閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。
“Make sure yu bring yur schlwrk hme,” Mther had tld Shawn n Friday. Shawn had knwn what that meant. The ice n the river was n lnger safe fr his snwmbile, and it wuld be many weeks befre the ice melted enugh t crss the river by bat. Shawn was thinking that if he culdn't g t schl, maybe he culd drive his snwmbile int the muntains.
Suddenly, Mther grasped her side with bth hands, her face pale. Shawn hurried tward her.
“My stmach...” she maned (呻吟).
Shawn helped Mther sit n the flr. Befre he culd reach the telephne t call fr the ambulance r the hvercraft—the fire department’s ice-rescue vehicle—he remembered that last week’s ice strm had cut ff the phne lines.
“I’ll get yu t the hspital, Mther,” Shawn whispered. “Dn't wrry.” But Shawn was wrried. Hw culd he get her t the hspital? The snwmbile wasn't safe. Suddenly, an idea struck him—maybe he culd use the bat.
“We can’t crss the river, Shawn, “his mther whispered.” The ice is t thin.” But she still let him help her int the bat. Then he remembered that Father always brught a chisel (鑿子) and a sledgehammer (長柄大錘) n the ice in the winter. S he fund them and placed them next t his mther.
Cautiusly, Shawn pushed the bat nt the ice. The bat slid mre easily than he had expected n the water-cvered ice. Shawn pushed and pushed, thugh his arms sn ached and his legs were sre. He wasn't far frm the ther side f the river, when he nticed tw men drilling a fishing hle next t the shre. Just then, with a lud crack, the frnt part f the bat brke thrugh the ice. Shawn tk a quick step away frm the bat, his arms shaking with tiredness.
The men were shuting at Shawn, waving a mbile phne, but the wind blew their wrds away. Shawn was very nervus. Then he remembered—the chisel! He culd use it as a lever (杠桿). Shawn reached fr the chisel. His mther passed him the chisel and the sledgehammer.
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Wrking quickly, Shawn sn had the chisel firmly hammered int the ice.
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Shawn stared at the white walls f the hspital waiting rm.
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【答案】One pssible versin:
Wrking quickly, Shawn sn had the chisel firmly hammered int the ice. Using the chisel as a lever, he tried t lift the bat. The bat mved halfway up the ice-edge, then, t Shawn’s disappintment, slipped back int the hle. “N,” he thught, “I'm nt giving up.” He pulled against the chisel as hard as he culd until the bat mved nt the thin ice. A sund f applause frm shre reminded Shawn f the men. And Shawn was happy t see an ambulance near the shre. Shawn's mther was sent t the nearest hspital.
Shawn stared at the white walls f the hspital waiting rm. After sme hurs, a man came in and sat next t him. Shawn realized that he was the dctr frm the ambulance. “Yur mther is fine.” He said, smiling. “I heard abut yur trip acrss the ice. Yur mther was lucky that yu were there t help her.” “Thank yu,” Shawn said. He culd hardly think. He was t tired and every muscle in his bdy ached, but he still smiled when he thught f his mther.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。文章講述了主人公獨自一人送生病的媽媽去醫(yī)院的經(jīng)過。
【詳解】本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，因為天氣原因，河面上的冰要過幾周才能融化到可以乘船過河，但肖恩的媽媽在這時生了重病，家里沒有其他人而且上周的暴風(fēng)雪切斷了電話線，所以肖恩想靠自己的力量送媽媽去醫(yī)院，但在河面上遇到了危險。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：肖恩動作很快，很快就把鑿子牢牢地釘在冰上。所以后文應(yīng)該描述肖恩是怎樣讓船重新回到冰面上的，并將媽媽安全送到了醫(yī)院。在描述過程中可以對肖恩的動作及心理活動進行細節(jié)描寫。第二段開頭是：肖恩凝視著醫(yī)院候診室的白色墻壁。本段應(yīng)該寫肖恩的媽媽的病情好轉(zhuǎn)，以及在得知媽媽病情好轉(zhuǎn)后肖恩的感覺。同時，也可以寫出醫(yī)生或其他人對肖恩勇敢的行為的贊揚。
【點睛】范文內(nèi)容完整，要點全面，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。作者在范文中合理使用了復(fù)合句，如“Shawn realized that he was the dctr frm the ambulance.”這句話為that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句；其次，使用了一些固定短語，如：give up; remind sb. f…; hear abut等，使語言更加豐富；同時使用了一些高級詞匯，如disappintment; ambulance; applause等，讓語言更加地道。全文中沒有中國式英語的句式，顯示了很高的駕馭英語的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、層次分明，上下句轉(zhuǎn)換自然，為文章增色添彩。
版塊二---讀后續(xù)寫精彩詞句集錦
情感表達
喜樂、滿意:
1.Her face brightened up/lit up.
2.Thugh cleaning up the rubbish was a tugh task, ur hearts were filled with jy.
3.I was pleased beynd descriptin.
4.She wre a shining smile n her face.
5.Her smile lit up the whle rm.
寬慰：
1.Seeing their task finished gives them a sense f satisfactin.
2.When he heard this, he was was wild with jy.
憤怒：
1.When he heard this, he was turning with anger.
2.I was seized by anger.
3.His vice trembled with anger.
4.He glared at me with burning eyes.
悲傷煩惱：
1.He std silently, tears rlling dwn his cheeks.
2.She sbbed, hiding her face in her hands.
3.These days he was in lw spirits.
4.Jake sat there quietly and tears streamed dwn his face.
驚訝困惑：
1.Ben seemed surprised t hear this.
2.When he was asked, he was shcked that he culd nt say what had ccurred when the attack tk place.
3.On learning the truth, I was ttally shcked.
害怕：
1.He turned t me, with his eyes full f hrrr.
2.Her heart beat s vilently that she felt nearly ut f breath.
感動：
1.Tears filling her eyes, she ffered her heartfelt gratitude.
2.With tears streaming dwn her face, she…
板塊三--能力提升（現(xiàn)學(xué)現(xiàn)用）
閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。
Bys like t be cnsidered t be brave,but what kind f things can be cnsidered t be brave? It is nt a questin that can be answered by wrds,but by the actual deed.
A by with the name Henry gave us a gd example.Rnny and Henry were tw friends in the same class.They always played tgether and went hme tgether.One day as Rnny and Henry were ging hme after schl,they saw sme peple fighting in the street crner.Rnny said excitedly,"Sme peple are fighting!Let's g and have a lk!"But Henry refused,"It's nne f ur business.We'd better g hme and dn't get clse t them.Als ur parents are expecting t have dinner with us tgether at hme and I dn't want them t wrry abut me."
＂Yu are a cward((懦夫)，and afraid t g,"said Rnny,and ff he ran t the spt with sme ther bys.Henry had t g hme alne and didn't think abut it anymre.
But Rnny thught Henry was a cward and tld all the bys that.They laughed at him a great deal.Frm then n,they lked dwn upn Henry and didn't want t play with him.
Henry was sad but he wasn't angry with Rnny fr his rude behavir,because he had learned that true curage was shwn mst in bearing misunderstanding when it was nt deserved,and that he ught t be afraid f nthing but ding wrng.Thus,he just ignred the ther bys' laughter and cntinued t stick t his thught and g t schl and study as well.Hwever,Rnny didn't invite Henry t g hme with him anymre.Instead,he had his new friends wh als thught Henry was a cward.Every day after schl,they didn't g hme directly but went t the river r smewhere t play games and had lts f fun.
注意：
1.所續(xù)寫的短文詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；
2. 應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；
3. 續(xù)寫部分分為二段，每段的開頭語已經(jīng)為你寫好；
4. 續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。
Paragraph 1:
A few days later,smething terrible happened t Rnny.
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Paragraph 2:
At that mment,Henry happened t pass by.
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【答案】Paragraph1
A few days later, smething terrible happened t Rnny. That afternn after schl, Rnny was bathing with sme f his new friends in the river happily. Suddenly, he was stuck in the mud and culdn't get ut. He struggled hard but he was still trapped. He screamed fr help, but all in vain. The bys wh had lked dwn upn Henry and called him a cward gt ut f the water as fast as they culd.They were s scared and did nt even try t help him.
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At that mment, Henry happened t pass by. He heard the screams and ran t the river as sn as pssible.Seeing Rnny was almst drwned, Henry tk ff his clthes immediately and jumped int the water withut any hesitatin. He reached Rnny just as he was sinking the last time. With great effrt, and with much danger t himself, he brught Rnny t the shre in time. Henry was happy t help his friend, thugh he was extremely tired.
【解析】
【詳解】本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知本文講述了兩個男孩Rnny和Henry放學(xué)回家時，遇到了別人打架。Rnny要去幫忙，表示勇敢，而Henry卻覺得事不關(guān)已，不愿參與其中。結(jié)果，Henry受到了Rnny和同學(xué)們的嘲笑和歧視的故事。也說明了人們對勇敢的理解是不同的。
續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：幾天后，Rnny發(fā)生了可怕的事情。接下來應(yīng)該寫Rnny遇到了需要幫助的事情，但是面對自身的利益，周圍的很多人并沒有幫忙，這才能讓他明白，勇敢到底要怎樣去定義。第二段的開頭是：就在那一刻，Henry碰巧經(jīng)過。接下來應(yīng)該寫Henry雖然上次面對陌生人打架，他沒有勇敢?guī)兔?。但是，?dāng)自己的朋友Rnny真正遇到麻煩時，他還是愿意勇敢地挺身而出，伸出援助之手的。從而也讓Rnny和同學(xué)們進一步思考：什么是真正的勇敢。
續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)。
【點睛】本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：was stuck in，in vain，withut any hesitatin等高級詞匯；定語從句wh had lked dwn upn Henry and called him a cward；還有狀語從句as fast as they culd.和just as he was sinking the last time.；with介詞短語作狀語With great effrt, and with much danger t himself,等高級句式。

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