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At that very mment Kim's parents arrived.“Help!Help!”TJ shuted.Immediately Kim's father tk ff tward the guy. Seeing this, the guy hurriedly let g f Kim and brke int a run. Kim's father dashed up, caught hld f him and pressed him t the grund.Kim ran crying int her mther's arms. Minutes later, the plice arrived and arrested the guy.TJ breathed a sigh f relief and smiled happily.TJ's quick thinking and bravery saved a little girl in the neighbrhd frm unimaginable cnsequences.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，11歲的TJ,7歲的Kim和9歲的Julie在安靜的街道玩滑板車。一個滿頭蓬亂長胡子的男人突然出現(xiàn)將Kim抱走。TJ和Julie開始想辦法營救Kim。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：Julie大喊道：“壞人把Kim帶走了?！彼院竺鎽?yīng)該寫Kim的父母聽到這一消息之后的反應(yīng)以及他們所采取的行動。給出的內(nèi)容提示當(dāng)Kim被帶走后，TJ唯一的想法就是怎么去營救她。所以本段也應(yīng)該提及，在Julie去告訴Kim父母期間，TJ是如何行動的。有什么進展。第二段寫道在那個時候，Kim的父母趕到了。所以第一段最后應(yīng)該是提及TJ的營救到了關(guān)鍵時刻。
第二段開頭寫道正在這時，Kim的父母趕到了。所以接下來應(yīng)該寫他們是如何與壞人斗爭，將Kim從壞人手中奪回來。最后要寫壞人被警察逮捕，繩之以法。TJ和Julie的勇敢行為得到了大家的贊賞。
最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右，按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫故事完整，邏輯合理。續(xù)寫文與前文做到了內(nèi)容上的銜接。時態(tài)正確，語言詳略得當(dāng)，心理活動與動作描寫生動，如描寫Kim的父親抓壞人使用了一系列動詞，dashed up, caught hld f him and pressed him很精彩地描寫了當(dāng)時激烈的場景。
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After reading the diary, the sn was filled with tears and began t reflect n the days when he used t sit tgether with his father. His father wuld patiently answer the same questin all 23 times withut feeling irritatin while his father asked him the same questin just fur times! The sn thught t himself: If I attain ld age, hw will my sn lk at me? Will he think f me as a burden? Will he shut at me because f my pr sight, pr hearing r pr understanding?
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Feeling ashamed, the sn gt dwn n his knees befre his father. He made an aplgy t his father, begging his father t frgive him fr his bad behavir. He said this alud, “I prmise t see yu happy frever, Dad. It is yu wh have cared fr me since I was a little child, shwering yur selfless affectin n me. Yu wrked hard t make mney s that I culd affrd t g t university. I will serve yu in the best day.”
【解析】
【分析】
本文屬于讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
“讀后續(xù)寫”題型的寫作步驟：1）細讀原文。首先要仔細閱讀短文，掌握文章主旨和結(jié)構(gòu)，明確各段的大意。本文講述了父親問了兒子四次“這是什么”，兒子回答是烏鴉后開始厭煩。父親拿出以前記錄不厭其煩回答兒子23遍同樣問題的日記讓兒子看。 2）弄清要求。新高考的概要寫作是寫全文概要，不是寫某一部分的概要，或者就某些問題寫出要點。3）列出原文要點。分析原文的內(nèi)容和結(jié)構(gòu)，將內(nèi)容分項扼要表述并注意在結(jié)構(gòu)上的順序。在此基礎(chǔ)上選出與文章主題密切相關(guān)的部分。根據(jù)提示詞可知，續(xù)寫第一段要寫兒子讀完日記后的感受，第二段寫讀完日記后的做法。
寫作注意事項：（1）概要應(yīng)包括原文中的主要事實，略去不必要的細節(jié)。（2）安排好篇幅的比例，概要應(yīng)同原文保持協(xié)調(diào)，即用較多的文字寫重要內(nèi)容，用較少的文字寫次要內(nèi)容。（3）注意要點之間的銜接，要用適當(dāng)?shù)年P(guān)聯(lián)詞語貫通全文，切忌只簡單地寫出一些互不相干的句子，但也不要每兩句之間都加關(guān)聯(lián)詞語，以免顯得生硬。（4）不排斥用原文的某些詞句，但不要照搬原文的句子，如果不能完全用自己的話語表達，至少對原文句子做一些同義詞替換，如果結(jié)構(gòu)上也能有一些轉(zhuǎn)換會更好。（5）計算詞數(shù)，看是否符合規(guī)定的詞數(shù)要求。
【點睛】
本文內(nèi)容完整，層次分明，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，表達準確。另外全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。
范文語言地道，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。作者在范文中使用了較多高級詞匯和句式，如be filled with tears，used t d, withut feeling irritatin , made an aplgy t, affrd t等詞語。非謂語動詞Feeling ashamed和begging his father t frgive him fr his bad behavir.強調(diào)句It is yu wh have cared fr me since I was a little child,目的狀語從句 Yu wrked hard t make mney s that I culd affrd t g t university. 全文沒有語法錯誤，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然流暢。
3．Emily hurried t the schl and nervusly glanced at the list n the dr f the chral rm. The fear f being rejected came t strike again. “Jeff Green, Rse Black…” she murmured as her eyes mved upward. “Ww!” Emily abruptly cvered her wide-pened muth, feeling as if her heart wuld jump ut. There, at the tp f the list was psted her name. The leading singer! Hwever, whispers arund her pulled her back t earth. Just then, she felt a pat n the shulder. It was Mr. Butler. “We selected yu fr ur faith in yur abilities and vice.” Inspired, Emily practiced even harder fr the day f perfrmance.
Finally the day fr the perfrmance came. Emily’s eyes danced with excitement as she stepped n t the stage. Standing still, she heard nises amng the crwd. Obviusly nt cheers! Emily felt nervus again and even her legs began trembling. At that mment, her eyes parked n Mr. Butler at the crner. He ndded and exchanged a determined glance with her, which timely put her heart back in place. With the music rising, Emily began her singing. Her sweet vice pured and the audience fell int an abrupt silence. When she finished, the auditrium erupted int a sea f cheers. Emily White in tears, with s many birth prblems in her bdy, became the shiniest star!
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，主人公艾米麗 · 懷特17年前來到這個世界，天生身體有許多缺陷但卻有一副好嗓音，她的音樂老師歐文斯太太認為艾米麗的缺陷會使她在演唱時讓觀眾注意，所以她未能參加學(xué)校去年的圣誕表演，但今年，音樂老師布特勒先生，聽說了艾米麗的事之后，建議她試試。在演唱時，雖然有點緊張，但艾米麗還是照巴特勒先生說的做了。完成測試后的當(dāng)天晚上，艾米麗輾轉(zhuǎn)反側(cè)，無法入睡，因為結(jié)果在第二天就會貼在合唱室的門上。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：艾米麗趕到合唱室，焦急地看了一眼門上的名單。所以，在接下來的內(nèi)容中，要描述艾米麗在閱讀名單時候的心情，尤其是和已知內(nèi)容：歐文斯太太拒絕艾米麗，形成對比，這次被認可后的激動心情進行重點描寫。第二段開頭是：終于，表演的日子到了。本段要充分描述艾米麗上臺后對自我狀態(tài)由緊張到從容的變化，進而取得成功。文章最后希望更多的老年人去學(xué)習(xí)，活到老學(xué)到老。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
文章思路清晰，語言規(guī)范，段落整齊，語篇連貫，層次清晰。使用了較為高級的句式: 現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語Standing still, she heard nises amng the crwd. When引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句When she finished, the auditrium erupted int a sea f cheers.
高級句式的應(yīng)用提升了寫作的檔次，整個短文顯示出了作者高水平的英語表達能力。
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Eventually the shp wner came ut and mved t the cunter. There, befre Bbby's eyes, lay twelve red rses, with leaves f green and tiny white flwers all tied tgether with a big silver tape. Bbby's heart sank as the wner placed them gently int a lng white bx. "That will be ten cents, yung man." the shp wner said, reaching ut his hand fr the dime. Slwly, Bbby mved his hand t give the man his dime. Culd this be true? He wndered.
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With the bunch f beautiful rses in his hands, Bbby backed ff and then turned and ran. Within minutes, he was at hme, still breathless. “Lk, Mther, what have I gt fr yu?” Bbby called ut in the backyard. Mther came ut frm inside the huse. She culd hardly believe her eyes upn seeing the beautiful flwers in frnt f her. “Merry Christmas!” Bbby said and began t tell her everything he had experienced in the flwer shp. Tearfully, Mther hugged her sn in her arms. Standing in the bitter cld air, they smehw didn't feel cld at all.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，生活貧苦的鮑比想在圣誕節(jié)送母親禮物，但他沒有錢，就在他在街上走時，他撿到了一角硬幣，他很開心，當(dāng)他走進第一家商店，售貨員告訴他一角硬幣無法買東西，他很失落，之后他去了一家花店，店主讓鮑比等著，說“我看看能為你做些什么”。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：最后店主走出來，來到柜臺前。本段應(yīng)該寫店主為鮑比準備了一角硬幣的禮物，注重寫店主對鮑比的幫助，鮑比簡直無法相信。第二段開頭是：鮑比手里拿著一束美麗的玫瑰，退后轉(zhuǎn)身跑開了。本段應(yīng)該寫鮑比把花送給媽媽，媽媽很驚訝且開心，之后鮑比把在花店里的經(jīng)歷告訴媽媽，母子倆感受到了冬日的溫暖。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：tie tgether，reach ut ne’s hand，call ut等高級詞匯；With the bunch f beautiful rses in his hands ——with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)，限制性定語從句everything he had experienced in the flwer shp，Standing in the bitter cld air 現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語等高級句式。
5．When I was lading up my backpack, Mrs. Sather asked me t g t her. Mrs. Sather stared int my eyes as if seeing my inner self lcked away inside. ''I wuld lve yu t give this a try fr me. But if yu really dn't want t, I wn’t make yu. It is yur chice. '' Mrs. Sather wanted me in this rle. She shcked me, fr I was always a shy persn, nt even dare t speak lud in public.
Hearing Mrs Sather's wrds, I realized it was time t make a change. I decided t thrw ff my shy clak. I wanted t prve that I als culd d smething gd in public. After secnds f hesitatin, I ndded my head, cnfidently saying ''Mrs Sather I want t, n, I am determined t paly the rle. And I will try my best t perfrm it well.'' Lking at me with a big smile n face, Mrs Sather said ''I believe in yu. If yu met sme prblem, yu can turn t me.'' ''Thank yu! '' I left her ffice happily.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。文章主要講述了作者是一個很害羞的人，從來沒有想過自己會在兩百人面前表演。可以一天薩瑟老師卻讓她去表演主角，她很害怕，但最后說服自己同意參加演出。經(jīng)過自己的努力，她終于成功地進行了表演。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫分為兩段，第一段的開頭是：當(dāng)我背上書包時，薩瑟老師讓我去她辦公室……，所以可以接著寫：薩瑟老師看著我的眼睛，好像看到了我被鎖在里面的內(nèi)心。“我想讓你為我去試一試，但如果你真的不想去，我也不想強迫你。這是你自己的選擇?！彼_瑟老師想讓我去演這個角色，這讓我很震驚，因為我一直都是一個害羞的人，甚至不敢在公開場合大聲說話。
第二段的開頭是：聽了薩瑟老師的話，我意識到是時候做出改變了。我決定脫掉害羞的斗篷。我想證明我也可以在公開場合把事情做好。猶豫片刻后，我點了頭，自信地說：“薩瑟老師，我想，不，我決定扮演這個角色，并且我會盡全力把它表演好?！泵鎺⑿Φ乜粗遥_瑟老師說：“我相信你，如果有什么問題，你盡管來找我?！薄爸x謝你！”我開心地離開了她的辦公室。
續(xù)寫時要注意時態(tài)，續(xù)寫內(nèi)容要符合人物特點和邏輯。
【點睛】
范文內(nèi)容完整，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。作者在范文中使用了一些高級表達，例如：I wanted t prve that I als culd d smething gd in public.中that引導(dǎo)賓語從句；Lking at me with a big smile n face, Mrs Sather said ''I believe in yu. If yu met sme prblem, yu can turn t me.''中使用了現(xiàn)在分詞短語作狀語。
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Suddenly, the leader ntice a small clump f grass. S he was lst in thught: There must be water here. If there wasn’t water, the grass culdn’t live in the desert. Therefre, he asked his fellw travelers t dig up the grund n that very spt where the grass was. They dug and dug, and gradually they fund a large stne. The guide jumped int the hle, put his ear t the stne, and heard the sund f flwing water.
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A spring (泉源) was fund at last. All the peple were extremely cheerful. They expressed their thanks t the leader. And then they hurried t drink water and cked their fd with it. Befre they left, they raised a high flag s that ther travelers culd see the new spring in the ht-sand desert. Then they cntinued traveling safely t the end f their jurney.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。要求考生根據(jù)所給內(nèi)容續(xù)寫兩段。
【詳解】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，一個商人帶領(lǐng)著商隊去另一個國家售賣商品。他們來到一個沙漠的邊緣，這個沙漠白天沙石燙的像木炭一般，無法行走。于是他們找到一個懂得星象的導(dǎo)游，晚上等沙子冷卻下來再前行。有一天晚上，導(dǎo)游發(fā)現(xiàn)他們離沙漠的另一邊非常近了，他非常疲憊，于是他在放松的時候睡著了。駱駝不識方向，它們轉(zhuǎn)向另一邊，繞著大圈走，停在了他們出發(fā)的地方。第二天早上人們發(fā)現(xiàn)他們在回到了原地，他們開始哭泣、擔(dān)憂，甚至指責(zé)領(lǐng)隊和導(dǎo)游。但是領(lǐng)隊并沒有灰心，開始和導(dǎo)游一起想辦法解決問題。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：突然，領(lǐng)隊注意到一小團草。于是接下來應(yīng)該寫：領(lǐng)隊看到草，想到草生長的附近一定是有水的。于是領(lǐng)隊讓大家在草所生長的地方挖土，最后他們發(fā)現(xiàn)了一個大石頭，導(dǎo)游靠近石頭，聽到了流動的水聲。第二段開頭是：最后他們找到了一個泉源。那么接下來就應(yīng)該寫：大家都很高興，對領(lǐng)隊表示了感謝。喝過水、吃完飯后，在啟程之前，他們在此立了一面大旗，為了讓其他的旅行者看到這個沙漠中的泉源。然后他們繼續(xù)旅程，最終安全地到達了終點。
（注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。）
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，情節(jié)生動，內(nèi)容完整，符合題目要求。范文中使用的一些詞匯和句型值得我們學(xué)習(xí)。高級詞匯/短語，如：be lst in thught，dig up，express ne’s thanks t sb.，hurry t d sth.等；高級句型：虛擬語氣。時間狀語從句和目的狀語從句 Befre they left, they raised a high flag s that ther travelers culd see the new spring in the ht-sand desert. 定語從句，Therefre, he asked his fellw travelers t dig up the grund n that very spt where the grass was.彰顯了作者高水平的英語駕馭能力。
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Every summer, we wuld visit Mr. Dnvan and talk t him. We shared with him ur clrful experiences at schl while he kept giving ut his luscius fruits t us as usual. As time went by, we seemed t be mre a family than gd friends. But ne summer, we were infrmed that he was seriusly ill and we were anxius and restless, s we rushed straight t the hspital. It was frm his family that we knew that he had fell frm a tree while lking after the fruits and his head was seriusly hurt and needed a dangerus peratin.
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The next winter, wrd gt arund that Old Man Dnvan had died. Hearing the bad news, I felt a lump in my thrat and tears welled up in my eyes. I realized gne were the days when we sat tgether chatting with each ther. I realized gne were the days when we were lucky enugh t have a taste f the luscius fruit grwn by him. Hwever, he left us a hidden treasure—his kind heart, which shall never die away with the passage f time.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫，要求根據(jù)所給情節(jié)續(xù)寫兩段。
【詳解】
第1步：根據(jù)提示可知，本文要求續(xù)寫兩段：閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事，時態(tài)應(yīng)為一般過去時。
第2步：根據(jù)寫作要求，確定關(guān)鍵詞（組），如； clrful（多姿多彩的），luscius（甘美的），infrm（通知），anxius（擔(dān)憂的），restless（不安的），gamble（冒險），hidden（隱藏的）及treasure（財富）等。
第3步：根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時態(tài)問題。
第4步：連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，保持卷面的整潔美觀。
【點睛】
范文語言地道，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)。作者在范文中使用了較多高級詞匯和句式，高級詞匯有g(shù)ive ut（分發(fā)），as usual（像往常一樣），rush t （火速趕往），die away (消失)，lk after（照顧），well up（涌出）以及get arund（消息傳開），而且還使用了狀語從句“As time went by, we seemed t be mre a family than gd friends.”，賓語從句“But ne summer, we were infrmed that he was seriusly ill and we were anxius and restless”，同位語從句“The next winter, wrd gt arund that Old Man Dnvan had died.”，倒裝和定語從句“I realized gne were the days when we sat tgether chatting with each ther.”及“I realized gne were the days when we were lucky enugh t have a taste f the luscius fruit grwn by him.”，強調(diào)句型“It was frm his family that we knew that he had fell frm a tree while lking after the fruits and his head was seriusly hurt and needed a dangerus peratin.”，非限定性定語從句“Hwever, he left us a hidden treasure—his kind heart, which shall never die away with the passage f time.”，非謂語動詞“Hearing the bad news, I felt a lump in my thrat and tears welled up in my eyes.”，全文沒有語法錯誤，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然流暢。
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I stared. “Really? There’s n purchase required?” “Nne at all. These are free. G and see.” I thanked him and went t the stre with my brther and sister, where clrful ballns still annunced the grand pening. We walked inside and shwed ur cards t the nearest clerk. “It says these are gift cards,” she said “These items are abslutely free.” We culd hardly believe it. We thanked Gd fr caring and picked up the gds and left the stre with brad smiles.
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When Mm returned, we had fd n the table. “Where did yu get this?” Mm asked. “I prayed,” I said. And then I shwed her the ice cream in the fridge. She had her eyes wide pen. “Where did all this cme frm?” she asked. I tld her abut the man wh gave me the cards and the new grcery stre as we had ur meal. She shk her head again, this time with a sense f wnder. I culd see tears f relief welled up her eyes.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。文章主要講述了一個單親媽媽的家庭，因為媽媽要出去掙錢，家里的孩子沒有晚飯可以吃。后來，來了一個好心的人給他們送來了商場的禮券，讓他們可以免費購物，解決了燃眉之急。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫分為兩段，第一段的開頭是：我看著他說：“真的嗎？不需要購買嗎？”根據(jù)提示，可以接著寫：他告訴我“一分錢都不需要。都是免費的。走去看看?！蔽抑x過他，然后和弟弟妹妹一起去了那家商店，那里的彩色氣球預(yù)示著商場剛開業(yè)。我們走進去，把我們的卡片給商場的職員看。“據(jù)說這些是購物卡，”她說：“這些商品都是免費的。”我們簡直不能相信。我們感謝上帝的眷顧，然后去挑選商品，最后帶著微笑離開商場。
第二段的開頭是：當(dāng)媽媽回來時，我們已經(jīng)有食物在桌子上了。“你們從哪兒來的食物？”媽媽問。根據(jù)提示，可以接著寫：“這是我祈禱的?！比缓笪野驯淅锏谋ち杞o她看。她把眼睛睜得大大地，問“這些所有東西都是從哪兒來的？”吃飯時，我告訴了那個給我購物卡的男人和那家剛開的商場。她再次搖頭，這次帶著驚奇的感覺。我看到淚水涌上了她的眼睛。
續(xù)寫時要注意時態(tài)和人稱的轉(zhuǎn)換。
【點睛】
范文內(nèi)容完整，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。作者在范文中使用了一些主從復(fù)合句，例如：I thanked him and went t the stre with my brther and sister, where clrful ballns still annunced the grand pening.句中where引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句。I tld her abut the man wh gave me the cards and the new grcery stre as we had ur meal.句中wh引導(dǎo)定語從句，as引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句。
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Andrew put Grdn dwn and they lked under the bush. There was Pecky, a half-naked chicken, still alive thugh. She lked a mess, with almst half f her feathers gne, but she was abslutely fine. Andrew gently gathered her up and returned her t the cp. Our kids hurried t gather arund, clsely watched and gently strked her feathers.
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The next day Andrew had a discussin with the kids abut what t d with the chickens. The kids believed that the chickens shuld be shut in, safe frm any dangers in the wrld. But Andrew disagreed. He believed that we shuld be mre careful when letting the chickens ut in the yard. He encuraged ur kids t take risks. He explained that lve isn’t a cp which restrains them but smething that can bth prvide adequate prtectin and allw mre freedm f living a happy life. Finally, the kids understd their father and they tgether fenced a bigger area, prviding the chickens with the maximum freedm and safety.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫作文。通過閱讀所給文章可知，文章主要講述了作者的丈夫Andrew是一位睿智的父親，他通過養(yǎng)雞、一起做雞籠并教導(dǎo)孩子如何平衡冒險和自由。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：Andrew把Grdn放下，他們在灌木叢下看了看。后文可以描寫還有他們找到了Pecky，半裸著，但還活著。她看起來很糟糕，幾乎掉了一半的羽毛，但她絕對很好。Andrew輕輕地把她抱起來，放回了雞舍。我們的孩子們急忙圍攏過來，仔細觀察著它，還輕輕地撫摸著它的羽毛。第二段開頭是：第二天，Andrew和孩子們討論了如何處理這些雞。后文可以描寫孩子們認為雞應(yīng)該關(guān)起來，這樣就不會有任何危險。但Andrew并不贊同。他認為我們把雞放到院子里時應(yīng)該更加小心。他鼓勵我們的孩子去冒險。他解釋說，愛不是束縛它們的籠子，而是既能提供足夠的保護，又能讓它們更自由地過上幸福的生活。最后，孩子們理解了他們的父親，他們一起圍了一塊更大的區(qū)域，給雞提供了最大限度的自由和安全。注意要使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語。
【點睛】
續(xù)寫內(nèi)容詳略得當(dāng)，使用了固定短語和高級句型。如：put dwn，gather up，d with，encurage sb. t d等固定短語；He believed that we shuld be mre careful when letting the chickens ut in the yard.該句使用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語；He explained that lve isn’t a cp which restrains them but smething that can bth prvide adequate prtectin and allw mre freedm f living a happy life.該句使用了賓語從句和定語從句。
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I entered the shp, and ne f the salesmen came t me. What surprised me mst was that the salesman was the husband frm the lder cuple wh had ever helped me years ag. Never had I met them since we met last time, which made me genuinely srry. Frtunately, I came acrss them and knew the shp was run by them. I was in truble again and needed them t give me a hand nce again. I tld them what was wrng with my car.
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After a while, they quickly drve a pickup truck t my car and started it. They slved my truble nce again, but when I tried t pay fr it, they wuld nt accept my mney. They tld me that when they ran the shp at first, n ne had ever taken time t write t them and say “Thank yu”, but nw they received an increasing number f thank-yu ntes frm peple, which they were really happy abut.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫作文。通過閱讀所給文章可知，文章主要講述了“我”有一次開車時遇到了故障得到了一對夫婦的幫助，“我”給他們寫了一封感謝信。后來，我的車子再次遇到了故障，于是“我”走進了一家汽車店。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：我進入汽車店，其中一位推銷員來到我面前。后文可以描寫“我”進入汽車店后，發(fā)現(xiàn)這個推銷員是幾年前曾經(jīng)幫助過“我”的那對夫妻中的丈夫，這家店竟然是由他們經(jīng)營的?！拔摇庇忠淮斡龅搅寺闊?，需要他們的幫助。第二段開頭是：過了一會兒，他們迅速將一輛皮卡車開到“我”的車前并啟動了。后文可以描寫當(dāng)“我”嘗試付款時，他們并不接受“我”的錢。他們說剛開始經(jīng)營這家店時，他們收到了“我”的感謝信，后來他們收到了越來越多的人的感謝信，他們對此感到非常高興。注意要使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語。
【點睛】
續(xù)寫內(nèi)容詳略得當(dāng)，使用了固定短語和主從復(fù)合句。如：cme acrss，in truble，give me a hand nce，an increasing number f等固定短語；Never had I met them since we met last time, which made me genuinely srry. 該句使用了倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)和which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句；They slved my truble nce again, but when I tried t pay fr it, they wuld nt accept my mney.該句使用了when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句。
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But nt a wrd came ut. Sally had been s excited abut putting n a dg shw fr her class. She had been quite familiar with the hand signals and had practiced fr weeks. Nw her eyes fund mine. I ndded encuragingly. She tk a deep breath and pened her muth. But then her whle bdy seemed t clse in n itself in defeat. Sally std ff t the side, head dwn. I felt awful. Sally returned t her seat, nt lking at anyne, nt even Bella.
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The next week, she tld me she wanted t try again, lking up at me with determinatin.”Are yu sure?” I asked. “Yu dn’t want t wait till next year?”“N,” she said,”Tday, I can d it.” Then we headed t Sally’s classrm. The kids were sitting in a circle n the flr listening t the teacher. We walked t the frnt f the rm. I shk Sally’s hands and stepped back. Fr a few secnds, she std silently, staring at her classmates. Finally she whispered,”This is Bella.” Then a little luder with mre cnfidence.”Bella.”
【解析】
【分析】
本文考查讀后續(xù)寫類的書面表達。
【詳解】
文章主要講述莎莉患有焦慮癥，我用訓(xùn)練過的狗貝拉幫助莎莉張嘴說話的故事。短文應(yīng)包含以下內(nèi)容：(1)所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；(2)至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；(3)續(xù)寫部分分為兩段,每段的開頭語已為你寫好；(4)續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。寫好這類作文要注意幾個步驟：1.認真審題，找準提示語中的關(guān)鍵詞或句，確定中心思想；2.依據(jù)關(guān)鍵句，草擬提綱，梳理文章的脈絡(luò)；3.準確定位人稱、時態(tài)。注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次；4.最后還要認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等。
【點睛】
本書面表達要點齊全，上下文連貫，使用一定數(shù)量的句式結(jié)構(gòu)，讓句子更加生動豐滿，同時運用了許多高級詞匯和固定短語，提高文章的檔次，體現(xiàn)了對英語的熟練的駕馭能力。例如: Sally std ff t the side, head dwn. 運用了獨立主格；Sally returned t her seat, nt lking at anyne, nt even Bella.運用了非謂語動詞；The kids were sitting in a circle n the flr listening t the teacher.運用現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語。
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After tw hurs f searching, I finally gave up and returned t the car. Then I fund my wife relaxing in a chair, drinking a cup f cffee. She was really smart. The next challenge was t get a new key. Luckily, anther family came thrugh the campsite, s I asked them t send ut a lcksmith. They prmised they wuld. Five hurs later, the lcksmith shwed up and he charged me twice the nrmal amunt fr making a new key.
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The next day, we stpped at a service centre fr lunch. I pulled ut the cup hlder and the missing key was sitting right there. Imagine my embarrassment.It was the nly place we didn't lk. And guess wh put it there? My wife! We actually bth made mistakes because I had pushed the cup hlder back withut nticing the key. I gt ut f the car, lked up at the sky and said, “Bird, I was wrng abut yu. I'm srry.”
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀文章可知，大約十年前，作者和妻子去亞利桑那州的大峽谷旅行，回來的時候不知道把車鑰匙放哪里了，并懷疑可能是被一只鳥偷走了，于是開始尋找丟失的鑰匙。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫第一段開頭為：找了兩個小時后，我終于放棄了，回到了車里……后面應(yīng)該寫尋找別的辦法，啟動車子。
續(xù)寫第二段開頭為：第二天，我們在一家服務(wù)中心停下來吃午飯……后面應(yīng)該寫我們卻意外的找到車鑰匙，作者冤枉了那只鳥。
續(xù)寫要求至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語，所以，考生應(yīng)熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候使用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
文章主題部分選用的是一般過去時，續(xù)寫部分也用一般過去時，通篇時態(tài)把握準確；所給關(guān)鍵詞使用的恰當(dāng)并且高級，顯示出較高的英語能力；文章中還使用了復(fù)合句，現(xiàn)在分詞作賓補等高級語法，為文章增加色彩和高級感，如Then I fund my wife relaxing in a chair, drinking a cup f cffee .We actually bth made mistakes because I had pushed the cup hlder back withut nticing the key. 這里原因狀語從句，顯示高級的英語水平，精準掌握了從句使用的要領(lǐng)；續(xù)寫部分構(gòu)思巧妙，銜接自然，思路清晰自然，表達完整，為一篇優(yōu)秀的作品。
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The day was nt spent n self-pity-it was really fun and unfrgettable. They rde bikes arund the schl’s hallways, tk phts, and played hide-and-seek. Trashaun taught Jayce hw t slam dunks. He even gave Jayce a shirt as a gift. He talked abut their left arms. He tld Jayce he was perfect the way he lked. He encuraged him nt t let anyne drag him dwn and shake his cnfidence.
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After the meeting, Jayce learned t accept his disability. He began t understand that there are many peple like him. He came t adapt himself t his disability. He recently started practising shting basketball every day and he really lves it. Jayce ften chats with Trashaun n the Internet abut basketball skills as well as sme schl issues. He is really mtivated by this rle mdel and has a psitive attitude t his future life. As fr Trashaun, he never dreamed that his vides wuld have such an impact. His relatinship with Jayce made him lk frward t helping mre kids.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，Jayce左臂殘缺，受到同學(xué)的嘲笑，母親不知如何向他解釋，同樣左臂殘缺的Trashaun在網(wǎng)絡(luò)上上傳了自己扣籃的視頻，很快受到歡迎，Jayce和他的母親看完視頻，信心大增。Jayce與Trashaun見面后很快成為朋友。Jayce意識到世界上還有和他一樣的人，他對自己的未來充滿信心。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：這一天不用再在自憐中度過，所以接下來寫的內(nèi)容是這是一個難忘的日子，因為這一天Jayce見到Trashaun及他們所做的事情，如在學(xué)校的過道里騎自行車、照相、玩捉迷藏等；同時要詳細描述Trashaun如何鼓勵Jayce，如告訴他看起來很好，不要因為任何人而沮喪且要對自己有信心。第二段開頭是：Trashaun與Jayce會面之后，所以接下來寫的內(nèi)容是Jayce在見到Trashaun之后受他鼓勵之后的改變。要詳細描述Jayce具體改變，如Jayce開始接受自己的殘疾，開始練習(xí)投籃并對未來的生活充滿積極樂觀的態(tài)度。文章最后也談到Trashaun認為他應(yīng)該幫助更多的像Jayce一樣的孩子。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯。如：adapt neself t，psitive attitude，lk frward t，drag dwn等高級詞匯。
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Suddenly, I didn’t feel quite s srry fr myself. She seemed sad, nw that I’d taken the time t ntice. I decided t d smething t cheer her up. “I have a better idea,” I said enthusiastically. “Cme n — let’s start back.” “OK,” agreed Jen, and a little smile caught at the crner f her muth. Ten minutes later, Jen and I put ur skates n the frnt prch, and I tld her we can make a big snw turkey. “This is ging t be great,” Jen said, grinning at me with rsy cheeks.
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We were s busy making it that we didn’t hear ur parents cme utside. “It’s the biggest snw turkey I’ve ever seen.” said Mm with a grin. A mment later, we were all busy wrking n ur giant creatin. When ur snw turkey was finished, Mm said t me, “Thanks fr cheering Jen up. Yu’re a gd brther, and yu cme up with great ideas.” A happy feeling spread thrugh me. I said, “I guess we make a gd team.” The snw turkey helped me remember that everything culd still wrk ut even if it had t change.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇記敘文。前文主要講述我習(xí)慣了和爸爸兩個人的生活，家里突然來了繼母和繼母帶來的妹妹，我很不習(xí)慣。特別是在圣誕節(jié)，以往爸爸都帶我去堆大雪人，但是今年的圣誕節(jié)爸爸卻在幫繼母做火雞。我感覺繼母和妹妹的到來改變樂我生活中的一切。但是當(dāng)我和妹妹對話時，我突然發(fā)現(xiàn)妹妹的生活改變了更多。我從沒有考慮過她怎么想。題干中已經(jīng)給出了續(xù)寫的每段首句，同學(xué)們按照首句將內(nèi)容展開即可。
【詳解】
第一步：審題：由續(xù)寫第一段給出的首句“Suddenly, I didn’t feel quite s srry fr myself.(突然，我覺得自己沒有那么委屈了)”可知，這一段主要圍繞作者開始關(guān)注妹妹的感受展開論述。由第二段首句We were s busy making it that we didn’t hear ur parents cme utside.(我們一直忙著制作雪人，沒聽到父母出來了)可知，這一段圍繞我們在一起也可以很開心展開論述。
第二步：列提綱（重點詞組）
taken the time t ntice(花時間注意)；cheer her up(讓她高興)；a little smile caught at the crner f her muth(嘴角露出了點笑容)；giant creatin(杰作)；cme up with(想出)；be all busy wrking n…(忙于做……)；grinning at me(朝我咧嘴笑)等。
第三步：遣詞造句：同學(xué)們在寫作時不能逐句翻譯，可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫，同時要點表述要完整，文章要通順，準確使用時態(tài)和語態(tài)。
第四步：連句成文：寫作時要適當(dāng)使用連詞、過渡詞和插入語，使文章渾然一體。同時恰當(dāng)而合理地使用一些高級詞匯和句型，如定語從句等，以提高文章檔次。
【點睛】
范文內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。作者在范文中使用了較多句式，如：第一段第二句使用了nw that引導(dǎo)的狀語從句；第一段第八句使用了賓語從句，第九句使用了現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語。第二段第二句使用了省略了that的定語從句；第二段第四句使用了時間狀語從句；最后兩句都使用了賓語從句；最后一句還使用了even if引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句。此外本文還使用了一些高級詞匯，如taken the time t ntice；cheer her up；a little smile caught at the crner f her muth；giant creatin；cme up with等。全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。
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“All right, that’s all we can d,” David tld Sara. Then they went back t the beach where they’d had lunch. They made a fire and laid ut a tarp. As the evening wre n, they placed a headlamp with a flashing light n a ledge. By abut 10:30 p.m.，they decided they prbably weren’t ging t get rescued that night, s they pulled ut their sleeping bags. Befre sleeping， David added mre wd t the fire t keep the muntain lins away.
Then, just after midnight, David suddenly wke up because he dreamed that they heard a helicpter hvering abve them and they heard the magic wrds: “This is Search and Rescue. Yu have been fund. “Unfrtunately, lking arund, he culd see nthing but endless darkness. He then fell int sleep again.
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David’s dream became true! The helicpter circled as the pilt lked fr a gd place t land. Finally the helicpter landed safely and it was a mment f pure happiness as the three chatted with the fficers wh had rescued them.When the fficers drpped them back at the Finch Campgrund, the family learned mre abut the lng sht events that had saved them: Sme hikers had seen the water bttle in the water. When they picked it up, they nticed the writing n it — “Help!”. Then they realized there was a nte inside. After they read it, they hightailed it t the campgrund, turned the bttle in. David is planning n having a big barbecue t meet the hikers — and thank them.“I imagine it’s ging t be ne f the greatest mments f my life.” he says.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
前文主要講述了David一家去野營，大雪和春雨把通?？梢钥刂频钠俨甲兂闪怂鳑坝康钠俨?，使得他們一家困在了山上，他們聽到瀑布另一側(cè)有人的聲音，下決心要把信息傳遞給這些人，最后他們在所攜帶的綠色水壺上刻下了“幫助”兩個字，并用所帶的紙筆寫下了“ 6- 15-19我們被困在瀑布了。請尋求幫助”，然后將紙條塞入瓶子。根據(jù)給的第一段開頭This time, his thrw ver the waterfall was perfect.（這次，他完美地將水壺扔過了瀑布。），可知本段是續(xù)寫水壺被扔過瀑布之后，David他們等待救援的過程。第二段是以The next mrning. they heard a helicpter hvering (盤旋) abve them.（第二天早上。他們聽到一架直升機盤旋在他們上方。）開頭，由此可知他們最后獲救了，所以這段重點寫他們是如何被救以及被救之后的事情。
【點睛】
續(xù)寫范文語言地道，句型多變。比如Then they g back t the beach where they’d had lunch.中使用了where引導(dǎo)的定語從句；he dreamed that they heard a helicpter hvering abve them and they heard the magic wrds使用了that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句；The helicpter circled as the pilt lked fr a gd place t land.使用了as引導(dǎo)的狀語從句。
16．Clearly Mercy's self-cntrl had failed. After midnight when everyne was asleep, she'd silently carried ne package after anther ut f the living rm s that she culd enjy in private. Anything eatable was gne, including ckies, chclates, candy canes, and fur punds f Milk-Bnes. She enjyed her midnight snack in her cmfrtable nest. My parents were s grateful instead f being angry, they laughed ff the ruined presents. Only ne prblem remained. With all the gift tags destryed, hw culd they send ut thank-yu cards?
As fr Thank-yu cards, Mercy prvided the answer. A few days later, Plly returned t her easy chair t find Mercy guiltily cleaning a plate with her tngue where a ckie had just been. Plly tk a picture f the shamefaced dg and used it t make thank-yu ntes. The title read. "Thank yu fr the mercy." Inside, the whle stry was explained. We all laughed and began t knw why Plly had the dg named Mercy. And everyne shared the sweet mment Mercy and Plly gave us!
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇續(xù)寫。文章敘述的是，作者的繼母，波莉，建議給寵物狗起一個最甜蜜的名字:Mercy。孩子們不知道她為什么會起這個奇怪的名字。但很快就知道這個名字正是這只新狗所需要的。當(dāng)他們弄回一棵圣誕樹時，他們希望一切都井井有條，然而，令他們驚訝的是，Mercy似乎一點也不在乎。她對突然長在她客廳里的那棵樹毫無興趣。她對盒子下面那些精美的禮物也沒有反應(yīng)，圣誕節(jié)前幾天，波莉像往常一樣一大早就醒了，她回頭看了看房間，發(fā)現(xiàn)所有的禮物都不見了。只有那棵樹還在那兒，波莉發(fā)現(xiàn)是Mercy干的。
【詳解】
1.第一段給出的首句是Clearly Mercy's self-cntrl had failed.這一句是故事發(fā)展的轉(zhuǎn)折點。可以從“午夜過后，大家都睡著了，她悄悄地把一個又一個包裹搬出了客廳，這樣她就可以獨自享用了?！比胧謹U展開去。緊接著應(yīng)該是“所有可吃的東西都不見了，包括餅干、巧克力、拐杖糖和4磅牛奶骨頭。她在舒適的窩里吃夜宵。我的父母對此非常感激，他們沒有生氣，反而對毀壞的禮物一笑置之。只有一個問題?！薄獰o論從何角度拓展，需注意與續(xù)寫第二段首句呼應(yīng)，所以該段最后一句“所有的禮物標簽都被銷毀了，他們怎么能寄感謝信呢?”與第二段首句呼應(yīng)。
2.第二段所給首句As fr Thank-yu cards, Mercy prvided the answer.這一句呼應(yīng)前文，緊接著可以從“幾天后，波莉回到她的安樂椅上，發(fā)現(xiàn)莫茜正在內(nèi)疚地用舌頭清理剛放餅干的盤子?！比胧掷m(xù)寫。接下來故事情節(jié)應(yīng)該是這樣的“波莉給這只害羞的狗拍了一張照片，用它做了感謝便條。標題閱讀?！爸x謝你的仁慈?！崩锩娼忉屃苏麄€故事。我們都笑了起來，開始明白為什么波莉要把狗叫Mercy。每個人都分享了Mercy和Plly給我們的甜蜜時刻!”
【點睛】
這是一篇續(xù)寫。文章符合續(xù)寫要求，段落與段落之間銜接緊密，環(huán)環(huán)相扣，層次清晰。同時文中使用高級句子。After midnight when everyne was asleep, she'd silently carried ne package after anther ut f the living rm s that she culd enjy in private.句中when引導(dǎo)時間狀語，s that引導(dǎo)目的狀語從句；With all the gift tags destryed, hw culd they send ut thank-yu cards?句中使用with的獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)；A few days later, Plly returned t her easy chair t find Mercy guiltily cleaning a plate with her tngue where a ckie had just been.句中where引導(dǎo)定語從句；the whle stry was explained.一般過去時態(tài)的被動語態(tài)用在句中。
17．After a well-placed kick, the man was dne, and attempted t release her and run. But Granny wuldn’t stand fr that. It was nw her turn t grab nt him, her hands made strng frm hurs and hurs f farm wrk. That pr fl didn’t have a chance. She shuted fr help t bystanders, and they rushed t her aid. With Granny leading the charge, a grup f strangers came tgether and pinned the man t the sidewalk, hlding him there until the plice came. A silver-haired wman had just made a citizen’s arrest.
Later, we asked “Granny, dn’t yu realize yu culd have gt yurself hilled?” Granny’s answer was surprisingly amusing and simple: “I wasn’t scared f that little idit. I’d had my brand-new van fr less than tw days and a pack f gd sandwiches fr my ffice. And there was n way he was ging t get either f thse!” But we all learned an imprtant lessn frm her that day- the same lessn that had been building thrugh the years. She encuraged us t push bundaries and expectatins. But even mre s, she taught us fearlessness.
【解析】
【分析】
本文是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，作者的奶奶開車上街。在停車等紅綠燈的時候遇到了攔路搶劫犯。作者的奶奶沒有被嚇到，反而在路上和搶劫犯做斗爭。抓住了搶劫犯，并因此上了電視。續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：在踢了一腳后，這名男子被擊倒，并試圖放開她并逃跑……，所以這一段應(yīng)該寫歹徒試圖逃跑而奶奶伙同其他人制服歹徒，并因此上了電視。要詳細寫奶奶是如何抓住那個歹徒的。第二段開頭是：后來，我們問:“奶奶，難道你沒有意識到你會被人盯上嗎?” 本段應(yīng)該寫奶奶不畏懼任何壞人。并且通過奶奶的事跡，教會了我們一些人身哲理：我們要無所畏懼。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
文章思路清晰，語言規(guī)范，段落整齊，語篇連貫，層次清晰。使用了較為高級的句式:with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)With Granny leading the charge, a grup f strangers came tgether and pinned the man t the sidewalk, hlding him there until the plice came；定語從句：But we all learned an imprtant lessn frm her that day- the same lessn that had been building thrugh the years等。高級句式的應(yīng)用提升了寫作的檔次，整個短文顯示出了作者高水平的英語表達能力。
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Appraching (走近) the drway, Jenny tk a deep breath. When she kncked at the dr, she fund the dr was lcked and her mther was nt in. Tired and sad, she sat dwn in frnt f the huse. “Where culd my mther be?” she wndered, “Was she still angry with me?” Again, the scene f the quarrel appeared in her mind. She remembered her rudeness t her mther. Realizing that all the sclding frm her mther was due t the fact that her mther really cared a lt abut her, she felt rather ashamed, and tears began t rll dwn her cheeks.
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A gentle tuch n her hair called her mind back. She raised her head and saw the familiar face f her mther. “Here yu cme! I’ve been lking fr yu,” she said, tired and relieved. Jenny culdn’t help thrwing herself int her mther’s arms. “Mum, I’m s srry and thank yu fr all yu have dne fr me.” She expressed her sincere aplgy and great gratitude. Hearing this, her mther smiled patting her back gently.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇考察的作文類型是讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
前文主要講的是Jenny聽到店主的話后，想起了母親熟悉的面孔和飽經(jīng)風(fēng)霜的雙手。想起自己從來沒有感謝過媽媽為自己所做的一切。于是Jenny打算回家，在回家的路上，Jenny一到家就決定為她的粗魯向她媽媽道歉。在給的第一段開頭Appraching the drway, Jenny tk a deep breath.中drway意思是“門口”，是此句中的關(guān)鍵詞，因為后文都圍繞著Jenny回到家后的事情展開。第二段開頭A gentle tuch n her hair called her mind back.中tuch意思為“觸碰”，是此句中的關(guān)鍵詞，因為后文都圍繞著這個詞展開。
【高分句型1】
She realized that her mther sclded her because her mther really cared a lt abut her. 她意識到她媽媽罵她是因為她媽媽真地很關(guān)心她。運用because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句。
【高分句型2】
After she raised her head, she saw the familiar face f her mther. 她抬起頭，看見了她母親那熟悉的面孔。運用after引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句。
19．參考范文一 (Simple versin)
Paragraph 1: The by headed back dwn t the ld man's huse with the figurine. He kncked n the dr again and the ld man pened the dr. "By, I tld yu n magazines." "N, sir. But I want t give yu a gift." The by handed him the figurine and the man's face lit up. " This is fr yu." The ld man was amazed. N ne had ever given him such a gift and shwn him kindness. (63wrds)
Paragraph 2: Frm that day n smething changed inside the ld man. He started cming ut f the huse and meeting peple. He and the by became friends. The by even brught his dg t visit him . Gradually, he develped the habit f smiling at everyne and shwed his precius cllectins t children actively and warmly. (44wrds)
參考范文二 (Cmplex versin)
Paragraph 1: The by headed back dwn t the ld man's huse with the figurine. Afraid as he felt, he still kncked n the dr, waiting breathlessly. Finally, it pened and ut came the ld man. Seeing the by hlding a well-wrapped dg figurine, he lked very astnished but still glared at him withut a wrd. Determined t break the ice, the by gave the ld man the gift with a card attached, expressing his care. The ld man was s mved by all the by did that wrds failed t cnvey his emtins. “Thank yu s much!” he said t the by gently and kindly. (91wrds)
Paragraph 2: Frm that day n smething changed inside the ld man. The neighbrhd always fund the ld man hanging ut and smiling at everyne. He shwed his precius cllectins t children actively and warmly. He used t cllect figurines in memry f a real live dg which had kept cmpany with him fr a lng time befre it died. But nw, he wasn’t drwned in the srrws and lneliness anymre. He had realized the true spirit f life. (67wrds)
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇記敘文。文章講述的是小男孩和一個孤獨的收藏老人的故事。在小男孩的感化下，老人走出了自己的家門，漸漸地養(yǎng)成了對每個人微笑的習(xí)慣，并積極、熱情地向孩子們展示他收藏的珍貴藏品。
【詳解】
1.第一段給出的首句是The by headed back dwn t the ld man's huse with the figurine.這一句是故事發(fā)展的轉(zhuǎn)折點?？梢詮摹八智昧饲瞄T，老人打開了門。”入手擴展開去，接下來故事應(yīng)該這樣發(fā)展:“孩子，我告訴過你不要看雜志?！薄安?，先生。但我想送你一件禮物?！蹦泻训裣襁f給他，那人的臉亮了起來?！斑@是給你的?！崩先撕荏@訝。——無論從何角度拓展，需注意該段最后一句“從來沒有人給過他這樣的禮物，并對他表示友好?！迸c續(xù)寫第二段首句呼應(yīng)。
2.第二段所給首句Frm that day n smething changed inside the ld man.這一句呼應(yīng)前文，緊接著可以從“他迫不及待地想見到他的妹妹，分享這個好消息。”入手續(xù)寫。接下來故事情節(jié)應(yīng)該是這樣發(fā)展：他開始走出屋子去見人。他和那個男孩成了朋友。男孩甚至帶著他的狗來看望他。漸漸地，他養(yǎng)成了對每個人微笑的習(xí)慣，并積極、熱情地向孩子們展示他收藏的珍貴藏品。
【點睛】
本文是一篇續(xù)寫。文章結(jié)構(gòu)嚴謹，續(xù)寫思路清晰，環(huán)環(huán)相扣，同時句中使用高級句子。But I want t give yu a gift.并列連詞表示轉(zhuǎn)折；The ld man was amazed.句中使用一般過去時態(tài)的被動語態(tài)；He started cming ut f the huse and meeting peple.句中動名詞作賓語；He used t cllect figurines in memry f a real live dg which had kept cmpany with him fr a lng time befre it died.定語從句和時間狀語從句用在句中。
20．Paragraph 1: Once, after the nurses had gne fr the day, I heard the sund f Mm’s vice cming frm her rm. I fund her with the head f the bed raised, reading frm the newspaper, with Ott in her arms, listening adringly. I will frever cherish the memry f Ott’s tuching her face. Eventually, using a walker, Mm began t take walks thrugh the huse, fllwed by Ott. Where she rested, Ott rested. Where she mved, Ott shadwed. Smehw, Ott knew that during thse days he became her dg child, giving her life purpse.
Paragraph 2: Three years later, Mm tgether with Ott is still here, medicines and nurses lng gne. When we saw the dctr a while ag, “I can’t believe it, Lula,” he said. “I can’t find yur cancer and yur heart is strng. When yur daughter brught yu t me, I thught yu were a ship that had sailed.” Mm gives the credit t Ott, wh cntinues t share his gift f lve―a medicine mre pwerful than any drug a dctr culd prescribe.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
1.第一段給出的首句是Jatin lked up and he saw the ther bys rushing ahead.這一句是故事發(fā)展的轉(zhuǎn)折點?？梢詮摹拔野l(fā)現(xiàn)她抬起床頭，讀著報紙，懷里抱著奧托，崇拜地聽著?！比胧謹U展開去，——無論從何角度拓展，需注意與續(xù)寫第二段首句呼應(yīng)，最后一句應(yīng)該用“不知道為什么，奧托知道在那些日子里，他成了她的狗孩子，給了她生活的目標。”與第二段首句相呼應(yīng)。
2.第二段所給首句Filled with pleasure, Jatin walked hme in n time.這一句呼應(yīng)前文，緊接著可以從“不久前我們?nèi)タ瘁t(yī)生時，他說:‘我真不敢相信，盧拉。’”入手續(xù)寫。
【點睛】
這是一篇續(xù)寫。符合續(xù)寫要求，段落之間銜接緊密，句子環(huán)環(huán)相扣，層次清晰。同時文中使用高級句子。I fund her with the head f the bed raised, reading frm the newspaper, with Ott in her arms, listening adringly.句中現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語；Eventually, using a walker, Mm began t take walks thrugh the huse, fllwed by Ott.過去分詞作方式狀語；Where she mved, Ott shadwed.句中where引導(dǎo)地點狀語從句；When yur daughter brught yu t me, I thught yu were a ship that had sailed.句中when引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句。
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Ali lked up and saw the ther bys rushing ahead. Refusing t give up at this pint, he jumped t his feet and ran as fast as he culd. He dashed acrss the finishing line and wn the furth prize. Thinking he wuld let her sister dwn, Ali culdn’t help sbbing. Just then he suddenly heard the annuncement frm the bradcast that he wn the third prize as the runner wh cllided with Ali was disqualified fr breaking the rule. Hlding the shes clse t his chest during the award ceremny, Ali felt verjyed and relieved as he eventually wn the shes fr his sister.
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Filled with delight, Ali walked hme quickly. He culd nt wait t see his sister and share the gd news. On his arrival, Ali fund Zahra was waiting utside. Nervus and anxius, Zahra wndered whether her brther had brught her what she was expecting. “Zahra, see what I have gt fr yu.” Ali said excitedly, taking the prize ut f his bag with his trembling hands. The instant Zahra saw the shes, her face lit up. S thrilled was she that she threw herself at Ali. “Thank yu! Ali.” Tears f jy welled up in their eyes as the brther and the sister hugged tightly tgether.
【解析】
【分析】
本文為續(xù)寫作文。首先要認真讀懂給作提供的材料，弄清整篇文章的中心是什么。根據(jù)中心，補續(xù)事情的發(fā)展和故事的結(jié)局。想象要符合原文的發(fā)展，人物和事物要與原文保持連續(xù)性和一致性。要有明確的中心，重點突出，有詳有略。故事情節(jié)的向后延續(xù)發(fā)展要合乎情理。
【詳解】
前文主要講述的是阿里家境貧窮，一天阿里給妹妹修鞋的路上，把妹妹的鞋弄丟了，他準備通過參加學(xué)校的長跑比賽，獲得三等獎的獎品——一雙鞋子，給妹妹作補償，但在終點的時候發(fā)生一點意外。在給的第一段開頭中，Ali lked up and saw the ther bys rushing ahead.(阿里抬頭一看，看到其他男孩沖在前面)，可知本段是續(xù)寫比賽中阿里被撞后是如何做的，這一段是文章的關(guān)鍵。第二段是以Filled with delight, Ali walked hme quickly.(Filled with delight, Ali walked hme quickly.)開頭，此句中的delight是關(guān)鍵詞，阿里為什么高興，是因為他達到目的了，上一段已經(jīng)指出他獲得了三等獎，本段重點講述他回家后發(fā)生的事情。
【點睛】
[高分句型]
Ali culdn’t help sbbing because he didn’t want t disappint his sister. 阿里忍不住哭泣，因為他不想讓妹妹失望。運用because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句。
22．A Texas wman asked a phtgrapher t take her pictures and heavily phtshp them. Hwever, her husband emailed the phtgrapher and shwed his disapprval f these pictures because he lved his imperfect wife. (33)
As far as I am cncerned, even thugh I agree that there is nthing wrng with lnging fr beauty and seeking perfectin, I d nt apprve f phtshpping persnal pictures. Fr ne thing, n matter hw attractive a phtshpped picture lks, the persn it shws isn't the real self. T sme extent, t heavily phtshp persnal pictures is an act f cheating, which cheats nt nly thers but als urselves. Fr anther, if we really want t becme better-lking, it is nt phtshpping persnal pcitures but wrking ut regularly t keep fit r putting n sme makeup that really makes sense. In additin, I believe thse wh truly lve us just accept us as we are, in which case there is n need t shw them fake pictures.
T cnclude, stp trying t be smebdy else in phtshpped pictures. Only when we are tlerant f ur imperfectins can we really becme mre cnfident and beautiful.
【解析】
【分析】
【詳解】
本文是一篇任務(wù)型寫作。共分兩個任務(wù)：1. 用約30個單詞概述上述信息的主要內(nèi)容；
2.用約120個單詞說明你對使用圖像處理軟件修改個人照片的看法，并用2-3個理由或論據(jù)支撐你的看法。注意完成第一任務(wù)時，語言使用應(yīng)簡練、準確、到位。在第二個任務(wù)中，應(yīng)涵蓋題目所列出的三大要點。本文應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。寫作過程中注意使用平時學(xué)到的短語和句型，注意行文的連貫和邏輯性。
【點睛】
本文是一篇任務(wù)型寫作。概括簡明扼要，自己觀點明確，理由充分，文章結(jié)構(gòu)布局合理，文中使用高級句子。because he lved his imperfect wife.句中使用because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語從句；even thugh I agree that there is nthing wrng with lnging fr beauty and seeking perfectin, I d nt apprve f phtshpping persnal pictures.句中even thugh引導(dǎo)讓步狀語從句；n matter hw attractive a phtshpped picture lks, the persn it shws isn't the real self.文中n matter hw引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語從句非常經(jīng)典；which cheats nt nly thers but als urselves.句中which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句；Only when we are tlerant f ur imperfectins can we really becme mre cnfident and beautiful.部分倒裝運用巧妙；另外，As far as I am cncerned, Fr ne thing, T sme extent, Fr anther, In additin, T cnclude,等的運用為文章增色添彩。
23．Mel frze as there wasn’t any mixup.She realized she was the ne wh’d made a mistake.Her little sister had earned the first chair thrugh effrts—and she hadn’t even cngratulated her.Mel walked dwn the hall.Mst days，she spent her time thinking abut sftball，her classes and her friends.Every day was s full that she didn’t always practice her vilin while Abbie played every day.Determined t make a change，Mel decided t have a talk with Abbie.
After schl，Mel fund Abbie n a bench utside，playing the vilin.Mel made up her mind t aplgize t Abbie after a brief inner struggle.She cleared her thrat and started，“I’m s prud that yu’re cncertmaster.I’m srry I’ve been s mean.I guess I was jealus.” Abbie was surprised.“But yu’re ppular，Mel.Yu get better grades.Yu’re better at sprts.Yu can d everything.” Mel shk her head.“I can’t make a trill like yu can.”“Yu can if yu keep practicing.” Abbie smiled and asked if Mel wuld like t play with her.Mel agreed delightedly.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。短文敘述了 Abbie獲得了首席小提琴手，而看到這時，姐姐Mel獲得了第二小題提琴手的席位，Mel認為是Mr Bensn搞錯了，而第二天Mel與Mr Bensn卻證實了Abbie的確獲得了首席小提琴手，Mr Bensn還夸獎了Abbie。
【詳解】
短文敘述了 Abbie獲得了首席小提琴手，姐姐Mel獲得了第二小題提琴手的席位，而看到這時，Mel認為是Mr Bensn搞錯了，而第二天Mel與Mr Bensn的談話卻證實了Abbie的確獲得了首席小提琴手，Mr Bensn還夸獎了Abbie。短文由此展開續(xù)寫，第一段After schl, Mel fund Abbie n a bench utside, playing the vilin.這時要續(xù)寫Mel意識到是她犯了一個錯誤，因為平時Abbie和努力的在練習(xí)琴而自己確在想著壘球、她的課和她的朋友。Mel決定改變一下，決定和 Abbie談一談。以此引出第二段續(xù)寫內(nèi)容。第二段After schl, Mel fund Abbie n a bench utside, playing the vilin.這時要續(xù)寫Mel將心理的想法告訴了Abbie，以及Abbie是怎樣回答的。最后二人和好如初。
續(xù)寫是需要注意對時態(tài)的把握。高級詞匯和句式以及句子連貫性的把握。
【點睛】
文章思路清晰，語言規(guī)范，段落整齊，語篇連貫，層次清晰。使用了較為高級的句式引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語從句Every day was s full that she didn’t always practice her vilin while Abbie played every day. 非謂語動詞的運用After schl，Mel fund Abbie n a bench utside，playing the vilin. wh引導(dǎo)的定語從句She realized she was the ne wh’d made a mistake.
高級句式的應(yīng)用提升了寫作的檔次，整個短文顯示出了作者高水平的英語表達能力。
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He asked me t sit dwn and what he tld me still mves me these decades later. Lying n the hspital bed, he tld me abut his life n the farm, his family, his lves, and his heartbreaks. Althugh he was trtured by the cancer, his inner self rushed ut t me in a great fld as if a pipe had burst all f a sudden. He had been speaking fr maybe an hur r mre and mentined that he actually felt regretful abut being s strict with us.
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At that mment, I realized that he was ding mre than telling. He was asking t be frgiven. All it tk was t understand that was what he needed, and I frgave everything, immediately. The thught f my father being an enemy disappeared, with tears rlling dwn n my face. I held my father's hands tightly, enjying this deep but quiet lve. Althugh he has gne fr a lng time, I still always remember that mment and the realizatin that I lve him.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，作者在一個小農(nóng)場長大，他的父親整天忙于工作和農(nóng)活。父親對作者和弟弟一直比較嚴格，因此有時作者感覺父親對他來說就像一個遠處的敵人。這種情況直到父親身患癌癥也沒有發(fā)生改變，直到有一天父親把作者叫到病床前，和作者敞開了心扉。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：他讓我坐下來，說了一些幾十年后仍讓我感動的話?？芍?，接下來第一段續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容應(yīng)該是父親和作者說話的具體內(nèi)容，應(yīng)該是與他生活息息相關(guān)的內(nèi)容，也會有對孩子的些許愧疚等。第一段開頭是：在那一刻，我才意識到父愛無言?？芍诙螒?yīng)該側(cè)重講了作者對自己與父親之間關(guān)系的感悟或?qū)Ω赣H離去的不舍等內(nèi)容。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：sit dwn；as if；all f a sudden；be strict with；rll dwn；fr a lng time等高級詞匯；由althugh引導(dǎo)的狀語從句和as if引導(dǎo)的虛擬句Althugh he was trtured by the cancer, his inner self rushed ut t me in a great fld as if a pipe had burst all f a sudden.；由and連接的并列句和that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句He had been speaking fr maybe an hur r mre and mentined that he actually felt regretful abut being s strict with us.；省略that的定語從句和what引導(dǎo)的表語從句All it tk was t understand that was what he needed, and I frgave everything, immediately.；with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)The thught f my father being an enemy disappeared, with tears rlling dwn n my face.等高級句式。
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I was wndering what t say when I heard the sund f ftsteps ut f the tent. Fllwing the sund we caught sight f the man in the pht. The wman intrduced t us that the cming man was her sn. Learning that ur car had brken dwn, he asked whether he culd help us fr free. Hearing what he said, we gt mved by his genersity. “Why dn't we g t change the wheel right nw?” suggested the yung man, striking his chest and shwing a pair f pwerful arms with strng muscles as hard as irn.
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Tgether we walked back t the car. The by pulled ut ur flat tyre as easy as blwing ff dust. Surprised at hw ur car gt repaired, Gerge and I was wndering hw we shuld thank him when we heard him saying t us,” Well, everything is OK with yur car! Yu can set ff again n yur jurney. Have a pleasant jurney!” Finally, we cntinued ur travel in the distance. Wherever we went, we wuld be always encuraged by the spirit frm smewhere in the jungle.
【解析】
【分析】
【詳解】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，在叢林里，作者他們的車輪胎出了故障，無法換輪胎，這時來了一位老婦人，作者他們跟著老婦人來到她的帳篷，老婦人請作者他們喝茶并拿出一張年輕男子的照片。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：當(dāng)我聽到從帳篷里走出的腳步聲時，我在想該說些什么。本段應(yīng)該寫照片里的年輕男子是老婦人的兒子，老婦人的兒子提議免費幫助作者他們修輪胎，這讓作者感動，然后他們?nèi)バ掭喬ァ５诙伍_頭是：我們一起走回車旁。本段應(yīng)該寫老婦人的兒子幫作者他們修好了車胎并祝作者他們旅途愉快，作者他們開車離開，并感慨無論他們走到哪里，他們都會被叢林中某個地方的精神所鼓舞。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：catch sight f，get dne，blw ff等高級詞匯；賓語從句Gerge and I was wndering hw we shuld thank him when we heard，非謂語動詞結(jié)構(gòu)做狀語Learning that ur car had brken dwn等。
26．The father asked, ''Did yu find the treasure?'' ''The jurney was fantastic. But frgive me fr I wasn't able t find the treasure,'' the sn said. ''There wasn't any treasure my sn,'' the father answered smiling. ''But why did yu send me t find it then? '' the sn asked. ''I will surely tell yu why, but first yu tell me, hw was yur jurney? Did yu enjy it?'' ''Of curse nt father! I was wrried smene else wuld find the treasure befre I did.''
The sn cntinued, ''But I did enjy the jurney n my way back hme.'' He was excited. ''I made many friends. I learned s many different skills. There was s much t learn that I frgt the pain f nt finding the treasure. ''The father said t him,'' Exactly my sn. Everyne wants a gal in life. But if yu pay t much attentin t the gal, then yu will miss ut n the real treasures f life. The truth is, life has n gal at all, ther than t just experience it and grw with it every single day.''
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。本文講述了一個小故事。一位明智的父親通過讓懶惰的兒子去“尋寶”給他留下了珍貴的遺產(chǎn)。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫分為兩部分。第一部分的開頭是：他的父親問：“你找到寶藏了嗎？”……所以可以接著寫：兒子回答：“旅程很棒。但請原諒我沒有找到寶藏。”父親聽后笑著說：“其實根本沒有寶藏?！薄澳悄銥槭裁匆屛胰フ夷兀俊眱鹤幼穯柕?。“我一定會告訴你原因，但首先你要告訴我，你的旅程怎么樣？你喜歡嗎？”“當(dāng)然不了。我擔(dān)心別人在我之前找到寶藏。”第二部分的開頭是：兒子繼續(xù)說：“但我很享受回來的旅程。”……所以可以接著寫：說到這兒，他非常興奮?！拔医涣撕芏嗯笥?。我學(xué)到了很多不同的技能。有很多要學(xué)的東西，以至于我已經(jīng)忘記了沒找到寶藏的痛苦。”父親說：“正是這樣。每個人的人生都有一個目標。但如果你過去關(guān)注這個目標，那么你就會錯過生命中真正的寶藏。事實上，生活根本沒有目標，除了每天去體驗它，和它一起成長?！?br>續(xù)寫時要注意情節(jié)要符合邏輯，還要注意人稱之間的轉(zhuǎn)換?？忌鷳?yīng)熟悉下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞，以便在適當(dāng)時候加以運用。寫作完成后，按要求將關(guān)鍵詞下劃線。
【點睛】
范文內(nèi)容完整，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。
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Emily listened t her mther carefully and fllwed her mm’s suggestin. The next day, she began t practice singing utside. Gradually, her curage became greater and greater, and the sund f her singing was als luder and luder. Mnths later. She culd sing as she was walking. A naughty by wh had laughed at her befre cried t her, “Emily, cward! Emily, cward!” Hwever, she chse t ignre his behavir.
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Ging n singing, she walked int the park, where many peple were singing and dancing. Hearing her beautiful vice, sme stpped t listen t her singing and clapped fr her. Emily felt pleased that she culd sing cnfidently in frnt f strangers. The secnd year, the neighbrhd held the singing cmpetitin again. This time, Emily walked nt the stage bravely, and her lud and beautiful vice f singing mved all the peple. They all cheered fr her, including thse wh had laughed at her. Her mther was delighted t see the timid girl had been a brave ne.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達屬于讀后續(xù)寫。要求考生閱讀所給情節(jié)后續(xù)寫兩段內(nèi)容，每段第一句都已給出。
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，Emily唱歌很好聽，但是她沒有勇氣在人前唱歌。一年夏天，Emily在朋友Lucy的邀請和媽媽的鼓勵下，參加了一個歌唱比賽。由于太緊張，歌唱聲音很小，甚至忘記了歌詞。淘氣的男孩們嘲笑她是膽小鬼。Emily哭著跑回了家。媽媽知道后，鼓勵她要克服不敢在人前歌唱的問題，并相信她一定會有收獲。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：Emily認真地聽媽媽講話，并聽從了媽媽的建議。那么接下來應(yīng)該接著寫：第二天Emily就開始在外面練習(xí)唱歌。慢慢地，她開始變得勇敢，唱歌的聲音也變大了。后來，當(dāng)她練習(xí)的時候，碰見嘲笑她的男孩再次嘲笑她，她也不理睬。第二段開頭是：她繼續(xù)歌唱著，她走進了公園，這里有很多人在唱歌、跳舞。接下來應(yīng)該接著寫：公園的人都被Emily美妙的聲音吸引了并為她鼓掌，這時Emily感覺到自己可以在陌生人面前勇敢地唱歌了。第二年，Emily再一次參加了那個歌唱比賽，所有人都為她的表演歡呼。Emily的媽媽很高興看到女兒如今變得這么勇敢。
注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，情節(jié)生動，內(nèi)容完整，符合題目要求。范文中使用的一些詞匯和句型值得我們學(xué)習(xí)。高級詞匯/短語，如：gradually，ignre，g n ding，in frnt f，be delighted t d，stpped t d等；高級句型。非謂語動詞作狀語：Hearing her beautiful vice, sme stpped t listen t her singing and clapped fr her. 非限制性定語從句：Ging n singing, she walked int the park, where many peple were singing and dancing.
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Ali lked up and saw the ther bys rushing ahead.Refusing t give up at this pint, he jumped t his feet and ran as fast as he culd. He dashed acrss the finish line and wn the furth prize. Thinking he wuld let her sister dwn, Ali culdn’t help sbbing. Just then he suddenly heard the annuncement frm the bradcast that he wn the third prize as the runner wh cllided with Ali was disqualified fr breaking the rule. Hlding the shes clse t his chest during the award ceremny, Ali felt verjyed and relieved as he eventually wn the shes fr his sister.
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Filled with delight, Ali walked hme quickly. He culd nt wait t see his sister and share the thrilling news. On his arrival, Ali fund Zahra was waiting utside. She was really nervus whether her brther had brught her what she was expecting. “Zahra, see what I have gt fr yu.” he tk the prize ut f his bag with his trembling hands. The instant Zahra saw the shes, her face lit up. S thrilled was she that she threw herself at Ali. “Thank yu! Ali.” Tears f jy welled up their eyes as the brther and sister hugged tightly tgether.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。文章主要講述Ali和他的妹妹Zahra生活在貧困的家庭里，他們共用Ali的跑鞋。因要拿到跑鞋后才能去學(xué)校，Ali經(jīng)常晚到并且被學(xué)校警告。為了讓妹妹能有一雙新鞋，Ali決定參加長跑比賽，在比賽最后一刻，被另外一名賽跑者撞倒。
【詳解】
讀后續(xù)寫要求考生首先要讀懂已有信息，不僅能讀懂字面含義，還要理清文章的脈絡(luò)。續(xù)篇這篇短文時，考生要搞清楚故事的發(fā)展進程、前因后果、地理位置、人物思想情感的變化等。在此基礎(chǔ)上，考生要順著文章的思路，根據(jù)線索，發(fā)揮想象，對其后的情節(jié)進行合理預(yù)測，并用語言表達出來，續(xù)寫時注意詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。
這篇短文續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：Ali抬起頭來看見其他男孩快速向前沖。由前一段的最后一句Ali本保持著第三名的狀態(tài)，但是被另外一名賽跑者碰倒在地，以及后一段給出的段首句Ali帶著開心快速地走回家可知，本段是賽跑比賽的一個轉(zhuǎn)折點，接下來要詳細寫Ali如何處理和解決這個問題，使得Ali能夠奪得第三名，開心地回家。第二段開頭是：Ali帶著開心快速地走回家。由給出的段首句可知，Ali是實現(xiàn)了他對妹妹贏得新鞋子的承諾，那么接下來本段應(yīng)該寫Ali回到家中，如何和妹妹Zahra分享他的喜悅和成果，妹妹是如何做出反應(yīng)的。
【點睛】
本文作者所續(xù)寫內(nèi)容符合文章的發(fā)展進程，情節(jié)合理，字數(shù)符合要求。作者在文中較多的使用非謂語動詞結(jié)構(gòu)，復(fù)合句，倒裝句等句式，使得文章句式靈活多變，也展現(xiàn)了作者較高的英語高級句式駕馭功底。如“Refusing t give up at this pint, he jumped t his feet and ran as fast as he culd.”使用的是現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語，“Just then he suddenly heard the annuncement frm the bradcast that he wn the third prize as the runner wh cllided with Ali was disqualified fr breaking the rule.”使用了賓語從句和定語從句，原因狀語從句?！癝 thrilled was she that she threw herself at Ali.”使用了倒裝句。
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After buying a pair f new bts, she walked int the clthing department. Cming t a dressing mirrr, lking at herself in the mirrr, “Wn’t I lk mre beautiful if my she matches a perfect dress n my bdy?” thught Missus Smmers. She waving t the salesgirl f the department and asked her whether she culd try n the fashinable dress styles. Her request was apprved, Missus Smmers kept trying n. One dress after anther tried n, she put them int her shpping cart fndly.
Paragraph 2:
She was abut t leave the stre when a kid running arund reminded her f smething. “Oh, My Gd! I frgt all abut my kids!” yelled Missus Smmers, starting t blame herself. “Excuse me, salesgirl, wuld yu be s kind as t let me put back all I had chsen, fr I had intended t buy my daughter Janie a new pair f shes, by’s new shirts and all f them new stckings? I must have lst my head!” A sense f respnsibility f caring abut her kids drve her t think f the right idea where the mney shuld g.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇考察的作文類型是讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
文章主要講的是Smmers太太意外得到了15美元，非常高興，想著給女兒和兒子們買鞋子和襯衫，結(jié)果在百貨公司試穿衣服時逐漸忘了自己要給孩子們買東西，最后讓售貨小姐退還了購物車里所有的衣服的故事。在給的第一段開頭中，“After buying a pair f new bts, she walked int the clthing department.”“the clthing department”是關(guān)鍵詞，表示“服裝部”，說明Smmers后來去了服裝部，第一段應(yīng)當(dāng)圍繞她在服裝部發(fā)生的事情展開；在給的第二段開頭中“She was abut t leave the stre when a kid running arund reminded her f smething.”此句中的kid為關(guān)鍵詞，因為后文都圍繞這個詞在說。
【高分句型一】
After her request was apprved, Missus Smmers kept trying n. 在她的請求被批準后，Smmers太太繼續(xù)嘗試。運用時間狀語從句。
【高分句型二】
Althugh she really liked these clthes, a sense f respnsibility f caring abut her kids drve her t think f the right idea where the mney shuld g. 雖然她真的很喜歡這些衣服，但是一種照顧孩子的責(zé)任感驅(qū)使她去想錢應(yīng)該花在哪里。運用讓步狀語從句。
30．Several weeks later, she returned. She had bught herself a cane and wrapped her leg tightly with bandages. She tld everyne she had been in a car crash and that her leg wuld never cmpletely heal again. Her dancing days were ver. N ne suspected the stry—She had learned t limp cnvincingly befre she returned hme. Then she traveled t the hspital. She saw my grandfather seated in his wheelchair with a cane n the grund nearby.
She tk a deep breath, leaned n her cane and limped t Grandfather. She tld him she had an accident and a leg was injured seriusly. She shwed him tw engagement rings she had bught the day after he left fr the war. “I was nt ging t waste them n any ther man.” Grandma said t him. Then Grandfather bent t take his cane frm the grund but Grandma was nt ging t help. And s he managed it n his wn and never sat in a wheelchair again in his life.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。文章主要講述了作者的奶奶為表達對爺爺?shù)膼?，假裝殘疾，放棄喜歡的跳舞的故事。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫分為兩段。第一段的開頭是：幾周后，她回來了。她給自己買了一根拐杖，用繃帶把腿裹得緊緊的。她告訴每個人她經(jīng)歷過車禍，她的腿再也不能完全痊愈了。她的舞蹈生涯結(jié)束了。沒有人懷疑這個故事——她在回家之前已經(jīng)學(xué)得一瘸一拐的。然后她去了醫(yī)院。她看見祖父坐在輪椅上，拐杖放在附近的地上。第二段的開頭是：她深吸了一口氣，拄著拐杖一瘸一拐地走到爺爺跟前。她告訴他她出了車禍，一條腿受了重傷。她給他看了兩枚訂婚戒指，這兩枚戒指是在他參戰(zhàn)的第二天買的。“我可不想把它們浪費在別的男人身上。奶奶對他說。爺爺彎下腰去拿地上的拐杖，但奶奶不打算幫忙。所以他靠自己做到了，從此以后再也沒有坐過輪椅。
續(xù)寫時應(yīng)注意故事情節(jié)要符合邏輯，基礎(chǔ)時態(tài)為一般過去時。
【點睛】
范文內(nèi)容完整，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。作者在范文中使用了一些高級表達，例如：She saw my grandfather seated in his wheelchair with a cane n the grund nearby.中使用了過去分詞作賓補；She shwed him tw engagement rings she had bught the day after he left fr the war.中使用定語從句。這些表達的使用不僅給文章增色添彩，也展示了作者扎實的語言功底。
31．The ld man said t Jy, “I hpe yu yung peple will remember t live each day with meaning” We watched him walk prudly ut f the stre. Then Jy turned t me, “Nw, hw can I help yu?” I explained the situatin and the ccasin and tld her that I als wanted a similar pair f diamnd earrings fr my daughter because I knew that Betsy wuld have lved them t. “Hw abut sme pearl earrings instead?” she said and she held ut a beautiful pair f earrings set with glittering pearls.
While she wrapped them, I tk a deep breath and asked Jy, “D yu have dinner plans?" I explained that I'd like t wait a bit befre I went back t the hspital. “Wuld yu be interested in jining me in a bite t eat?” I asked. “I'd lve t,” she replied, her eyes sparkling like diamnds.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫作文。
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，前文主要講述了作者去商場給自己的女兒買禮物時，遇到了員工Jy給一個老人挑選周年紀念禮物的事情。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：老人對Jy說:“我希望你們年輕人記住，要活得有意義。”所以后文應(yīng)該是講述老人走后，作者的購物過程；第二段開頭是：當(dāng)她把它們包起來的時候，我深吸了一口氣，問Jy:“你有晚餐計劃嗎?”本段應(yīng)該寫作者邀請Jy去吃晚飯。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：walk ut f, similar, hld ut等高級詞匯；I explained the situatin and the ccasin and tld her that I als wanted a similar pair f diamnd earrings fr my daughter because I knew that Betsy wuld have lved them t. 原因狀語從句；While she wrapped them, I tk a deep breath and asked Jy時間狀語從句等高級句式。
32．Just at that mment, many memries came back int my mind. When I was ill, she was always the ne taking care f me. When I had truble with my study, she never lst faith in me and encuraged me t keep ging. When I arrived hme during the weekend, she always prepared my favurite fd. All her kindness came back t me. I shuld be grateful fr all she had dne fr me. I realized that I shuld return hme immediately and say srry t my mther.
When arriving hme, I saw my mther sitting at the dinner table, wrried and tired. She must have been lking fr me everywhere. I was ready fr her anger and shuts. Hwever, befre I culd aplgize, my mther saw me and gently said :“h, hney, thank Gd, yu’re back! Cme inside. Yu are prbably very hungry? I cked yur favrite ndles, cme and eat while they are still ht...” N lnger able t cntrl myself, I cried in her arms. “I ’m srry, mm, please frgive me.” I whispered t her thrugh tears, extremely ashamed f myself.
【解析】
【分析】
本文是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，作者因為和媽媽吵架跑了出去。之后他餓了，但是沒帶錢，幸運的是好心的店主給了她一碗面條，她因為感動而落淚。而店主知道后對她說，自己就給了你一碗面就讓你這么感激，而你小時候母親一直在照顧你，為什么你不感恩，為什么？你傷害了你媽媽嗎？店主的話讓作者開始反思自己。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：就那一瞬間，很多回憶涌入腦?！?，所以這一段應(yīng)該寫我的回憶。要詳細描寫媽媽是如何照顧我支持我的。第二段開頭是：回到家之后，我看見媽媽坐在餐桌邊，擔(dān)憂又疲憊。本段應(yīng)該寫我回到家之后媽媽的反應(yīng)，媽媽沒有責(zé)怪我，反而在關(guān)心我。我因為愧疚向媽媽道歉，希望能得到她的原諒。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
文章思路清晰，語言規(guī)范，段落整齊，語篇連貫，層次清晰。使用了較為高級的句式: when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句When I had truble with my study, she never lst faith in me and encuraged me t keep ging. that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句I realized that I shuld return hme immediately and say srry t my mther.高級句式的應(yīng)用提升了寫作的檔次，整個短文顯示出了作者高水平的英語表達能力。
33．Several weeks passed, I checked in t the classrm and nticed a change. The rm appeared calm. The children appeared n task. One by, nt ne t ever be serius abut anything, whispered t me with a tne f cmbined disbelief and jy, “Nt nly is Tmmy nt teasing peple, he’s even getting ther peple t stp! It’s like we are all being nice t each ther. It’s weird!” Nw, when Jhn trips, r Hannah misspells a wrd, there is n laughing. There is n hesitatin t raise a hand in Rm 7. The students knw it is nt stupid t make a mistake and ask questins. Tmmy, wn’t allw any teasing.
I was s prud f Tmmy that I knew never again wuld anyne mistake this by fr a bully! Frm then n, teachers, used t have a headache fr the bully, always mentined Tmmy with enrmus cmpliments. Tmmy wn the respect f everyne wh was willing t befriend him and fllwed his example. A brn leader wh nce needed directin has changed t be an inspiratin t his classmates, t me and t cuntless thers. I am hpeful that Tmmy will carry the trch f kindness and pass it nt all thse with whm he interacts. Tmmy’s cmpanin and kindness certainly prved t be appealing in Rm 7! (all these came dwn t Tmmy’s cnscience and self-help. Smetimes, what ur behavirs mean and hw they affect thers depends n urselves.)
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，Tmmy在學(xué)校里經(jīng)常欺負同學(xué)，聽完一首關(guān)于校園欺凌的歌曲之后，他意識到了自己的錯誤并決定在老師的幫助下改正。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：幾個星期過去了，我來到教室，發(fā)現(xiàn)情況有了變化。所以應(yīng)該寫教室里具體的變化。要詳細描述Tmmy的變化和班級同學(xué)對于這種變化的反應(yīng)。第二段開頭是：我為湯米感到驕傲，我知道再也不會有人把這個男孩當(dāng)成惡霸了！所以應(yīng)該寫這件事之后湯米變成了什么樣的人，并對以后的生活和學(xué)習(xí)產(chǎn)生了哪些積極影響。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語，給續(xù)寫增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語，按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：Nt nly is Tmmy nt teasing peple, he’s even getting ther peple t stp!本句運用了倒裝句；A brn leader wh nce needed directin has changed t be an inspiratin t his classmates, t me and t cuntless thers.本句使用了定語從句。全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很好的英語駕馭能力。
34．As Susan hurried hme, this cnflict went n in her mind. When she passed thrugh the gate, her eyes fell upn the wden seat. Instantly, the wrds f the Glden Rule rang in her ears. Turning arund quickly, she raced alng the rad breathlessly until she fund herself again at farmer Jasn’s gate. “Why are yu back again?” shuted the cld fellw angrily, as he saw Susan again at his side. “Sir, yu gave me tw bills, instead f ne,” she said in a trembling vice. “Tw bills? Did I? Let me see. Well, s I did. Why didn’t yu bring it back sner? Yu want t keep it yurself?” he blamed.
Susan’s face became red with embarrassment and annyance. Tears rlling dwn her cheeks, she ludly argued that she returned it almst the mment she discvered the truth. Jasn lked at the child, seemingly tuched. Putting his hand in his pcket, he drew ut a few cins and handed them t her. “N, sir. I thank yu,” sbbed Susan, “I d nt want t be paid fr ding right. I nly wish yu wuld nt think me dishnest.” After hearing this, Jasn said srry t her, ashamed. Susan returned hme with a lightened heart. Never wuld she frget her mther’s Glden rule in her life.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，文章講述了Susan在幫媽媽向Jasn索要洗衣費的時候，收到了兩張紙幣，其中一張是Jasn不小心多拿出的，在是否將這張多余的紙幣據(jù)為己有的矛盾中，Susan最終選擇了將其還給Jasn。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：As Susan hurried hme, this cnflict went n in her mind. (當(dāng)Susan匆忙趕回家時，這個矛盾在她的腦海里繼續(xù)著。)所以應(yīng)該寫Susan回到家看到那把木制椅子時的感觸，想到媽媽的教導(dǎo)，而把多余的錢還給Jasn，同時應(yīng)描寫Jasn和Susan之間關(guān)于還錢的對話，包括Jasn的疑惑，質(zhì)問等；第二段開頭是Susan’s face became red with embarrassment and annyance. ( Susan又尷尬又惱怒，臉都紅了。) 本段應(yīng)該寫Susan對于Jasn質(zhì)問的回答，同時Jasn對于Susan回答的反應(yīng)，比如給與獎勵，同時呼應(yīng)文章主題“己所不欲勿施于人”，應(yīng)描寫Susan對此做出的回應(yīng)，比如拒絕獎勵，誠實地表達出個人的想法等。要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右，按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：1.高級詞匯：fall upn n; rll dwn; draw ut; hand sth. t sb.2.復(fù)合句式：“Why are yu back again?” shuted the cld fellw angrily, as he saw Susan again at his side. (as引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句)Tears rlling dwn her cheeks, she ludly argued that she returned it almst the mment she discvered the truth .(“tears rlling dwn her cheeks”為獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)，表伴隨；the mment 引導(dǎo)時間狀語從句。)Putting his hand in his pcket, he drew ut a few cins and handed them t her. (putting his hand in his pcket為現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語)Never wuld she frget her mther’s Glden rule in her life.(否定詞置于句首，部分倒裝)
35．Paragraph 1:
At that mment I thught Ugly was the mst beautiful, lving creature I have ever seen. Never nce did he try t bite r scratch me, r even try t get away frm me, r struggle in any way. Ugly was kind t everyne he met but nw he was dying in my arms. Ugly just lked up at me cmpletely trusting me t relieve his pain.
Paragraph 2:
Ugly died in my arms befre I culd get inside, but I sat and held him fr a lng time afterwards. I was thinking abut hw an ugly-lking cat culd s change my pinin abut what it means t have true pureness f spirit, t lve s ttally and truly. Ugly taught me mre abut giving and lve than a thusand bks, lectures, r talk shw specials ever culd, and fr that I will always be thankful. He was ugly utside but nice inside. It was time fr me t learn t lve truly and deeply, t give my ttal t thse I cared fr. Many peple want t be richer, mre successful, well liked, beautiful, but fr me, I will always try t be Ugly.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，作者講述了他住的地方里有一只叫Ugly的流浪貓，Ugly雖然滿身傷痕、丑陋骯臟，但它有愛，有一天作者發(fā)現(xiàn)Ugly受了重傷，作者去幫忙想把它帶回家，Ugly想吮吸作者的耳朵請求一點愛。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：在那一刻，我認為Ugly是我見過的最美麗、最可愛的動物。本段應(yīng)該寫為什么Ugly是最美麗、最可愛的動物，可從Ugly對作者和其他人有愛的行為上體現(xiàn)。第二段開頭是：Ugly還沒來得及進去就死在我懷里了，但后來我坐了好長時間抱著它。本段應(yīng)該寫Ugly的死亡帶給作者的反思，作者明白真正純潔的靈魂是內(nèi)心善良且真誠地去愛，作者會努力變得和Ugly一樣。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：try t d sth.，think abut，care fr等高級詞匯；如限制性定語從句everyne he met，everyne先行詞，后接定語從句，省略關(guān)系代詞that。
36．All f a sudden, Betty felt smething tuching the bttm f her ft. She began t panic. She tried t climb n tp f her surfbard and lk t see what was swimming belw. She turned arund and saw a giant shark fin circling her. Befre Betty culd call ut t her uncle, the shark attacked her surfbard. Luckily the shark missed her but nw she was stuck in the water.
“Help! Help! Betty screamed in hrrr. Hearing Betty's scream and seeing the shark, Uncle Mark was quick t act. By the time he arrived, Betty was exhausted frm keeping herself aflat withut a surfbard. Uncle Mark tld Betty t grab nt his surfbard. He swam crazy and quickly brught them bth back nt the shre. Betty was crying but felt safe as she knew Uncle Mark wuld always be there prtecting her.
【解析】
【分析】
閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
【詳解】
為完成續(xù)寫任務(wù)，首先需要掌握所給文章的大意，理清其敘事脈絡(luò)、說明方法或論證方式，可以先從梳理每段的大意開始：
第一段：本段交代了主要人物和故事背景，一個周日的早上Betty很早就起來了，因為這一天Mark叔叔要帶她去沙灘上沖浪，她心情激動，迫不及待，這時Mark叔叔的車來了。
第二段：Mark叔叔接上了Betty，跟她開玩笑說這次要去的水域最近報告有鯊魚出沒（這里可以看作一個伏筆），然后兩人就去吃早餐了。
第三段：兩人來到了沙灘上，進行一些沖浪前的準備動作，主要是給沖浪板打蠟。
第四段：本段主要描寫Mark叔叔和Betty準備好后下水沖浪的情景。
可以看到，前四段已經(jīng)將主要的人物和事件交代清楚，屬于記敘文，敘事的脈絡(luò)就是按照時間順序來展開的，續(xù)寫的部分要結(jié)合所給的開頭部分來繼續(xù)講述Betty和Mark叔叔在沖浪時發(fā)生的事情。
續(xù)寫第一段給出的情節(jié)是“突然Betty感覺到有東西碰到了自己的腳”，而續(xù)寫第二段“救命！救命！Betty恐懼地大叫道”表明Betty在水中遭遇了險情，這里就可以呼應(yīng)到第二段埋下的伏筆，即Betty在水里真的遇到了鯊魚，但仍然需要一個確認的過程，續(xù)寫第一段就可以圍繞這一點展開，描述Betty如何察覺危險、她的情緒如何變化、她作出何種應(yīng)對，甚至可以描寫鯊魚進行了攻擊但沒有命中，渲染危急緊張的氣氛。而續(xù)寫第二段就應(yīng)該切入另外一個人物Mark叔叔了，聽到Betty的求救，他會作何反應(yīng)，二人又將如何化險為夷，這里是有較大的發(fā)揮空間的。另外建議續(xù)寫比較圓滿的結(jié)局，這樣更加符合一般故事的走向和價值觀。
【點睛】
與提綱類書面表達不同，讀后續(xù)寫要求考生首先要讀懂已有信息，這意味著不僅要讀懂文章大意，還要理清文章的脈絡(luò)和關(guān)系。此類題目多以記敘文的形式出現(xiàn)，進行續(xù)寫時考生需要明白故事的發(fā)展進程、前因后果、地理位置變化、人物特征和情感等。在此基礎(chǔ)上，考生順著文章的思路，根據(jù)線索，發(fā)揮想象，對其后的情節(jié)進行合理預(yù)測，并用英語表達出來，即可完成續(xù)寫任務(wù)。本文的敘事線索是比較清楚的，在明確故事內(nèi)容的基礎(chǔ)上，需要注意到第二段中埋下的伏筆，并且在續(xù)寫中反映出來，這樣可以使得文章前后形成呼應(yīng)，給人良好的閱讀體驗。
37．The next day, Emily nervusly glanced at the list n the dr f the chral rm. She was nt rejected this time. Her name was psted at the tp f the list. She, Emily White. was chsen t be the leading singer! She wuld sing alne in the perfrmance. Emily culdn't believe her eyes. There must be sme mistake. But Mr. Buttler said t her with determined eyes. “Emily, I chse yu because yu shuld perfrm the part - yur vice is unusual. Believe in yurself.” Greatly encuraged, Emily practiced rally hard.
Finally, the day f perfrmance came. Standing in frnt f the line. Emily felt her thrat tight and her palms sweating. When the curtain pened up. the eyes f the whle audience fell upn Emily. “Emily White!” Smene whispered. Then alng with the first nte f music. Emily began t sing her heart ut. Her vice was like a nightingale ringing in the auditrium. Applause! Emily felt s happy and cmfrtable. She was shining n the stage. Emily White, with s many birth prblems in her bdy, was an angel.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達屬于記敘文。要求考生根據(jù)閱讀內(nèi)容續(xù)寫兩段內(nèi)容，每段第一句已給出。
【詳解】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，Emily非常喜歡唱歌，去年，她向音樂老師Mrs. Owens提出想?yún)⒓友莩?，卻被拒絕了，她感到受傷和難過，并決定不再嘗試。Mrs. Owens老師退休后，新來的音樂老師Mr. Buttler知道Emily的故事后，建議她再試一次。然后Emily完成了測試表演，緊張地等待著測試結(jié)果。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：第二天，Emily緊張地瀏覽合唱室門上的名單。所以接下來應(yīng)該寫Emily被選中了，以及她在名單上看到自己的名字的反應(yīng)，和Mr. Buttler的鼓勵等。第二段開頭是：終于，表演的那天到來了。本段應(yīng)該寫表演過程中，Emily一開始的緊張情緒，觀眾看到Emily反應(yīng)，然后觀眾被Emily的歌唱征服，以及Emily開心的心情等。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，記得用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，邏輯連貫，故事完整，符合題目要求。使用了一些高級詞匯和高級句子供我們學(xué)習(xí)參考。高級詞匯，如：determined，believe in，pen up，nightingale等；高級句型：非謂語動詞作狀語。Standing in frnt f the line. Emily felt her thrat tight and her palms sweating.運用修辭手法。Her vice was like a nightingale ringing in the auditrium.等。都為本篇范文增色不少。
38．Para 1: The attack rendered her uncnscius, and that’s when her car came crashing int the canal. Mlly started having the illness 13 years ag and started treating it with medicatin. The drug helped her manage the attack, but its cst tk a tll n her finances. Even with insurance, the medicine cst her $500 a mnth. She culdn’t get help frm her dctr t find a mre affrdable alternative, s she weaned herself ff — then came the accident. (77)
Para 2: Mlly and Shawn met n Tuesday, and she says she culdn’t thank him enugh and everyne invlved in fr what they did fr her. “It was nice t meet him and thank him, because I wuldn’t be here if it weren’t fr him,” Mlly said. “He and Adam are the nes that jumped in and saved me, and they deserve all the praise in the wrld as far as I’m cncerned.”(71)
【解析】
【分析】
本篇考查的作文類型是讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
第一步：理順文章主線：
已知線索：Shawn和他的孩子們開車回家→看到有人帶車落水，積極施救→這時Adam過來幫忙，他們一起將人救出→直至送到醫(yī)院Mlly才恢復(fù)意識，明白發(fā)生的一切……
第二步：構(gòu)思可續(xù)寫線索：
根據(jù)第一段給出的句子: The attack rendered her uncnscius, and that’s when her car came crashing int the canal.可知，心臟病突發(fā)（the attack）使她失去了知覺，就在那時她的車掉入了運河。本段可以就她的病情和車禍事件突發(fā)之間的聯(lián)系展開聯(lián)想，敘述失事起因。
第二段開頭指出: Mlly and Shawn met n Tuesday, and she says she culdn’t thank him enugh and everyne invlved in fr what they did fr her. Mlly和Shawn周二見了面，她說她非常感謝他和所有有關(guān)的人。因此，本段可以就Mlly對Shawn的救命之恩表達感激。續(xù)寫時注意字數(shù)要求，和段落之間的過渡和銜接。
【點睛】
[高分句型1] She culdn’t get help frm her dctr t find a mre affrdable alternative, s she weaned herself ff — then came the accident.使用了s引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語從句。
[高分句型2] “It was nice t meet him and thank him, because I wuldn’t be here if it weren’t fr him,” Mlly said. 使用了虛擬語氣。
39．On the night befre the dnkey fair, the Mullah bught a piece f rpe. N ne had any idea why the Mullah shuld want a piece f rpe.On Saturday, men and bys in the village came t the dnkey fair.They fund a cat tied with a piece f rpe t the tail f the Mullah's dnkey! Beside them std the Mullah, wh lked happy.Peple felt strange abut it but they still circled arund.
The Mullah made them calm dwn and said ludly.”It is true, I'll sell my dnkey fr a dllar. But, just ne thing, thugh. My dnkey and my cat are very gd friends. They must nt be parted. The kind man wh buys my dnkey must buy my cat als."
"Hw much is yur cat?" asked many vices.
"Oh, my cat is a very imprtant animal," said the Mullah. "Her father caught a muse fr a king. Her mther caught a muse fr the Queen. She is ne f the finest f cats. Fr such a great cat I want ne thusand dllars."
The men laughed, and gave up the idea f wning the dnkey.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫作文。
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，Mullah的驢子丟了，找了很久沒找到，他在大門口坐著休息，幾個朋友來找它。于是Mullah生氣地說找到驢要以一美元的價格賣了。后來驢真的找到了，但是他的朋友拿出一美元要買驢，Mullah無法食言，于是說要在星期六要把驢賣給那個對他最仁慈的人。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：在驢集市的前一天晚上，Mullah買了一根繩子。所以后文應(yīng)該是講述Mullah想出了一個辦法，Mullah買了一根繩子。沒有人知道為什么Mullah想要一根繩子。星期六，村里的男人和男孩都來到了驢市。他們發(fā)現(xiàn)一只貓被一根繩子拴在了Mullah的驢尾巴上！Mullah站在他們旁邊，看上去很高興。
第二段開頭是：Mullah讓所有的人都冷靜下來，大聲說。本段應(yīng)該寫Mullah想出了貓和驢一起賣的計策，貓要一千美元，于是大家都放棄了買驢的想法。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句式。如：strange abut, circle arund, give up等高級詞匯；N ne had any idea why the Mullah shuld want a piece f rpe.why引導(dǎo)的賓語從句；Beside them std the Mullah, wh lked happy.wh引導(dǎo)的非限定性定語從句等高級句式。高級詞匯和高級句式彰顯了作者對英語的良好的駕馭能力。
40．Paragraph 1：
Tears frmed in my eyes as I saw the empty hall and realized that I wuld miss my plane. Just then the elderly airprt emplyee walked twards me frm the crner. He saw that I was lst and asked if he culd help in any way. He gave me his handkerchief t dry my tears. He smiled kindly. He patted my shulder t ease my anxiety befre leading me dwn a lng hallway. We walked up sme stairs, turned a crner, and at last, there was the check-in cunter！He led me past all the lines f peple and pushed my luggage t the inspectin cunter.
Paragraph 2
When I turned t thank him fr all his help, he was gne. I never gt an pprtunity t knw that kind man’s name, but I wuld always remember his unexpected kindness. He helped me when I needed it mst Withut his timely help, I wuld have certainly missed my plane. I can nly hpe that ne day I will be able t d the same fr anther traveler wh is suffering a terrible jurney.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇續(xù)寫。短文敘述了作者要趕飛機，一生中從未如此焦慮過，這是作者第一次獨自來到機場的國際航站樓，一切都不熟悉，為了能夠找到辦理登機手續(xù)的柜臺，作者跟誰著一群人上了三樓，電梯慢慢地爬上三樓，停了下來。沒有登記柜臺!作者害羞地環(huán)顧四周，卻發(fā)現(xiàn)一個老人站在角落里。他是一名機場工作人員。
【詳解】
1.第一段給出的首句是Tears frmed in my eyes as I saw the empty hall and realized that I wuld miss my plane.這一句是故事發(fā)展的轉(zhuǎn)折點?？梢詮摹熬驮谶@時，機場的一位老員工從拐角處向我走來?！比胧謹U展開去。接下來：他看到我迷路了，就問我是否需要他幫忙并拍我的肩膀來緩解我的焦慮，然后帶我走過一條長長的走廊。我們上了幾級樓梯，拐了個彎，終于到了辦理登機手續(xù)的柜臺。他領(lǐng)著我穿過了所有排隊的人群，把我的行李推到了驗票柜臺。該段最后一句與第二段首句“當(dāng)我轉(zhuǎn)身感謝他的幫助時，他已經(jīng)走了?！毕辔呛??！獰o論從何角度拓展，需注意與續(xù)寫第二段首句呼應(yīng)。
2.第二段所給首句When I turned t thank him fr all his help, he was gne.這一句呼應(yīng)前文，緊接著可以從“我從來沒有機會知道那個好心的人的名字，但我會永遠記住他出乎意料的好意?！比胧掷m(xù)寫。作者想感謝這位老員工時他卻已經(jīng)走了，作者覺得在最需要的時候幫助了作者。如果沒有他及時的幫助，作者肯定會錯過我的飛機。作者只希望有一天，能夠為另一個正在經(jīng)歷可怕旅程的旅行者做同樣的事情。
【點睛】
這篇續(xù)寫段落銜接緊密，環(huán)環(huán)相扣，符合續(xù)寫要求。同時續(xù)寫的文中使用了高級句式。He saw that I was lst and asked if he culd help in any way.句中使用兩個賓語從句；He patted my shulder t ease my anxiety befre leading me dwn a lng hallway.句中使用非謂語動詞；When I turned t thank him fr all his help, he was gne.句中使用when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句；Withut his timely help, I wuld have certainly missed my plane.句中是用虛擬語氣； I can nly hpe that ne day I will be able t d the same fr anther traveler wh is suffering a terrible jurney.定語從句用在句中。
41．At hme that afternn, Tim stared at the plastic rat ball. Wndering abut the use f the clear plastic ball if Dana had n rat, he started walking up and dwn the rm with a frwn n his face. Mm was surprised and asked him what was happening. Tim tld her Dana wasn’t getting a live rat frm her parents but a bike. As they were racking their brains (絞腦汁) t cme up with an apprpriate gift, Tim turn arund and saw Nezumi n his bed.
All f a sudden, he had an idea. He lifted Nezumi and squeezing Nezumi int the plastic ball with great cautin s that Nezumi wuld be safe frm cats and dgs. Seeing this, Mm asked Tim whether he was giving Dana an ld cttn rat with ne ear as a gift, Tim ndded with a smile saying she wuld definitely like it. Lking at Mm’s cnfused expressin, Tim added that Dana was a Nezumi kind f persn wh thught ld tys were the BEST.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫作文。
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，Tim從Dana的庭院舊貨出售會得到了有一只耳朵被扯掉了的玩具老鼠Nezumi，Tim很喜歡。Dana的生日快到了，Tim去商店里為Dana喜歡的老鼠買了一個透明的塑料球，可以讓它在里面跑，不會被貓和狗咬傷。第二天Tim聽到Dana說她的父母給她的生日禮物是一輛新自行車，而不是一只活老鼠，因為他們認為老鼠會咬東西。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：那天下午在家里，Tim盯著塑料老鼠球。所以后文應(yīng)該是講述Tim得知Dana不會受到老鼠作為生日禮物后的心理活動，他覺得買的這個塑料老鼠球沒有用了，于是他皺著眉頭開始在房間里走來走去。媽媽很驚訝，問他發(fā)生了什么事。Tim告訴她Dana從她父母那里得到的不是一只活老鼠，而是一輛自行車。當(dāng)他們絞盡腦汁想出合適的禮物時，Tim轉(zhuǎn)過身，看見Nezumi躺在床上；第二段開頭是：突然，他有了一個主意。本段應(yīng)該寫Tim為Dana準備生日禮物的過程，Tim要送Dana一只長著一只耳朵的老鼠。
最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：walk up and dwn, nt…but…, with great cautin等高級詞匯；Wndering abut the use f the clear plastic ball if Dana had n rat, he started walking up and dwn the rm with a frwn n his face.非謂語動詞的運用和if引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句；Seeing this, Mm asked Tim whether he was giving Dana an ld cttn rat with ne ear as a gift, Tim ndded with a smile saying she wuld definitely like it.運用了whether引導(dǎo)的賓語從句等高級句式。
42．I was ging t see if there was a wild animal beside the fire. Thrugh the burning fire, I believed I saw its sharp teeth and cruel red eyes. Its craws wuld insert int my flash withut mercy as sn as I came int its sight. I culdn’t help trembling and screaming ludly at the thught f it. Then a sft vice came frm the dark, “Are yu Okey?” It was Old Mali wh was nw lying n his side with his eyes wide pen.
Old Mali’s quiet calm vice made me feel better. Adjusting breath quickly and bserving carefully, I fund the “animal” was just the shade f trees. I laughed in relief and tld Old Mali what had happened just nw. Having knwn the whle stry, Mali gave me an understanding smile and tld me his frmer experiences in jungle. With these stries, I gt back t my bed and lay dwn. Exhausted, I clsed my eyes, and knwing Old Mali was watching, I sn fell fast asleep. That night was s unfrgettable that it wuld stay in my memry frever.
【解析】
【分析】
這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
通讀短文可知，作者跟隨著Old Mali進入了叢林。夜色降臨，吃完晚飯作者和 Old Mali各自休息，但作者一閉上眼睛就聽到各種動物的聲音，續(xù)寫由此展開。第一段以“我去看看火邊有沒有野獸”開始，所以接下來要敘述作者所誤認為的“野獸”以及當(dāng)時作者的心理活動。這是Old Mali已經(jīng)醒來，問作者“還好嗎”。第二段以“Old Mali平靜的聲音讓作者感覺好多了。”所以要接著寫Old Mali告訴了作者所謂的“野獸”就是樹的影子，并與作者講起了以前的叢林經(jīng)歷，作者聽了這些故事，很快入睡，那晚是作者最難忘的經(jīng)歷。
所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為 150 左右；應(yīng)使用 5 個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；
【點睛】
本篇范文層次清晰，要點全面，表達流暢，句子結(jié)構(gòu)準確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。文中使用一些極佳的詞語和句子為文章增色。使用高級句型有：…if there was a wild animal beside the fire和as sn as I came int its sight使用了狀語從句；It was Old Mali wh was nw lying n his side with his eyes wide pen.使用了強調(diào)句型和with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)：Adjusting breath quickly and bserving carefully, I fund the “animal” was just the shade f trees.和Having knwn the whle stry,…使用了非謂語從句；…what had happened just nw使用了賓語從句；Exhausted, I clsed my eyes, and knwing Old Mali was watching,…使用了形容詞作伴隨狀語和非謂語動詞結(jié)構(gòu)；That night was s unfrgettable that it wuld stay in my memry frever.使用了s…that…引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語從句。
43．Paragraph 1：
“Oh n，” I thught, “Where's Christpher？” Scared and frzen n the spt, I felt the need t see, hug my brther and make sure he was all right. My stmach twisted. I ran up and dwn the aisles in the dark, panic filling my small chest and making it difficult t breathe. I kncked int displays f candies and tripped ver tys, while calling my brther's name like crazy. Anxius as I was, I culd nt find him. Tears f frustratin and fear trickled dwn my face, but I cntinued t run.
Paragraph 2：
“Christine, I'm here.” Excitement tk my breath away — there in the Leg aisle I fund Christpher. He was standing alne, perfectly still, next t the pirate ship set. I began t cry in relief, thrwing my arms arund him and hugged him tightly. He hugged me back, saying, “I knew if I waited here, Christine, yu wuld be able t find me.” Then, I tk his hand in mine and we went t lk fr ur mther, wh must be desperately searching the stre fr us.
【解析】
【分析】
根據(jù)所給短文和段首句，續(xù)寫兩段，詞數(shù)要求為150詞左右。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫短文需要先理清所給短文內(nèi)容，掌握文章脈絡(luò)，可以先逐段總結(jié)大意：
第一段：交代時間和天氣背景，周六下午，大雨滂沱。
第二段：交代人物和事件，作者的母親帶她和五歲的弟弟去一家玩具店。
第三段：興奮的姐弟倆先于母親之前沖進了商店，母親在后面大喊讓作者照顧好弟弟。
第四段：弟弟跑去了樂高積木區(qū)，作者還沒來得及趕上去就被芭比娃娃給吸引住了。
第五段：沉迷于芭比娃娃的作者被外面的閃電嚇到了，讓她想起可怕的事情。
根據(jù)各段大意可知，這是一篇記敘文，已經(jīng)將主干部分交代清楚，接下來應(yīng)該按照故事的脈絡(luò)繼續(xù)發(fā)展下去，續(xù)寫的第一段開頭為：“噢不，”我想到，“Christpher哪兒去了？”也就是作者發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的弟弟不見了故事產(chǎn)生了懸念，所以該段的續(xù)寫可以考慮從作者心情焦急、四處尋找弟弟這一方面去描寫，其中可以參照原文的風(fēng)格，加入一些細節(jié)描寫和心理描寫，制造懸念越緊張越好；而續(xù)寫的第二段開頭為：“Christine，我在這兒呢?！毕喈?dāng)于是懸念后的一個反轉(zhuǎn)，作者的弟弟并沒有丟，所以該段的續(xù)寫可以考慮從作者心情上的轉(zhuǎn)變以及找到弟弟后兩人的行動上去展開。
44．Paragraph 1:
I was hlding the pants tightly under my arm when my mther went t pay the mney. As sn as I turned arund, I saw her take a sum f mney ut f her pure in her left hand. I didn’t knw where my mm gt all this mney frm. Finally she handed this mney fr the pants t the seller, wh immediately gave my mther the fifty cents change. Mm smiled at me and said, “Let’s g back, hney.”
Paragraph 2
We tk the trlley back hme. And the trlley was crwded with many peple, s my mther and I were standing tgether all the time. Hwever, I even imagined walking up t the stage in my new pants t receive my medal, and I culdn’t help laughing. When we gt hme, my mther tk ut the key and wanted t pen the dr. And at that mment, I nticed that the gld wedding ring n her ring finger my mther had always wrn was missing. Perhaps it was mther wh sld it, and I felt sad, lst in thught.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，1937年的冬天，作者即將參加小學(xué)畢業(yè)典禮，他告訴母親他需要一條褲子參加畢業(yè)典禮，但當(dāng)時作者的家里買不起一條新褲子。作者的母親告訴作者會想辦法解決。有一天，作者和母親坐有軌電車來到了商業(yè)街，作者的母親先進入了一家看起來像銀行的店鋪，之后花了三美元五十美分給作者買了一條褲子。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：當(dāng)我媽媽去付錢的時候，我把褲子緊緊地抱在懷里。所以應(yīng)該寫我抱著新褲子，看著母親去付錢，當(dāng)我看到母親拿出錢的時候，我心中疑惑：母親的錢是從哪來的。最后母親付完款喊我回家。第二段開頭是：我們乘坐電車回家了。本段應(yīng)該寫我和母親在擁擠的電車上，但我卻想到我穿著新褲子去領(lǐng)獎，這讓我忍不住笑出聲來。當(dāng)我們到家，母親去開門的時候，我注意到一直戴在母親手上的金戒指不見了。我猜到母親把它賣了，我感到很難過并陷入了沉思。
續(xù)寫時要求至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，情節(jié)生動，內(nèi)容完整，符合題目要求。范文中使用的一些詞匯和句型值得我們學(xué)習(xí)。高級詞匯/短語，如：As sn as，immediately，be crwded with，culdn’t help ding，lst in thught等高級詞匯；非限制性定語從句Finally she handed this mney fr the pants t the seller, wh immediately gave my mther the fifty cents change.強調(diào)句型Perhaps it was mther wh sld it, and I felt sad, lst in thught.。
45．A wave f guilt swept ver me and I had t admit the fact that I had gne t the mvies and that was the real reasn why I was late .Dad listened carefully as a sadness passed thrugh him，“I'm angry, nt with yu but with myself. Yu see. I realize that I have failed as a father if after all these years yu feel that yu have t lie t me. I have failed because I have brught up a sn wh cannt even tell the truth t his wn father. I'm ging t walk hme nw and think where I have gne wrng all these years”.
But father, it's exactly eighteen miles hme frm here , and it's dark. Yu can't walk back. " I begged .My prtests, my aplgies and the rest f my wrds were useless. I had let my father dwn. and I was abut t learn ne f the mst painful lessns f my life. Dad began walking alng the dusty rads. I quickly jumped in the car and fllwed behind. I aplgized all the way,telling him hw srry I was, but he simply ignred me. Fr 18 miles he kept walking. Seeing my father in s much pain was the mst awful experience that I have ever faced.Hwever it was als the mst successful lessn.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，作者駕車去接他的父親，但是他因為去看電影而耽誤了時間后，他謊稱去修車了，最后謊言被拆穿了，這使得父親非常生氣。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：一股負疚感席卷了我，我不得不承認我去看電影了，這才是我遲到的真正原因……，所以應(yīng)該寫父親對此的反應(yīng)是什么以及父親的情感此時影視什么樣的。第二段開頭是：可是，爸爸，那兒離這兒正好十八英里，而且天又黑。你不能走回去。我懇求。本段應(yīng)該寫父親對我這么做的反應(yīng)是什么以及我的心里活動是什么以及我從這件事情當(dāng)中得到了什么經(jīng)驗教訓(xùn)。
續(xù)寫時要求所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：prtest，aplgies，ignre等高級詞匯；非謂語動詞 I aplgized all the way,telling him hw srry I was, but he simply ignred me，Dad listened carefully as a sadness passed thrugh him. as引導(dǎo)的狀語從句，I realize that I have failed as a father if after all these years yu feel that yu have t lie t me.that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句。
46．Para l:
Freddie was surprised but happy t see his classmate. “Yeah, sure. Help me make this snwman, wuld yu?” Din ndded, and they gt t wrk, building the snwman a slid base and lifting a heavy snwball n tp f it. Din fund sme stnes fr buttns, and Freddie stuck a cuple f brken branches int the bdy t make arms. Finally, the snwman was finishes! Then, they bth had a gd time. Suddenly, Din said, “Hey, I knw what we can d next!” He tld Freddie his idea and Freddie grinned.
Para 2:
Delighted at the idea, Freddie excitedly ran int his huse. Seeing snw full f Freddie’s face and cat, his mther culdn’t help laughing. “Are yu ready t cme in?” she asked. “Nt yet, mm.” Freddie said. Still excited, he asked his mther if he culd g t the park with Din and g sledding dwn the hill. Knwing Freddie wuld rather enjy himself utside, his mther agreed withut hesitatin. “Snw day are the best” Freddie yelled as he ran ff t play with his friend.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇考查的作文類型是讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
前文主要講的是主人公Freddie很懊惱下雪天，因為他可能又要為了保持道路暢通繼續(xù)出去鏟雪。不過，在得知學(xué)校由于連日積雪而停課時，F(xiàn)reddie激動不已，心想著終于可以宅在家里打游戲了。但是，媽媽堅持建議他出門去堆個雪人，呼吸下新鮮空氣。Freddie不情愿地來到院子，堆了個大雪球，同學(xué)Din突然出現(xiàn)，興奮地想要成為Freddie的同伴，同時表示喜歡雪天帶來的快樂。
在給的第一段開頭“Freddie was surprised but happy t see his classmate.”中“happy”一詞可以想象兩人一起成功地堆了雪人的而快樂場景；同時第二段開頭“Delighted at the idea, Freddie excitedly ran int his huse.”中“excitedly”和“delighted”也呈現(xiàn)了Freddie的情感及態(tài)度變化。而“idea”一詞可以推測兩人在堆完雪人后有了進一步的想法，而這個想法也一定和戶外玩雪所帶來的快樂相關(guān)。
【高分句型一】
As Din fund sme stnes fr buttns, Freddie stuck a cuple f brken branches int the bdy t make arms. 當(dāng)Din找了一些石頭做紐扣時，F(xiàn)reddie就把幾根斷了的樹枝插進身體里做胳膊。運用時間狀語從句。
【高分句型二】
His mther agreed withut hesitatin because she knew Freddie enjyed himself utside. 他的母親毫不猶豫地同意了，因為她知道Freddie在外面玩得很開心。運用原因狀語從句。
47．One pssible versin:
Tm nticed the flame was reaching up. Frzen with fear, he std rted t the spt. He cmprehended the gravity f the situatin and held Jane’s hand tightly. By then, bth f them were cughing and their eyes were stinging. Time seemed t stand still, thugh they were prbably there fr nly tw r three minutes. Tm begged Jane t run fr safety as quickly as pssible. Jane tried t shield her nse frm the chking smke and shk her head. She kept punding against the dr. Tm burst ut crying.
Luckily, sme neighbrs passing by stpped and ffered help. A sense f strength immediately replaced the munting fear and anxiety in Jane’s mind. She tld them Ms. Makcik must be still in the rm. They frced the dr pen with all their might. Sure enugh, Makcik was lying in bed, uncnscius. She was carried dwnstairs and then rushed t the hspital, where she finally came t herself. Peple in the neighbrhd felt relieved and Jane and Tm’s jy was immense.
【解析】
湯姆家樓下的汽車店發(fā)生了火災(zāi)，湯姆和姐姐Jane趕緊從家里從出來逃生?？斓阶呃缺M頭的時候，Jane突然停了下來，往回跑去。原來，她是要去救同住一樓的70多歲的Makcik。所給短文寫到Jane堅持不懈的敲Makcik的門。要求學(xué)生續(xù)寫這個故事。所給故事比較好理解，主要考查學(xué)生的基本理解能力和表達能力。
所給范文符合故事的情節(jié)發(fā)展，突出了“正能量”。范文中，不僅描述了人物的具體行動，還描述了人物的內(nèi)心感受，內(nèi)容充實，符合實際。
48．Paragraph 1:
My dearest sn，
I think f yu all the time and I’m srry that I came t yur huse and scared yur children. I had never thught my visit wuld bring s much unhappiness t yu. Hwever, I was really s happy when I heard yu were cming fr the reunin. I missed yu day and night. But I may nt be able t even get ut f bed t see yu. I’m terribly srry that I was a cnstant embarrassment t yu when yu were grwing up.
Paragraph 2:
Yu see, when yu were very little, yu gt int a terrible accident, as a result f which yu lst ne f yur precius eyes. As a mther, I culdn’t stand watching yu having t grw up with just ne eye. It was t much fr yu—a yung sul t endure such a cruel fact and a pssible future full f challenges. S I gave yu mine. I was s prud f my sn wh was seeing a whle new wrld fr me, in my place, with that eye.
With all my lve t yu.
Yur mther
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。要求根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
【詳解】
通過閱讀所給文章可知，因為作者的媽媽只有一只眼睛，讓自己在學(xué)校很尷尬，因此恨自己的媽媽；成年后，他有了自己的家庭，有一天媽媽來看他，他卻言辭狠厲地讓媽媽離開；之后，他回老家參加聚會，得知媽媽死了，并收到了一封信。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：我一直想你并且很抱歉……，所以應(yīng)該寫媽媽表達對兒子的愛和帶來的困境向兒子道歉，和對作者來參加聚會這件事的開心。不僅要描述媽媽因嚇孩子對兒子的歉意和在成長過程中給兒子造成難堪的歉意，還要描述媽媽知道兒子來參加聚會這件事的開心，表明媽媽很想作者。
第二段開頭是：你看，當(dāng)你很小的時候……，所以本段應(yīng)該寫媽媽一只眼睛的真相。媽媽一只眼睛是因為作者小時候因為事故失去了一只眼，媽媽因為愛孩子，把她自己的眼睛給了作者，且很高心作者用自己的眼看世界。文章最后媽媽再一次表達自己對作者的愛。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】
本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：get int，as a result f，culdn’t stand ding, be prud f等高級詞匯；非限制性定語從句as a result f which yu lst ne f yur precius eyes，when引導(dǎo)的時間狀語從句。
49．Paragraph 1：
Several days later, when Jenny’s father came in t read her stry, Jenny was waiting anxiusly fr him n the bed. When listening t the stry, Jenny was ttally absent-minded, with her hands hlding the necklace tightly and firmly. When the stry came t an end, unexpectedly, Jenny ffered her belved necklace t her father, with her fingers trembling autmatically. N ne knew what the necklace meant t her. She whispered t her father, sftly and gently, “Daddy, yu knw I lve yu mre than the necklace.” Then, the necklace slid int her father’s hands determinedly.
Paragraph 2：
Hlding the plastic pearl his daughter ffered, the father dragged ut a blue bx. Much t Jenny’s amazement, a beautiful real pearl necklace lay peacefully in the bx, which set her heart racing. Jenny frze there, a thrilled expressin twisting her face. Befre Jenny was able t say smething. her father brushed a warm kiss n her face and gathered her int his arms. Hlding the genuine necklace in her hand, Jenny lifted her lip, tears beginning t blur her visin.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達考查讀后續(xù)寫。
【詳解】
讀后續(xù)寫主要以故事類文本為主，考生在閱讀時，不應(yīng)該走馬觀花看情節(jié)，而應(yīng)找出文章的六要素（wh, when, where, what, hw, why），然后將每個主要事件都用六要素串聯(lián)成一句話。這樣一來，冗長的故事就成了兩三句，文章的結(jié)構(gòu)自然清晰明了。同時，考生還應(yīng)該分析已給出的兩個開頭句包含的主要句子結(jié)構(gòu)，這樣才能保證正確的寫作方向。為了寫出符合故事發(fā)展的“尾巴”，必須先分析原文的情節(jié)發(fā)展方向。除了采用上文提到過的六要素分析法，在審題時還應(yīng)該著重分析三個點：起因、轉(zhuǎn)折、高潮。只有確定了故事的起因，考生才能合理推斷這個起因會導(dǎo)致的可能結(jié)果；只有確定了故事的轉(zhuǎn)折，考生才能合理地將故事發(fā)展下去。不過，在設(shè)計情節(jié)時，同樣要考慮六要素，將它們串聯(lián)成一句話，再將這句話添磚加瓦變成段落。在語言方面，注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切，合理使用高分詞匯、短語及句型；不要抄原文，情節(jié)合情合理；書寫美觀，保持卷面整潔。
【點睛】
范文內(nèi)容完整，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴謹，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。作者在范文中使用了高級句子When listening t the stry, Jenny was ttally absent-minded, with her hands hlding the necklace tightly and firmly.使用了狀語從句的省略，和with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)；Hlding the plastic pearl his daughter ffered, the father dragged ut a blue bx.使用了非謂語動詞做狀語；Much t Jenny’s amazement, a beautiful real pearl necklace lay peacefully in the bx, which set her heart racing.使用了which引導(dǎo)的定語從句。這些為文章增色不少，而且全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。
50．The squirrel climbed up nt Bald By's shulder and whispered the answers t the three questins in his ear. Then she jumped dwn and ran back int the frest.Bald By made himself a rpe,then climbed dwn the cliff edge and made his way t where the squirrel had tld him the Frest Queen lived.When she saw him appraching, the Queen stpped Bald By and demanded that he answer three questins.
＂If yu d nt answer crrectly,"she said in her cld vice,"then yu will lse yur head.""Hw many cherries are grwing n this tree?""Where is the middle f the earth?""Which is the heavier f these tw apples?" Cnfidently,Bald By spke ut the answers the squirrel had already tld him.The Frest Queen culd nt deny that all three answers were crrect and s she unwillingly handed Bald By a large bag f gld that was his prize. He thanked the squirrel in his heart and happily returned hme t his mther with the gld.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。文章主要講述生活在一個小村莊里的禿頭男孩和他的母親相依為命，并且很貧窮。一天，這個禿頭男孩遇到一個哭的傷心的小松鼠并安慰它，小松鼠受到感動決定幫助男孩的故事。
【詳解】
續(xù)寫第一段開頭為：松鼠爬上禿頭男孩的肩膀，小聲說……后面應(yīng)該寫小松鼠怎么幫助禿頭男孩去獲取獎勵，男孩怎樣到達懸崖底部見到森林女王的過程。
續(xù)寫第二段開頭為：“如果你答錯了，”她用冰冷的聲音說，“那么……后面應(yīng)該寫禿頭男孩回答上森林女王的問題，最終獲得獎勵，回到家中和他媽媽分享喜悅。
【點睛】
文章主題部分選用的是一般過去時，續(xù)寫部分也用一般過去時，通篇時態(tài)把握準確；詞語運用恰當(dāng)并且高級，顯示出較高的英語能力；文章中還使用大量的復(fù)合句，為文章增加色彩和高級感，如Bald By made himself a rpe, then climbed dwn the cliff edge and made his way t where the squirrel had tld him the Frest Queen lived. The Frest Queen culd nt deny that all three answers were crrect and s she unwillingly handed Bald By a large bag f gld that was his prize. 這里的賓語從句和定語從句相結(jié)合使用，顯示高級的英語水平，精準掌握了從句使用的要領(lǐng)；續(xù)寫部分構(gòu)思巧妙，銜接自然，思路清晰自然，表達完整，為一篇優(yōu)秀的作品。

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