! “Thse peple n the beach are angels n earth，”said Rberta．“Whether it is the first persn r the last persn in the chain，they are all ur heres，wh helped get ur family ut f truble．”
讀后續(xù)寫模擬專練02
讀后續(xù)寫 閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
In 1945, a 12-year-ld by saw a beautiful brch(胸針) in a shp windw that set his heart racing. But the price－five dllars－was t high fr Reuben Earle. Five dllars wuld buy almst a week's fd fr his family.
Reuben culdn't ask his father fr the mney. Everything his father made thrugh fishing went t his mther, Dra. Slim and beautiful, she was the center f the hme, the glue that held it tgether. The husewrk was never-ending, and she struggled t supprt their five children but she was happy as her family and their well-being were all she cared abut.
Nevertheless, he pened the shp's weathered (風(fēng)化的)dr and went inside, Standing prud and straight in his flur－sack(面粉袋改做的) shirt and washed－ut trusers, he tld the shpkeeper what he wanted, adding, "But I dn't have the mney right nw. Can yu please hld it fr sme time?
"I'll try," the shpkeeper smiled. "Peple arund here dn't usually have that kind f mney t spend n things. It shuld keep fr a while."
Reuben respectfully tuched his wrn cap and walked ut.
He wuld raise the mney and nt tell anybdy, fr he thught Mum wuld get surprised when she saw that brch. On hearing the sund f hammering frm a side street, Reuben suddenly had an idea that he culd raise mney by selling the used nail bags(裝釘子的麻袋). Peple built their wn buildings in Bay Rberts, using nails bught in bags frm a lcal factry. Smetimes the used nail bags were thrwn away at the cnstructin site, and Reuben knew he culd sell them back t the factry fr five cents a piece.
That day he sld tw nail bags and hid the mney in a rusty sda tin.
注意：
1. 所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
2. 應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；
3. 續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；
4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。
Paragraph l: Every day after schl, Reuben started his plan.
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Paragraph 2: Finally, the time came!
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翻譯小練習(xí)：
1. 魯本又冷又餓，在街上徘徊，小心翼翼地尋找指甲袋。
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2. 為了省更多的錢，他甚至決定一大早送報紙。
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3. 盡管他感到筋疲力盡，但他仍然堅持這個計劃。
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4. 商店櫥窗里的胸針提醒他，他所做的是值得的。
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5. 經(jīng)過長時間的努力，他終于成功了。
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6. 他拿出汽水罐，把硬幣倒出來，開始數(shù)。
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7. 五美元！他的努力得到了回報！
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8. 魯本拿著汽水罐，沖到商店去買胸針。
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9. 當(dāng)他拿到漂亮的胸針時，他沖進(jìn)前門，把它放在朵拉和阿普斯的手里。
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10. 多拉從來沒有收到過這樣的禮物。
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11. 她說不出話來，高興極了，把兒子緊緊地抱在懷里，眼里噙滿了淚水。
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參考答案：
1. 魯本又冷又餓，在街上徘徊，小心翼翼地尋找指甲袋。
Cld and hungry, Reuben wandered the streets, searching fr the nail bags carefully.
2. 為了省更多的錢，他甚至決定一大早送報紙。
T save mre mney, he even decided t deliver papers in the early mrning.
3. 盡管他感到筋疲力盡，但他仍然堅持這個計劃。
Exhausted and tired as he felt, he still stuck t the plan.
4. 商店櫥窗里的胸針提醒他，他所做的是值得的。
It was the brch in the shp windw that reminded him that what he did was wrthwhile.
5. 經(jīng)過長時間的努力，他終于成功了。
After a lng time f hard wrk, he made it eventually.
6. 他拿出汽水罐，把硬幣倒出來，開始數(shù)。
He tk ut the sda tin, pured the cins ut and began t cunt.
7. 五美元！他的努力得到了回報！
Five dllars! His hard wrk paid ff!
8. 魯本拿著汽水罐，沖到商店去買胸針。
Hlding the sda tin firmly, Reuben rushed fr the shp t buy the brch.
9. 當(dāng)他拿到漂亮的胸針時，他沖進(jìn)前門，把它放在朵拉和阿普斯的手里。
The mment he gt the beautiful brch, he burst thrugh the frnt dr and placed it in Dra&aps’s hand.
10. 多拉從來沒有收到過這樣的禮物。
Never had Dra received such a gift.
11. 她說不出話來，高興極了，把兒子緊緊地抱在懷里，眼里噙滿了淚水。
Speechless and happy, she held her sn tightly int her arms, with tears welling up in her eyes.
參考范文：Paragraph 1: Every day after schl, Reuben started his plan. Cld and hungry, Reuben wandered the streets, searching fr the nail bags carefully. T save mre mney, he even decided t deliver papers in the early mrning. Exhausted and tired as he felt, he still stuck t the plan. It was the brch in the shp windw that reminded him that what he did was wrthwhile. After a lng time f hard wrk, he made it eventually.
Paragraph 2: Finally the time came! He tk ut the sda tin, pured the cins ut and began t cunt. Five dllars! His hard wrk paid ff! Hlding the sda tin firmly, Reuben rushed fr the shp t buy the brch. The mment he gt the beautiful brch, he burst thrugh the frnt dr and placed it in Dra&aps’s hand. Never had Dra received such a gift. Speechless and happy, she held her sn tightly int her arms, with tears welling up in her eyes.

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這是一份專題36 讀后續(xù)寫07 助人型 -2022年高考英語畢業(yè)班二輪熱點(diǎn)題型歸納與變式演練（新高考專用），文件包含專題36讀后續(xù)寫07助人型解析版doc、專題36讀后續(xù)寫07助人型原卷版doc等2份試卷配套教學(xué)資源，其中試卷共39頁， 歡迎下載使用。

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