專題33 讀后續(xù)寫04 動作描寫突破 -2022年高考英語畢業(yè)班二輪熱點題型歸納與變式演練（新高考專用）-試卷下載-教習網(wǎng)

相反，空洞、籠統(tǒng)的描寫會使內(nèi)容缺乏生動性，使人物形象不豐滿。人物的動作或簡單，或復雜，都不是一下子就能完成的，細心觀察都能捕捉到最能體現(xiàn)人物特征的慢鏡頭。因此，在描寫動作時，同學們要學會細化動作，把動作過程分解成一連串細微的動作，形成動作鏈，寫出動作的連貫性，這樣才能使描寫具有畫面感，使人物更立體。
動作鏈的重要性
讀后續(xù)寫作文中動作描寫沒有頭緒？不知道如何下手？不如拆解動作，構(gòu)造動作鏈，讓你的動作描寫既豐富又精彩！舉個例子，何為構(gòu)造動作鏈？我們先看一句高考樣題范文。
He stpped the taxi, jumped in with the suitcase and tld the driver, “G t the plice statin, please.”
這句話的意思是：他攔下了車，拿著箱子跳進了車里，然后對司機說，“請到警察局去。”
其實，這句話只是描寫了“上車”的動作，然而通過拆解，細致地展現(xiàn)了一個動作下的組成部分。其本質(zhì)是避免簡單粗暴的使用一個動詞概括整個動作，而是用2-3個動詞組合進行描述。用一個公式進行總結(jié)以上例句，如下:
上車=攔車+上車+告訴目的地
再比如2017年高考真題中的一個優(yōu)秀范文句子。
She wuld get ff the car excitedly, laughing and dancing arund.
這句話的意思是：她會興奮地下車，又笑又跳。這句講的是一個比較粗線條的媽媽，動作描寫完整地描述了這位媽媽下車時及下車后的表現(xiàn)，即：
下車=下車+笑+跳
這個訓練過程，需要我們仔細觀察，結(jié)合一丟丟的語文功底，并進行合理聯(lián)想，并多多積累動詞。同時，這也為我們提供了兩種構(gòu)造動作鏈條的句式：
1. A, B and C（連詞連接動詞們）
2. 使用非謂語
第一部分、A, B and C結(jié)構(gòu)
我們先看一下“A, B and C結(jié)構(gòu)”。下面我用三個句子來說明這個結(jié)構(gòu)，每個例子我將停頓三秒鐘，正在聽這個課程的你，你可以抓住這寶貴的三秒鐘，快速思考，如果是自己來寫，會怎么寫？如果剛開始覺得有困難，可以先想中文思路。
第一句：“男孩們跳入湖中嬉戲”
想一想：跳入湖中，這個動作前面或后面會有哪些動作？
跳入湖里嬉戲 = 沖向湖邊 + 脫掉衣服 + 跳入水中
The bys rushed excitedly t the lake, tk ff their clthes and jumped int the water.（孩子們興奮地沖到湖邊，脫下衣服，跳進了水里。）
第二句，“她抱住兒子”（停頓三秒鐘）
想一想：抱住兒子，這個動作前面或后面會有哪些動作？
抱住兒子 = 沖向前 + 蹲下 + 一把抱住
She dashed frward, knelt dwn and gathered her sn int her arms.（她向前沖過去，跪下來，把兒子抱在懷里。）
第三句，“這個歌手唱歌”
想一想：歌手唱歌，這個動作前面或后面會有哪些動作？
歌手唱歌 = 掃視觀眾 + 深吸一口氣 + 開始演唱
The singer glanced at the audience, tk a deep breath and began t sing.（歌手瞥了看觀眾，深吸了一口氣，開始唱歌。
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第二部分、使用非謂語
下面仍然用三種方式和三個句子來說明這種描寫動作的句子結(jié)構(gòu)，每個例子我仍然停頓三秒鐘。
第一種句子模式：-ing現(xiàn)在分詞,凸顯同一對象同時發(fā)生不同的動作。
第1個例句，“老人靜坐”
想一想：老人靜坐，這個動作前面或后面會有哪些動作？（停頓三秒鐘）好！我來公布參考答案。
老人靜坐=坐在夕陽下 + 看報紙 + 聽廣播
The ld man sat under the sunset, reading the newspaper and listening t the radi.
第二種句子模式：having dne 表現(xiàn)動作先后關(guān)系
第2個例句，“沒有買到票”
想一想：“買票”這個動作前面或后面會有哪些動作？
沒有買到票= 排了很久隊 + 被告知票賣完了
Having queued fr 3 hurs, he was tld that the ticket had been sld ut.
第三種句子模式. -ed過去分詞凸顯被動
第3個例句，“孩子們哭了”
想一想：“哭”這個動作前面或后面會有哪些動作？或者因為什么原因讓孩子哭
感動哭了= 被感動 + 哭了
Deeply mved by the stry, the children began t cry.

綜合演練
讀后續(xù)寫模擬專練01
讀后續(xù)寫閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
The spt f red was what first caught Randy Heiss’s attentin n December 16, 2018. He was hiking the remte land behind his farm in a small twn near the brder, and there lying n the grass was a balln. He walked tward it with his dg, thinking he shuld pick it up and thrw it away.
That’s when he nticed the balln’s string was attached t a piece f paper. “Dayami,” it read n ne side, in a child’s writing. Heiss flipped the paper ver. On the back he saw a numbered list, all in Spanish. His Spanish wasn’t very gd, but he culd see it was a Christmas list!
Heiss was charmed. He suspected that a child had tried t send Santa Claus a Christmas wish list by balln, smething he used t d himself when he was a kid. Nbdy had ever returned the letters Heiss had sent, but he wndered whether he culd find the girl wh had sent this ne.
It wuld be difficult, but Heiss had a few clues. Abut 20 miles t the suthwest, just acrss the brder, was the city f Ngales, Mexic, with a ppulatin f abut a quarter millin. Based n the wind directin, he was almst sure that was where it came frm. Heiss brught the nte hme t his wife, wh is fluent in Spanish and helped him translate the list. They determined that Dayami, prbably a girl, had asked fr a dll, a dllhuse, dll clthes and art supplies.
Heiss then psted his search abut finding Dayami n Facebk, attaching phts, hping sme f his friends in Ngales might knw the girl’s family. A few days passed with n results; Heiss wrried that time was running ut befre Christmas. On December 19, 2018, he decided t send a private Facebk message t Radi Xeny, an AM radi statin based in Ngales. T his surprise, smene frm the statin called him back right away and prmised him t pst his search n the statin’s Facebk page immediately.
注意：
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；
2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語己為你寫好；
Paragraph 1:
The next mrning, Heiss awke t a message frm Radi Xeny.
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Dayami’s eyes were wide pen with wnder.
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翻譯小練習：
1. 工作人員已經(jīng)找到了Dayami。他確實住在Ngales，愿意在電臺安排聚會。
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2. Heiss和他的妻子急忙去買Dayami清單上的所有東西。然后他們驅(qū)車45分鐘，越過邊境進入Ngales。
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3. 他們終于見到了那個非常興奮的女孩。
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4. 比如，“哦，天哪，這真的很管用！“這是一次美好的經(jīng)歷，” Heiss說。
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5. 61歲的Heiss在Arizna州Bisbee生活了30多年。
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6. 十年前，他和妻子失去了他們唯一的孩子。他們沒有孫子。
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7. 現(xiàn)在他們把時間分配給Ngales和Bisbee。
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8. Heiss說：“在我們的生活中，圣誕節(jié)期間和孩子們在一起是不存在的。
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9. “在我們的圣誕經(jīng)歷中，這是一個巨大的漏洞。”
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10. 從那以后，他一直在思考，他發(fā)現(xiàn)了氣球是多么的幻覺，更不用說他能夠找到Dayami和她的家人了。
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讀后續(xù)寫模擬專練02
讀后續(xù)寫閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
①Emily White was brn seventeen years ag with s many birth prblems in her bdy. Sme f her rgans, bnes and muscles were ut f shape. N ne expected her t survive. She did make it but with her strange bdy figure, everyne culd recgnize her, even frm a distance.
②In Emily White's hmetwn, there was a yearly utdr perfrmance in the schl auditrium(禮堂). It had been perfrmed fr s many years and actually had becme ne f the mst imprtant events f the Christmas seasn fr many f the twn's peple.
③Many peple tried ut each year fr it, but s many were turned away. It can nly include the mst excellent peple in the field.
④Emily had a beautiful singing vice. Last year she went t Mrs. Owens- her music teacher t ask t jin in the perfrmance. Withut letting her sing, Mrs. Owens tk a lk at Amy's bdy and said, "Child, yu just dn't fit. Everyne wuld stare at yu and that wuld make yu uncmfrtable. It wuld make them uncmfrtable, t.”
⑤Withut singing a single nte, Emily was sent back thrugh the dr f the chral rm. Hurt and upset, she decided never t try ut again. But Mrs. Owens then retired.
⑥This year, there came a new music teacher, Mr. Buttler. He heard abut Emily and suggested that she have a try.
⑦Emily didn't want t be rejected again, s she hesitated a little abut it. As Emily struggled, the dr was pushed pen and Mr. Buttler called, “Emily, yu're next." Althugh kind f nervus, Emily did as Mr. Buttler tld her t d. Mr. Buttler sat by the pian t keep Emily cmpany. When Emily finished her testing perfrmance, she thanked Mr. Buttler and knew the result wuld be psted n the dr f the chral rm the next day.
⑧Emily culdn't sleep that night. She was suffering frm the feelings that she didn't fit and the great need t be accepted. By the next mrning, her stmach was even in pain because f stress.
注意：
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；
2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語己為你寫好；
Paragraph 1
The next day, Emily nervusly glanced at the list n the dr f the chral rm.
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Finally, the day f perfrmance came.
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翻譯小練習：
1. 她的目光落在“艾米莉”這個詞上，她尖聲尖叫，像一個興奮的小精靈跳了起來。
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2. 然而，歐文太太的話在她腦海里閃過，使她心中一片陰郁。
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3. “如果有人嘲笑我而我失敗了呢？艾米麗緊張地低聲說，她先前的興奮讓位于日益增加的焦慮。
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4. 她拖著腳步離開合唱室，在期待展現(xiàn)自己非凡才華的期待和被戲弄的焦慮之間掙扎著。
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5. 但最終，一種無法抗拒的歌唱欲望吸引了她，她決心要取得一個完美的表演。
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6. 艾米麗搖搖晃晃地走到舞臺上，努力把嘴唇彎成優(yōu)雅的弧線，以掩飾內(nèi)心的不安。
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7. 她奇怪的身體發(fā)出嗡嗡聲，這使她更加焦慮。
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8. 汗珠從額頭滲出，艾米麗緊緊抓住袖子以緩解焦慮，最后終于唱出了第一個音調(diào)。
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9. 人群一片寂靜，接著是雷鳴般的掌聲。
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10. 艾米麗用悅耳的歌聲，讓喜悅的淚水在模糊的視線中自由地飛濺。
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11. 她看到了一個光明的前景，她不再是一個殘疾女孩，而是一個歌唱的精靈，永遠閃耀著光芒。
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精講精練
Passage 01---拿古董槍偷竊古董被抓
讀后續(xù)寫閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
Carl lst his jb. He tried t find anther ne but it wasn’t easy. As a result, the pr fellw culdn’t pay his bills and he culdn’t even find anybdy t lend him any.
Carl spent mst f his days at hme. Smetimes he lked ut f the windw and watched his neighbr’s huse. An ld prfessr lived there alne. Strangely, he hardly talked t his neighbrs. Carl culd see int the prfessr’s huse because he never drew the curtain. The rms were full f antique (古董) furniture and vases. Carl thught, “If I gt an antique vase, I culd sell it fr a lt f mney.”
Every day Carl saw the prfessr. He left at 10 ’clck in the mrning and came back hme at 4 ’clck in the afternn. He had a dg. Carl ften went t the fence and played with it r gave it a piece f meat.
One day Carl thught, “I will g int the prfessr’s huse and steal a vase. I will break the windw and climb in. The dg is nt a prblem.”
There was an ld gun in the cellar(地下室). It had been his great grandfather’s favrite thing a lng time befre. Carl didn’t want t use the gun but he thught, “Anything culd happen.”
He wanted t hide the gun under his cat but it was t lng s he had t cut the end ff with a saw（鋸）.
The next mrning he watched the prfessr leaving hme at 10 ’clck. Carl climbed ver the fence. The dg ran t him and Carl gave it a big bne. He threw a piece f stne thrugh the windw, which brke. It wasn’t high. He culd climb int the huse easily.
He lked arund inside. There were paintings n the walls, small figures and vases n the shelves and the flr. Carl didn’t knw much abut arts. He culdn’t chse. He reached his hands twards a big vase when he heard a nise. The frnt dr pened and smene entered the huse.
注意：
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；
2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語己為你寫好；
Paragraph 1:
It was the prfessr. He had frgtten t take an imprtant dcument (文件) with him.
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Paragraph 2:
The prfessr was scared.
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【寫作特訓】
1. Carl culd see int the prfessr’s huse because ______________________________(他從來不拉窗簾) .
2. I will ______________________________(打破窗戶，爬進去).
3. ______________________________(他想把槍藏在外套下面) but it was t lng s he had t cut the end ff with a saw（鋸）.
4. ______________________________(他把手伸向一個大花瓶) when he heard a nise.
5. Carl became s afraid mat ______________________________(他不假思索地拔出了槍).
6. “I havent stlen anything. Just let me g r I will sht” cried Carl, ______________________________(用顫抖的雙手將槍對準教授).
7. The prfessr was scared. Suddenly, ______________________________(他突然大笑起來).
8. Strangely, _____________________________(他似乎不再害怕Carl了).

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Passage 02---搶了餅干的故事
閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
A yung wman was waiting fr her flight at an airprt. She was leaving fr Lndn because she gt a new jb there. It was said that her new bss was a typical English gentleman----plite, mdest, humrus and cnsiderate. She was excited as well as a little nervus abut her new life.
With several lng hurs befre her flight, the wman hunted fr a bk in the airprt shps, bught a packet f ckies and fund a place t sit. She tk ut a bk and started t read. Althugh she was absrbed in her bk, she happened t see that the man sitting beside her, as bld(大膽的)as he culd be, grabbed(抓)a ckie r tw frm the bag in between them. Educated t be well-mannered, she tried t ignre it t avid an argument. But t shw that she was the wner, she started t take ckies frm that bag t. Unfrtunately, the man didn't get that hint(暗示), since he didn't stp grabbing the ckies.
"Hw annying!" she thught. As the greedy ckie thief kept eating, the wman munched(用力咀嚼)sme ckies and watched the clck.
She was getting angrier as the minutes went by, thinking, "If I weren't s nice, I wuld blacken his eyes." With each ckie she tk, he tk ne, t; when nly ne was left, she wndered what he wuld d.
With a smile n his face, and a nervus laugh, he tk the last ckie and brke it in half. He ffered her a half, and ate the ther. She grabbed it frm him, glared at him and thught, "Oh, brther. This guy has sme nerve and he is s rude! Why didn't he even shw any gratefulness?"
She had never knwn when she had been s angry, and sighed in relief when her flight was called. She gathered her belngings and headed t the gate quickly, refusing t lk back at the rude thief. She barded the plane, sank in her seat, and lked fr her bk, which was almst cmplete.
注意：
1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；
2.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語己為你寫好；

Paragraph 1: As she reached in her baggage, she gasped(喘氣) with surprise.
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Paragraph 2: Surprisingly, she fund the man sitting just behind her.
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【寫作特訓】
1. With several lng hurs befre her flight, the wman ______________________________(在機場的商店里尋找一本書，買了一包餅干，然后找了個地方坐下) .
2. ______________________________(盡管她全神貫注于她的書), she happened t see that the man sitting beside her, as bld(大膽的)as he culd be, grabbed(抓)a ckie r tw frm the bag in between them.
3. ______________________________(她受過良好禮貌的教育), she tried t ignre it t avid an argument.
4. ______________________________(他臉上帶著微笑，緊張地笑著), he tk the last ckie and brke it in half.
5. She ______________________________(從他手里奪過它，瞪著他，心想), "Oh, brther. This guy has sme nerve and he is s rude! Why didn't he even shw any gratefulness?"
6. At that mment, ______________________________(她看見那包餅干), which had been just bught by her, unpened at all.
7. ______________________________(感到羞恥和像小偷一樣), she finally gt that the ckies were nt hers but belnged t the man sitting next t her, wh had calmly ffered t share his last ckie with her.
8. _____________________________(那女人完全不知所措) but gave the man a nervus laugh in return.
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